Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTR12RS2GNNM1GV13KSSDAS

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The rustle of leaves whispered secrets as Aurora Carter stepped into the Fae Grove, her heart pounding in rhythm with the pulse of the ancient trees. Shadows danced at the periphery of her vision, flickering like candle flames, but she pressed on, drawn by the promise of answers. The Heartstone Pendant nestled against her chest, its faint warmth a reminder of the unknown benefactor who had gifted it to her. She had come seeking clarity, but the air felt thick with something unnameable, a tension that prickled at her skin. A low hum vibrated through the grove, a sound that seemed to emanate from the very earth beneath her feet. It was not the gentle rustle of wind through branches or the distant call of night creatures. This was something else—an unsettling melody that tugged at her instincts. She paused, scanning the clearing, her bright blue eyes darting from one shadow to another. The ancient oak standing stones loomed like sentinels, their gnarled forms twisted and knotted, as if they had witnessed centuries of secrets. “Hello?” Her voice felt small, swallowed by the oppressive silence that followed. The hum faded, leaving only the sound of her own breath, quick and shallow. She took a step forward, the wildflowers blooming year-round brushing against her jeans, their petals soft yet eerily vibrant in the dim light. A flicker caught her attention—a movement just beyond the edge of the grove. She turned sharply, but nothing remained. Just the trees, their branches swaying gently, as if mocking her unease. *Get a grip, Rory,* she thought, forcing herself to breathe deeply. She had faced worse than this. But the wrongness lingered, a weight pressing down on her chest. She had come here to find answers about the Heartstone, to understand its connection to the Hel portals that had begun to plague her dreams. The pendant pulsed softly, a heartbeat against her skin, urging her to delve deeper into the grove. As she ventured further, the hum returned, louder now, a cacophony of whispers that seemed to swirl around her. She strained to catch the words, but they slipped through her fingers like smoke. The trees closed in, their trunks thick and twisted, creating a labyrinth that felt alive, shifting with every step she took. A sudden rustle to her left made her jump. She turned, heart racing, but again, nothing. Just the shadows, deeper now, as if the night itself had thickened. She pressed on, her instincts screaming at her to turn back, but curiosity propelled her forward. “Is anyone there?” she called out, her voice stronger this time, though it trembled slightly. The grove responded with silence, the hum fading into an eerie stillness. She felt the pendant grow warmer, a pulse that matched her racing heart. Then she saw it—a figure, barely discernible, flitting between the trees. It was there one moment, gone the next, leaving only the echo of its presence. Aurora’s breath caught in her throat. She wasn’t alone. “Show yourself!” she demanded, her voice echoing through the grove. The shadows shifted, and for a fleeting moment, she thought she saw a face—a pale visage with hollow eyes staring back at her. But it vanished before she could blink, leaving her questioning her own sanity. The hum returned, now a low growl, vibrating through the ground. Aurora stumbled back, her foot catching on a root, sending her sprawling to the forest floor. The wildflowers cradled her, their petals brushing against her cheek, soft yet unsettling. She pushed herself up, heart hammering, and glanced around. The grove felt different now, as if it had shifted while she was down. The standing stones loomed closer, their ancient faces twisted in expressions of warning. She could almost hear them whispering, urging her to leave. But she couldn’t. Not yet. The Heartstone Pendant throbbed against her chest, a beacon in the darkness. She had to know what it wanted, what secrets it held. Rising to her feet, she took a deep breath, steeling herself. “I’m not afraid of you!” she shouted, though her voice wavered. The shadows seemed to thicken, swirling around her like a living entity. A sudden chill swept through the grove, wrapping around her like a shroud. The hum morphed into a cacophony of voices, rising and falling like a tide. She pressed her hands to her ears, trying to block out the sound, but it seeped into her bones, a relentless whispering that clawed at her mind. “Leave… now…” The words echoed, a chorus of voices layered over one another, each one more insistent than the last. “No!” she shouted back, defiance surging through her. “I’m here for answers!” The shadows recoiled, and for a moment, the grove fell silent. Aurora’s heart raced as she felt the weight of unseen eyes upon her, watching, waiting. She took a step forward, the pendant glowing faintly, illuminating the path ahead. Then, without warning, the ground trembled beneath her feet. The standing stones shuddered, their ancient forms vibrating with a power she couldn’t comprehend. A low growl rumbled through the air, and the shadows coalesced into a figure—a tall, gaunt silhouette with elongated limbs and a face obscured by darkness. “Foolish child,” it hissed, the voice a chilling blend of the many that had whispered before. “You tread where you do not belong.” Aurora’s breath caught in her throat. The figure loomed closer, its presence suffocating, a palpable darkness that threatened to swallow her whole. She clutched the Heartstone Pendant, its warmth a stark contrast to the cold dread creeping into her bones. “I’m not afraid of you!” she repeated, though her voice trembled. The figure laughed, a sound that echoed through the grove, reverberating off the standing stones. “Fear is not your enemy, child. It is your only ally in this place.” With a sudden rush, the shadows surged forward, enveloping her in a whirlwind of darkness. Aurora stumbled back, her heart racing as she fought against the tide. The pendant pulsed violently, its warmth intensifying, and she felt a surge of energy coursing through her veins. “Show me!” she cried, desperation clawing at her throat. “Show me what you want!” The shadows hesitated, swirling around her like a tempest. The figure loomed closer, its face still hidden, but she could feel its gaze piercing through the darkness. “Very well,” it whispered, the voices merging into a single, haunting tone. “But know this: the truth comes at a price.” The ground beneath her feet shifted, and the grove began to dissolve, the trees fading into mist. Aurora felt herself being pulled into the void, the shadows wrapping around her like a cocoon. “Rory!” a voice called out, distant yet familiar. She reached out, but the darkness swallowed her whole, dragging her into the depths of the unknown. The last thing she felt was the Heartstone Pendant burning against her skin, a final pulse of warmth before everything went black.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she shouted back [back]"
dialogueSentences16
tagDensity0.688
leniency1
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.091
74.18% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1162
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"very"
count2
1
adverb"sharply"
count1
2
adverb"gently"
count1
3
adverb"softly"
count1
4
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"sharply"
2"gently"
3"softly"
4"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1162
totalAiIsms51
found
0
word"pounding"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count3
2
word"warmth"
count4
3
word"reminder"
count1
4
word"tension"
count1
5
word"vibrated"
count1
6
word"scanning"
count1
7
word"loomed"
count4
8
word"sentinels"
count1
9
word"oppressive"
count1
10
word"silence"
count2
11
word"flicker"
count1
12
word"weight"
count2
13
word"pulsed"
count2
14
word"delve"
count1
15
word"cacophony"
count2
16
word"racing"
count3
17
word"trembled"
count3
18
word"echo"
count1
19
word"echoing"
count1
20
word"fleeting"
count1
21
word"throbbed"
count1
22
word"beacon"
count1
23
word"wavered"
count1
24
word"chill"
count1
25
word"echoed"
count2
26
word"raced"
count1
27
word"chilling"
count1
28
word"palpable"
count1
29
word"stark"
count1
30
word"could feel"
count1
31
word"familiar"
count1
32
word"depths"
count1
33
word"the last thing"
count1
highlights
0"pounding"
1"pulse"
2"warmth"
3"reminder"
4"tension"
5"vibrated"
6"scanning"
7"loomed"
8"sentinels"
9"oppressive"
10"silence"
11"flicker"
12"weight"
13"pulsed"
14"delve"
15"cacophony"
16"racing"
17"trembled"
18"echo"
19"echoing"
20"fleeting"
21"throbbed"
22"beacon"
23"wavered"
24"chill"
25"echoed"
26"raced"
27"chilling"
28"palpable"
29"stark"
30"could feel"
31"familiar"
32"depths"
33"the last thing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences80
matches(empty)
71.43% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences80
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences85
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen27
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords4
totalWords1156
ratio0.003
matches
0"Get a grip, Rory,"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions20
wordCount1091
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity0.64
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora7
Carter1
Fae1
Grove1
Heartstone5
Pendant4
Hel1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Carter"
2"Pendant"
places
0"Fae"
1"Grove"
2"Hel"
globalScore1
windowScore1
52.60% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences77
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"sound that seemed to emanate from the very earth beneath her feet"
1"as if mocking her unease"
2"whispers that seemed to swirl around her"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1156
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences85
matches(empty)
94.77% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs30
mean38.53
std18.56
cv0.482
sampleLengths
090
185
249
348
453
554
644
740
835
946
1049
1137
1228
1334
1454
1520
1612
1739
1849
1923
2040
2111
2229
2345
2414
2527
2621
2733
288
2939
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences80
matches
0"being pulled"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs202
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount5
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences85
ratio0.059
matches
0"This was something else—an unsettling melody that tugged at her instincts."
1"A flicker caught her attention—a movement just beyond the edge of the grove."
2"Then she saw it—a figure, barely discernible, flitting between the trees."
3"The shadows shifted, and for a fleeting moment, she thought she saw a face—a pale visage with hollow eyes staring back at her."
4"A low growl rumbled through the air, and the shadows coalesced into a figure—a tall, gaunt silhouette with elongated limbs and a face obscured by darkness."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1097
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount36
adverbRatio0.032816773017319965
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.010027347310847767
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences85
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences85
mean13.6
std5.51
cv0.405
sampleLengths
026
122
222
320
420
517
611
715
822
912
1014
1123
1213
136
1412
1511
166
1711
1825
1917
2019
2114
2221
239
247
2512
2616
2715
2812
2913
3011
3115
326
333
3410
3523
3613
3711
3816
3913
409
4114
4213
4310
443
452
4612
4711
4811
4911
47.45% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.3058823529411765
totalSentences85
uniqueOpeners26
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences79
matches
0"Just the trees, their branches"
1"Just the shadows, deeper now,"
2"Then she saw it—a figure,"
3"Then, without warning, the ground"
ratio0.051
73.16% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount29
totalSentences79
matches
0"She had come seeking clarity,"
1"It was not the gentle"
2"She paused, scanning the clearing,"
3"Her voice felt small, swallowed"
4"She took a step forward,"
5"She turned sharply, but nothing"
6"She had faced worse than"
7"She had come here to"
8"She strained to catch the"
9"She turned, heart racing, but"
10"She pressed on, her instincts"
11"she called out, her voice"
12"She felt the pendant grow"
13"It was there one moment,"
14"She wasn’t alone."
15"she demanded, her voice echoing"
16"She pushed herself up, heart"
17"She could almost hear them"
18"She had to know what"
19"she shouted, though her voice"
ratio0.367
29.62% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount68
totalSentences79
matches
0"The rustle of leaves whispered"
1"Shadows danced at the periphery"
2"The Heartstone Pendant nestled against"
3"She had come seeking clarity,"
4"A low hum vibrated through"
5"It was not the gentle"
6"This was something else—an unsettling"
7"She paused, scanning the clearing,"
8"The ancient oak standing stones"
9"Her voice felt small, swallowed"
10"The hum faded, leaving only"
11"She took a step forward,"
12"A flicker caught her attention—a"
13"She turned sharply, but nothing"
14"She had faced worse than"
15"She had come here to"
16"The pendant pulsed softly, a"
17"She strained to catch the"
18"The trees closed in, their"
19"A sudden rustle to her"
ratio0.861
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences79
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences57
technicalSentenceCount12
matches
0"The Heartstone Pendant nestled against her chest, its faint warmth a reminder of the unknown benefactor who had gifted it to her."
1"She had come seeking clarity, but the air felt thick with something unnameable, a tension that prickled at her skin."
2"This was something else—an unsettling melody that tugged at her instincts."
3"The ancient oak standing stones loomed like sentinels, their gnarled forms twisted and knotted, as if they had witnessed centuries of secrets."
4"Just the trees, their branches swaying gently, as if mocking her unease."
5"The trees closed in, their trunks thick and twisted, creating a labyrinth that felt alive, shifting with every step she took."
6"She felt the pendant grow warmer, a pulse that matched her racing heart."
7"Aurora stumbled back, her foot catching on a root, sending her sprawling to the forest floor."
8"The wildflowers cradled her, their petals brushing against her cheek, soft yet unsettling."
9"She pressed her hands to her ears, trying to block out the sound, but it seeped into her bones, a relentless whispering that clawed at her mind."
10"The figure loomed closer, its presence suffocating, a palpable darkness that threatened to swallow her whole."
11"The pendant pulsed violently, its warmth intensifying, and she felt a surge of energy coursing through her veins."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount7
matches
0"she called out, her voice stronger this time, though it trembled slightly"
1"she demanded, her voice echoing through the grove"
2"she shouted, though her voice wavered"
3"she shouted back, defiance surging through her"
4"she repeated, though her voice trembled"
5"she cried, desperation clawing at her throat"
6"it whispered, the voices merging into a single, haunting tone"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount9
fancyTags
0"she called out (call out)"
1"she demanded (demand)"
2"she shouted (shout)"
3"she shouted back (shout)"
4"it hissed (hiss)"
5"she repeated (repeat)"
6"she cried (cry)"
7"it whispered (whisper)"
8"a voice called out (call out)"
dialogueSentences16
tagDensity0.563
leniency1
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio1
71.4404%