Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTQYGA3BXSNHYQF8FXHW773

Run Details

Duration:
22.6s
Cost:
$0.019762
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
A shiver trailed up Aurora Carter’s spine as the air around her felt alive, a near-tingling sensation brushing against her skin. Her breath was steady, but her senses screamed at her: this isn't just another night. This isn't just another random job from Yu-Fei. Stepping lightly on the leaf-strewn path, Aurora, or Rory to those who knew her, clutched the Heartstone Pendant tightly. Its faint inner glow, a comfort that she was near. Richmond Park sprawled in inky shadows around her, the familiar, albeit usually more welcoming, environment shrouded in an eerie quiet. For anyone passing through, it would appear the same aged park, but Rory knew better. She wasn't here for a late-night stroll. The Fae Grove called out more than her mundane duties would dare. As she crossed over the line marked by ancient oak standing stones, her internal clock hesitated, caught off-guard by the Grove’s confounding time behavior. What was moments ago an eerie night descended into an altered reality where the night loomed richer, darker, and ripe with the impossible. Wildflowers bloomed around her, their petals radiant under moonlight that weaved through the branches. But that was just it—wildflowers shouldn't thrive like this in the dead of night, in the toss and tumult of winter. Echoing through the woods, faint whispers or perhaps only the rustling of leaves began to worm their way into Rory's mind. Her logical frame told her the breeze, strong and chilling, was shifting through branches in its natural pathway. But logic was a thin veil here, cracked with every unsettling sound she couldn't place. A slight crunch snapped from behind her, a footfall disturbance she couldn't ignore. Rory stopped, senses now razor-sharp. Pausing was like pulling away old scabs of memory—a childhood of traipsing through woods, the warmth of her mother’s voice teaching caution, teaching bravery. Always, the path was clearer in flush daylight. In the night, left only with echoes of her former screams, knowledge transmuted into instinct. “Get a grip, Rory, just keep moving.” She coaxed herself away from spiralling thoughts, though her voice was a moth-eaten attempt at confidence. She resumed walking, trying not to let her heart race too quick, too loud. It seemed like it was louder than the forest now and that thought alone pulled at her resolve. Another flicker of movement caught her from the corner of her eye. She spun fast, training her gaze on only the winding arms of oaks and the blanketing darkness that seemed almost devoid of stars. Blinking, trying to shake off the climb of fear from her throat, she focused on nothing in particular. Solidify your conviction, Aurora, a silent mantra snaked through her cognition. She needed the certainty more than the air itself. The pendant pulsed against her chest—an anchor she had to trust. Its glow grew stronger with every step, a beacon for the Hel portal she half-heartedly sought. She tried to ignore the feeling that she was less welcomed guest, more pursued prey. The glistening path beneath her feet began to change, subtly, another realm unfurling its talons. The sounds morphed and warped—a cacophony of whispers that clambered over one another, over her steadily mounting heartbeat. She pressed on, the forest's trepidation dragging at her resolve. Each footfall was like weaving through spectres, unseen observers whose breath was palpable against her neck, like soft wisps in the dark, ever closing. "Enough." Her own word startled her in the silence. It carried unnaturally, mingling with distant murmurs, hanging expectant in the air. Perhaps this Grove played games with speech, with reality itself. Each step forward pulled her from stark fear to a certain, uneasy intoxication. The kind that lent strength to her trembling gait, emboldened by the wild concoction of instinct and curiosity. There it was again – movement, a shade barely shifting across her peripheral. Fury coursed through her veins. She wasn't about to let shadows have power over her. Pivoting, demanding to meet whatever followed halfway, Rory found herself staring into the belly of the darkness. The tension snapped when a voice slipped from behind, silk-stitched in cryptic familiarity. "You shouldn't have come alone." Rory whipped around, backing up against the old oak until bark pressed comfortingly against her spine. The voice was warm, coaxing even, whispering a promise of safety alongside danger: controller of her next heartbeat. "Show yourself!” She demanded; her eyes scanning for the beholder of these words left only the silhouettes cast by moon and mystery. Quiet persisted. The pendant felt unruly now. Blazing, a siren's call resonating through the threads of her consciousness, willing her to step through. But even that call held an ancient malice, a danger hidden in crimson whispers. Yet she felt bolstered with heady confidence ebbing in and out with every breath. Rory's hand twitched towards the border, where enchantment sloped into full Ether’s embrace. But a hearty crunch underfoot—too deliberate, too here to be imagined—halted her in place. She wasn't alone, not now, not ever in this trapped interplay of Earth and Fae openness. "Who are you?" Her voice held stronger, cutting into the shadows. Silence clung tighter, the weight of eyes pressing intangible hands against her skin. That presence, looming closer, unseen, yet undeniable. Harsh breath fell upon the nape of her neck, expectation dripping from the unseen fact of existence around her. She could taste the closeness on the chilled air, a union with magic and malice. Each swallow of breath, pulling motes of ancient enchantment into her lungs, was intoxicating and punishing. Would she turn back when her goal was so palpably near? Or was this a test—a trial of spirit and character, far beyond what Rory could glean? She paused, consideration fleeting in the threshold moments of brave exploration and yielding. Then another step forward—hers or the Grove's, who could know—broke the still. Limbs weakened momentarily, driving her back home; yet curiosity moored her feet fast. And the vastness expanded ‘round her, the true mystery beginning to unveil with the Fae Grove’s incessant beckoning. Rory stood, captive audience to the ensuing call of the pendant and the promise wrapped silently within the woodland old as time itself.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags5
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences5
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
90.42% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1044
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"lightly"
count1
1
adverb"tightly"
count1
highlights
0"lightly"
1"tightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1044
totalAiIsms30
found
0
word"familiar"
count1
1
word"loomed"
count1
2
word"radiant"
count1
3
word"echoing"
count1
4
word"chilling"
count1
5
word"footfall"
count2
6
word"warmth"
count1
7
word"echoes"
count1
8
word"race"
count1
9
word"resolve"
count2
10
word"flicker"
count1
11
word"pulsed"
count1
12
word"beacon"
count1
13
word"glistening"
count1
14
word"cacophony"
count1
15
word"trepidation"
count1
16
word"palpable"
count1
17
word"silence"
count2
18
word"stark"
count1
19
word"tension"
count1
20
word"silk"
count1
21
word"scanning"
count1
22
word"weight"
count1
23
word"looming"
count1
24
word"chilled"
count1
25
word"glean"
count1
26
word"fleeting"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"loomed"
2"radiant"
3"echoing"
4"chilling"
5"footfall"
6"warmth"
7"echoes"
8"race"
9"resolve"
10"flicker"
11"pulsed"
12"beacon"
13"glistening"
14"cacophony"
15"trepidation"
16"palpable"
17"silence"
18"stark"
19"tension"
20"silk"
21"scanning"
22"weight"
23"looming"
24"chilled"
25"glean"
26"fleeting"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences70
matches(empty)
81.63% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences70
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
1"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences71
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen25
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1027
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions28
wordCount995
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity0.9
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Aurora3
Carter1
Yu-Fei1
Rory9
Heartstone1
Pendant1
Park1
Fae2
Grove4
Hel1
Quiet1
Ether1
Earth1
Silence1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Carter"
2"Rory"
3"Pendant"
4"Grove"
5"Quiet"
6"Ether"
places
0"Yu-Fei"
1"Park"
2"Fae"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences65
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"seemed almost devoid of stars"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1027
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences71
matches(empty)
56.56% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs20
mean51.35
std17.87
cv0.348
sampleLengths
073
154
282
354
465
555
673
757
852
962
1045
1118
1234
1324
1449
1543
1611
1754
1856
1966
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences70
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs163
matches
0"was shifting"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount10
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences10
totalSentences71
ratio0.141
matches
0"But that was just it—wildflowers shouldn't thrive like this in the dead of night, in the toss and tumult of winter."
1"Pausing was like pulling away old scabs of memory—a childhood of traipsing through woods, the warmth of her mother’s voice teaching caution, teaching bravery."
2"The pendant pulsed against her chest—an anchor she had to trust."
3"The sounds morphed and warped—a cacophony of whispers that clambered over one another, over her steadily mounting heartbeat."
4"There it was again – movement, a shade barely shifting across her peripheral."
5"\"Show yourself!” She demanded; her eyes scanning for the beholder of these words left only the silhouettes cast by moon and mystery."
6"But a hearty crunch underfoot—too deliberate, too here to be imagined—halted her in place."
7"Or was this a test—a trial of spirit and character, far beyond what Rory could glean?"
8"Then another step forward—hers or the Grove's, who could know—broke the still."
9"Limbs weakened momentarily, driving her back home; yet curiosity moored her feet fast."
92.53% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount989
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount48
adverbRatio0.04853387259858443
lyAdverbCount17
lyAdverbRatio0.017189079878665317
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences71
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
81.91% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences71
mean14.46
std5.13
cv0.355
sampleLengths
021
115
28
319
410
520
615
77
812
924
1023
1114
1221
1321
1418
1515
1613
175
1824
198
2015
2123
2214
2318
2412
2523
2618
2711
289
2911
3016
3115
3215
3318
3410
3524
369
3712
3810
3913
4018
4113
425
4310
4417
4513
465
4716
4818
4922
98.59% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.6056338028169014
totalSentences71
uniqueOpeners43
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences69
matches
0"Always, the path was clearer"
1"Perhaps this Grove played games"
2"Then another step forward—hers or"
ratio0.043
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount20
totalSentences69
matches
0"Her breath was steady, but"
1"Its faint inner glow, a"
2"She wasn't here for a"
3"Her logical frame told her"
4"She coaxed herself away from"
5"She resumed walking, trying not"
6"It seemed like it was"
7"She spun fast, training her"
8"She needed the certainty more"
9"Its glow grew stronger with"
10"She tried to ignore the"
11"She pressed on, the forest's"
12"Her own word startled her"
13"It carried unnaturally, mingling with"
14"She wasn't about to let"
15"She demanded; her eyes scanning"
16"She wasn't alone, not now,"
17"Her voice held stronger, cutting"
18"She could taste the closeness"
19"She paused, consideration fleeting in"
ratio0.29
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount46
totalSentences69
matches
0"A shiver trailed up Aurora"
1"Her breath was steady, but"
2"This isn't just another random"
3"Its faint inner glow, a"
4"Richmond Park sprawled in inky"
5"She wasn't here for a"
6"The Fae Grove called out"
7"Wildflowers bloomed around her, their"
8"Her logical frame told her"
9"A slight crunch snapped from"
10"Rory stopped, senses now razor-sharp."
11"Pausing was like pulling away"
12"She coaxed herself away from"
13"She resumed walking, trying not"
14"It seemed like it was"
15"Another flicker of movement caught"
16"She spun fast, training her"
17"She needed the certainty more"
18"The pendant pulsed against her"
19"Its glow grew stronger with"
ratio0.667
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences69
matches(empty)
ratio0
79.08% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences56
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"Wildflowers bloomed around her, their petals radiant under moonlight that weaved through the branches."
1"She spun fast, training her gaze on only the winding arms of oaks and the blanketing darkness that seemed almost devoid of stars."
2"The sounds morphed and warped—a cacophony of whispers that clambered over one another, over her steadily mounting heartbeat."
3"The kind that lent strength to her trembling gait, emboldened by the wild concoction of instinct and curiosity."
4"Blazing, a siren's call resonating through the threads of her consciousness, willing her to step through."
25.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags5
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"She coaxed, though her voice was a moth-eaten attempt at confidence"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"She coaxed (coax)"
1"She demanded (demand)"
2"the vastness expanded (expand)"
dialogueSentences5
tagDensity0.6
leniency1
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio1
80.1907%