Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTQVP68XBXCSAHCSHDGH2ST

Run Details

Duration:
14.6s
Cost:
$0.039550
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The frantic pounding on Aurora's door startled her, a jarring interruption to the solace she found lost in a leather-bound volume of Poe. Her heart lurched. Not many people knocked with such urgency. Setting the book on the cluttered dining table, Rory crossed the small flat quickly, three deadbolts clinking open under her nimble fingers. Her mind scrambled—could it be Eva? No, not at this hour. Yu-Fei needing an emergency shift cover? Unlikely. The door swung open to reveal a figure she hadn't seen in months but whose presence was as familiar as the breath in her lungs. "Lucien?" His name slipped from her lips, a startled whisper. He stood there, impeccably dressed in a tailored charcoal suit, his platinum blond hair slicked back, casting a glossy sheen. The heterochromatic stare—one eye amber, the other black—was penetrating as ever. "Aurora," he replied, the tiniest smirk curling at the corner of his lips. "May I come in?" The request sounded more rhetorical than genuine. Still, the gravity of his appearance at her doorstep left her little choice. She stepped aside, the door opening wider to let him pass. He entered the flat with the grace of a panther, his cane tapping lightly on the threshold. "What brings you here, Lucien?" she asked, closing the door and securing the locks habitually. The weight of their history hung in the cramped space, thickening the air around them. "Danger, as always," he replied, the nonchalance in his tone mocking the seriousness of his words. "Would you like to sit, or do you prefer pacing while we talk?" His amber eye glinted with amusement, the light catching on the bone handle of his concealed blade. Rory bristled at his tone, recalling the last time she had seen those eyes lit with a similar amusement—before everything between them had gone awry. "I'm fine standing," Rory said, crossing her arms. The small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist throbbed, a ghost of past pains. "So, tell me. Why are you really here?" Lucien glanced around the flat, taking in the mismatched furniture, the walls lined with bookshelves, and the air thickened with old paper and faded memories. He exhaled slowly, his eyes finally settling on her. "You're in danger, Aurora. And whether you like it or not, you need my help." She scoffed, more out of reflex than genuine dismissal. "I haven't needed your help since... since..." "Since Evan," he finished for her, his tone suddenly serious. "I know. But this is different.” "Different how?" Her eyes narrowed, scrutinizing every inch of his expression. Trust had never come easily between them, and now wasn't the time for mind games. Lucien took a step closer, the scent of his cologne—spiced cedar and something darker—flooded her senses. "A new player in the supernatural underworld has taken an interest in you. A dangerous one." Rory felt a shiver run down her spine, but she masked it with a roll of her shoulders. "I don't see how that changes anything. I handle myself just fine." "Perhaps," he conceded. "But even you must admit that London’s underworld is far more treacherous than Cardiff's ever was." She paused, the truth behind his words piercing through her bravado. Rory hadn't survived the shift to London's chaos without learning a thing or two about survival. "Why are you the one telling me this?" she finally asked. "You left, remember?" His face tightened. "I had no choice." "Convenient," she snapped. "You always have a choice, Lucien." Their eyes locked, a battle of wills playing out in the silence. Rory's heartbeat quickened, memories of nights spent entwined, confessions whispered in the dark, and the inevitable fracture that had torn them apart flooding her mind. Lucien took a measured breath. "Aurora, you must know that I never wanted to leave. I was... compelled." "By what? Who could compel you?" Her voice rose. Hurt and betrayal bled through each syllable. "A demon far more powerful than even my father," he replied softly. "One who wields influence in ways far subtler than violence.” That gave her pause. She knew bits of Lucien’s past, enough to know that if someone or something had forced his hand, it must have been formidable indeed. "So, what now?" she asked, softer this time. "You keep an eye on me, and we make sure I don't get snatched away? How long does this last?" Lucien tilted his head, considering her. "As long as it takes. Until the threat is neutralised." "And then?" she pressed, the unspoken question lingering between them: What happens to us? He held her gaze, his eyes softer than she'd seen in months. "One step at a time, Aurora. Shall we see if we even make it to 'then'?" Without waiting for her response, Lucien moved to sit on the worn sofa, setting his cane aside. Rory watched him for a moment before joining him, a small sigh escaping her lips. It suddenly felt like old times, a dangerous familiarity she wasn't sure she welcomed. “So, what's the plan?" she asked. "We start by eliminating the immediate threat. Information gathering, identifying the players involved.” She raised an eyebrow. “And you have leads?” “A few.” There was that smirk again. “And they're quite eager to talk—with a little persuasion.” A reluctant smile tugged at Rory's lips despite herself. "I suppose I do enjoy watching you work." "Careful, Aurora," he teased. "You might start to believe you need me after all." She rolled her eyes, the familiar banter dulling the sharp edges of their past. "Let's get this over with, then.” As they slipped into the night, Rory couldn’t help but remember the last time she ventured into danger with Lucien by her side. She only hoped this time, they’d find their way back to each other unscathed.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"he replied softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences40
tagDensity0.35
leniency0.7
rawRatio0.071
effectiveRatio0.05
64.07% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount974
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count1
1
adverb"lightly"
count1
2
adverb"really"
count1
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
4
adverb"suddenly"
count2
5
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"quickly"
1"lightly"
2"really"
3"slowly"
4"suddenly"
5"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
23.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount974
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"pounding"
count1
1
word"solace"
count1
2
word"lurched"
count1
3
word"familiar"
count2
4
word"whisper"
count1
5
word"weight"
count1
6
word"throbbed"
count1
7
word"down her spine"
count1
8
word"treacherous"
count1
9
word"silence"
count1
10
word"quickened"
count1
11
word"measured"
count1
12
word"unspoken"
count1
13
word"eyebrow"
count1
highlights
0"pounding"
1"solace"
2"lurched"
3"familiar"
4"whisper"
5"weight"
6"throbbed"
7"down her spine"
8"treacherous"
9"silence"
10"quickened"
11"measured"
12"unspoken"
13"eyebrow"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences61
matches
0"felt a shiver"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences61
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"happens to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences84
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen26
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords964
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions22
wordCount680
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity1.32
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Aurora1
Poe1
Rory9
Eva1
Trust1
London1
Hurt1
Lucien7
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Poe"
2"Rory"
3"Eva"
4"Trust"
5"Hurt"
6"Lucien"
places
0"London"
globalScore0.838
windowScore0.833
93.18% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences44
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like old times, a dangerous famili"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount964
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences84
matches
0"was that smirk"
99.18% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs40
mean24.1
std11.98
cv0.497
sampleLengths
055
143
210
331
417
548
630
729
842
930
1034
1115
1216
1316
1426
1532
1630
1719
1827
1914
207
219
2237
2318
2416
2522
2628
2728
2816
2914
3028
3146
326
3313
348
3516
3617
3714
3820
3937
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences61
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs126
matches
0"was penetrating"
6.80% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount6
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences84
ratio0.048
matches
0"Her mind scrambled—could it be Eva?"
1"The heterochromatic stare—one eye amber, the other black—was penetrating as ever."
2"Rory bristled at his tone, recalling the last time she had seen those eyes lit with a similar amusement—before everything between them had gone awry."
3"Lucien took a step closer, the scent of his cologne—spiced cedar and something darker—flooded her senses."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount689
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount25
adverbRatio0.036284470246734396
lyAdverbCount13
lyAdverbRatio0.018867924528301886
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences84
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences84
mean11.48
std6.04
cv0.526
sampleLengths
023
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910
1020
1111
1213
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147
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1611
1717
1815
1915
2016
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2217
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2514
268
2725
289
2915
309
317
3210
336
3411
3515
3616
3716
3818
3912
403
4116
4211
4316
4411
453
463
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496
81.35% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.4880952380952381
totalSentences84
uniqueOpeners41
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences56
matches(empty)
ratio0
20.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount28
totalSentences56
matches
0"Her heart lurched."
1"Her mind scrambled—could it be"
2"His name slipped from her"
3"He stood there, impeccably dressed"
4"he replied, the tiniest smirk"
5"She stepped aside, the door"
6"He entered the flat with"
7"she asked, closing the door"
8"he replied, the nonchalance in"
9"His amber eye glinted with"
10"He exhaled slowly, his eyes"
11"She scoffed, more out of"
12"he finished for her, his"
13"Her eyes narrowed, scrutinizing every"
14"She paused, the truth behind"
15"she finally asked"
16"His face tightened."
17"Their eyes locked, a battle"
18"Her voice rose"
19"he replied softly"
ratio0.5
31.43% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount48
totalSentences56
matches
0"The frantic pounding on Aurora's"
1"Her heart lurched."
2"Her mind scrambled—could it be"
3"Yu-Fei needing an emergency shift"
4"The door swung open to"
5"His name slipped from her"
6"He stood there, impeccably dressed"
7"The heterochromatic stare—one eye amber,"
8"he replied, the tiniest smirk"
9"The request sounded more rhetorical"
10"She stepped aside, the door"
11"He entered the flat with"
12"she asked, closing the door"
13"The weight of their history"
14"he replied, the nonchalance in"
15"His amber eye glinted with"
16"Rory bristled at his tone,"
17"Rory said, crossing her arms"
18"The small crescent-shaped scar on"
19"Lucien glanced around the flat,"
ratio0.857
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences56
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences28
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"Rory's heartbeat quickened, memories of nights spent entwined, confessions whispered in the dark, and the inevitable fracture that had torn them apart flooding …"
53.57% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"he finished, his tone suddenly serious"
1"she pressed, the unspoken question lingering between them: What happens to us"
50.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags11
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"he conceded (concede)"
1"she snapped (snap)"
2"she pressed (press)"
3"he teased (tease)"
dialogueSentences40
tagDensity0.275
leniency0.55
rawRatio0.364
effectiveRatio0.2
76.6637%