Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTQZGBAF2WTPH10EBZZVBPV

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Duration:
16.0s
Cost:
$0.000722
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
A chair scraped harshly against the wooden floor, echoing through the dim haze of the bar, and she turned sharply. It was him — Silas Blackwood — the man whose face she’d thought about at odd hours, whose voice she’d replay like a half-forgotten tune lurking in the back of her mind. His hazel eyes caught her by surprise, sharp now, with a hint of a tiredness she didn’t remember. He leaned against the bar, a cigarette smouldering lazily between ink-stained fingers, the faint smell of tobacco and something darker wrapping around him like a shroud. His auburn hair had long surrendered to streaks of grey, and the lines on his face told stories she hadn’t been around to witness unfold. Rory’s stomach twisted, but her voice emerged tightly controlled, cool as ever. “Silas.” She didn’t bother to ask if he remembered her. Some things were implicit. His gaze flickered, surprised, then softened into a faint, crooked smile that didn’t quite reach his eyes. “Carter.” He paused, a beat too long, before offering a nod. “It’s been a while.” She stepped closer, silently noting the way his good leg steadied him a little more forcefully than before. The bar’s faint glow stretched across his face like old cloth—stained and frayed at the edges. “Too long,” she said. Her hands trembled just enough to feel familiar, as if holding something she shouldn’t. A tense silence unfurled between them, dense and sticky as the smoke curling in lazy spirals overhead. Part of Rory wondered if she had expected this—to see him here, of all places, another shadow in the ever-shifting city she’d tried to outrun. She looked at him, really looked, and saw worlds that had changed while she waited years for a sign that she would change too. He finally broke the silence with a quiet chuckle that sounded like a crack in old leather. “London does that, doesn’t it? Swallows everyone whole.” “You look… different,” she said carefully, voice even. There was no accusatory edge, only a blunt observation. She slid onto the empty stool, alert and ready. He ran a hand through his greying hair, smile fading just a touch. “Guess I am. Time’s a bitch that way.” His voice was rough, threaded with something unspoken. Silas Blackwood, who used to be sharp as a blade, was now wearier—his hazel eyes clouded with memories that refused to settle. She studied him, recalling the man he’d been — the confidant, the confidante, the man who’d whispered secrets through the dark hours of their youth—everything raw and reckless with promise. The one who'd once stood so tall in her world, unbreakable. Now, fragments of that man shimmered faintly beneath the fog of years. “I’ve changed, Rory. You probably won’t recognise the man I am now.” “Maybe.” She let her tone linger, a ghost of a smile flickering. “Maybe I’ve changed, too.” She looked into her glass, the amber liquid gleaming like a warning. “London does that. It strips you down, bit by bit.” He nodded, rubbing his chin thoughtfully, voice low. “Didn’t expect to see you here... of all places. Thought you’d be settled somewhere by now. Doing something safe.” She chuckled without humour. “I’m just passing through. Delivery runs, mostly. Nothing safe or permanent.” Her fingers traced the edge of her glass, reminiscing about nights she’d spent dreaming of escape, of a place where she could breathe without shadows. He looked at her, an odd smile curling at the corner of his mouth. “You always did have a way of moving on fast. Think you’ve found what you're after?” Rory’s eyes flicked away, scanning the murky interior of the bar, the dark corners hiding whispers. She felt it all in the way her nerves tightened—him asking that, the unspoken history piled between them. Before she could answer, the door swung open with a jarring squeal. A rush of cold air chased in a handful of new patrons, their chatter muffled against the low hum of conversations, clinking glasses. Rory’s eyes caught the movement. A tall, broad-shouldered figure pushing inside, and her heart skipped an unsettling beat. He paused, scanning the room with a wary look, then froze when he spotted her. Silas straightened, almost imperceptibly, as if measuring the distance between past and present. “Well, now,” he said softly. “Looks like I’m not the only one who’s changed around here.” She turned her head to face the intruder—dark hair, sharp features, eyes that held a trace of intensity too deliberate to ignore. The stranger’s gaze flicked between her and Silas, unreadable but charged with something dangerous. “Rory,” the man said, voice smooth but edged with a faint menace. “Fancy meeting you here.” Silas’s body tensed. His fingers tapped lightly against the bar’s surface, ring glinting in the neon glow. “Who’s that?” The stranger smirked, a hint of disdain curling his lips. “Friend of a friend. Someone I thought I’d find, actually. Long time.” Rory clenched her jaw, feeling a cold rush seep into her veins. She knew that look — predator’s eyes with a veneer of civility. It was a face she’d seen lurking in her nightmares, long before she fled Cardiff. “You want to sit?” her voice was steadier than she felt, the faint tremor masked behind a relaxed tone. His smile sharpened. “No need. I just wanted a word. You’re far from where you used to be, Rory.” His eyes flicked towards Silas, then back. “Seems I’ve caught you in the middle of something.” Silas’s gaze narrowed, the hazel of his eyes flickering with a guarded calm. “You don’t get to tell her what she’s doing.” The stranger’s smirk faded just a fraction, but his tone remained icy. “Things have changed, Silas. There are demands now. You’d do well to remember that.” The room spun into a quiet chaos, the weight of unspoken alliances pressing thickly against the air. Rory’s fingers tightened on her glass, the tiny crescent scar on her wrist a reminder that some wounds never truly closed — neither those in her past nor those whispering in the present. She looked from Silas to the stranger and back, her mind racing. The past had come barging through the bar’s slick veneer, dragging shadows from the corners. The years had not been kind to some; others had still kept their secrets buried under layers of dust and regret. And now, they stood caught in a moment where everything might unravel. The quiet hum of the bar faded into the background. Her skin prickled. She could feel it — the imminent clash, the oncoming storm. It was no longer just Silas and her against the world. Now, the ghosts had returned, and they wanted something—she wasn’t sure what—but she knew, immediately, that whatever it was, it wouldn’t be gentle.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
40.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"she said carefully [carefully]"
1"he said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences25
tagDensity0.44
leniency0.88
rawRatio0.182
effectiveRatio0.16
64.85% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1138
totalAiIsmAdverbs8
found
0
adverb"sharply"
count1
1
adverb"lazily"
count1
2
adverb"tightly"
count1
3
adverb"really"
count1
4
adverb"carefully"
count1
5
adverb"softly"
count1
6
adverb"lightly"
count1
7
adverb"truly"
count1
highlights
0"sharply"
1"lazily"
2"tightly"
3"really"
4"carefully"
5"softly"
6"lightly"
7"truly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1138
totalAiIsms28
found
0
word"echoing"
count1
1
word"stomach"
count1
2
word"flickered"
count1
3
word"trembled"
count1
4
word"familiar"
count1
5
word"silence"
count2
6
word"unspoken"
count3
7
word"shimmered"
count1
8
word"gleaming"
count1
9
word"traced"
count1
10
word"flicked"
count3
11
word"scanning"
count2
12
word"intensity"
count1
13
word"unreadable"
count1
14
word"charged"
count1
15
word"glinting"
count1
16
word"predator"
count1
17
word"weight"
count1
18
word"reminder"
count1
19
word"racing"
count1
20
word"unravel"
count1
21
word"could feel"
count1
highlights
0"echoing"
1"stomach"
2"flickered"
3"trembled"
4"familiar"
5"silence"
6"unspoken"
7"shimmered"
8"gleaming"
9"traced"
10"flicked"
11"scanning"
12"intensity"
13"unreadable"
14"charged"
15"glinting"
16"predator"
17"weight"
18"reminder"
19"racing"
20"unravel"
21"could feel"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"clenched jaw/fists"
count1
highlights
0"clenched her jaw"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences67
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences67
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences80
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen36
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1132
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions18
wordCount948
uniqueNames4
maxNameDensity0.95
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Silas9
Blackwood2
Rory6
Cardiff1
persons
0"Silas"
1"Blackwood"
2"Rory"
places
0"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore0.833
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences58
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"quite reach his eyes"
1"as if holding something she shouldn’t"
2"sounded like a crack in old leather"
3"as if measuring the distance between past and present"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.883
wordCount1132
matches
0"neither those in her past nor"
83.33% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences80
matches
0"asking that, the"
1"knew that look "
98.45% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs32
mean35.38
std17.5
cv0.495
sampleLengths
020
1101
226
332
452
566
625
726
851
953
1012
1138
1227
1340
1430
1534
1653
1715
1829
1936
2016
2119
2222
2339
2419
2535
2622
2726
2850
2948
3036
3134
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences67
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs169
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount14
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences12
totalSentences80
ratio0.15
matches
0"It was him — Silas Blackwood — the man whose face she’d thought about at odd hours, whose voice she’d replay like a half-forgotten tune lurking in the back of her mind."
1"The bar’s faint glow stretched across his face like old cloth—stained and frayed at the edges."
2"Part of Rory wondered if she had expected this—to see him here, of all places, another shadow in the ever-shifting city she’d tried to outrun."
3"Silas Blackwood, who used to be sharp as a blade, was now wearier—his hazel eyes clouded with memories that refused to settle."
4"She studied him, recalling the man he’d been — the confidant, the confidante, the man who’d whispered secrets through the dark hours of their youth—everything raw and reckless with promise."
5"She felt it all in the way her nerves tightened—him asking that, the unspoken history piled between them."
6"She turned her head to face the intruder—dark hair, sharp features, eyes that held a trace of intensity too deliberate to ignore."
7"She knew that look — predator’s eyes with a veneer of civility."
8"Rory’s fingers tightened on her glass, the tiny crescent scar on her wrist a reminder that some wounds never truly closed — neither those in her past nor those whispering in the present."
9"The years had not been kind to some; others had still kept their secrets buried under layers of dust and regret."
10"She could feel it — the imminent clash, the oncoming storm."
11"Now, the ghosts had returned, and they wanted something—she wasn’t sure what—but she knew, immediately, that whatever it was, it wouldn’t be gentle."
91.40% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount954
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"tall, broad-shouldered figure"
adverbCount41
adverbRatio0.0429769392033543
lyAdverbCount18
lyAdverbRatio0.018867924528301886
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences80
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences80
mean14.15
std7.12
cv0.503
sampleLengths
020
132
218
326
425
512
610
74
817
911
104
1118
1216
134
1414
1517
1625
1724
1817
198
208
219
229
2313
2416
2522
2630
2711
2812
2912
3012
3116
3210
338
3419
354
3636
3714
3816
3916
4018
4112
4223
435
4413
4515
4613
475
4811
4922
62.08% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.3875
totalSentences80
uniqueOpeners31
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences66
matches(empty)
ratio0
1.82% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount36
totalSentences66
matches
0"It was him — Silas"
1"His hazel eyes caught her"
2"He leaned against the bar,"
3"His auburn hair had long"
4"She didn’t bother to ask"
5"His gaze flickered, surprised, then"
6"He paused, a beat too"
7"She stepped closer, silently noting"
8"Her hands trembled just enough"
9"She looked at him, really"
10"He finally broke the silence"
11"she said carefully, voice even"
12"She slid onto the empty"
13"He ran a hand through"
14"His voice was rough, threaded"
15"She studied him, recalling the"
16"She let her tone linger,"
17"She looked into her glass,"
18"He nodded, rubbing his chin"
19"She chuckled without humour."
ratio0.545
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount61
totalSentences66
matches
0"A chair scraped harshly against"
1"It was him — Silas"
2"His hazel eyes caught her"
3"He leaned against the bar,"
4"His auburn hair had long"
5"Rory’s stomach twisted, but her"
6"She didn’t bother to ask"
7"Some things were implicit."
8"His gaze flickered, surprised, then"
9"He paused, a beat too"
10"She stepped closer, silently noting"
11"The bar’s faint glow stretched"
12"Her hands trembled just enough"
13"A tense silence unfurled between"
14"Part of Rory wondered if"
15"She looked at him, really"
16"He finally broke the silence"
17"she said carefully, voice even"
18"She slid onto the empty"
19"He ran a hand through"
ratio0.924
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences66
matches
0"Now, fragments of that man"
1"Before she could answer, the"
2"Now, the ghosts had returned,"
ratio0.045
80.75% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences46
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Her hands trembled just enough to feel familiar, as if holding something she shouldn’t."
1"She studied him, recalling the man he’d been — the confidant, the confidante, the man who’d whispered secrets through the dark hours of their youth—everything r…"
2"Silas straightened, almost imperceptibly, as if measuring the distance between past and present."
3"She turned her head to face the intruder—dark hair, sharp features, eyes that held a trace of intensity too deliberate to ignore."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"He paused, a beat too long, before offering a nod"
1"She let, a ghost of a smile flickering"
2"She looked into, the amber liquid gleaming like a warning"
3"the man said, voice smooth but edged with a faint menace"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences25
tagDensity0.16
leniency0.32
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
70.2004%