Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTQW2C15H4S4BR247GZXJKF

Run Details

Duration:
14.4s
Cost:
$0.000932
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door swung open before the knock even finished echoing through the cramped flat on Brick Lane. Aurora Carter—I guess Rory—stood on the threshold, still gripping the door handle, eyes narrowing as her gaze slid up and down the figure before her. Lucien Moreau didn’t look like he’d been anywhere but right here, right now; bone-deep calm coated in that slick attitude he always carried, his platinum blond hair slicked back, a tailored charcoal suit hugging his tall frame. His black eye, the heterochromatic one, gleamed like a predator’s in the dim hallway. She hadn’t expected him. Not today, not ever, she told herself. Her pulse tumbled in her chest, a stubborn drum that refused to slow. “Lucien,” she managed, voice clipped and cautious. Her brow knotted as she looked past him, feeling the faint scent of tobacco and something darker lingering—demon blackness her nose had grown accustomed to. “What are you doing here?” He tilted his head, that inscrutable smile tugging at one corner of his mouth, the kind that meant trouble. His cane—the ivory-handled thing that concealed a blade—leaned casually against the doorframe as if he had all the time in the world. “Aurora. Always so sceptical. I come with news. Or perhaps, a warning.” She crossed her arms, shoulders tense, fighting the flash of distant memories that played like fractured film reels: their last heated argument, banished lies, and silences that stretched so painfully long from stories unsaid. “Yeah, I figured.” Her voice dropped an octave. “News? Warnings? You always come with something, Lucien. What's this? A rescue? A threat?” He chuckled softly, but it was sharp—edged with that faint menace he wielded so effortlessly in every word. “Depends how you look at it. I could tell you I’ve found something that might interest you. Something... urgent.” His eyes flickered, amber and black, a mirror of the demon blood within him. She hesitated, the muscles in her jaw clenched. The scars from her past—small crescent-shaped on her wrist—itched with the memory of youthful reckless confidence. She’d long ago learned not to trust easy, especially when it came to Lucien. “Fine.” She shifted, almost involuntary, as her hand went to her hip. “Speak. And make it quick. I don’t have all night.” His gaze lingered on her, unblinking, that faint smirk rubbing salt in old wounds. “I’ve uncovered a fragment of Avaros—A demon realm I once thought was just stories to scare schoolchildren.” His voice lowered, deliberate. “It’s nearby. Very nearby. And someone is trying to summon something—someone—who shouldn’t be here.” Rory’s stomach clenched. Her mind spun, pictures flashing of the late nights battling shadows and whispers, of things she’d bet her life weren’t supposed to cross into her world. “Who?” she demanded, voice rough from disuse. “An organisation more dangerous than you realise. They’re desperate, reckless. They want power, or they want chaos, I can’t tell yet.” His eyes flicked to her scar, then back to her face. “But I know it’s linked to the old magic—the stuff you’ve always been so good at uncovering. And I figured... you’d want to know.” She stared, hands braced on the doorframe, as if physical contact would break her fragile composure. Truthfully, her heart pounded like a hammer. Despite the years, despite everything, a part of her still wondered what it’d be like if he just pushed past her and stayed. What it’d feel like to forget the hurt, to succumb to the pull that had never quite disappeared. “Why should I trust you?” Her words snapped out cold, even as her eyes betrayed her curiosity, her longing. Lucien’s smile widened just enough, a flash of charm masking danger. “Because I’m the only one who’s got a lead. And because, deep down, you’re still interested. You can pretend you’re above it all, but I know you feel it, Rory. That shadow in your eye. That hunger for answers.” She swallowed hard, heat rushing to her cheeks, and looked away toward the cluttered room behind her—books and scrolls spilling from the shelves, notes scrawled across every surface. A life riddled with secrets, with ghosts. “Fine,” she said finally, finding her voice. “But if you think I’m going to go chasing after some demon-bothering lunatic because you showed up unannounced—think again.” Lucien took a step closer, a ghost of a smirk on his lips. “No chase necessary. Now it’s just a matter of whether you’re willing to come with me or not. Because if someone else finds this thread—if they get their hands on it—they’ll unravel everything you’ve fought for.” The click of Ptolemy’s claws on the wooden floor was suddenly loud in the tense silence. The tabby’s emerald eyes blinked slowly at Lucien’s feet, then at Rory’s guarded face. Rory felt her heart stir. This was dangerous. Instinct told her to slam the door and forget. But her memories whispered what she already knew—the ticking of the old clock over her bed, the nights she’d played with fire chasing shadows, and the one thing she refused to admit even now: she hadn’t stopped thinking about him. Her hand lifted, hesitated. A silent question. Lucien saw it, said softly, “You don’t have to decide now. But I need to know you’re in.” For a moment, she considered pushing the door shut, sealing him out. Instead, she swallowed the knot in her throat and nodded. “Fine. But if this goes south…” Her voice was steady, deliberately cold. “If you drag me into some demon mess I don’t want part of—” He chuckled again, this time darker, eyes flicking with amusement. “It’s already begun, Rory. And I suspect you’re already in too deep to back out now.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
18.18% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags10
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"She shifted almost [almost]"
1"she said finally [finally]"
dialogueSentences22
tagDensity0.455
leniency0.909
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.182
68.88% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount964
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"softly"
count2
1
adverb"very"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
4
adverb"deliberately"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"very"
2"suddenly"
3"slowly"
4"deliberately"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
42.95% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount964
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"echoing"
count1
1
word"predator"
count1
2
word"pulse"
count1
3
word"fractured"
count1
4
word"flickered"
count1
5
word"jaw clenched"
count1
6
word"stomach"
count1
7
word"flicked"
count1
8
word"charm"
count1
9
word"unravel"
count1
10
word"silence"
count1
highlights
0"echoing"
1"predator"
2"pulse"
3"fractured"
4"flickered"
5"jaw clenched"
6"stomach"
7"flicked"
8"charm"
9"unravel"
10"silence"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"jaw clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences48
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences48
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences59
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen41
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords943
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Not today, not ever, she told herself."
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions15
wordCount653
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity0.92
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Brick1
Lane1
Carter1
Rory4
Moreau1
Lucien6
Ptolemy1
persons
0"Carter"
1"Rory"
2"Moreau"
3"Lucien"
4"Ptolemy"
places
0"Brick"
1"Lane"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences39
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount943
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences59
matches(empty)
93.23% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs27
mean34.93
std16.64
cv0.476
sampleLengths
017
176
224
337
453
534
622
751
838
922
1014
1135
1236
1356
1464
1519
1650
1735
1826
1949
2030
2157
227
2318
2422
2525
2626
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences48
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs126
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount10
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences8
totalSentences59
ratio0.136
matches
0"Aurora Carter—I guess Rory—stood on the threshold, still gripping the door handle, eyes narrowing as her gaze slid up and down the figure before her."
1"Lucien Moreau didn’t look like he’d been anywhere but right here, right now; bone-deep calm coated in that slick attitude he always carried, his platinum blond hair slicked back, a tailored charcoal suit hugging his tall frame."
2"Her brow knotted as she looked past him, feeling the faint scent of tobacco and something darker lingering—demon blackness her nose had grown accustomed to."
3"His cane—the ivory-handled thing that concealed a blade—leaned casually against the doorframe as if he had all the time in the world."
4"He chuckled softly, but it was sharp—edged with that faint menace he wielded so effortlessly in every word."
5"The scars from her past—small crescent-shaped on her wrist—itched with the memory of youthful reckless confidence."
6"She swallowed hard, heat rushing to her cheeks, and looked away toward the cluttered room behind her—books and scrolls spilling from the shelves, notes scrawled across every surface."
7"But her memories whispered what she already knew—the ticking of the old clock over her bed, the nights she’d played with fire chasing shadows, and the one thing she refused to admit even now: she hadn’t stopped thinking about him."
86.39% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount666
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount37
adverbRatio0.05555555555555555
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.016516516516516516
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences59
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences59
mean15.98
std9.55
cv0.598
sampleLengths
017
125
237
314
44
57
613
77
825
95
1019
1122
1212
1334
148
1514
1618
1733
188
1916
2014
2112
2210
2314
2421
2514
263
2726
287
2932
3024
3116
327
3323
3418
3519
3611
3739
3828
397
407
4119
4213
4336
4416
4514
465
473
489
4940
85.88% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.5254237288135594
totalSentences59
uniqueOpeners31
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences48
matches
0"Truthfully, her heart pounded like"
1"Instead, she swallowed the knot"
ratio0.042
3.33% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences48
matches
0"His black eye, the heterochromatic"
1"She hadn’t expected him."
2"Her pulse tumbled in her"
3"she managed, voice clipped and"
4"Her brow knotted as she"
5"He tilted his head, that"
6"His cane—the ivory-handled thing that"
7"She crossed her arms, shoulders"
8"Her voice dropped an octave"
9"He chuckled softly, but it"
10"His eyes flickered, amber and"
11"She hesitated, the muscles in"
12"She’d long ago learned not"
13"She shifted, almost involuntary, as"
14"His gaze lingered on her,"
15"His voice lowered, deliberate"
16"Her mind spun, pictures flashing"
17"she demanded, voice rough from"
18"His eyes flicked to her"
19"She stared, hands braced on"
ratio0.542
32.92% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount41
totalSentences48
matches
0"The door swung open before"
1"Aurora Carter—I guess Rory—stood on"
2"Lucien Moreau didn’t look like"
3"His black eye, the heterochromatic"
4"She hadn’t expected him."
5"Her pulse tumbled in her"
6"she managed, voice clipped and"
7"Her brow knotted as she"
8"He tilted his head, that"
9"His cane—the ivory-handled thing that"
10"She crossed her arms, shoulders"
11"Her voice dropped an octave"
12"He chuckled softly, but it"
13"His eyes flickered, amber and"
14"She hesitated, the muscles in"
15"The scars from her past—small"
16"She’d long ago learned not"
17"She shifted, almost involuntary, as"
18"His gaze lingered on her,"
19"His voice lowered, deliberate"
ratio0.854
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences48
matches(empty)
ratio0
32.97% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences26
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"He tilted his head, that inscrutable smile tugging at one corner of his mouth, the kind that meant trouble."
1"His cane—the ivory-handled thing that concealed a blade—leaned casually against the doorframe as if he had all the time in the world."
2"She crossed her arms, shoulders tense, fighting the flash of distant memories that played like fractured film reels: their last heated argument, banished lies, …"
3"She stared, hands braced on the doorframe, as if physical contact would break her fragile composure."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags10
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"she managed, voice clipped and cautious"
1"His voice lowered, deliberate"
2"she demanded, voice rough from disuse"
59.09% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she demanded (demand)"
1"Her words snapped (snap)"
dialogueSentences22
tagDensity0.136
leniency0.273
rawRatio0.667
effectiveRatio0.182
74.1270%