Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTQXW8Q9W39PFFEC0RH31J9

Run Details

Duration:
17.9s
Cost:
$0.046685
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
"Rory? Is that—" The glass slipped from Aurora's hand, shattering against the bar's polished oak surface and sending shrapnel-like shards skittering across the floor. Her eyes widened, a deer caught in headlights moment. "Eva?" She blinked rapidly, as if clearing the fog of a distant dream. There stood Eva, or at least some version of her that Aurora half-recognised. The intervening years had sculpted sharper lines into her friend’s face, wisdom or weariness, it was hard to tell. Her once auburn hair now glinted with an artful streak of silver, her form draped in a sleek, dark coat that whispered wealth. Silas, ever the sentinel behind the bar, moved with swift precision, towel in hand, capturing the rogue liquid that escaped Rory's fallen glass. He gave her an almost imperceptible nod, a reassurance that the world wasn’t crumbling—merely shifting. "Well, look at you," Eva spoke first, voice a familiar melody, tinged with the sophistication she had once only dreamed of. Aurora ran a hand through her black hair, the tremor unmistakable. "I could say the same about you. It's been—years." Silas withdrew discreetly, his role as the silent observer intact, as he tended to a patron across the room. The ambience of The Raven's Nest cradled them in its dim glow, maps and photos a silent testament to their history. "Too long," Eva agreed, sliding onto a barstool beside Aurora. "Last I heard, you were in Cardiff, buried in law books." Aurora laughed, a hollow echo. "That was another lifetime ago. Now, I moonlight as a delivery gal for Yu-Fei’s Golden Empress. Life, eh?” Eva’s brow arched. "Delivery girl? Really?" Her eyes flicked to the small crescent scar on Aurora's wrist—a memory preserved in skin. "Yeah, it's a good gig. Free egg rolls." Aurora’s attempt at levity faltered in the face of Eva’s scrutiny. Silence thickened between them, punctuated only by the hum of the bar and the muted clink of glasses. From the hidden back room, a low murmur hinted at clandestine conversations, the kind that suited Silas' reputation as the Spymaster. "So, what brings you to London?" Aurora ventured, desperate to fill the void. "Work," Eva replied, her tone clipped. "I've been in and out of the city for months." "Work, huh?" Aurora studied her friend's face, seeking hidden stories in the lines of her expression. "What kind of work?" Eva paused, a shadow crossing her features. "Finance. Investments, mostly." Aurora leaned back, the gesture casual yet laden with disbelief. "Finance. You always did have a knack for numbers." "And you always had a knack for trouble," Eva shot back, a smile playing at her lips. "Wouldn't be me otherwise," Aurora smirked. "Remember the time we climbed up onto the school roof?" "To steal back our confiscated cassette tapes?" Eva laughed, genuinely this time. "Mr. Howard was furious when he found out." Aurora's eyes softened, nostalgia briefly dissolving the present tension. "Those were the days. Everything seemed simpler." "Everything was simpler," Eva said, almost wistfully. She looked down, examining her hands as if they held a secret. Eva’s silence gnawed at Aurora, who leaned in, voice a low murmur. "I've missed you, you know. Missed us." Eva's gaze met hers, a flash of something raw and unguarded. "I've missed you too. But, life... it gets complicated." "Complicated how?" “You ever think about the path not taken?” Eva’s question hung heavy in the air. "All the time," Aurora admitted. “But I made my choices, for better or worse.” Eva reached into her coat pocket, fingers brushing something unseen. “We both did.” ”And yet here we are,” Aurora said, glancing around the cozy bar. "Funny, isn't it?" Eva followed her gaze, absorbing the myriad details—the aged maps, the flickering candlelight casting long shadows. “I always liked this place.” “Silas keeps it interesting,” Aurora said, her eyes finding the older man polishing a glass at a distance, his presence a comforting anchor. Eva hesitated before speaking again. “Aurora, there’s something I need to tell you.” Aurora stiffened, sensing the gravity of Eva’s tone. “What is it?” “I’m not just here for work,” Eva admitted. "I’m here because I need your help." "Help?" Aurora’s mind raced through the possibilities, none of which seemed likely. "With what?" Eva glanced around, ensuring no one was within earshot. “There’s something I got involved in, something big. I thought I could handle it, but...” Aurora felt a familiar pit in her stomach. The calm before the storm. "Eva, what did you do?" Eva bit her lip, a gesture from their past. "There’s a man, someone dangerous, who's after me. And I have something he wants." Aurora’s pulse quickened. "How dangerous?" "MI6-level dangerous," Eva confessed. Aurora’s eyes flicked to Silas, who was now animatedly conversing with another patron. She knew what that kind of danger entailed. "Eva, what did you steal?" "It's classified." Eva's voice dropped to a whisper. "But I have to get it out of the country. Tomorrow." Aurora rubbed her temples, trying to process the whirlwind of complications. "You've stepped in it deep, haven't you?" Eva nodded, her eyes pleading. "I thought maybe you... We could do it together, one last time." Aurora exhaled, a long and tired sigh. "We might. But things aren't like before." "They never are," Eva said softly. "But you once told me that it's not about where you end up. It's about who you end up with." Aurora looked deeply into Eva’s eyes, searching for the truth behind her words. "And you’ll leave again, won’t you? Once this is done?" Eva’s silence was answer enough. "Fine," Aurora said, standing up. "For old times' sake." A sense of urgency replaced their sentimental reverie. They both knew the plans had to be laid quickly and quietly. Aurora approached Silas, tapping the bar gently to get his attention. “'Evening, Aurora. Everything alright?" Silas asked, his voice warm but lined with curiosity. “Silas, we need to borrow the secret room,” she said. “Can I inquire as to why?” Silas' tone remained controlled, but Aurora noticed the concern in his eyes. “It’s complicated," Aurora replied. “Just an old friend who needs help.” Silas hesitated, then nodded, his hand sliding behind the bar to press a hidden mechanism. The bookshelf nearest them creaked open, revealing a narrow stairway descending into the shadows. Silas offered a silent warning in his gaze, which Aurora acknowledged with a nod. Eva slipped down first, and Aurora followed, the hidden door closing behind them with a whisper. In the dim light of the room, surrounded by the relics of espionage past, Eva set her bag on the table between them. She unzipped it, producing a small, metallic case. "This is what he’s after." Aurora stared at the case, understanding the enormity of what Eva had just unleashed into her life. "So, we run tonight and move it first thing?" Eva nodded. "Can you still drive a getaway car?" Aurora smirked, the adrenaline beginning to drown out her doubts. "Like riding a bike." They worked out their plan with a focus and urgency forged in years of shared history. The quieter side of The Raven’s Nest walls witnessed their reunion as it always had—silently, steadfastly, the shadows their only witnesses. Aurora glanced at Eva one last time before they headed upstairs, the years between them melting into the resolve of their shared mission. Whatever the future held, tonight they were who they had once been—partners in crime, forever tied by the scars of their past.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags25
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"She blinked rapidly [rapidly]"
1"Eva said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences65
tagDensity0.385
leniency0.769
rawRatio0.08
effectiveRatio0.062
80.03% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1252
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
1
adverb"wistfully"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count1
3
adverb"quickly"
count1
4
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"really"
1"wistfully"
2"softly"
3"quickly"
4"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
8.15% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1252
totalAiIsms23
found
0
word"sentinel"
count1
1
word"familiar"
count2
2
word"tinged"
count1
3
word"testament"
count1
4
word"echo"
count1
5
word"flicked"
count2
6
word"silence"
count3
7
word"clandestine"
count1
8
word"tension"
count1
9
word"comforting"
count1
10
word"raced"
count1
11
word"ensuring"
count1
12
word"stomach"
count1
13
word"pulse"
count1
14
word"quickened"
count1
15
word"whisper"
count2
16
word"sense of"
count1
17
word"resolve"
count1
highlights
0"sentinel"
1"familiar"
2"tinged"
3"testament"
4"echo"
5"flicked"
6"silence"
7"clandestine"
8"tension"
9"comforting"
10"raced"
11"ensuring"
12"stomach"
13"pulse"
14"quickened"
15"whisper"
16"sense of"
17"resolve"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
1"hung heavy in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences77
matches
0"n with disbelief"
1"A sense of urgency"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences77
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tended to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences117
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen23
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1244
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions75
wordCount826
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity3.75
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity7.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Aurora31
Eva31
Rory1
Raven2
Nest2
Silence1
Silas7
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Eva"
2"Rory"
3"Raven"
4"Nest"
5"Silence"
6"Silas"
places(empty)
globalScore0
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences57
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"as if clearing the fog of a distant dream"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1244
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences117
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs63
mean19.75
std10.17
cv0.515
sampleLengths
03
130
213
355
438
521
620
740
821
923
1021
1119
1239
1313
1416
1520
1610
1719
1817
1916
2020
2116
2219
2319
2420
252
2615
2714
2813
2915
3021
3123
3213
3311
3415
3514
3624
3718
3823
395
404
4126
4219
4318
4417
4514
4626
4723
485
499
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences77
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs148
matches
0"wasn’t crumbling"
20.76% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount5
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences117
ratio0.043
matches
0"He gave her an almost imperceptible nod, a reassurance that the world wasn’t crumbling—merely shifting."
1"\"Delivery girl? Really?\" Her eyes flicked to the small crescent scar on Aurora's wrist—a memory preserved in skin."
2"Eva followed her gaze, absorbing the myriad details—the aged maps, the flickering candlelight casting long shadows."
3"The quieter side of The Raven’s Nest walls witnessed their reunion as it always had—silently, steadfastly, the shadows their only witnesses."
4"Whatever the future held, tonight they were who they had once been—partners in crime, forever tied by the scars of their past."
96.14% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount608
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount27
adverbRatio0.044407894736842105
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.019736842105263157
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences117
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences117
mean10.63
std5.74
cv0.54
sampleLengths
03
121
29
313
413
519
623
723
815
921
1011
119
1219
1321
1410
1511
165
1718
183
1918
2019
2118
2221
2313
246
2510
2616
274
287
293
3010
319
3217
336
3410
3512
368
379
387
397
4012
4112
427
4311
449
452
4615
475
489
4910
70.09% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.4358974358974359
totalSentences117
uniqueOpeners51
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences70
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount10
totalSentences70
matches
0"Her eyes widened, a deer"
1"She blinked rapidly, as if"
2"Her once auburn hair now"
3"He gave her an almost"
4"Her eyes flicked to the"
5"She looked down, examining her"
6"She knew what that kind"
7"They both knew the plans"
8"She unzipped it, producing a"
9"They worked out their plan"
ratio0.143
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount67
totalSentences70
matches
0"The glass slipped from Aurora's"
1"Her eyes widened, a deer"
2"She blinked rapidly, as if"
3"There stood Eva, or at"
4"The intervening years had sculpted"
5"Her once auburn hair now"
6"Silas, ever the sentinel behind"
7"He gave her an almost"
8"Eva spoke first, voice a"
9"Aurora ran a hand through"
10"Silas withdrew discreetly, his role"
11"The ambience of The Raven's"
12"Eva agreed, sliding onto a"
13"Aurora laughed, a hollow echo."
14"Eva’s brow arched."
15"Her eyes flicked to the"
16"Aurora’s attempt at levity faltered"
17"Silence thickened between them, punctuated"
18"Aurora ventured, desperate to fill"
19"Eva replied, her tone clipped"
ratio0.957
71.43% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences70
matches
0"”And yet here we"
ratio0.014
98.21% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences32
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The glass slipped from Aurora's hand, shattering against the bar's polished oak surface and sending shrapnel-like shards skittering across the floor."
1"Her once auburn hair now glinted with an artful streak of silver, her form draped in a sleek, dark coat that whispered wealth."
45.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags25
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"She blinked rapidly, as if clearing the fog of a distant dream"
1"Aurora ventured, desperate to fill the void"
2"Eva replied, her tone clipped"
3"Silas asked, his voice warm but lined with curiosity"
26.92% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags16
fancyCount8
fancyTags
0"Eva spoke (speak)"
1"Eva agreed (agree)"
2"levity faltered (falter)"
3"a low murmur hinted (hint)"
4"Eva laughed (laugh)"
5"Aurora admitted (admit)"
6"Eva admitted (admit)"
7"Eva confessed (confess)"
dialogueSentences65
tagDensity0.246
leniency0.492
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.246
76.1132%