Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTQWQDS6CF6ZEDZHC11QQ88

Run Details

Duration:
43.4s
Cost:
$0.066025
Provider:
Azure

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora Carter stood at the edge of The Fae Grove, the ancient oak standing stones casting long shadows in the moonlight. The air was thick with the scent of wildflowers, their vibrant colors muted in the darkness. She clutched the Heartstone Pendant around her neck, its faint inner glow providing little comfort. She had come here for a reason, though the specifics eluded her in the oppressive silence of the night. The Grove was eerily quiet, the usual sounds of nocturnal creatures conspicuously absent. Rory's breath fogged in the cool air, and she pulled her jacket tighter around her. She took a step forward, the crunch of leaves underfoot sounding unnaturally loud. The standing stones loomed ahead, their ancient presence both a guide and a warning. As she moved deeper into the Grove, the sense of wrongness grew. The trees seemed to close in around her, their gnarled branches reaching out like skeletal fingers. She glanced over her shoulder, half-expecting to see someone—or something—following her. But there was nothing, just the dark, empty path she had walked. A rustling sound to her left made her freeze. She turned slowly, her heart pounding in her chest. The shadows between the trees shifted, but she saw nothing. She took a deep breath and continued walking, her eyes darting around, trying to catch any movement. The pendant pulsed faintly against her skin, a reminder of its purpose. She had been given the Heartstone by an unknown benefactor, its significance a mystery. But she knew it was important, that it held some connection to the Grove and the Hel portals. She just had to find out what. A low whispering sound reached her ears, like the wind through the trees, but more insistent, more deliberate. She stopped again, straining to hear. The whispering grew louder, a chorus of voices just beyond comprehension. She turned in a slow circle, trying to pinpoint the source, but it seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere. "Who's there?" she called out, her voice sounding small and uncertain in the vast darkness. The whispering stopped abruptly, leaving an oppressive silence in its wake. Rory's pulse quickened, and she took a hesitant step forward. The path ahead was barely visible, the moonlight filtering through the dense canopy above. She could see the faint outline of the standing stones in the distance, their presence both a beacon and a threat. As she walked, the feeling of being watched grew stronger. She could almost feel eyes on her, tracking her every move. She glanced around, her breath coming in short, sharp bursts. The shadows seemed to shift and dance at the edge of her vision, but when she turned to look, there was nothing there. A sudden chill ran down her spine, and she shivered. The air around her seemed to grow colder, the warmth of the pendant the only source of heat. She quickened her pace, her footsteps echoing in the stillness. The standing stones were closer now, their ancient forms looming larger with each step. The whispering started again, louder this time, more insistent. Rory's heart raced, and she broke into a run, the pendant bouncing against her chest. The stones were just ahead, their presence both a promise and a threat. She reached the clearing and skidded to a stop, her breath coming in ragged gasps. The Grove was silent once more, the whispering gone. Rory looked around, her eyes wide with fear. The standing stones cast long shadows in the moonlight, their ancient forms seeming to pulse with a life of their own. She took a step forward, the pendant glowing faintly in the darkness. A movement at the edge of her vision made her spin around. She saw nothing, just the dark, empty clearing. But the feeling of being watched was stronger than ever, a palpable presence that made her skin crawl. She took another step forward, her eyes darting around, trying to catch any sign of movement. The whispering started again, louder and more insistent. Rory's heart pounded in her chest, and she clutched the pendant tightly. The voices seemed to come from all around her, a cacophony of sound that made her head spin. She took a deep breath and stepped into the center of the clearing, the standing stones towering over her. The whispering grew louder, the voices almost deafening. Rory's vision blurred, and she stumbled, her knees hitting the ground. She looked up at the stones, their ancient forms seeming to pulse with a life of their own. The pendant glowed brightly, its warmth a stark contrast to the cold air around her. "Show yourself!" she shouted, her voice echoing in the stillness. The whispering stopped abruptly, and the silence was deafening. Rory's breath came in short, sharp bursts, her heart pounding in her chest. She looked around, her eyes wide with fear. The shadows seemed to shift and dance at the edge of her vision, but when she turned to look, there was nothing there. A low, guttural growl reached her ears, and she spun around, her eyes searching the darkness. The growl grew louder, more insistent, and she took a step back, her heart racing. The shadows seemed to close in around her, their presence a tangible force. "Who's there?" she called out, her voice trembling. The growl stopped, and the silence was oppressive. Rory's breath fogged in the cool air, and she pulled her jacket tighter around her. She took a step forward, the pendant glowing brightly in the darkness. The standing stones loomed ahead, their ancient forms both a guide and a warning. As she moved deeper into the clearing, the sense of wrongness grew. The trees seemed to close in around her, their gnarled branches reaching out like skeletal fingers. She glanced over her shoulder, half-expecting to see someone—or something—following her. But there was nothing, just the dark, empty path she had walked. A rustling sound to her left made her freeze. She turned slowly, her heart pounding in her chest. The shadows between the trees shifted, but she saw nothing. She took a deep breath and continued walking, her eyes darting around, trying to catch any movement. The pendant pulsed faintly against her skin, a reminder of its purpose. She had been given the Heartstone by an unknown benefactor, its significance a mystery. But she knew it was important, that it held some connection to the Grove and the Hel portals. She just had to find out what. A low whispering sound reached her ears, like the wind through the trees, but more insistent, more deliberate. She stopped again, straining to hear. The whispering grew louder, a chorus of voices just beyond comprehension. She turned in a slow circle, trying to pinpoint the source, but it seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere. "Who's there?" she called out, her voice sounding small and uncertain in the vast darkness. The whispering stopped abruptly, leaving an oppressive silence in its wake. Rory's pulse quickened, and she took a hesitant step forward. The path ahead was barely visible, the moonlight filtering through the dense canopy above. She could see the faint outline of the standing stones in the distance, their presence both a beacon and a threat. As she walked, the feeling of being watched grew stronger. She could almost feel eyes on her, tracking her every move. She glanced around, her breath coming in short, sharp bursts. The shadows seemed to shift and dance at the edge of her vision, but when she turned to look, there was nothing there. A sudden chill ran down her spine, and she shivered. The air around her seemed to grow colder, the warmth of the pendant the only source of heat. She quickened her pace, her footsteps echoing in the stillness. The standing stones were closer now, their ancient forms looming larger with each step. The whispering started again, louder this time, more insistent. Rory's heart raced, and she broke into a run, the pendant bouncing against her chest. The stones were just ahead, their presence both a promise and a threat. She reached the clearing and skidded to a stop, her breath coming in ragged gasps. The Grove was silent once more, the whispering gone. Rory looked around, her eyes wide with fear. The standing stones cast long shadows in the moonlight, their ancient forms seeming to pulse with a life of their own. She took a step forward, the pendant glowing faintly in the darkness. A movement at the edge of her vision made her spin around. She saw nothing, just the dark, empty clearing. But the feeling of being watched was stronger than ever, a palpable presence that made her skin crawl. She took another step forward, her eyes darting around, trying to catch any sign of movement. The whispering started again, louder and more insistent. Rory's heart pounded in her chest, and she clutched the pendant tightly. The voices seemed to come from all around her, a cacophony of sound that made her head spin. She took a deep breath and stepped into the center of the clearing, the standing stones towering over her. The whispering grew louder, the voices almost deafening. Rory's vision blurred, and she stumbled, her knees hitting the ground. She looked up at the stones, their ancient forms seeming to pulse with a life of their own. The pendant glowed brightly, its warmth a stark contrast to the cold air around her. "Show yourself!" she shouted, her voice echoing in the stillness. The whispering stopped abruptly, and the silence was deafening. Rory's breath came in short, sharp bursts, her heart pounding in her chest. She looked around, her eyes wide with fear. The shadows seemed to shift and dance at the edge of her vision, but when she turned to look, there was nothing there. A low, guttural growl reached her ears, and she spun around, her eyes searching the darkness. The growl grew louder, more insistent, and she took a step back, her heart racing. The shadows seemed to close in around her, their presence a tangible force. "Who's there?" she called out, her voice trembling. The growl stopped, and the silence was oppressive. Rory's breath fogged in the cool air, and she pulled her jacket tighter around her. She took a step forward, the pendant glowing brightly in the darkness. The standing stones loomed ahead, their ancient forms both a guide and a warning. As she moved deeper into the clearing, the sense of wrongness grew. The trees seemed to close in around her, their gnarled branches reaching out like skeletal fingers. She glanced over her shoulder, half-expecting to see someone—or something—following her. But there was nothing, just the dark, empty path she had walked. A rustling sound to her left made her freeze. She turned slowly, her heart pounding in her chest. The shadows between the trees shifted, but she saw nothing. She took a deep breath and continued walking, her eyes darting around, trying to catch any movement. The pendant pulsed faintly against her skin, a reminder of its purpose. She had been given the Heartstone by an unknown benefactor, its significance a mystery. But she knew it was important, that it held some connection to the Grove and the Hel portals. She just had to find out what. A low whispering sound reached her ears, like the wind through the trees, but more insistent, more deliberate. She stopped again, straining to hear. The whispering grew louder, a chorus of voices just beyond comprehension. She turned in a slow circle, trying to pinpoint the source, but it seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere. "Who's there?" she called out, her voice sounding small and uncertain in the vast darkness. The whispering stopped abruptly, leaving an oppressive silence in its wake. Rory's pulse quickened, and she took a hesitant step forward. The path ahead was barely visible, the moonlight filtering through the dense canopy above. She could see the faint outline of the standing stones in the distance, their presence both a beacon and a threat. As she walked, the feeling of being watched grew stronger. She could almost feel eyes on her, tracking her every move. She glanced around, her breath coming in short, sharp bursts. The shadows seemed to shift and dance at the edge of her vision, but when she turned to look, there was nothing there. A sudden chill ran down her spine, and she shivered. The air around her seemed to grow colder, the warmth of the pendant the only source of heat. She quickened her pace, her footsteps echoing in the stillness. The standing stones were closer now, their ancient forms looming larger with each step. The whispering started again, louder this time, more insistent. Rory's heart raced, and she broke into a run, the pendant bouncing against her chest. The stones were just ahead, their presence both a promise and a threat. She reached the clearing and skidded to a stop, her breath coming in ragged gasps. The Grove was silent once more, the whispering gone. Rory looked around, her eyes wide with fear. The standing stones cast long shadows in the moonlight, their ancient forms seeming to pulse with a life of their own. She took a step forward, the pendant glowing faintly in the darkness. A movement at the edge of her vision made her spin around. She saw nothing, just the dark, empty clearing. But the feeling of being watched was stronger than ever, a palpable presence that made her skin crawl. She took another step forward, her eyes darting around, trying to catch any sign of movement. The whispering started again, louder and more insistent. Rory's heart pounded in her chest, and she clutched the pendant tightly. The voices seemed to come from all around her, a cacophony of sound that made her head spin. She took a deep breath and stepped into the center of the clearing, the standing stones towering over her. The whispering grew louder, the voices almost deafening. Rory's vision blurred, and she stumbled, her knees hitting the ground. She looked up at the stones, their ancient forms seeming to pulse with a life of their own. The pendant glowed brightly, its warmth a stark contrast to the cold air around her. "Show yourself!" she shouted, her voice echoing in the stillness. The whispering stopped abruptly, and the silence was deafening. Rory's breath came in short, sharp bursts, her heart pounding in her chest. She looked around, her eyes wide with fear. The shadows seemed to shift and dance at the edge of her vision, but when she turned to look, there was nothing there. A low, guttural growl reached her ears, and she spun around, her eyes searching the darkness. The growl grew louder, more insistent, and she took a step back, her heart racing. The shadows seemed to close in around her, their presence a tangible force. "Who's there?" she called out, her voice trembling. The growl stopped, and the silence was oppressive. Rory's breath fogged in the cool air, and she pulled her jacket tighter around her. She took a step forward, the pendant glowing brightly in the darkness. The standing stones loomed ahead, their ancient forms both a guide and a warning. As she moved deeper into the clearing, the sense of wrongness grew. The trees seemed to close in around her, their gnarled branches reaching out like skeletal fingers. She glanced over her shoulder, half-expecting to see someone—or something—following her. But there was nothing, just the dark, empty path she had walked. A rustling sound to her left made her freeze. She turned slowly, her heart pounding in her chest. The shadows between the trees shifted, but she saw nothing. She took a deep breath and continued walking, her eyes darting around, trying to catch any movement. The pendant pulsed faintly against her skin, a reminder of its purpose. She had been given the Heartstone by an unknown benefactor, its significance a mystery. But she knew it was important, that it held some connection to the Grove and the Hel portals. She just had to find out what. A low whispering sound reached her ears, like the wind through the trees, but more insistent, more deliberate. She stopped again, straining to hear. The whispering grew louder, a chorus of voices just beyond comprehension. She turned in a slow circle, trying to pinpoint the source, but it seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere. "Who's there?" she called out, her voice sounding small and uncertain in the vast darkness. The whispering stopped abruptly, leaving an oppressive silence in its wake. Rory's pulse quickened, and she took a hesitant step forward. The path ahead was barely visible, the moonlight filtering through the dense canopy above. She could see the faint outline of the standing stones in the distance, their presence both a beacon and a threat. As she walked, the feeling of being watched grew stronger. She could almost feel eyes on her, tracking her every move. She glanced around, her breath coming in short, sharp bursts. The shadows seemed to shift and dance at the edge of her vision, but when she turned to look, there was nothing there. A sudden chill ran down her spine, and she shivered. The air around her seemed to grow colder, the warmth of the pendant the only source of heat. She quickened her pace, her footsteps echoing in the stillness. The standing stones were closer now, their ancient forms looming larger with each step. The whispering started again, louder this time, more insistent. Rory's heart raced, and she broke into a run, the pendant bouncing against her chest. The stones were just ahead, their presence both a promise and a threat. She reached the clearing and skidded to a stop, her breath coming in ragged gasps. The Grove was silent once more, the whispering gone. Rory looked around, her eyes wide with fear. The standing stones cast long shadows in the moonlight, their ancient forms seeming to pulse with a life of their own. She took a step forward, the pendant glowing faintly in the darkness. A movement at the edge of her vision made her spin around. She saw nothing, just the dark, empty clearing. But the feeling of being watched was stronger than ever, a palpable presence that made her skin crawl. She took another step forward, her eyes darting around, trying to catch any sign of movement. The whispering started again, louder and more insistent. Rory's heart pounded in her chest, and she clutched the pendant tightly. The voices seemed to come from all around her, a cacophony of sound that made her head spin. She took a deep breath and stepped into the center of the clearing, the standing stones towering over her. The whispering grew louder, the voices almost deafening. Rory's vision blurred, and she stumbled, her knees hitting the ground. She looked up at the stones, their ancient forms seeming to pulse with a life of their own. The pendant glowed brightly, its warmth a stark contrast to the cold air around her. "Show yourself!" she shouted, her voice echoing in the stillness. The whispering stopped abruptly, and the silence was deafening. Rory's breath came in short, sharp bursts, her heart pounding in her chest. She looked around, her eyes wide with fear. The shadows seemed to shift and dance at the edge of her vision, but when she turned to look, there was nothing there. A low, guttural growl
created_at"2026-02-19T10:42:21.757Z" 2/19/2026, 10:42:21 AM
model"openai/gpt-4o-2024-05-13"
app_id182717
external_user(null)
streamedtrue
cancelledfalse
latency519
moderation_latency(null)
generation_time43369
tokens_prompt1038
tokens_completion4904
native_tokens_prompt917
native_tokens_completion4096
native_tokens_completion_images(null)
native_tokens_reasoning0
native_tokens_cached0
num_media_prompt(null)
num_input_audio_prompt(null)
num_media_completion0
num_search_results(null)
origin"https://ncbench.com/"
is_byokfalse
finish_reason"length"
native_finish_reason"length"
usage0.066025
router(null)
provider_responses
0
endpoint_id"ef6b0afa-fd92-4db6-96e0-b8f0e5e4734b"
id"chatcmpl-DAvm9SzoZL4TTNuhay6bP18sSOrt3"
is_byokfalse
latency220
model_permaslug"openai/gpt-4o-2024-05-13"
provider_name"Azure"
status200
api_type"completions"
id"gen-1771497741-12HnnJy5Kfgy19KVubhZ"
upstream_id"chatcmpl-DAvm9SzoZL4TTNuhay6bP18sSOrt3"
total_cost0.066025
cache_discount(null)
upstream_inference_cost0
provider_name"Azure"

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences11
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
87.78% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3273
totalAiIsmAdverbs8
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count4
1
adverb"tightly"
count4
highlights
0"slowly"
1"tightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3273
totalAiIsms130
found
0
word"oppressive"
count8
1
word"silence"
count12
2
word"loomed"
count4
3
word"sense of"
count4
4
word"pounding"
count8
5
word"pulsed"
count4
6
word"reminder"
count4
7
word"pulse"
count12
8
word"quickened"
count8
9
word"beacon"
count4
10
word"dance"
count8
11
word"chill"
count4
12
word"down her spine"
count4
13
word"warmth"
count8
14
word"footsteps"
count4
15
word"echoing"
count8
16
word"looming"
count4
17
word"raced"
count4
18
word"palpable"
count4
19
word"cacophony"
count4
20
word"stark"
count4
21
word"racing"
count3
22
word"tangible"
count3
highlights
0"oppressive"
1"silence"
2"loomed"
3"sense of"
4"pounding"
5"pulsed"
6"reminder"
7"pulse"
8"quickened"
9"beacon"
10"dance"
11"chill"
12"down her spine"
13"warmth"
14"footsteps"
15"echoing"
16"looming"
17"raced"
18"palpable"
19"cacophony"
20"stark"
21"racing"
22"tangible"
33.33% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches9
maxInWindow3
found
0
label"heart pounded in chest"
count4
1
label"silence was deafening"
count4
2
label"air was thick with"
count1
highlights
0"heart pounded in her chest"
1"the silence was deafening"
2"The air was thick with"
98.23% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells8
narrationSentences249
matches
0"e with fear"
1"e with fear"
2"e with fear"
3"e with fear"
4"e with fear"
5"e with fear"
6"e with fear"
7"e with fear"
0.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount27
narrationSentences249
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences249
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen23
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords3261
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions51
wordCount3239
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity0.86
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Grove"
discoveredNames
Carter1
Fae1
Grove11
Heartstone5
Pendant1
Hel4
Rory28
persons
0"Carter"
1"Pendant"
2"Rory"
places
0"Fae"
1"Grove"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences248
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount3261
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences249
matches(empty)
58.12% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs72
mean45.29
std16.01
cv0.353
sampleLengths
071
155
251
345
451
555
615
756
854
952
1052
1150
1254
1357
1452
1510
1653
1744
188
1949
2051
2145
2251
2355
2415
2556
2654
2752
2852
2950
3054
3157
3252
3310
3453
3544
368
3749
3851
3945
4051
4155
4215
4356
4454
4552
4652
4750
4854
4957
99.63% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences249
matches
0"been given"
1"been given"
2"been given"
3"been given"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs542
matches
0"was deafening"
1"was deafening"
2"was deafening"
3"was deafening"
96.96% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences249
ratio0.016
matches
0"She glanced over her shoulder, half-expecting to see someone—or something—following her."
1"She glanced over her shoulder, half-expecting to see someone—or something—following her."
2"She glanced over her shoulder, half-expecting to see someone—or something—following her."
3"She glanced over her shoulder, half-expecting to see someone—or something—following her."
94.09% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount3251
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount152
adverbRatio0.04675484466318056
lyAdverbCount42
lyAdverbRatio0.012919101814826207
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences249
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
68.15% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences249
mean13.1
std4.2
cv0.32
sampleLengths
021
116
215
319
413
515
613
714
812
916
1011
1112
129
139
1410
1517
1612
1714
1818
197
2018
216
2211
2320
2415
2511
2610
2714
2821
2910
3011
3110
3223
3310
3418
3510
3614
379
3815
3913
4015
419
428
4321
4412
4512
468
4718
4816
498
45.18% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.03614457831325301
totalSentences249
uniqueOpeners9
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences249
matches(empty)
ratio0
77.03% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount89
totalSentences249
matches
0"She clutched the Heartstone Pendant"
1"She had come here for"
2"She took a step forward,"
3"She glanced over her shoulder,"
4"She turned slowly, her heart"
5"She took a deep breath"
6"She had been given the"
7"She just had to find"
8"She stopped again, straining to"
9"She turned in a slow"
10"she called out, her voice"
11"She could see the faint"
12"She could almost feel eyes"
13"She glanced around, her breath"
14"She quickened her pace, her"
15"She reached the clearing and"
16"She took a step forward,"
17"She saw nothing, just the"
18"She took another step forward,"
19"She took a deep breath"
ratio0.357
0.16% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount229
totalSentences249
matches
0"Aurora Carter stood at the"
1"The air was thick with"
2"She clutched the Heartstone Pendant"
3"She had come here for"
4"The Grove was eerily quiet,"
5"Rory's breath fogged in the"
6"She took a step forward,"
7"The standing stones loomed ahead,"
8"The trees seemed to close"
9"She glanced over her shoulder,"
10"A rustling sound to her"
11"She turned slowly, her heart"
12"The shadows between the trees"
13"She took a deep breath"
14"The pendant pulsed faintly against"
15"She had been given the"
16"She just had to find"
17"A low whispering sound reached"
18"She stopped again, straining to"
19"The whispering grew louder, a"
ratio0.92
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences249
matches(empty)
ratio0
96.77% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences186
technicalSentenceCount12
matches
0"She took a deep breath and continued walking, her eyes darting around, trying to catch any movement."
1"But the feeling of being watched was stronger than ever, a palpable presence that made her skin crawl."
2"She took another step forward, her eyes darting around, trying to catch any sign of movement."
3"She took a deep breath and continued walking, her eyes darting around, trying to catch any movement."
4"But the feeling of being watched was stronger than ever, a palpable presence that made her skin crawl."
5"She took another step forward, her eyes darting around, trying to catch any sign of movement."
6"She took a deep breath and continued walking, her eyes darting around, trying to catch any movement."
7"But the feeling of being watched was stronger than ever, a palpable presence that made her skin crawl."
8"She took another step forward, her eyes darting around, trying to catch any sign of movement."
9"She took a deep breath and continued walking, her eyes darting around, trying to catch any movement."
10"But the feeling of being watched was stronger than ever, a palpable presence that made her skin crawl."
11"She took another step forward, her eyes darting around, trying to catch any sign of movement."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount11
matches
0"she called out, her voice sounding small and uncertain in the vast darkness"
1"she shouted, her voice echoing in the stillness"
2"she called out, her voice trembling"
3"she called out, her voice sounding small and uncertain in the vast darkness"
4"she shouted, her voice echoing in the stillness"
5"she called out, her voice trembling"
6"she called out, her voice sounding small and uncertain in the vast darkness"
7"she shouted, her voice echoing in the stillness"
8"she called out, her voice trembling"
9"she called out, her voice sounding small and uncertain in the vast darkness"
10"she shouted, her voice echoing in the stillness"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags11
fancyCount11
fancyTags
0"she called out (call out)"
1"she shouted (shout)"
2"she called out (call out)"
3"she called out (call out)"
4"she shouted (shout)"
5"she called out (call out)"
6"she called out (call out)"
7"she shouted (shout)"
8"she called out (call out)"
9"she called out (call out)"
10"she shouted (shout)"
dialogueSentences11
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio1
68.5144%