Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTQWGNSPG8740XBWMMYCYXR

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Duration:
42.6s
Cost:
$0.002156
Provider:
DeepInfra

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The Heartstone pulsed against Rory’s chest as she stepped through the ancient oak stones. The air shifted, thick and cloying, pressing against her skin like a damp hand. She paused, her breath shallow, and scanned the clearing. The Fae Grove looked just as Eva had described — wildflowers carpeting the ground, their colours unnaturally vivid in the moonlight. But something felt... wrong. She tightened her jacket against the chill, her fingers brushing the crescent scar on her wrist. The scar itched, a sensation she hadn’t felt in years. She ignored it, focusing instead on the task at hand. The pendant had led her here after days of erratic pulsing, its crimson glow intensifying as she approached Richmond Park. Now, standing in the heart of the Grove, its warmth was almost unbearable. The silence was wrong. Parks at night were never silent — the rustle of leaves, the distant hum of traffic, the occasional call of a fox. Here, the quiet pressed down like a weight, broken only by the faint whisper of wind through the standing stones. She moved forward, her boots crunching softly against the earth. The flowers swayed as if pushed by an unseen breeze, but the air remained still. Rory’s gaze flicked to the edge of the clearing, where shadows pooled thick and deep. Something moved there — a flicker of movement, too quick to grasp. “Hello?” Her voice sounded small, swallowed by the oppressive stillness. No answer. She swallowed hard, forcing herself to breathe evenly. It’s just your imagination. Eva had warned her about the Grove, about how it played tricks on the mind. But Rory had grown up in Cardiff, roaming its fog-shrouded docks and narrow alleys. She knew how to keep her head in eerie places. The pendant’s glow intensified, casting a faint crimson light on the ground before her. She followed it, her steps deliberate, her senses alert. The path led her deeper into the Grove, where the trees grew taller, their branches intertwining to form a canopy. Moonlight filtered through in jagged beams, illuminating patches of wildflowers that seemed to shimmer unnaturally. A sound made her freeze — a low, guttural rumble that vibrated through her chest. It wasn’t human. She turned slowly, her heart pounding. The sound came again, closer this time, accompanied by the soft crunch of footsteps. The shadows shifted, coalescing into a shape that towered just beyond the edge of the light. Rory’s breath caught. The creature stood at least seven feet tall, its form indistinct, cloaked in darkness save for its eyes — twin points of amber light that glowed with malevolent intelligence. She took a step back, her mind racing. The pendant’s warmth surged, pulsing in time with her heartbeat. The creature tilted its head, its gaze locking onto hers. It moved closer, its movements fluid and unnaturally silent. “Stay back.” Her voice trembled, but she held her ground. The creature paused, its head cocking to the side as if considering her. Then it lunged, its form dissolving into a swirl of shadows that surged towards her. Rory turned and ran, her boots pounding against the ground. The shadows pursued, their presence a cold weight at her back. She ducked under low branches, her breath coming in ragged gasps. The Grove seemed to stretch endlessly, the path twisting and turning in ways that defied logic. Ahead, the standing stones loomed, their ancient oaks marking the boundary of the Grove. She pushed herself harder, her lungs burning. The pendant’s glow became blinding, its warmth searing against her skin. She burst through the stones, stumbling into the cool night air of the park. The shadows stopped at the edge of the Grove, swirling angrily before retreating into the darkness. Rory collapsed to her knees, her chest heaving. She glanced back at the Grove, its wildflowers swaying as if nothing had happened. The pendant’s glow faded, its warmth returning to a gentle pulse. She stood, brushing dirt from her knees, and scanned the park. The familiar hum of London nightlife drifted in from the distance, grounding her. The Grove was quiet once more, its secrets hidden behind the ancient oak stones. But as she turned to leave, she felt it — a cold, lingering presence that watched from the shadows, waiting.
created_at"2026-02-19T10:42:14.849Z" 2/19/2026, 10:42:14 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags2
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences2
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
78.78% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount707
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
2
adverb"angrily"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"slowly"
2"angrily"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount707
totalAiIsms25
found
0
word"pulsed"
count1
1
word"scanned"
count2
2
word"chill"
count1
3
word"warmth"
count4
4
word"silence"
count1
5
word"weight"
count2
6
word"whisper"
count1
7
word"flicked"
count1
8
word"flicker"
count1
9
word"oppressive"
count1
10
word"vibrated"
count1
11
word"pounding"
count2
12
word"footsteps"
count1
13
word"racing"
count1
14
word"trembled"
count1
15
word"loomed"
count1
16
word"searing"
count1
17
word"pulse"
count1
18
word"familiar"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"scanned"
2"chill"
3"warmth"
4"silence"
5"weight"
6"whisper"
7"flicked"
8"flicker"
9"oppressive"
10"vibrated"
11"pounding"
12"footsteps"
13"racing"
14"trembled"
15"loomed"
16"searing"
17"pulse"
18"familiar"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences59
matches(empty)
94.43% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences59
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences59
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen28
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords712
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions0
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions23
wordCount709
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity1.27
worstName"Grove"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Grove"
discoveredNames
Heartstone1
Rory6
Fae1
Grove9
Eva2
Richmond1
Park1
Cardiff1
London1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Eva"
places
0"Fae"
1"Grove"
2"Richmond"
3"Park"
4"Cardiff"
5"London"
globalScore0.865
windowScore0.833
53.85% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences52
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"wildflowers that seemed to shimmer unnaturally"
1"as if considering her"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount712
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences59
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs21
mean33.9
std17.9
cv0.528
sampleLengths
062
169
246
352
410
52
651
758
818
936
1032
1118
1219
1310
1428
1548
1632
1730
1833
1938
2020
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences59
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs124
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount6
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences59
ratio0.102
matches
0"The Fae Grove looked just as Eva had described — wildflowers carpeting the ground, their colours unnaturally vivid in the moonlight."
1"Parks at night were never silent — the rustle of leaves, the distant hum of traffic, the occasional call of a fox."
2"Something moved there — a flicker of movement, too quick to grasp."
3"A sound made her freeze — a low, guttural rumble that vibrated through her chest."
4"The creature stood at least seven feet tall, its form indistinct, cloaked in darkness save for its eyes — twin points of amber light that glowed with malevolent intelligence."
5"But as she turned to leave, she felt it — a cold, lingering presence that watched from the shadows, waiting."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount704
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"cloying, pressing against her"
adverbCount22
adverbRatio0.03125
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.01278409090909091
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences59
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences59
mean12.07
std5.29
cv0.438
sampleLengths
014
114
29
321
43
51
616
710
810
920
1013
114
1222
1320
1410
1515
1615
1712
1810
192
208
214
2215
2314
2410
2514
269
2720
2815
2915
303
316
3214
3316
343
3529
368
3710
3810
399
4010
4113
4215
4310
4411
4511
4616
4714
487
4911
44.07% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.3050847457627119
totalSentences59
uniqueOpeners18
58.48% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences57
matches
0"Then it lunged, its form"
ratio0.018
86.67% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount19
totalSentences57
matches
0"She paused, her breath shallow,"
1"She tightened her jacket against"
2"She ignored it, focusing instead"
3"She moved forward, her boots"
4"Her voice sounded small, swallowed"
5"She swallowed hard, forcing herself"
6"It’s just your imagination."
7"She knew how to keep"
8"She followed it, her steps"
9"It wasn’t human."
10"She turned slowly, her heart"
11"She took a step back,"
12"It moved closer, its movements"
13"Her voice trembled, but she"
14"She ducked under low branches,"
15"She pushed herself harder, her"
16"She burst through the stones,"
17"She glanced back at the"
18"She stood, brushing dirt from"
ratio0.333
12.63% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount51
totalSentences57
matches
0"The Heartstone pulsed against Rory’s"
1"The air shifted, thick and"
2"She paused, her breath shallow,"
3"The Fae Grove looked just"
4"She tightened her jacket against"
5"The scar itched, a sensation"
6"She ignored it, focusing instead"
7"The pendant had led her"
8"The silence was wrong."
9"Parks at night were never"
10"Here, the quiet pressed down"
11"She moved forward, her boots"
12"The flowers swayed as if"
13"Rory’s gaze flicked to the"
14"Something moved there — a"
15"Her voice sounded small, swallowed"
16"She swallowed hard, forcing herself"
17"It’s just your imagination."
18"Eva had warned her about"
19"She knew how to keep"
ratio0.895
87.72% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences57
matches
0"Now, standing in the heart"
ratio0.018
91.84% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences42
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Moonlight filtered through in jagged beams, illuminating patches of wildflowers that seemed to shimmer unnaturally."
1"The creature stood at least seven feet tall, its form indistinct, cloaked in darkness save for its eyes — twin points of amber light that glowed with malevolent…"
2"The creature paused, its head cocking to the side as if considering her."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags2
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
82.8599%