Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTQX2SPJ37RYRBNAKKHYTFW

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

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The air smelled of damp stone and something older, something that clung to the back of my throat like copper. I crouched beside the body, my knees pressing into the cracked tile of what used to be a Tube platform. The victim lay sprawled on his back, arms splayed as if he’d been dropped from a great height. His face was frozen in a rictus of surprise, eyes wide, mouth open in a silent scream. No blood. No visible wounds. Just a man in a cheap suit, dead in a place that shouldn’t exist. “Quinn.” Davies stood a few feet away, his torch beam flickering over the graffiti-covered walls. “You’re gonna want to see this.” I didn’t look up. “Tell me it’s not another occult wannabe with a Sharpie.” “Worse.” He nudged something with the toe of his boot. A small brass compass rolled into the light, its needle spinning wildly before settling on a direction that made no sense. North, then east, then nowhere at all. The casing was etched with symbols I didn’t recognise, but the patina of verdigris was unmistakable. Old. Expensive. I picked it up. The metal was cold, too cold, like it had been sitting in a freezer. “Where’d this come from?” “Found it clutched in his hand. Tight, too. Had to pry his fingers open.” I turned the compass over. The back was smooth, no engravings, no maker’s mark. Just a single scratch, fresh, like someone had tried to scrape something off. “This isn’t standard issue.” “No shit.” Davies exhaled sharply. “But you recognise it.” I did. Not the compass itself, but the type. The kind of thing you’d find in the Veil Market, if you knew where to look and had the right kind of currency. Bone tokens. Favours. Secrets. I’d heard whispers about the place, seen the aftermath of deals gone wrong. Never the market itself. They didn’t let cops in. “You’re thinking what I’m thinking?” Davies asked. “That this is a waste of time and we should call it in before Forensics tramples all over the scene?” “That this looks like Morris’s case.” The name hit like a punch to the gut. DS Morris. My partner. Three years ago, he’d gone into an abandoned warehouse on a tip about a missing person. Came out in a body bag. No signs of struggle. No cause of death. Just a man in his forties, healthy as an ox one day, dead the next. The file was still open. Officially, at least. I stood, brushing dust off my trousers. “Morris’s case had no evidence. No compass. No body in a place that shouldn’t exist.” “No body in a place that *does* exist, either,” Davies countered. “This bloke’s real. Morris wasn’t.” “You saying he’s a ghost?” “You saying he’s not?” I ignored that. The platform stretched into darkness on either side, the old tiles cracked and buckled. The air hummed with a low vibration, like the distant rumble of a train that never arrived. “Where the hell are we?” “Abandoned station. Camden Town branch. Been closed since the nineties.” Davies shone his torch down the tunnel. The beam disappeared into blackness after twenty feet. “Except it’s not on any of the maps. Not the old ones, not the new ones. And the entrance? Boarded up. Locked. No signs of forced entry.” “So how’d he get in?” “Same way he got out, I reckon. Which is to say, he didn’t.” I turned back to the body. The man’s suit was rumpled, his tie askew. His shoes were scuffed, the soles worn thin. A working man. Not the type to be poking around in supernatural black markets. Unless he was desperate. “Check his pockets,” I said. Davies hesitated. “You sure? Forensics-” “Forensics can wait.” I knelt again, pulling on a pair of nitrile gloves. The man’s jacket was cheap polyester, the kind you’d find in a high street shop. The left pocket held a wallet. Inside, a driver’s licence identified him as Daniel Reeves, thirty-four, from Croydon. A bank card, a library card, a faded photo of a woman and a little girl. No cash. No receipts. Nothing to indicate where he’d been or what he’d been doing. The right pocket was empty except for a single bone token, smooth and yellowed with age. I held it up to the light. It was carved with the same symbols as the compass. Davies whistled. “That’s a Veil Market token. No way this bloke was a regular.” “Unless he was selling something.” I turned the token over. The back was rough, unpolished. “Or buying.” “Buying what?” I didn’t answer. The compass in my other hand pulsed once, the needle twitching. I looked up. The tunnel to my left was darker than the one to my right. Not just darker. *Wrong*. The air there seemed to ripple, like heat off asphalt, but there was no heat. No light. Just a void that swallowed the torch beam whole. “Quinn.” Davies’s voice was tight. “You seeing this?” I stood, the compass heavy in my palm. “We need to call this in.” “And say what? That we found a body in a secret Tube station that doesn’t exist, holding a magic compass that points to nowhere?” “That we found a body, full stop.” I pocketed the compass and the token. Evidence. Even if it was evidence of something I couldn’t explain. “The rest we keep to ourselves.” Davies opened his mouth to argue, but the sound of footsteps cut him off. Heavy. Deliberate. Coming from the tunnel to the right. I turned, my hand going to my sidearm. The footsteps grew louder, echoing off the tiles. Then a figure emerged from the darkness. A woman, mid-twenties, with curly red hair and round glasses. She carried a worn leather satchel stuffed with books, and her freckled face was pale under the harsh light of our torches. “Detective Quinn,” she said, tucking a strand of hair behind her left ear. “I was wondering when you’d show up.” I didn’t lower my gun. “Who the hell are you?” “Eva Kowalski.” She adjusted her glasses. “Occult researcher. And, if you’ll recall, the one who called this in.” Davies glanced at me. “You know her?” “No.” I kept my eyes on Eva. “But I know her type. The kind who shows up at crime scenes with theories and no badge.” Eva didn’t flinch. “The kind who shows up because the police don’t have the first clue what they’re dealing with.” “And you do?” She reached into her satchel and pulled out a book. Thick, leather-bound, the pages yellowed with age. “This is a ledger from the Veil Market. Lists transactions, buyers, sellers. Your victim’s name is in here. Daniel Reeves. Bought a compass three days ago. Paid with a bone token.” I didn’t take the book. “Convenient.” “Not really.” She flipped to a page and held it out. “He wasn’t the first. There’s a pattern. Missing persons. All last seen in Camden. All found dead within a week. No signs of trauma. Just... empty.” Davies stepped closer. “How many?” “Seven in the last month. Including your partner.” The tunnel seemed to tilt. I steadied myself against the wall. “Morris wasn’t in Camden.” “No,” Eva said. “But he was investigating the same thing. The Veil Market. The compasses. He was close to finding out who’s running it.” I looked at the body on the ground. Daniel Reeves. Thirty-four. Father. Library card holder. Not the type to get mixed up in something like this. Unless he had no choice. “You’re saying someone’s using these compasses to kill people,” I said. “Not just kill.” Eva’s voice was quiet. “To collect. The Veil Market deals in more than just trinkets. It deals in souls.” Davies let out a sharp laugh. “You’re having a laugh, right?” I didn’t laugh. The compass in my pocket was warm now, almost hot. The needle spun in slow circles, pointing to nothing and everything at once. “Quinn.” Davies’s voice was low. “We need to go. Now.” I looked at the tunnel to the left. The wrong one. The one that swallowed light. The compass pulsed again, the needle snapping into place. It was pointing straight at Eva.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Davies exhaled sharply [sharply]"
1"I knelt again [again]"
dialogueSentences60
tagDensity0.267
leniency0.533
rawRatio0.125
effectiveRatio0.067
92.73% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1375
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"sharply"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"sharply"
1"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
70.91% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1375
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"etched"
count1
1
word"standard"
count1
2
word"aftermath"
count1
3
word"pulsed"
count2
4
word"footsteps"
count2
5
word"echoing"
count1
highlights
0"etched"
1"standard"
2"aftermath"
3"pulsed"
4"footsteps"
5"echoing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences126
matches
0"was desperate"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences126
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences167
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen31
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords2
totalWords1370
ratio0.001
matches
0"does"
1"Wrong"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
78.88% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions28
wordCount914
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity1.42
worstName"Davies"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Tube1
Veil1
Market1
Morris1
Davies13
Daniel2
Reeves2
Croydon1
Evidence1
Eva5
persons
0"Morris"
1"Davies"
2"Daniel"
3"Reeves"
4"Eva"
places
0"Veil"
1"Croydon"
globalScore0.789
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences66
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"something like this"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.73
wordCount1370
matches
0"Not the compass itself, but the type"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences167
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs58
mean23.62
std19.96
cv0.845
sampleLengths
094
121
214
356
422
514
631
79
858
97
1020
116
1266
1322
1416
155
164
1739
1852
195
2013
2140
225
235
2477
2533
2614
2717
282
2960
308
3114
3224
3331
3423
3555
3620
3710
3818
397
4025
4120
423
4348
446
4537
465
478
4815
4924
85.77% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount7
totalSentences126
matches
0"been dropped"
1"was frozen"
2"was etched"
3"was rumpled"
4"were scuffed"
5"was carved"
6"get mixed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs144
matches
0"was pointing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences167
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount919
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount28
adverbRatio0.030467899891186073
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.004352557127312296
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences167
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences167
mean8.2
std6.07
cv0.74
sampleLengths
020
120
218
317
42
53
614
715
86
94
1010
1110
1221
137
1416
151
161
174
1814
194
2014
215
229
2313
244
255
264
272
287
2923
302
311
321
3313
344
355
367
3720
386
399
402
412
4216
436
444
454
4615
475
483
497
60.28% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.40119760479041916
totalSentences167
uniqueOpeners67
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount6
totalSentences100
matches
0"Just a man in a"
1"Just a single scratch, fresh,"
2"Just a man in his"
3"Officially, at least."
4"Just a void that swallowed"
5"Then a figure emerged from"
ratio0.06
84.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount34
totalSentences100
matches
0"I crouched beside the body,"
1"His face was frozen in"
2"I didn’t look up."
3"He nudged something with the"
4"I picked it up."
5"I turned the compass over."
6"I’d heard whispers about the"
7"They didn’t let cops in."
8"I stood, brushing dust off"
9"I ignored that."
10"I turned back to the"
11"His shoes were scuffed, the"
12"I knelt again, pulling on"
13"I held it up to"
14"It was carved with the"
15"I turned the token over"
16"I didn’t answer."
17"I looked up."
18"I stood, the compass heavy"
19"I pocketed the compass and"
ratio0.34
75.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount77
totalSentences100
matches
0"The air smelled of damp"
1"I crouched beside the body,"
2"The victim lay sprawled on"
3"His face was frozen in"
4"Davies stood a few feet"
5"I didn’t look up."
6"He nudged something with the"
7"A small brass compass rolled"
8"The casing was etched with"
9"I picked it up."
10"The metal was cold, too"
11"I turned the compass over."
12"The back was smooth, no"
13"Davies exhaled sharply"
14"The kind of thing you’d"
15"I’d heard whispers about the"
16"They didn’t let cops in."
17"The name hit like a"
18"The file was still open."
19"I stood, brushing dust off"
ratio0.77
50.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences100
matches
0"Even if it was evidence"
ratio0.01
99.57% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences33
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The air smelled of damp stone and something older, something that clung to the back of my throat like copper."
1"A small brass compass rolled into the light, its needle spinning wildly before settling on a direction that made no sense."
93.75% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Davies stood, his torch beam flickering over the graffiti-covered walls"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences60
tagDensity0.083
leniency0.167
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
93.0296%