Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTR10CSBGC3HEH8NZD8MSX4

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35.8s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door swung open with a creak that echoed through the cramped flat, revealing a tall figure silhouetted against the yellow-orange glow of the corridor lights. Aurora stood frozen, a mug of lukewarm tea precariously poised between her fingertips, the steam curling into the air like the remnants of her warring thoughts. “Lucien?” His name slipped from her lips both as a question and an accusation. The shock of his presence sent a rush of heat to her cheeks, and she fought the impulse to retreat. “Not expecting me?” A smirk danced on his lips as he stepped into the flat, his tailored charcoal suit perfectly contrasting the clutter surrounding them. Books, scrolls, and half-finished takeout boxes cluttered every surface, a chaos that mirrored the tangle of emotions within her. “No.” She set the cup down for fear of spilling it. “Not exactly.” He brushed past her, a lingering scent of bergamot and danger trailing in his wake. The way he carried himself, all confidence and grace, only ignited the old embers of attraction she had tried so hard to bury. The sound of his cane clicking against the wooden floor punctuated the silence, a rhythm that reverberated in her chest. “Mind if I take a seat?” He gestured to the tiny sofa, his tone casual, yet there was an edge lingering beneath his words. “Suit yourself.” Her reply was curt, her heart racing as she crossed her arms defensively. She turned toward the window, the street outside buzzing with life as if mocking the stiff tension inside. He sank into the worn fabric of the couch, inspecting the chaos with a quirked brow. “You haven’t changed much. Still hoarding your literary treasures, I see." “Nothing’s changed,” she snapped, burning with a mix of resentment and longing. “You wanted it that way, didn’t you?” His gaze shifted from the piles of books to her, the warmth of his heterochromatic eyes unsettlingly intense. “Perhaps. But don’t assign all the blame to me, Rory.” “Right. Because it takes two to make things toxic." The words were sharper than she intended, but the memories flooded back—every late-night argument, every whispered regret. The scars of their past felt as fresh as the crescent-shaped mark on her wrist, a reminder of a childhood mishap grown into something darker. Lucien shifted, his cane tapping lightly against the floor, a tell-tale sign of the discomfort radiating from him. “You still care.” He leaned forward, his eyes glinting with challenge. “What do you want from me?” “Nothing.” She turned away, fingernails digging into her palms. “You’re the one who walked away.” “I had my reasons.” “Yeah, reasons that felt like excuses. You said London was too small for us, but look at you!” She wheeled around, pieces of her own hurt spilling out unchecked. “You’re still a part of this world. You still haunt my nights. What do you expect? I found my way back here for a fresh start, not to be reminded of my past.” “A fresh start? Is that what you call this?” He gestured at the mess, a smirk tugging at his lips. “Organised chaos?” “Don’t you dare mock me.” The tension between them swelled, the air thickening as unspoken truths brushed against the surface. Memories flooded in—sweaty summer nights tangled in sheets, whispered confessions, and the sweetness of stolen moments overshadowed by pain. “Rory, we can drop the facade. We both know there’s still something here.” He made no attempt to disguise the deliberateness of his shift towards her, his composure sleek and predatory. “Something—” she faltered, her throat tightening. “What, you mean the broken remnants of a relationship that was never going to last?” The bitterness rolled off her tongue, but deep down, buried beneath the layers, was the pulse of something warmer. “Would you rather it be cold and distant, then?” He stood, closing the gap between them, the heat radiating from his body signalling something primal. “Because I can already feel the distance, Rory. It’s suffocating.” Her breath hitched as she took a step back, her heart racing, battling against her own instincts. Never had she allowed herself to anticipate the chaos he stirred inside her, the dangerous dance of desire and distrust. “You don’t get to zone in when it suits you—” “Doesn’t that feel familiar?” His voice dropped an octave, laced with a quiet intensity. “Every time we unraveled, we came back together, like moths to a flame.” “That’s a twisted analogy, Lucien.” She looked away, hating the way her pulse quickened at his nearness, the way uncertainty clawed at her resolve. “And yet it rings true.” His voice softened, a rare vulnerability shining through. “Is this what you want? To push me away again, to deny what we could have? What we already share?” “Or,” she whispered, “to pretend the past doesn’t exist?” “What if we used the past to build something else?” He reached out, brushing his fingers against her arm, a touch so light and yet igniting a fire in her skin. “I’ve changed, Rory. I’m not the same man you knew.” “Then who are you?” His eyes darkened, reflecting a combination of determination and regret. “I’m the man who came back tonight to set things right. I want to fight for us.” “You think fighting will change anything?” “It’s a start.” A silence enveloped them, loaded with gravity. The air seemed charged, pulsating with the unexpressed, the desperate, the unresolved. “I don’t want to be hurt again.” Her voice barely rose above a whisper, her heart laid bare, fragile and exposed. “I don’t want to hurt you.” He stepped closer, the warmth of his presence enveloping her like an embrace. “But we have to face it—to face us. No more running.” The vulnerability in his tone drew her in, and for a heartbeat, the world outside faded. Their eyes locked, the connection igniting the very air between them. Desire flickered like a candle’s flame, dancing in the darkness, and she felt herself reaching for the warmth, for the promise of what could be. “What if—” Before she could finish the thought, the blaring of her phone shattered the moment, the shrillness cutting through the charged atmosphere. Both jumped, tension breaking like glass. “Who is it?” Lucien asked, a dark edge creeping into his voice again. “Just—” she hesitated, eyeing the screen. “Someone I work with.” “Are you going to answer it?” A wave of frustration surged through her, tangling with the remnants of their earlier conflict. “We can’t just disregard my life because you’ve suddenly chosen to show up.” “Maybe I wouldn’t have to if you’d told me sooner.” He glared at her, the tension reigniting. “Tell me what?” “About the damned job!” Both of them held their breaths as they stared each other down, their silhouettes framed against the clutter of the flat, the air thick between them, burning with memories and uncertainty. “Fine.” She exhaled, reaching for her phone, swiping away the call without answering. “We’ll talk about it—” A loud crash echoed from the hall, shattering the moment once more. Glass shattered, followed by muffled shouts. “What was that?” Lucien’s eyes widened, a flicker of alarm sweeping across his face as he turned toward the door. “Rory, stay back.” “What?” she snapped. But before she could move, the door burst open, and the dark shape of a figure rushed in, the intensity of their presence eclipsing the fragile moment they had been tethering on the edge of something new, something they had woven with tension and history. “What the hell—” The intruder swung an arm, sending her tumbling backwards. The fear spilled into the air, suffocating and sharp, extinguishing the flickering warmth of their previously forged connection just as chaos descended anew.
total_cost0.00137404

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
94.74% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags26
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"She turned away [away]"
1"She wheeled around [around]"
2"She looked away [away]"
dialogueSentences57
tagDensity0.456
leniency0.912
rawRatio0.115
effectiveRatio0.105
84.60% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1299
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count1
1
adverb"lightly"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count1
3
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"lightly"
2"very"
3"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1299
totalAiIsms38
found
0
word"echoed"
count2
1
word"silence"
count2
2
word"reverberated"
count1
3
word"racing"
count2
4
word"tension"
count5
5
word"warmth"
count4
6
word"reminder"
count1
7
word"glinting"
count1
8
word"unspoken"
count1
9
word"facade"
count1
10
word"pulse"
count2
11
word"dance"
count1
12
word"desire"
count2
13
word"familiar"
count1
14
word"intensity"
count2
15
word"quickened"
count1
16
word"resolve"
count1
17
word"charged"
count2
18
word"whisper"
count1
19
word"flickered"
count1
20
word"dancing"
count1
21
word"shattered"
count2
22
word"flicker"
count1
highlights
0"echoed"
1"silence"
2"reverberated"
3"racing"
4"tension"
5"warmth"
6"reminder"
7"glinting"
8"unspoken"
9"facade"
10"pulse"
11"dance"
12"desire"
13"familiar"
14"intensity"
15"quickened"
16"resolve"
17"charged"
18"whisper"
19"flickered"
20"dancing"
21"shattered"
22"flicker"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences59
matches
0"A wave of frustration"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences59
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences90
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen45
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1291
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions4
wordCount903
uniqueNames2
maxNameDensity0.33
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Books1
Lucien3
persons
0"Books"
1"Lucien"
places(empty)
globalScore1
windowScore1
59.09% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences55
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"as if mocking the stiff tension inside"
1"seemed charged pulsating with the unexpressed, the desperate, the unresolved"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1291
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences90
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs54
mean23.91
std16.13
cv0.675
sampleLengths
052
11
233
344
413
558
624
733
827
919
1028
1151
1235
1315
144
1562
1622
175
1834
1931
2040
2135
2247
2327
2424
2533
269
2741
284
2927
306
313
3219
3321
3430
3552
362
3727
3813
3910
406
4128
4217
433
444
4531
4617
4718
483
4920
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences59
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs161
matches(empty)
79.37% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences90
ratio0.022
matches
0"“Right. Because it takes two to make things toxic.\" The words were sharper than she intended, but the memories flooded back—every late-night argument, every whispered regret."
1"Memories flooded in—sweaty summer nights tangled in sheets, whispered confessions, and the sweetness of stolen moments overshadowed by pain."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount910
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount22
adverbRatio0.024175824175824177
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.00989010989010989
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences90
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences90
mean14.34
std8.99
cv0.626
sampleLengths
026
126
21
313
420
525
619
711
82
915
1023
1120
1224
1315
1418
1516
1611
1712
187
1918
2010
2126
2225
2318
2411
256
269
276
284
2929
3033
3120
322
335
3415
3519
3631
376
3834
3925
4010
4117
4220
4310
4414
4513
4624
4713
4820
499
91.11% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.5666666666666667
totalSentences90
uniqueOpeners51
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences57
matches(empty)
ratio0
23.51% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount28
totalSentences57
matches
0"His name slipped from her"
1"She set the cup down"
2"He brushed past her, a"
3"He gestured to the tiny"
4"Her reply was curt, her"
5"She turned toward the window,"
6"He sank into the worn"
7"she snapped, burning with a"
8"His gaze shifted from the"
9"He leaned forward, his eyes"
10"She turned away, fingernails digging"
11"She wheeled around, pieces of"
12"He gestured at the mess,"
13"He made no attempt to"
14"she faltered, her throat tightening"
15"He stood, closing the gap"
16"Her breath hitched as she"
17"His voice dropped an octave,"
18"She looked away, hating the"
19"His voice softened, a rare"
ratio0.491
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount53
totalSentences57
matches
0"The door swung open with"
1"Aurora stood frozen, a mug"
2"His name slipped from her"
3"The shock of his presence"
4"A smirk danced on his"
5"She set the cup down"
6"He brushed past her, a"
7"The way he carried himself,"
8"The sound of his cane"
9"He gestured to the tiny"
10"Her reply was curt, her"
11"She turned toward the window,"
12"He sank into the worn"
13"she snapped, burning with a"
14"His gaze shifted from the"
15"The words were sharper than"
16"The scars of their past"
17"Lucien shifted, his cane tapping"
18"He leaned forward, his eyes"
19"She turned away, fingernails digging"
ratio0.93
87.72% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences57
matches
0"Before she could finish the"
ratio0.018
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences29
technicalSentenceCount8
matches
0"The door swung open with a creak that echoed through the cramped flat, revealing a tall figure silhouetted against the yellow-orange glow of the corridor lights…"
1"Books, scrolls, and half-finished takeout boxes cluttered every surface, a chaos that mirrored the tangle of emotions within her."
2"The sound of his cane clicking against the wooden floor punctuated the silence, a rhythm that reverberated in her chest."
3"She turned toward the window, the street outside buzzing with life as if mocking the stiff tension inside."
4"Lucien shifted, his cane tapping lightly against the floor, a tell-tale sign of the discomfort radiating from him."
5"Her breath hitched as she took a step back, her heart racing, battling against her own instincts."
6"Desire flickered like a candle’s flame, dancing in the darkness, and she felt herself reaching for the warmth, for the promise of what could be."
7"But before she could move, the door burst open, and the dark shape of a figure rushed in, the intensity of their presence eclipsing the fragile moment they had …"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags26
uselessAdditionCount10
matches
0"she intended, but the memories flooded back—every late-night argument, every whispered regret"
1"He leaned, his eyes glinting with challenge"
2"She turned away, fingernails digging into her palms"
3"He gestured, a smirk tugging at his lips"
4"He made, his composure sleek and predatory"
5"she faltered, her throat tightening"
6"His voice softened, a rare vulnerability shining through"
7"He stepped, the warmth of his presence enveloping her like an embrace"
8"Lucien asked, a dark edge creeping into his voice again"
9"He glared, the tension reigniting"
79.82% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"she snapped (snap)"
1"she faltered (falter)"
2"she whispered (whisper)"
3"she snapped (snap)"
dialogueSentences57
tagDensity0.088
leniency0.175
rawRatio0.8
effectiveRatio0.14
76.6653%