Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTR1FBVXT8H88HJGGMV1CDW

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
In the heart of Richmond Park, where the ancient oaks stood sentinel, Aurora Carter stepped off the path, her boots sinking into the dew-kissed grass. The Fae Grove lay ahead, hidden from prying eyes by the wild growth of wildflowers and the whispered secrets of the wind. She had come here seeking solace, a respite from the city's relentless hum, but the silence that greeted her was too profound, too expectant. The Heartstone Pendant around her neck pulsed faintly, a warmth that mirrored the unease coiling in her stomach. It had led her here, drawn to the whisper of a Hel portal, a doorway to the Fae realm. Yet, as she ventured deeper into the grove, the pendant's glow seemed to flicker, as if uncertain of its own purpose. A twig snapped, a sound too loud in the stillness. Aurora whirled, her eyes scanning the shadows. Nothing moved, yet she couldn't shake the feeling of being watched. She took a deep breath, the scent of damp earth and old magic filling her lungs. "Just my imagination," she murmured, her voice barely disturbing the quiet. The grove was different tonight. The wildflowers, usually vibrant and defiant, seemed to huddle close to the ground, their petals closed tight as if in sleep. Or fear. Aurora shook her head, dismissing the thought. She was letting the stories Eva had told her, tales of the Fae and their tricks, get to her. She moved further into the grove, her footsteps soft on the grass. The standing stones loomed ahead, their ancient faces carved with runes that seemed to shift in the moonlight. She had seen them before, but tonight, they seemed to stare at her, their expressions accusatory. A soft rustle came from her left, a sound like fabric on fabric. Aurora turned, her heart pounding in her chest. A figure stood at the edge of the grove, cloaked in shadows. It was tall, too tall to be human, and it seemed to shimmer, as if made of stardust and moonlight. "Who are you?" Aurora demanded, her voice steadier than she felt. The figure didn't move, didn't speak, but she could feel its gaze, cold and calculating. She took a step back, her hand reaching for the Heartstone. It pulsed again, warmer this time, as if in warning. The figure took a step forward, and Aurora saw it clearly for the first time. It was a woman, or at least, it had been once. Her skin was pale, almost translucent, and her eyes were black, bottomless pits that seemed to swallow the light. She was beautiful, in a way that was both terrifying and mesmerizing. "You shouldn't be here," the woman said, her voice like ice cracking. "This place is not for you." Aurora swallowed hard, her mind racing. "I was invited," she said, her voice barely above a whisper. "The Heartstone-" "The Heartstone is a trinket," the woman sneered, her eyes flicking to the pendant. "A bauble given to a child to keep her safe. It cannot protect you here." Aurora's hand tightened around the pendant, her knuckles turning white. "What do you want?" she asked, her voice steady despite the fear coiling in her stomach. The woman smiled, a slow, cruel smile that didn't reach her eyes. "I want you to leave," she said. "Before it's too late." Aurora hesitated, her eyes darting from the woman to the standing stones and back again. She could feel the wrongness of this place, the ancient evil that lurked just beneath the surface. But she had come here for a reason, and she wasn't about to leave without answers. "I can't do that," she said, her voice firm. "Not until I know why I'm here." The woman's smile faded, her eyes narrowing. "Very well," she said. "But remember, you were warned." She turned and walked away, her form dissolving into the shadows as she moved. Aurora watched her go, her heart pounding in her chest. She knew she should follow, should demand answers, but her feet seemed rooted to the spot. A soft rustle came from the trees, a sound like leaves whispering in the wind. Aurora turned, her eyes scanning the darkness. Something moved in the shadows, something large and twisted. She could see it now, a form that was almost humanoid, but twisted and wrong. Its eyes glowed in the darkness, a sickly yellow that seemed to burn into her soul. Aurora took a step back, her breath coming in short, sharp gasps. The thing took a step forward, its form shifting and changing as it moved. It was like watching a nightmare come to life, a thing of shadows and fear that seemed to defy the laws of nature. She turned to run, her heart pounding in her chest. But it was too late. The thing was upon her, its hands like claws as they reached for her. She screamed, a sound that echoed through the grove, a sound that seemed to wake the ancient stones from their slumber. And then, everything went black.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags9
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences15
tagDensity0.6
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
88.14% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount843
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"barely above a whisper"
1"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount843
totalAiIsms24
found
0
word"sentinel"
count1
1
word"solace"
count1
2
word"silence"
count1
3
word"profound"
count1
4
word"pulsed"
count2
5
word"warmth"
count1
6
word"stomach"
count2
7
word"whisper"
count2
8
word"flicker"
count1
9
word"scanning"
count2
10
word"footsteps"
count1
11
word"loomed"
count1
12
word"pounding"
count3
13
word"could feel"
count2
14
word"calculating"
count1
15
word"racing"
count1
16
word"echoed"
count1
highlights
0"sentinel"
1"solace"
2"silence"
3"profound"
4"pulsed"
5"warmth"
6"stomach"
7"whisper"
8"flicker"
9"scanning"
10"footsteps"
11"loomed"
12"pounding"
13"could feel"
14"calculating"
15"racing"
16"echoed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences61
matches(empty)
0.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount9
narrationSentences61
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences67
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen26
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords842
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
72.08% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions24
wordCount770
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity1.56
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
Aurora12
Carter1
Fae3
Grove1
Heartstone2
Pendant1
Hel1
Eva1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Carter"
2"Eva"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Fae"
3"Grove"
4"Pendant"
globalScore0.721
windowScore0.833
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences54
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"runes that seemed to shift in the moonlight"
1"pits that seemed to swallow the light"
2"seemed rooted to the spot"
3"fear that seemed to defy the laws of nature"
4"sound that seemed to wake the ancient stones from their slumber"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount842
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences67
matches(empty)
86.18% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs21
mean40.1
std18.11
cv0.452
sampleLengths
071
158
255
354
446
553
647
757
818
919
1029
1126
1223
1348
1416
1516
1640
1762
1849
1950
205
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences61
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs135
matches
0"was letting"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences67
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount771
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount22
adverbRatio0.028534370946822308
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.007782101167315175
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences67
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences67
mean12.57
std5.51
cv0.439
sampleLengths
025
122
224
318
419
521
610
77
811
916
1011
115
1221
132
147
1519
1612
1718
1816
1913
208
2112
2220
2311
2415
2511
2610
2715
2811
2919
3012
3112
326
336
3411
352
3614
3715
3810
3916
4012
417
424
4315
4417
4516
469
477
487
494
52.74% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.34328358208955223
totalSentences67
uniqueOpeners23
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences58
matches(empty)
ratio0
54.48% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences58
matches
0"She had come here seeking"
1"It had led her here,"
2"She took a deep breath,"
3"she murmured, her voice barely"
4"She was letting the stories"
5"She moved further into the"
6"She had seen them before,"
7"It was tall, too tall"
8"She took a step back,"
9"It pulsed again, warmer this"
10"It was a woman, or"
11"Her skin was pale, almost"
12"She was beautiful, in a"
13"she said, her voice barely"
14"she asked, her voice steady"
15"She could feel the wrongness"
16"she said, her voice firm"
17"She turned and walked away,"
18"She knew she should follow,"
19"She could see it now,"
ratio0.414
3.10% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount53
totalSentences58
matches
0"The Fae Grove lay ahead,"
1"She had come here seeking"
2"The Heartstone Pendant around her"
3"It had led her here,"
4"A twig snapped, a sound"
5"Aurora whirled, her eyes scanning"
6"Nothing moved, yet she couldn't"
7"She took a deep breath,"
8"she murmured, her voice barely"
9"The grove was different tonight."
10"The wildflowers, usually vibrant and"
11"Aurora shook her head, dismissing"
12"She was letting the stories"
13"She moved further into the"
14"The standing stones loomed ahead,"
15"She had seen them before,"
16"A soft rustle came from"
17"Aurora turned, her heart pounding"
18"A figure stood at the"
19"It was tall, too tall"
ratio0.914
86.21% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences58
matches
0"Yet, as she ventured deeper"
ratio0.017
3.48% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences41
technicalSentenceCount8
matches
0"She had come here seeking solace, a respite from the city's relentless hum, but the silence that greeted her was too profound, too expectant."
1"The Heartstone Pendant around her neck pulsed faintly, a warmth that mirrored the unease coiling in her stomach."
2"Yet, as she ventured deeper into the grove, the pendant's glow seemed to flicker, as if uncertain of its own purpose."
3"The wildflowers, usually vibrant and defiant, seemed to huddle close to the ground, their petals closed tight as if in sleep."
4"The standing stones loomed ahead, their ancient faces carved with runes that seemed to shift in the moonlight."
5"Her skin was pale, almost translucent, and her eyes were black, bottomless pits that seemed to swallow the light."
6"She was beautiful, in a way that was both terrifying and mesmerizing."
7"It was like watching a nightmare come to life, a thing of shadows and fear that seemed to defy the laws of nature."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags9
uselessAdditionCount6
matches
0"she murmured, her voice barely disturbing the quiet"
1"Aurora demanded, her voice steadier than she felt"
2"she said, her voice barely above a whisper"
3"the woman sneered, her eyes flicking to the pendant"
4"she asked, her voice steady despite the fear coiling in her stomach"
5"she said, her voice firm"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"she murmured (murmur)"
1"Aurora demanded (demand)"
2"the woman sneered (sneer)"
dialogueSentences15
tagDensity0.6
leniency1
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.333
68.2136%