Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTQX9QWS18MD42THNXNEZFM

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11.2s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
--- The door creaked open before the lock could even click into place, swinging inward with a force that sent the framed photograph of Eva’s grandmother’s wedding crashing to the floor. Glass shattered against the linoleum like a gunshot, and Rory’s first instinct was to duck, her body tensing as she braced for whatever storm was about to hit. Then the cane hit her shoulder. Not hard enough to bruise, but enough to send a jolt of pain up her arm and a sharp intake of breath. She spun, fingers already curling into a fist, but the blade in the cane never left its sheath. Instead, the platinum blond hair, the tailored charcoal suit, the amber-and-black eyes—all of it froze her in place. “Lucien,” she breathed, voice raw. “What the *fuck*?” His lips twitched, just once, before he straightened the cane with a flick of his wrist. “Language, *chérie*.” The air between them crackled, thick with something older than anger. Something that had once been electric, before it burned out. Before he left. Before she told him to go. Eva’s flat smelled like old books and burnt coffee, the scent of Ptolemy’s fur clinging to the air. The tabby cat shot up from his perch on the windowsill, tail lashing, eyes wide as he hissed at the intruder. Lucien didn’t even glance at him. His gaze locked onto Rory’s, unblinking, like he could see right through her. “You’re bleeding,” he said, voice low, almost clinical. She touched her shoulder instinctively, fingers coming away red. “Cut myself on the doorframe.” “Liar.” The word wasn’t a question. It was a statement, delivered with the same precision as the blade in his cane. Rory’s chest tightened. She should have been relieved. Should have been *happy* to see him. But the way he looked at her—like she was a puzzle he’d spent too long trying to solve—made her skin crawl. “What do you want, Lucien?” she asked, voice steadier than she felt. “A tour? A lecture on how I’ve clearly ruined my life since you last saw me?” His jaw tightened. “I need your help.” That was it. Three words. No preamble. No apology. Just the cold, hard truth that she’d been waiting for him to say for years. Rory laughed, sharp and bitter. “Oh, here we go. The grand reunion. The *I’ve-missed-you* speech. Save it.” Lucien’s fingers twitched around the cane. “I’m not here for small talk.” “Then what are you here for?” She stepped closer, voice dropping to a growl. “Because if this is about *that night*, you’re too late. I’ve moved on.” His eyes darkened. “Have you?” The question hung between them, heavy as a threat. Rory’s pulse hammered in her throat. She wanted to deny it. Wanted to tell him she was fine, that she’d never looked back. But the way he stood there, so still, so *certain*, made her chest ache. “You’re here about the *thing*,” she said, voice breaking just enough to betray her. “Whatever it is you’re after, it’s not personal.” Lucien’s lips curled. “Isn’t it?” She ignored the sting. “You want information. I’ll give it to you. But I’m not doing it for free.” His gaze flicked over her, assessing. “You always were a pragmatist.” “And you were always a *problem*.” She gestured to the mess around them—the broken frame, the scattered books, the way Ptolemy was now glaring at her from the couch like she’d betrayed him. “So. What’s the play? You’re not here to collect your things. You never would’ve left them behind if you were.” Lucien exhaled through his nose, a sound that was almost a laugh. “I left them behind because I knew you’d find them eventually. And I wasn’t wrong.” Rory’s fingers curled into fists. “You left *your* things? Or the ones you *stole*?” His eyes flashed. “You’re still the same.” “And you’re still the same,” she shot back. “Always playing the long game. Always assuming you know what’s best for everyone else.” He stepped closer, close enough that she could see the faint scar above his eyebrow, the one she’d given him in a fit of rage the last time they’d been this close. “I’m not here to argue.” “Then what are you here for?” “A name,” he said, voice dropping to a murmur. “A name that belongs to someone who’s been asking about you.” Rory’s blood turned to ice. “Who?” “Does it matter?” Lucien’s gaze never wavered. “He’s not someone you want to cross.” “Then why am I the one you’re coming to?” She crossed her arms, trying to hide the way her hands trembled. “You could’ve gone to the police. You could’ve gone to *anyone*.” “Because you’re the only one who can get me what I need.” His voice was smooth, almost amused. “And because,” he added, low enough that only she could hear, “I haven’t forgotten how you taste.” The words hit her like a physical blow. Rory’s breath caught, her chest tightening. She wanted to slap him. Wanted to scream. Wanted to *run*. Instead, she laughed, sharp and hollow. “You’re delusional.” Lucien’s lips quirked. “Am I?” She didn’t answer. Couldn’t. The silence stretched, thick and suffocating, until even the cat seemed to hold its breath. Then, from the depths of the flat, Eva’s voice cut through the tension, sharp and tired. “Lucien. To what do I owe this *pleasure*?” Rory turned, heart hammering. Eva stood in the doorway to the bedroom, arms crossed, her dark eyes flicking between them like she was trying to decide who to kill first. “You’re bleeding,” she said, voice flat. “And you’re *still* wearing that suit.” Lucien didn’t even glance at her. His gaze was locked on Rory, unreadable. “Eva.” “What?” Eva’s voice was a blade. “You’re not here to see me. You’re here to see *her*.” Lucien’s jaw tightened. “I need a name.” Eva’s eyes narrowed. “You need a name? Or you need *her*?” Rory’s stomach twisted. “Eva—” “No.” Eva’s voice was steel. “You’re not getting off that easy. Not after what you did.” Lucien’s fingers twitched around the cane. “I didn’t do anything.” “You *left*,” Eva snapped. “And you didn’t even have the decency to say goodbye.” Lucien’s gaze flicked to Rory, then back to Eva. “I had my reasons.” “Bullshit,” Eva shot back. “You had *pride*. You had *rules*. You had *every excuse in the world* to walk away, and you did it anyway.” Rory’s chest ached. She wanted to reach out to Eva, to pull her into a hug, to tell her it was okay. But the way Lucien was looking at her—like she was the only thing in the room that mattered—made her want to punch him. Instead, she stepped forward, putting herself between them. “Enough.” Eva’s eyes widened. “Rory—” “No.” Rory’s voice was firm. “We’re not doing this here. Not now.” Lucien’s gaze never left her face. “We need to talk.” “Not here,” Rory said, voice steady. “Not like this.” Eva exhaled sharply. “Fine. But you’re not getting out of this.” Rory turned to Lucien, her eyes burning. “You have five minutes. Then I’m calling the police.” Lucien’s lips curled. “Five minutes.” Rory gestured to the kitchen table, where Ptolemy was now watching them with the patience of a man who’d seen too much. “Sit. Talk. And *hurry*.” Lucien didn’t move. Didn’t speak. Just stared at her, like he was trying to memorise every inch of her face. Then, finally, he sat. And the game began.
total_cost0.0006032

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences67
tagDensity0.209
leniency0.418
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.99% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1247
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"sharply"
count1
highlights
0"sharply"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
47.87% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1247
totalAiIsms13
found
0
word"shattered"
count1
1
word"electric"
count1
2
word"pulse"
count1
3
word"flicked"
count2
4
word"eyebrow"
count1
5
word"wavered"
count1
6
word"trembled"
count1
7
word"silence"
count1
8
word"depths"
count1
9
word"tension"
count1
10
word"unreadable"
count1
11
word"stomach"
count1
highlights
0"shattered"
1"electric"
2"pulse"
3"flicked"
4"eyebrow"
5"wavered"
6"trembled"
7"silence"
8"depths"
9"tension"
10"unreadable"
11"stomach"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count2
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences98
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences98
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences146
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans21
markdownWords26
totalWords1241
ratio0.021
matches
0"fuck"
1"chérie"
2"happy"
3"I’ve-missed-you"
4"that night"
5"certain"
6"thing"
7"problem"
8"your"
9"stole"
10"anyone"
11"run"
12"pleasure"
13"still"
14"her"
15"her"
16"left"
17"pride"
18"rules"
19"every excuse in the world"
20"hurry"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Instead, she laughed, sharp and hollow."
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions51
wordCount837
uniqueNames5
maxNameDensity2.03
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity5.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Eva13
Rory17
Ptolemy3
Lucien15
Wanted3
persons
0"Eva"
1"Rory"
2"Ptolemy"
3"Lucien"
places(empty)
globalScore0.484
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences53
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"smelled like old books and burnt coffee, t"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.806
wordCount1241
matches
0"Not hard enough to bruise, but enough to send a jolt of pain up her arm"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences146
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs66
mean18.8
std15.19
cv0.808
sampleLengths
01
158
26
358
48
518
630
758
88
914
101
1156
1228
137
1424
1517
1612
1727
185
1946
2022
215
2219
2311
2453
2527
2614
277
2822
2937
306
3120
326
3314
3432
3535
3625
378
385
394
4031
418
4242
4314
4417
457
4611
474
4816
4910
98.10% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences98
matches
0"been relieved"
1"was locked"
91.30% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs184
matches
0"was trying"
1"was looking"
2"was trying"
64.58% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount6
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences146
ratio0.027
matches
0"Instead, the platinum blond hair, the tailored charcoal suit, the amber-and-black eyes—all of it froze her in place."
1"But the way he looked at her—like she was a puzzle he’d spent too long trying to solve—made her skin crawl."
2"“And you were always a *problem*.” She gestured to the mess around them—the broken frame, the scattered books, the way Ptolemy was now glaring at her from the couch like she’d betrayed him."
3"But the way Lucien was looking at her—like she was the only thing in the room that mattered—made her want to punch him."
98.71% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount844
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount35
adverbRatio0.041469194312796206
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.005924170616113744
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences146
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences146
mean8.49
std6.85
cv0.806
sampleLengths
030
128
26
322
418
518
65
73
816
92
1011
1110
123
136
1418
1521
166
1713
188
199
205
211
225
2315
243
255
267
2721
2812
2916
303
314
323
332
342
352
3615
375
3812
396
406
4114
4213
433
442
459
466
475
4812
4914
50.23% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.3219178082191781
totalSentences146
uniqueOpeners47
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount8
totalSentences92
matches
0"Then the cane hit her"
1"Instead, the platinum blond hair,"
2"Just the cold, hard truth"
3"Instead, she laughed, sharp and"
4"Then, from the depths of"
5"Instead, she stepped forward, putting"
6"Just stared at her, like"
7"Then, finally, he sat."
ratio0.087
93.91% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount29
totalSentences92
matches
0"She spun, fingers already curling"
1"she breathed, voice raw"
2"His lips twitched, just once,"
3"His gaze locked onto Rory’s,"
4"he said, voice low, almost"
5"She touched her shoulder instinctively,"
6"It was a statement, delivered"
7"She should have been relieved."
8"she asked, voice steadier than"
9"His jaw tightened."
10"She stepped closer, voice dropping"
11"His eyes darkened."
12"She wanted to deny it."
13"she said, voice breaking just"
14"She ignored the sting."
15"His gaze flicked over her,"
16"She gestured to the mess"
17"His eyes flashed."
18"she shot back"
19"He stepped closer, close enough"
ratio0.315
63.26% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount73
totalSentences92
matches
0"The door creaked open before"
1"Glass shattered against the linoleum"
2"She spun, fingers already curling"
3"she breathed, voice raw"
4"His lips twitched, just once,"
5"The air between them crackled,"
6"Something that had once been"
7"Eva’s flat smelled like old"
8"The tabby cat shot up"
9"Lucien didn’t even glance at"
10"His gaze locked onto Rory’s,"
11"he said, voice low, almost"
12"She touched her shoulder instinctively,"
13"The word wasn’t a question."
14"It was a statement, delivered"
15"Rory’s chest tightened."
16"She should have been relieved."
17"she asked, voice steadier than"
18"His jaw tightened."
19"That was it."
ratio0.793
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences92
matches
0"Before he left."
1"Before she told him to"
ratio0.022
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences25
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"The door creaked open before the lock could even click into place, swinging inward with a force that sent the framed photograph of Eva’s grandmother’s wedding c…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount9
matches
0"she breathed, voice raw"
1"he said, voice low, almost clinical"
2"she asked, voice steadier than she felt"
3"She stepped, voice dropping to a growl"
4"she said, voice breaking just enough to betray her"
5"he said, voice dropping to a murmur"
6"She crossed, trying to hide the way her hands trembled"
7"she said, voice flat"
8"Rory said, voice steady"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"she breathed (breathe)"
1"he added (add)"
2"Eva snapped (snap)"
dialogueSentences67
tagDensity0.134
leniency0.269
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.09
85.6878%