Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTR1ND80G2W77D8B6BXYNEF

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Duration:
3.9s
Cost:
$0.000215

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The neon sign of *The Raven’s Nest* flickered like a dying ember, casting jagged shadows across the pavement. Silas Blackwood’s bar was the kind of place where secrets took root in the rafters, where the air smelled of stale gin and the hum of conversation was the only soundtrack to a world that had moved on. Aurora Carter—Rory, as she preferred—paused mid-stride, her fingers brushing the handle of her bag before she dropped it with a clatter. The sound echoed off the brick walls of Soho, where the distant murmur of a pub crowd mingled with the sharp *clink* of glasses. She was late. Again. But the bar’s green neon sign had been glowing for hours, and the scent of something sweet and spiced—perhaps the Golden Empress’s signature dish—drifted from the alleyway where Silas’s door was hidden behind a stack of old newspapers. She didn’t look back as she pushed through the door, her breath catching when she saw him. Silas stood at the bar, his back to her, his left leg catching on the edge of a stool as he reached for a glass. The way he moved—slow, deliberate—was a sharp contrast to the way she had once seen him: sharp, quick, always in motion. His auburn hair was streaked with grey now, his beard trimmed just enough to suggest he’d spent too long in the sun and not enough in the mirror. The silver signet ring on his right hand glinted under the dim light, catching the amber of his eyes. “You’re late,” he said without turning, his voice rough with something that wasn’t quite amusement. “Traffic,” she lied, though the truth was worse. She had been running late because she hadn’t been running at all. Silas finally turned, his expression unreadable. “You look different.” The words hung between them, heavy as the weight of years she’d spent trying to outrun. She exhaled through her nose, the scent of her own perfume—something floral, something that had once been hers—mixing with the bar’s stale air. “You look older.” “Older,” he repeated, as if testing the word. “Or just… tired.” She didn’t answer. Instead, she slid onto the stool opposite him, the cold metal biting into her thighs. The bar was packed, the kind of place where the walls were lined with maps and old photographs, where the air was thick with the scent of whiskey and the quiet hum of a network of people who knew better than to ask too many questions. Silas poured a shot of something amber and strong, his hand steady despite the limp in his leg. He didn’t offer her one. “You still work for Yu-Fei?” She nodded, her fingers tightening around the edge of the stool. “Same as always.” “Same as always,” he echoed, as if he’d been waiting for that. “Funny.” She didn’t smile. “Funny how?” “How you’re here.” His voice was low, almost a whisper. “How you’re not.” The words hit her like a punch. She had left London years ago, fled to Cardiff after Evan, after the things he’d done to her. She had thought she’d never come back. But here she was, standing in the same bar, the same city, as if the world had been waiting for her to show up. Silas set the glass down with a clink. “You should’ve called.” “I didn’t have to.” The words were out before she could stop them. “You know that.” He didn’t deny it. Instead, he leaned forward, his elbows resting on the counter. “You’re not the same person I knew.” She wanted to say it was a compliment. Instead, she said, “I’m still me.” “No,” he said, and it was a statement, not a question. “You’re not.” The bar’s lights flickered, casting long shadows across the faces of the patrons. Someone laughed, the sound sharp and sudden. A woman in a leather jacket slid onto the stool next to Rory, her dark hair pulled into a tight bun. She was younger than Silas, younger than Rory, but there was something familiar about the way she watched him, like she’d been waiting for him too. Silas didn’t look at her. “You ever think about what you left behind?” Rory’s fingers dug into the stool’s edge. “Not really.” “You should.” She wanted to argue. Instead, she said, “I have my life.” “Your life is a cage,” he said, and the words were sharp, like a blade. “And you know it.” The woman at the bar—Eva, Rory’s childhood friend—grinned at her. “You look like you’ve seen a ghost.” Rory didn’t answer. She just watched Silas, the way he moved, the way he looked at her, like he was trying to read her mind. Silas raised his glass. “To old friends.” Rory didn’t drink. She just watched him, the way he’d changed, the way he’d stayed the same. And for the first time in years, she wondered if she had ever really left at all.
total_cost0.00021492

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags9
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences28
tagDensity0.321
leniency0.643
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
88.01% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount834
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"really"
count2
highlights
0"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
52.04% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount834
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"flickered"
count2
1
word"echoed"
count2
2
word"unreadable"
count1
3
word"weight"
count1
4
word"whisper"
count1
5
word"familiar"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"echoed"
2"unreadable"
3"weight"
4"whisper"
5"familiar"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"air was thick with"
count1
highlights
0"the air was thick with"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences55
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences55
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences73
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen46
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords4
totalWords822
ratio0.005
matches
0"The Raven’s Nest"
1"clink"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions27
wordCount731
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity1.37
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Blackwood1
Carter1
Rory7
Soho1
Golden1
Empress1
Silas10
London1
Cardiff1
Evan1
Eva1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Blackwood"
2"Carter"
3"Rory"
4"Empress"
5"Silas"
6"Evan"
7"Eva"
places
0"Soho"
1"London"
2"Cardiff"
globalScore0.816
windowScore0.667
30.95% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences42
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"quite amusement"
1"as if testing the word"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount822
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences73
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs31
mean26.52
std23.79
cv0.897
sampleLengths
056
187
217
393
415
520
69
742
811
964
1028
1114
1213
135
1413
1556
1611
1716
1821
1914
2013
2167
2213
239
242
2511
2619
2717
2825
297
3034
86.12% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences55
matches
0"was hidden"
1"was streaked"
2"was packed"
3"were lined"
84.06% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs115
matches
0"was, standing"
1"was trying"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount10
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences73
ratio0.068
matches
0"Aurora Carter—Rory, as she preferred—paused mid-stride, her fingers brushing the handle of her bag before she dropped it with a clatter."
1"But the bar’s green neon sign had been glowing for hours, and the scent of something sweet and spiced—perhaps the Golden Empress’s signature dish—drifted from the alleyway where Silas’s door was hidden behind a stack of old newspapers."
2"The way he moved—slow, deliberate—was a sharp contrast to the way she had once seen him: sharp, quick, always in motion."
3"She exhaled through her nose, the scent of her own perfume—something floral, something that had once been hers—mixing with the bar’s stale air."
4"The woman at the bar—Eva, Rory’s childhood friend—grinned at her."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount742
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount24
adverbRatio0.03234501347708895
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.004043126684636119
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences73
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences73
mean11.26
std9.46
cv0.84
sampleLengths
018
138
221
324
43
51
638
717
825
921
1028
1119
1215
138
1412
156
163
1716
1823
193
208
213
223
2315
2446
2518
265
275
2811
293
3012
311
323
332
3410
353
367
3718
387
3924
408
413
4213
433
444
4510
467
478
486
4911
52.97% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.3424657534246575
totalSentences73
uniqueOpeners25
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences54
matches
0"Instead, she slid onto the"
1"Instead, he leaned forward, his"
2"Instead, she said,"
3"Instead, she said,"
ratio0.074
42.22% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences54
matches
0"She was late."
1"She didn’t look back as"
2"His auburn hair was streaked"
3"he said without turning, his"
4"she lied, though the truth"
5"She had been running late"
6"She exhaled through her nose,"
7"he repeated, as if testing"
8"She didn’t answer."
9"He didn’t offer her one."
10"She nodded, her fingers tightening"
11"he echoed, as if he’d"
12"She didn’t smile."
13"His voice was low, almost"
14"She had left London years"
15"She had thought she’d never"
16"He didn’t deny it."
17"She wanted to say it"
18"he said, and it was"
19"She was younger than Silas,"
ratio0.444
24.81% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount47
totalSentences54
matches
0"The neon sign of *The"
1"Silas Blackwood’s bar was the"
2"Aurora Carter—Rory, as she preferred—paused"
3"The sound echoed off the"
4"She was late."
5"She didn’t look back as"
6"Silas stood at the bar,"
7"The way he moved—slow, deliberate—was"
8"His auburn hair was streaked"
9"The silver signet ring on"
10"he said without turning, his"
11"she lied, though the truth"
12"She had been running late"
13"Silas finally turned, his expression"
14"The words hung between them,"
15"She exhaled through her nose,"
16"he repeated, as if testing"
17"She didn’t answer."
18"The bar was packed, the"
19"Silas poured a shot of"
ratio0.87
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences54
matches(empty)
ratio0
37.04% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences27
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Silas Blackwood’s bar was the kind of place where secrets took root in the rafters, where the air smelled of stale gin and the hum of conversation was the only …"
1"She exhaled through her nose, the scent of her own perfume—something floral, something that had once been hers—mixing with the bar’s stale air."
2"The bar was packed, the kind of place where the walls were lined with maps and old photographs, where the air was thick with the scent of whiskey and the quiet …"
3"But here she was, standing in the same bar, the same city, as if the world had been waiting for her to show up."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags9
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"she lied, though the truth was worse"
1"he repeated, as if testing the word"
2"he echoed, as if he’d been waiting for that"
3"he said, and the words were sharp, like a blade"
78.57% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she lied (lie)"
1"he repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences28
tagDensity0.25
leniency0.5
rawRatio0.286
effectiveRatio0.143
74.7821%