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Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTQW0G9NEWVHYSQMZTQFXP7
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Model:
GPT-4o Mini (temp=0)
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:
51.7s
Cost:
$0.001794
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
80.68%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
0.00%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
100.00%
Cliché density
(details)
74.19%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
73.17%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
55.96%
Name drop frequency
(details)
5.07%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
90.91%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
64.85%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
40.65%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
27.07%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
51.28%
Technical jargon density
(details)
0.00%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
0.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
75.4610%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Fantasy genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>
Model response
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AI
The air shimmered as Aurora
stepped through the archway, her heart
racing
.
The moment she crossed the
threshold, the world behind her faded into a distant memory, swallowed by the ethereal glow of the Fae Grove.
She paused, taking in the
sight before her. Towering ancient oaks, their trunks gnarled and twisted,
loomed
like
sentinels
, their leaves shimmering in hues of silver and lavender.
Wildflowers carpeted the ground, vibrant
and alive, their scents mingling in a heady perfume that made her head spin. “Isolde’s grove,”
she murmured, her voice barely
above a
whisper
.
The words felt sacred, as
if speaking them too loudly might shatter the enchantment surrounding her. “More like a fairy tale,”
Nyx replied, their silhouette flickering
in and out of solidity beside her.
The Shade’s faintly glowing violet
eyes
scanned
the grove, absorbing every detail. “I can feel the magic here. It’s thick enough to cut.” “Thick enough to drown,”
Aurora countered, a shiver running
down her spine
.
The grove pulsed with an
energy that felt both inviting and
foreboding
.
She glanced back at the
others—Eva, her childhood friend, and a newcomer, a wiry man named Jareth, who had insisted on joining them. His wide eyes darted around, taking in the wonders with a mix of awe and
trepidation
. “Are we sure this is safe?”
Jareth asked, his voice trembling
slightly
. “I mean, what if we disturb something?” “Nothing here will harm us unless we give it reason,”
Nyx replied, their voice a
whisper
carried on the wind. “But tread
carefully
. The Fae do not take kindly to intruders.” With a nod, Aurora led the way deeper into the grove, her senses heightened.
The air felt electric, charged
with an
unspoken
promise. As they ventured further, the trees closed in around them, their branches intertwining like fingers clasped in a secret.
The light shifted, casting dappled
shadows that danced across the ground, creating
patterns that seemed to shift and swirl
. “Look!”
Eva exclaimed, pointing to a
cluster of flowers that glowed with an inner light. “They’re beautiful!” Aurora knelt beside the blooms, their petals a deep, iridescent blue. “They’re called moonblossoms,”
she said, recalling the tales
Isolde had shared. “They only bloom under the light of the full moon.” “Fascinating,”
Jareth said, leaning closer
. “But what do they do?” “Nothing good, I suspect,”
Nyx interjected, their tone serious
. “Many Fae plants have a mind of their own. Best not to touch.”
As if on cue, the
flowers
seemed to
sway, their glow pulsing in rhythm with the grove’s heartbeat. Aurora felt a strange pull, an urge to reach out and touch the petals, but she resisted.
Instead, she stood, scanning the
surroundings. The grove felt alive, as if it
were watching
them, waiting for their next move. “Let’s keep moving,”
she suggested, her voice steady
despite the unease creeping into her gut.
They pressed on, the path
winding through the trees, each step
echoing
with the soft crunch of leaves beneath their feet. The deeper they went, the more
surreal
the environment became. The trees twisted into impossible shapes, their bark shimmering with a silvery sheen. Aurora reached out to touch one, her fingers brushing against the cool surface.
It felt like stone, yet
it
pulsed
with
warmth
, as if the tree itself
were breathing
. “Did you feel that?” she asked, glancing at Nyx, who nodded, their form flickering with excitement. “Every heartbeat of this grove resonates with magic,”
they said, their voice low
and reverent. “It’s a conduit between realms.” “Conduit?”
Jareth echoed, his brow furrowing
. “What do you mean?” “Between Earth and the Fae realm,” Aurora explained, her gaze drifting to the horizon where the trees parted, revealing a glimmering pool of water. “This place is a threshold. A gateway.” “Then we should be careful,”
Jareth said, his voice tightening
. “We don’t want to accidentally cross over.” “Or attract unwanted attention,”
Nyx added, their eyes narrowing
. “The Fae are not known for their hospitality.” As they approached the pool, the air grew cooler, the atmosphere thick with
anticipation
. The water
shimmered
like liquid glass, reflecting the vibrant colours of the grove. Aurora knelt at the edge, mesmerised by the sight. Tiny fish darted beneath the surface, their scales
glinting
like jewels. “Look at that!”
Eva pointed, her excitement infectious
. “It’s like a mirror.” “More like a portal,”
Nyx corrected, their voice low
. “We should not linger here.” But Aurora couldn’t tear her gaze away. The water
seemed to
ripple with secrets, whispering promises of adventure and danger.
She leaned closer, entranced, when
a sudden splash broke the surface, sending ripples
cascading
outward. A figure emerged, ethereal and shimmering, its features indistinct yet undeniably beautiful. “Who dares disturb the waters of the Grove?”
the figure intoned, its voice echoing like a distant chime
. Aurora’s heart
raced
. “We mean no harm,”
she stammered, instinctively stepping back
. “We’re just explorers.” “Explorers?” The figure’s laughter was like the tinkling of bells, both enchanting and unsettling. “Curiosity is a dangerous trait in these woods.” “Perhaps we should go,”
Jareth suggested, his voice barely above a whisper
. “This doesn’t feel right.” “Stay,”
the figure commanded, its gaze piercing through the veil of uncertainty
. “You have entered a realm of wonders, yet you tread upon the edge of
peril
. What do you seek?” Aurora swallowed hard, her mind
racing
. “We seek knowledge,”
she replied, her voice steadier
than she felt. “We wish to understand the magic of this place.” “Knowledge comes at a price,”
the figure warned, its form shimmering like a mirage
. “What are you willing to sacrifice?” A heavy
silence
fell over the group, the
weight
of the question pressing down on them. Aurora exchanged glances with Nyx and Eva, uncertainty flickering in their eyes. Jareth shifted uneasily, his hands
clenching
at his sides. “I have nothing to offer,”
he said, his voice trembling
. “I just wanted to see.” “Then you should leave,”
the figure replied, its tone dismissive
. “This grove is not for the faint of heart.” “No,”
Aurora said, her resolve hardening
. “We came here for a reason. I won’t turn back now.” “Foolishness,”
the figure hissed, its form flickering ominously
. “But perhaps that is what makes you interesting.”
Before Aurora could respond, the
ground
trembled
beneath them, the trees shuddering
as if awakening from a long slumber
. The air thickened,
charged
with a
palpable
energy that crackled like static. A low rumble
echoed
through the grove, and the shimmering figure
began to
dissolve, its laughter fading into the wind. “Choose wisely,”
it whispered, the words lingering
in the air like a haunting melody. “The Grove remembers.” With that, the figure vanished, leaving only the rippling water and the heavy
silence
of the grove. Aurora’s heart
raced
, adrenaline coursing through her veins. She turned to her companions, their faces pale with shock. “What just happened?”
Jareth breathed, his eyes wide
. “I don’t know,”
Aurora admitted, her voice barely above a whisper
. “But I think we’ve just scratched the surface of something much bigger.” Nyx’s form
flickered
, their eyes
glinting
with excitement. “We’ve awakened the Grove. Now, we must decide how to proceed.” The ground
trembled
again, and Aurora felt a surge of energy coursing through her, a call to adventure that she couldn’t ignore. The grove
pulsed
with life, and she knew they were on the brink of something extraordinary. “Let’s go deeper,”
she said, her voice steady
. “Whatever lies ahead, we’ll face it together.” As they moved forward, the trees closed in around them, the shadows deepening. The air crackled with
anticipation
, and Aurora felt the
weight
of the Grove’s magic pressing against her skin.
They were no longer mere
explorers; they were part of a story that had yet to unfold, and the next chapter was about to begin.
total_cost
0.00179445
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
32
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
dialogueSentences
61
tagDensity
0.525
leniency
1
rawRatio
0
effectiveRatio
0
80.68%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
1294
totalAiIsmAdverbs
5
found
0
adverb
"barely above a whisper"
count
3
1
adverb
"slightly"
count
1
2
adverb
"carefully"
count
1
highlights
0
"barely above a whisper"
1
"slightly"
2
"carefully"
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
0.00%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
1294
totalAiIsms
48
found
0
word
"shimmered"
count
2
1
word
"racing"
count
2
2
word
"loomed"
count
1
3
word
"sentinels"
count
1
4
word
"whisper"
count
4
5
word
"scanned"
count
1
6
word
"down her spine"
count
1
7
word
"pulsed"
count
3
8
word
"foreboding"
count
1
9
word
"trepidation"
count
1
10
word
"electric"
count
1
11
word
"charged"
count
2
12
word
"unspoken"
count
1
13
word
"fascinating"
count
1
14
word
"scanning"
count
1
15
word
"echoing"
count
2
16
word
"surreal"
count
1
17
word
"warmth"
count
1
18
word
"echoed"
count
2
19
word
"furrowing"
count
1
20
word
"anticipation"
count
2
21
word
"glinting"
count
2
22
word
"cascading"
count
1
23
word
"raced"
count
2
24
word
"peril"
count
1
25
word
"silence"
count
2
26
word
"weight"
count
2
27
word
"clenching"
count
1
28
word
"resolve"
count
1
29
word
"trembled"
count
2
30
word
"palpable"
count
1
31
word
"flickered"
count
1
highlights
0
"shimmered"
1
"racing"
2
"loomed"
3
"sentinels"
4
"whisper"
5
"scanned"
6
"down her spine"
7
"pulsed"
8
"foreboding"
9
"trepidation"
10
"electric"
11
"charged"
12
"unspoken"
13
"fascinating"
14
"scanning"
15
"echoing"
16
"surreal"
17
"warmth"
18
"echoed"
19
"furrowing"
20
"anticipation"
21
"glinting"
22
"cascading"
23
"raced"
24
"peril"
25
"silence"
26
"weight"
27
"clenching"
28
"resolve"
29
"trembled"
30
"palpable"
31
"flickered"
100.00%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
74.19%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
5
narrationSentences
82
matches
0
"d with warmth"
1
"g with excitement"
2
"k with anticipation"
3
"g with excitement"
4
"d with anticipation"
73.17%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
4
narrationSentences
82
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
1
"began to"
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
110
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
25
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
0
markdownWords
0
totalWords
1293
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
23
unquotedAttributions
0
matches
(empty)
55.96%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
43
wordCount
957
uniqueNames
8
maxNameDensity
1.88
worstName
"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity
3
worstWindowName
"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora
18
Fae
1
Grove
2
Shade
1
Eva
4
Jareth
8
Nyx
8
Isolde
1
persons
0
"Aurora"
1
"Shade"
2
"Eva"
3
"Jareth"
4
"Nyx"
5
"Isolde"
places
0
"Fae"
1
"Grove"
globalScore
0.56
windowScore
0.667
5.07%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
69
glossingSentenceCount
4
matches
0
"as if speaking them too loudly might shatter the enchantment surrounding her"
1
"patterns that seemed to shift and swirl"
2
"felt like stone, yet it pulsed with war"
3
"as if awakening from a long slumber"
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
0
per1kWords
0
wordCount
1293
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
110
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
45
mean
28.73
std
16.87
cv
0.587
sampleLengths
0
83
1
26
2
40
3
63
4
19
5
31
6
61
7
17
8
32
9
10
10
22
11
56
12
36
13
52
14
16
15
20
16
10
17
31
18
17
19
17
20
47
21
12
22
14
23
47
24
18
25
15
26
22
27
16
28
31
29
26
30
20
31
37
32
15
33
19
34
17
35
16
36
51
37
17
38
35
39
8
40
23
41
19
42
38
43
15
44
56
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
0
totalSentences
82
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
2
totalVerbs
191
matches
0
"were watching"
1
"were breathing"
90.91%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
1
semicolonCount
1
flaggedSentences
2
totalSentences
110
ratio
0.018
matches
0
"She glanced back at the others—Eva, her childhood friend, and a newcomer, a wiry man named Jareth, who had insisted on joining them."
1
"They were no longer mere explorers; they were part of a story that had yet to unfold, and the next chapter was about to begin."
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
958
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
31
adverbRatio
0.032359081419624215
lyAdverbCount
11
lyAdverbRatio
0.011482254697286013
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
110
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
110
mean
11.75
std
5.14
cv
0.437
sampleLengths
0
12
1
24
2
8
3
20
4
19
5
10
6
16
7
17
8
12
9
11
10
12
11
12
12
23
13
16
14
12
15
7
16
20
17
11
18
14
19
9
20
19
21
19
22
15
23
2
24
11
25
11
26
10
27
5
28
5
29
9
30
13
31
18
32
17
33
6
34
15
35
15
36
21
37
10
38
13
39
13
40
16
41
16
42
15
43
5
44
6
45
4
46
24
47
7
48
10
49
7
64.85%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
7
diversityRatio
0.42727272727272725
totalSentences
110
uniqueOpeners
47
40.65%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
1
totalSentences
82
matches
0
"Instead, she stood, scanning the"
ratio
0.012
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
18
totalSentences
82
matches
0
"She paused, taking in the"
1
"she murmured, her voice barely"
2
"She glanced back at the"
3
"His wide eyes darted around,"
4
"she said, recalling the tales"
5
"she suggested, her voice steady"
6
"They pressed on, the path"
7
"It felt like stone, yet"
8
"she asked, glancing at Nyx,"
9
"they said, their voice low"
10
"She leaned closer, entranced, when"
11
"she stammered, instinctively stepping back"
12
"she replied, her voice steadier"
13
"he said, his voice trembling"
14
"it whispered, the words lingering"
15
"She turned to her companions,"
16
"she said, her voice steady"
17
"They were no longer mere"
ratio
0.22
27.07%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
71
totalSentences
82
matches
0
"The air shimmered as Aurora"
1
"The moment she crossed the"
2
"She paused, taking in the"
3
"Wildflowers carpeted the ground, vibrant"
4
"she murmured, her voice barely"
5
"The words felt sacred, as"
6
"Nyx replied, their silhouette flickering"
7
"The Shade’s faintly glowing violet"
8
"Aurora countered, a shiver running"
9
"The grove pulsed with an"
10
"She glanced back at the"
11
"His wide eyes darted around,"
12
"Jareth asked, his voice trembling"
13
"Nyx replied, their voice a"
14
"The air felt electric, charged"
15
"The light shifted, casting dappled"
16
"Eva exclaimed, pointing to a"
17
"Aurora knelt beside the blooms,"
18
"she said, recalling the tales"
19
"Jareth said, leaning closer"
ratio
0.866
100.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
2
totalSentences
82
matches
0
"As if on cue, the"
1
"Before Aurora could respond, the"
ratio
0.024
51.28%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
39
technicalSentenceCount
5
matches
0
"Towering ancient oaks, their trunks gnarled and twisted, loomed like sentinels, their leaves shimmering in hues of silver and lavender."
1
"Wildflowers carpeted the ground, vibrant and alive, their scents mingling in a heady perfume that made her head spin."
2
"The words felt sacred, as if speaking them too loudly might shatter the enchantment surrounding her."
3
"The grove felt alive, as if it were watching them, waiting for their next move."
4
"Before Aurora could respond, the ground trembled beneath them, the trees shuddering as if awakening from a long slumber."
0.00%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
32
uselessAdditionCount
26
matches
0
"she murmured, her voice barely above a whisper"
1
"Nyx replied, their silhouette flickering in and out of solidity beside her"
2
"Aurora countered, a shiver running down her spine"
3
"Jareth asked, his voice trembling slightly"
4
"Nyx replied, their voice a whisper carried on the wind"
5
"Nyx interjected, their tone serious"
6
"she suggested, her voice steady despite the unease creeping into her gut"
7
"they said, their voice low and reverent"
8
"Jareth echoed, his brow furrowing"
9
"Jareth said, his voice tightening"
10
"Nyx added, their eyes narrowing"
11
"Eva pointed, her excitement infectious"
12
"Nyx corrected, their voice low"
13
"the figure intoned, its voice echoing like a distant chime"
14
"Jareth suggested, his voice barely above a whisper"
15
"the figure commanded, its gaze piercing through the veil of uncertainty"
16
"she replied, her voice steadier than she felt"
17
"the figure warned, its form shimmering like a mirage"
18
"he said, his voice trembling"
19
"the figure replied, its tone dismissive"
20
"Aurora said, her resolve hardening"
21
"the figure hissed, its form flickering ominously"
22
"it whispered, the words lingering in the air like a haunting melody"
23
"Jareth breathed, his eyes wide"
24
"Aurora admitted, her voice barely above a whisper"
25
"she said, her voice steady"
0.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
27
fancyCount
14
fancyTags
0
"she murmured (murmur)"
1
"Eva exclaimed (exclaim)"
2
"Nyx interjected (interject)"
3
"she suggested (suggest)"
4
"Aurora explained (explain)"
5
"Nyx added (add)"
6
"Nyx corrected (correct)"
7
"she stammered (stammer)"
8
"Jareth suggested (suggest)"
9
"the figure warned (warn)"
10
"the figure hissed (hiss)"
11
"it whispered (whisper)"
12
"Jareth breathed (breathe)"
13
"Aurora admitted (admit)"
dialogueSentences
61
tagDensity
0.443
leniency
0.885
rawRatio
0.519
effectiveRatio
0.459
75.4610%