Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTQZPXZ6MDXMJGPP7362ZEQ

Run Details

Model:
GPT-4.1
Duration:
36.3s
Cost:
$0.015466
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Roots snagged Aurora’s boot heel. She staggered, swearing softly, only just managing to keep hold of the parcel tucked beneath her arm. Her heart hammered from the climb, not from exertion but from the clinging sense that something in the darkness watched her. The so-called map in her hand – Eva’s scrawled lines and cryptic landmarks – had led her further from the city’s faint sodium glow and deeper into the flinty hush of Richmond Park than she’d ever dared alone. No foxes yipped. Not even the wind teased the wildflowers carpeting the track. Just the crunch of her own feet, measured and slow, echoing around the clearing as though the space itself breathed out after each step. She checked her phone. No service. Not even the stuttering bars that flickered desperately through the yew trees near the park’s southern edge. Fine. Just drop the parcel, snap a photo as proof of delivery, and get back to Silas’ bar before the night crowd turned rowdy or Yu-Fei started texting threats about cold dumplings again. The grove's entrance revealed itself with a wedge of uneasy clarity. Oak trunks arranged almost artfully, older than anything she’d seen in London, their bark notched and pitted with centuries’ worth of stories. Standing stones between them, each one too regular, too upright in the loamy ground. The clearing within pulsed against her skin—too still, air thick with green scents and something bitter underneath. Soap and wild garlic, cut with metal. She stepped over the nearest stone. The pendant at her throat, crimson heartstone throbbing lightly, released a muted heat. Not enough to burn, but enough to warn. Somewhere behind her, something snapped. Not a branch; a sound less organic, a brittle click echoing unnatural precision. Aurora forced herself to walk faster, breath held tight. That had not been a park deer. She laid the parcel on a moss-laden stump. Phone out. Camera app up. A shadow flickered across the phone screen. The corner of her vision caught it, but when she spun around, nothing waited between the oaks. No wind shifted the wildflowers – bluebells, foxgloves, moon-pale primroses nodding unbruised in the hush. Back to the task. Photograph taken. She pocketed her phone again. Another sound. Closer this time. A low, rhythmic tapping – like knuckles brushing glass, barely heard but impossible to ignore. She scanned the ring of stones. Leaves curled, overturned by something unseen. Her ears thudded with her own pulse, drowning out any distant roar of traffic. Was this a prank? Eva wouldn’t have sent her here blind, would she? Aurora touched the pendant. The gemstone pulsed again, heat trampling along the chain to her collarbone. A figure moved beyond the furthest oak. Tall, thinner than should be possible. Limbs too long, draped in something shifting—more like cobwebs than clothing. No face, just the glimmer of moisture where a mouth might sit. It hadn’t been there a moment ago. Aurora’s breath caught with a stutter. Her chest constricted. She blinked, but the thing remained, swaying fractionally in the non-existent breeze, as if daring her to move. She stepped back, every instinct screaming for her to bolt. Roots curled around her ankles, clutching. Not living, but entangling all the same, clinging to her boots as if trying to keep her here for someone else. She tugged free, nearly losing her balance. The tapping returned. Louder. All around now. Fingers drumming on the stones' tops, but none of the shapes matched the shadowy, slender figure—or was it moving too fast, circuiting the grove each eye-blink? She spoke, the sound a rough whisper. “Who’s out there?” No reply. The pendant at her throat gave one long, urgent pulse. Her thoughts tumbled. Had she crossed some line? Fae territory, the warnings said, never strictly real until the law of the woods pressed you in. Not a torch in sight. Her own shadow loomed on the flowerbed, stretched thin by the pendant’s faint glow. The shape at the edge of the grove inched closer, details resolving in the gloom. Not feet. Hooves. Not hands. Digits, yes, but double-jointed, clicking together like beetle pincers. Something inside the creature’s form shimmered, like moonlight glancing off water, then the illusion snapped and all she could see was a hunger that did not belong in the world of flesh. Aurora’s mouth dried, words shriveling before she could choke out a plea. All that training, all those hours in Cardiff running moot courts and telling herself logic solved everything—useless now. She moved to leave, foot scuffing wild garlic. The tapping ceased. Silence, heavier than before. She reached the stone boundary and stopped, ruled by some old children’s warning about stepping three times upon faerie ground. It stood directly in front of her now, behind the thickest stone. The distance between them shrank to the length of her arm. The air smelt sharper here, iron and stagnant pondwater. The being hungered for her. Not food – it wanted something else. Her heartbeat? Her name? Her shadow? It extended an arm, joint creaking. Something gleamed in those fingers—a locket? An old coin? No, her own parcel, pinched delicately. It hadn’t moved, but somehow it now held the parcel, the moss scraped away from the stump where she’d left it. Return for return. The rules surfaced from some bedtime story curled at the root of her mind. She forced her voice to steady. "That’s not yours.” The fingers opened, revealing the battered cardboard, still sealed. A voice like distant thunder Grinding out the syllables of her name. “Aurora.” She pressed the pendant to her skin. Heat slid through her veins; the smell of burnt ozone flared. The ground bucked. Stones shuddered. Wildflowers shriveled beneath the thing's shadow. The figure flickered, impossible angles bending, expanding. She tried to flee but her boots stuck fast to the softened earth, as if the ground had liquefied around her soles. A wet, sucking sound, mud clutching hungrily. Around the grove, the oaks bent, not in a breeze but in answer to a command. The figure stepped through the standing stones. A shriek, high and keening, burst across the clearing as the pendant glowed—crimson lighting up the figure’s blank face. It recoiled, limbs lashing out. Wood splintered. Bark split. She dug her nails into her wrist, half-hoping pain might prove this a dream. The ground tore open at her feet. A cold hand, not flesh, not bone, closed around her ankle and yanked. Rory fell screaming into the darkness below as the woods above closed over her, the stones ringing with that unearthly tapping, the pendant at her throat searing like a red coal against her skin.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags3
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Oak trunks arranged almost [almost]"
dialogueSentences3
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.333
86.56% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1116
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"lightly"
count1
2
adverb"hungrily"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"lightly"
2"hungrily"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
14.87% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1116
totalAiIsms19
found
0
word"measured"
count1
1
word"echoing"
count2
2
word"flickered"
count3
3
word"pulsed"
count2
4
word"rhythmic"
count1
5
word"scanned"
count1
6
word"pulse"
count2
7
word"whisper"
count1
8
word"loomed"
count1
9
word"resolving"
count1
10
word"gloom"
count1
11
word"shimmered"
count1
12
word"silence"
count1
13
word"searing"
count1
highlights
0"measured"
1"echoing"
2"flickered"
3"pulsed"
4"rhythmic"
5"scanned"
6"pulse"
7"whisper"
8"loomed"
9"resolving"
10"gloom"
11"shimmered"
12"silence"
13"searing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences115
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences115
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences118
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen37
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1107
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions13
wordCount1057
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity0.47
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora5
Eva2
Richmond1
Park1
London1
Standing1
Cardiff1
Grinding1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Eva"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"Standing"
4"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
83.33% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences75
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"as if daring her to move"
1"as if trying to keep her here for someone else"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches4
per1kWords3.613
wordCount1107
matches
0"not from exertion but from the clinging sense"
1"Not enough to burn, but enough to warn"
2"Not living, but entangling all the same, clinging to her boots as if trying"
3"not in a breeze but in answer to a command"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences118
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs36
mean30.75
std18.41
cv0.599
sampleLengths
081
137
256
371
427
534
613
739
811
959
1016
1136
1234
1344
1433
1510
1612
1744
1861
1930
2035
2132
2218
2342
2417
259
269
2713
2818
2918
3045
3135
3214
337
3413
3534
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences115
matches
0"being hungered"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs177
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount10
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences11
totalSentences118
ratio0.093
matches
0"The so-called map in her hand – Eva’s scrawled lines and cryptic landmarks – had led her further from the city’s faint sodium glow and deeper into the flinty hush of Richmond Park than she’d ever dared alone."
1"The clearing within pulsed against her skin—too still, air thick with green scents and something bitter underneath."
2"Not a branch; a sound less organic, a brittle click echoing unnatural precision."
3"No wind shifted the wildflowers – bluebells, foxgloves, moon-pale primroses nodding unbruised in the hush."
4"A low, rhythmic tapping – like knuckles brushing glass, barely heard but impossible to ignore."
5"Limbs too long, draped in something shifting—more like cobwebs than clothing."
6"All that training, all those hours in Cardiff running moot courts and telling herself logic solved everything—useless now."
7"Not food – it wanted something else."
8"Something gleamed in those fingers—a locket?"
9"Heat slid through her veins; the smell of burnt ozone flared."
10"A shriek, high and keening, burst across the clearing as the pendant glowed—crimson lighting up the figure’s blank face."
74.08% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount158
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount11
adverbRatio0.06962025316455696
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.0189873417721519
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences118
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences118
mean9.38
std7.5
cv0.8
sampleLengths
05
117
221
338
43
510
624
74
82
917
101
1132
1211
1322
1414
1517
167
176
1813
198
205
2113
229
237
248
252
263
277
2817
2915
304
312
325
332
343
3515
366
376
3814
394
409
414
4212
437
446
4511
4612
477
486
493
60.73% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.3898305084745763
totalSentences118
uniqueOpeners46
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences99
matches
0"Just the crunch of her"
1"Just drop the parcel, snap"
2"Somewhere behind her, something snapped."
3"All that training, all those"
ratio0.04
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences99
matches
0"She staggered, swearing softly, only"
1"Her heart hammered from the"
2"She checked her phone."
3"She stepped over the nearest"
4"She laid the parcel on"
5"She pocketed her phone again."
6"She scanned the ring of"
7"Her ears thudded with her"
8"It hadn’t been there a"
9"Her chest constricted."
10"She blinked, but the thing"
11"She stepped back, every instinct"
12"She tugged free, nearly losing"
13"She spoke, the sound a"
14"Her thoughts tumbled."
15"Her own shadow loomed on"
16"She moved to leave, foot"
17"She reached the stone boundary"
18"It stood directly in front"
19"It extended an arm, joint"
ratio0.263
86.26% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount74
totalSentences99
matches
0"Roots snagged Aurora’s boot heel."
1"She staggered, swearing softly, only"
2"Her heart hammered from the"
3"The so-called map in her"
4"She checked her phone."
5"The grove's entrance revealed itself"
6"Oak trunks arranged almost artfully,"
7"The clearing within pulsed against"
8"Soap and wild garlic, cut"
9"She stepped over the nearest"
10"The pendant at her throat,"
11"Aurora forced herself to walk"
12"That had not been a"
13"She laid the parcel on"
14"Camera app up."
15"A shadow flickered across the"
16"The corner of her vision"
17"She pocketed her phone again."
18"A low, rhythmic tapping –"
19"She scanned the ring of"
ratio0.747
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences99
matches(empty)
ratio0
57.82% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences42
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"Not even the stuttering bars that flickered desperately through the yew trees near the park’s southern edge."
1"She blinked, but the thing remained, swaying fractionally in the non-existent breeze, as if daring her to move."
2"Not living, but entangling all the same, clinging to her boots as if trying to keep her here for someone else."
3"Something inside the creature’s form shimmered, like moonlight glancing off water, then the illusion snapped and all she could see was a hunger that did not bel…"
4"Rory fell screaming into the darkness below as the woods above closed over her, the stones ringing with that unearthly tapping, the pendant at her throat searin…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags3
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"the parcel snap (the parcel snap)"
dialogueSentences3
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.667
75.4557%