Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTQZYWZB447Z72492NHNM1G

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Duration:
46.6s
Cost:
$0.001415

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door swung open with a creak, and the familiar scent of aged wood and spilled spirits enveloped Aurora Carter like a long-lost embrace. She stepped inside The Raven's Nest, her heart racing, not from the thrill of the bar's dimly lit atmosphere but from the weight of the past that clung to her like a second skin. The walls, adorned with sepia-toned photographs and maps of forgotten places, whispered secrets she had long buried. “Rory!” Silas Blackwood’s voice cut through the murmur of conversation, a warm beacon in the haze of smoke and laughter. He stood behind the bar, his grey-streaked auburn hair catching the low light, a silver signet ring glinting on his right hand. The slight limp in his left leg was more pronounced tonight, but his presence still commanded respect. “Si,” she replied, forcing a smile that felt foreign on her lips. “It’s been a while.” “Too long.” He wiped a glass with a rag, his hazel eyes scanning her face, searching for the girl he once knew. “What’ll it be?” “Just a tonic water, thanks.” She leaned against the bar, the cool surface grounding her as memories flickered like the neon sign outside. “Still avoiding the hard stuff, I see.” He poured her drink, the fizz rising like the tension in the air. “You know, I thought you’d have a drink in hand by now. You’ve been gone long enough.” “Some things never change.” She took a sip, the bubbles tickling her throat, but the taste felt flat. “How’s business?” “Busy as ever. You know how it is.” He gestured to the patrons scattered around the bar, their laughter mingling with the clinking of glasses. “But it’s not the same without you around.” “Right.” The word hung between them, heavy with unspoken truths. She glanced around, avoiding his gaze, her fingers tracing the crescent-shaped scar on her wrist, a reminder of childhood mischief and the innocence that had slipped through her fingers. “Still delivering for Golden Empress?” Silas asked, his tone casual, but the question felt like a probe. “Yeah, it pays the bills.” She shrugged, trying to sound nonchalant, but the weight of her choices pressed down on her. “What about you? Any new secrets to share?” “Always.” He leaned closer, lowering his voice. “But some secrets are better left unspoken.” A shadow crossed his face, and for a moment, Aurora saw the man he had been before the world had worn him down. The spymaster, the one who had taught her how to navigate the murky waters of life. But that man felt like a ghost now, lost beneath layers of time and regret. “Do you ever miss it?” she asked, her voice barely above a whisper. “Miss what? The thrill of the chase? The danger?” He chuckled, but it lacked warmth. “I’ve had my fill, Rory. I prefer the quiet chaos of this place.” “Quiet chaos?” She raised an eyebrow, a smirk tugging at her lips. “You’ve always had a way with words.” “Words are all I have left.” He straightened, the weight of his past settling on his shoulders. “What about you? You left Cardiff to escape, but did you ever find what you were looking for?” The question hung in the air, a challenge wrapped in concern. Aurora’s heart raced, memories of Evan flooding her mind—his anger, the way he had twisted her reality until she felt like a stranger in her own skin. “I’m still searching,” she admitted, her voice steady despite the turmoil inside. “But I’m not the same person I was.” “Neither am I.” Silas’s gaze bore into hers, a silent understanding passing between them. “Time changes us, Rory. It’s inevitable.” “Is it?” She leaned back, crossing her arms defensively. “Or do we just let it?” “Maybe a bit of both.” He poured himself a drink, the amber liquid swirling in the glass. “You can’t deny the choices we make shape who we become.” “Choices.” The word tasted bitter on her tongue. “I made mine. I chose to leave.” “And I chose to stay.” He took a sip, his expression unreadable. “But sometimes I wonder if I should have followed you.” “Why didn’t you?” The question slipped out before she could stop it, a spark igniting the air between them. “Because I had my own demons to face.” He set the glass down with a thud, the sound echoing in the silence that followed. “You weren’t the only one running away, Rory.” The revelation hit her like a punch to the gut. She had always seen herself as the sole victim of circumstance, but Silas had his battles too. The weight of their shared history pressed down on her, and she felt the walls of the bar closing in. “Maybe we both thought we could outrun our pasts,” she said, her voice trembling slightly. “But here we are, still haunted by it.” “Haunted?” He scoffed, but there was a hint of vulnerability in his eyes. “More like… aware. Aware of what we’ve lost.” “Lost?” She echoed, her heart racing. “What have we lost, Si?” “Time. Opportunities. Each other.” He leaned closer, his voice low and intense. “We were supposed to be something, Rory. Together.” The words hung in the air, heavy with unfulfilled promises. Aurora’s breath caught in her throat, the memories of their shared laughter and dreams crashing over her like a tidal wave. They had been young, invincible, and full of hope. But life had a way of shattering dreams, leaving only shards behind. “Maybe we were just kids playing at being adults,” she said, her voice barely above a whisper. “We didn’t know what we were doing.” “Maybe.” He studied her, his expression softening. “But we had each other. That counted for something.” “Did it?” She felt the sting of tears threatening to spill, but she blinked them away. “I left you behind, Si. I left everyone behind.” “And I let you go.” He sighed, the weight of regret etched on his face. “But I never stopped caring.” The honesty in his words struck her like a bolt of lightning. She had always thought of Silas as the strong one, the one who had it all figured out. But now, she saw the cracks in his facade, the vulnerability that lay beneath. “Do you think we can go back?” she asked, her voice trembling with uncertainty. “Back?” He shook his head, a sad smile playing on his lips. “We can’t go back, Rory. But we can move forward. Together.” The promise hung in the air, a fragile thread connecting their past to an uncertain future. Aurora felt a flicker of hope ignite within her, but it was quickly extinguished by the weight of reality. “Together?” she echoed, her heart racing. “What does that even mean?” “It means we face our demons, whatever they may be.” He reached out, his hand hovering just above hers, a silent invitation. “It means we stop running.” The moment stretched, the air thick with unspoken possibilities. Aurora’s heart pounded in her chest, the tension between them palpable. She could feel the ghosts of their past swirling around them, urging her to take a leap of faith. But before she could respond, the door swung open again, and a group of rowdy patrons stumbled in, laughter and shouts filling the bar. The moment shattered, the connection between them slipping away like sand through her fingers. “Looks like the night’s just getting started,” Silas said, his voice steadying as he turned to greet the newcomers. Aurora felt the weight of disappointment settle in her chest, the moment lost to the chaos of the bar. She took a deep breath, trying to steady herself, but the ache of what could have been lingered in the air. “Maybe we can talk later?” she suggested, her voice barely audible over the din. “Of course.” He smiled, but it didn’t reach his eyes. “I’ll be here.” As she stepped back into the thrumming energy of the bar, Aurora felt the ghosts of her past trailing behind her, a reminder of the choices that had led her here. The night was far from over, but the weight of unspoken words hung heavy in the air, a promise of what was yet to come.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags37
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"She leaned back [back]"
dialogueSentences67
tagDensity0.552
leniency1
rawRatio0.027
effectiveRatio0.027
85.53% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1382
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count2
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"quickly"
count1
highlights
0"barely above a whisper"
1"slightly"
2"quickly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1382
totalAiIsms42
found
0
word"familiar"
count1
1
word"racing"
count3
2
word"weight"
count8
3
word"beacon"
count1
4
word"glinting"
count1
5
word"scanning"
count1
6
word"flickered"
count1
7
word"tension"
count2
8
word"unspoken"
count4
9
word"tracing"
count1
10
word"reminder"
count2
11
word"navigate"
count1
12
word"whisper"
count2
13
word"warmth"
count1
14
word"eyebrow"
count1
15
word"raced"
count1
16
word"unreadable"
count1
17
word"echoing"
count1
18
word"silence"
count1
19
word"echoed"
count2
20
word"etched"
count1
21
word"facade"
count1
22
word"flicker"
count1
23
word"palpable"
count1
24
word"could feel"
count1
25
word"shattered"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"racing"
2"weight"
3"beacon"
4"glinting"
5"scanning"
6"flickered"
7"tension"
8"unspoken"
9"tracing"
10"reminder"
11"navigate"
12"whisper"
13"warmth"
14"eyebrow"
15"raced"
16"unreadable"
17"echoing"
18"silence"
19"echoed"
20"etched"
21"facade"
22"flicker"
23"palpable"
24"could feel"
25"shattered"
0.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches7
maxInWindow6
found
0
label"heart pounded in chest"
count1
1
label"weight of words/silence"
count1
2
label"hung in the air"
count4
3
label"flicker of emotion"
count1
highlights
0"heart pounded in her chest"
1"the weight of unspoken words"
2"hung in the air"
3"hung heavy in the air"
4"a flicker of hope"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences70
matches
0"felt the sting"
1"a flicker of hope"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences70
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences99
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1377
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions19
wordCount994
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity0.8
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora8
Carter1
Raven1
Nest1
Blackwood1
Evan1
Silas6
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Carter"
2"Blackwood"
3"Evan"
4"Silas"
places
0"Raven"
globalScore1
windowScore1
39.71% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences68
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"felt like a probe"
1"felt like a ghost now, lost beneath lay"
2"felt like a stranger in her own skin"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.726
wordCount1377
matches
0"not from the thrill of the bar's dimly lit atmosphere but from the weight of the past"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences99
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs49
mean28.1
std14.11
cv0.502
sampleLengths
075
159
216
325
423
537
620
733
839
917
1029
1114
1254
1313
1428
1519
1635
1738
1820
1920
2015
2128
2215
2322
2419
2532
2647
2723
2821
2911
3020
3152
3224
3316
3425
3520
3644
3714
3823
3935
4011
4127
4239
4338
4419
4540
4614
4713
4856
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences70
matches
0"been lingered"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs167
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences99
ratio0.01
matches
0"Aurora’s heart raced, memories of Evan flooding her mind—his anger, the way he had twisted her reality until she felt like a stranger in her own skin."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount999
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount30
adverbRatio0.03003003003003003
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.008008008008008008
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences99
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences99
mean13.91
std6.68
cv0.48
sampleLengths
024
134
217
320
422
517
612
74
822
93
1023
1120
1217
1318
142
1525
168
1710
1829
1917
2021
218
227
237
2423
2516
2615
2713
2815
2913
3012
317
3217
3318
3411
3527
3612
378
3814
396
409
416
4217
4311
448
457
4612
4710
4819
4924
74.75% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.45454545454545453
totalSentences99
uniqueOpeners45
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences70
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount39
totalSentences70
matches
0"She stepped inside The Raven's"
1"He stood behind the bar,"
2"she replied, forcing a smile"
3"He wiped a glass with"
4"She leaned against the bar,"
5"He poured her drink, the"
6"She took a sip, the"
7"He gestured to the patrons"
8"She glanced around, avoiding his"
9"She shrugged, trying to sound"
10"He leaned closer, lowering his"
11"she asked, her voice barely"
12"He chuckled, but it lacked"
13"She raised an eyebrow, a"
14"He straightened, the weight of"
15"she admitted, her voice steady"
16"She leaned back, crossing her"
17"He poured himself a drink,"
18"He took a sip, his"
19"He set the glass down"
ratio0.557
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount65
totalSentences70
matches
0"The door swung open with"
1"She stepped inside The Raven's"
2"The walls, adorned with sepia-toned"
3"Silas Blackwood’s voice cut through"
4"He stood behind the bar,"
5"The slight limp in his"
6"she replied, forcing a smile"
7"He wiped a glass with"
8"She leaned against the bar,"
9"He poured her drink, the"
10"She took a sip, the"
11"He gestured to the patrons"
12"The word hung between them,"
13"She glanced around, avoiding his"
14"Silas asked, his tone casual,"
15"She shrugged, trying to sound"
16"He leaned closer, lowering his"
17"A shadow crossed his face,"
18"The spymaster, the one who"
19"she asked, her voice barely"
ratio0.929
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences70
matches(empty)
ratio0
71.43% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences30
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"She glanced around, avoiding his gaze, her fingers tracing the crescent-shaped scar on her wrist, a reminder of childhood mischief and the innocence that had sl…"
1"She could feel the ghosts of their past swirling around them, urging her to take a leap of faith."
2"As she stepped back into the thrumming energy of the bar, Aurora felt the ghosts of her past trailing behind her, a reminder of the choices that had led her her…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags37
uselessAdditionCount25
matches
0"He poured, the fizz rising like the tension in the air"
1"She took, the bubbles tickling her throat, but the taste felt flat"
2"He gestured, their laughter mingling with the clinking of glasses"
3"Silas asked, his tone casual, but the question felt like a probe"
4"she asked, her voice barely above a whisper"
5"She raised, a smirk tugging at her lips"
6"He straightened, the weight of his past settling on his shoulders"
7"she admitted, her voice steady despite the turmoil inside"
8"Silas’s gaze bore, a silent understanding passing between them"
9"He poured, the amber liquid swirling in the glass"
10"He took, his expression unreadable"
11"The question slipped out, a spark igniting the air between them"
12"He set, the sound echoing in the silence that followed"
13"she said, her voice trembling slightly"
14"She echoed, her heart racing"
15"He leaned, his voice low and intense"
16"she said, her voice barely above a whisper"
17"He studied, his expression softening"
18"He sighed, the weight of regret etched on his face"
19"she asked, her voice trembling with uncertainty"
20"He shook, a sad smile playing on his lips"
21"she echoed, her heart racing"
22"He reached out, his hand hovering just above hers, a silent invitation"
23"Silas said, his voice steadying as he turned to greet the newcomers"
24"she suggested, her voice barely audible over the din"
75.37% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"He chuckled (chuckle)"
1"she admitted (admit)"
2"She felt (feel)"
3"He sighed (sigh)"
4"she suggested (suggest)"
dialogueSentences67
tagDensity0.179
leniency0.358
rawRatio0.417
effectiveRatio0.149
71.5594%