Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTR2MCPCS6S2QZCD95HYZAT

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door swung open before I could even knock, as if she’d been waiting on the other side. Aurora stood there, her bright blue eyes wide, a takeaway bag from Golden Empress clutched in one hand. The scent of soy sauce and five-spice curled into the hallway, sharp and familiar. Her black hair was damp at the ends, like she’d just stepped out of the shower, and the crescent scar on her wrist caught the light as she tightened her grip on the bag. “You’re early,” she said, voice flat. “I didn’t realise I needed an appointment.” A beat of silence. Then she stepped aside, just enough to let me pass, but not enough to avoid the brush of her shoulder against mine. The contact sent a jolt through me, something electric and unwelcome. The flat smelled of old books and the faintest hint of lavender—her shampoo, maybe, or the candle Eva always kept burning. Ptolemy, the tabby cat, wound himself around my ankles, purring like a traitor. Aurora shut the door harder than necessary. The three deadbolts clicked into place one after another, the sound deliberate, final. “Eva’s not here.” “I know.” “Then why are you?” I turned to face her. She hadn’t changed much in the months since I’d last seen her—same sharp edges, same way of holding herself like she was braced for impact. But there was something different in her eyes, something I couldn’t quite place. Wariness, maybe. Or the ghost of something else. “You took my calls,” I said. “Eventually.” “And you hung up before I could tell you to fuck off.” A laugh escaped me before I could stop it. “Fair.” She dumped the takeaway bag on the kitchen counter, the plastic crinkling loudly in the quiet. “If this is about the job, I already told Eva I’m out. I don’t do that anymore.” “It’s not about the job.” “Then what?” I reached into my coat pocket and pulled out the envelope. The paper was thin, flimsy, the kind you got from cheap stationery shops. No return address, just her name scrawled in blocky, uneven handwriting. Aurora’s fingers stilled on the takeaway container she’d been opening. “Where did you get that?” she asked, voice low. “Your ex left it at my office.” Her head snapped up. “Evan?” “Unless you’ve got another abusive arsehole in your past I don’t know about.” She didn’t laugh. Didn’t even smile. Just stared at the envelope like it might bite her. “He’s in Cardiff.” “Not anymore.” The container lid slipped from her fingers, clattering against the counter. Soy sauce splattered across the laminate, dark and spreading. Aurora didn’t move to clean it. “What does it say?” “Haven’t opened it.” “Why not?” “Because it’s not mine.” She exhaled sharply, then snatched the envelope from my hand. Her fingers trembled as she tore it open, the paper ripping along the seam. Inside was a single sheet, folded in half. She unfolded it with the same care she might’ve used to handle a live grenade. I watched her face as she read. The way her lips pressed into a thin line. The way her free hand curled into a fist, nails digging into her palm hard enough to leave marks. When she finished, she crumpled the paper in her hand, her breath coming faster, shallower. “He knows where I live,” she said. “Yes.” “He knows about Eva.” “Yes.” “He’s *here*, Lucien.” I didn’t answer. Didn’t need to. The fear in her voice was answer enough. Aurora turned away, her shoulders rigid, and for a moment I thought she might be sick. Then she grabbed the nearest thing—a half-empty mug of tea—and hurled it against the wall. The ceramic shattered, tea splattering across the peeling wallpaper like blood. Ptolemy yowled and bolted under the sofa. “Fuck,” she breathed. “Fuck, fuck, *fuck*.” I stepped closer, close enough to see the way her hands shook. “We can handle this.” “Handle it?” She whirled on me, eyes blazing. “He’s not some two-bit demon you can pay off or some human thug you can scare with your cane. He’s *Evan*. He doesn’t stop. He doesn’t *let go*.” “I know.” “Do you?” Her voice cracked. “Do you have any idea what he’s like when he’s angry? When he’s *obsessed*?” I did. I’d seen the reports. The police statements. The hospital records. But none of that mattered right now. What mattered was the way she was looking at me—like I was the one thing standing between her and the edge. “He won’t touch you,” I said. “You can’t promise that.” “I just did.” She laughed, sharp and humourless. “God, you’re still the same. Always so sure of yourself. Always so *certain* you can fix everything.” “Not everything,” I said quietly. “Just this.” Aurora stared at me, her chest rising and falling too fast. Then, without warning, she closed the distance between us, her hands fisting in the lapels of my coat. “Why?” she demanded. “Why now? Why *you*?” I could’ve lied. Could’ve given her some smooth, polished answer about duty or professional obligation. But the way she was looking at me—like she wanted to believe me, like she *needed* to—made the truth spill out before I could stop it. “Because I should’ve done something the first time.” Her grip loosened, just a fraction. “What?” “The night you left Cardiff. I was there.” She went very still. “What?” “I saw you at the station. Saw him follow you onto the platform. Saw the way he grabbed your arm.” My jaw tightened. “I *saw* it, Aurora. And I didn’t stop it.” Her face paled. “You were in Cardiff?” “I was tracking a lead. Unrelated.” I exhaled. “But I saw him. And I didn’t intervene.” “Why?” “Because I didn’t know you then.” She let go of my coat, stepping back like I’d burned her. “That’s it? That’s your grand reason? You didn’t *know* me?” “It’s not an excuse. It’s the truth.” “Bullshit.” Her voice was raw. “You’re a *fixer*, Lucien. That’s what you *do*. You don’t just... stand there and watch.” “I know.” “Then why—” “Because I was a coward.” The words hung between us, heavy and ugly. Aurora’s breath hitched. For a long moment, neither of us spoke. Then she turned away, her hands braced against the counter like she needed the support to stay upright. “Get out,” she said. “Aurora—” “Get. Out.” I didn’t move. “I’m not leaving you alone with this.” “You don’t get to decide that.” “I already did.” She whirled on me, her eyes wild. “You don’t get to waltz back into my life after *months* of silence and act like you care. You don’t get to stand there and tell me you *should’ve* done something when it’s too late to matter. And you *definitely* don’t get to play the hero now just because you feel guilty.” “I’m not playing at anything.” “Then what do you call this?” She gestured between us, her hand shaking. “You show up at my door with some cryptic note and expect me to what? Fall into your arms? Thank you for finally giving a damn?” “No.” “Then what?” “I don’t know.” She stared at me, her chest heaving. Then, without another word, she grabbed her jacket from the back of the chair and shoved her arms into the sleeves. “I’m going to Eva’s.” “It’s not safe.” “Neither is staying here.” “Aurora—” She was already at the door, yanking it open. “If you follow me, I swear to God, I will make you regret it.” The door slammed shut behind her, the sound echoing through the flat like a gunshot. I stood there for a long moment, listening to her footsteps fade down the stairs. Then I pulled out my phone and dialled. Eva answered on the second ring. “Lucien.” “She’s coming to you.” A pause. “What did you do?” “Nothing she didn’t ask for.” “Bullshit. Rory doesn’t ask for help. She *endures*.” I pinched the bridge of my nose. “He’s in London.” Silence. Then, quieter: “How bad?” “Bad enough.” Another pause. Then Eva sighed. “I’ll keep her here. But you owe me.” “I know.” She hung up. I pocketed my phone and turned back to the flat. The takeaway was still on the counter, the food untouched. The mug lay in pieces on the floor, tea seeping into the carpet. And on the wall, just above the splatter, was a single word scrawled in Aurora’s handwriting on a sticky note: *Why now?* I reached out and peeled it off the wall. The paper was warm from where it had been pressed against the plaster. I folded it carefully and put it in my pocket. Then I went to find Evan Carter.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"I said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences89
tagDensity0.157
leniency0.315
rawRatio0.071
effectiveRatio0.022
89.71% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1458
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"sharply"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count1
2
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"sharply"
1"very"
2"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
69.14% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1458
totalAiIsms9
found
0
word"familiar"
count1
1
word"silence"
count3
2
word"electric"
count1
3
word"trembled"
count1
4
word"shattered"
count1
5
word"echoing"
count1
6
word"footsteps"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"silence"
2"electric"
3"trembled"
4"shattered"
5"echoing"
6"footsteps"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"sent a shiver through"
count1
highlights
0"sent a jolt through"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences105
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences105
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences178
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen53
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans17
markdownWords19
totalWords1450
ratio0.013
matches
0"here"
1"fuck"
2"Evan"
3"let go"
4"obsessed"
5"certain"
6"you"
7"needed"
8"saw"
9"know"
10"fixer"
11"do"
12"months"
13"should’ve"
14"definitely"
15"endures"
16"Why now?"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions21
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions15
wordCount944
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity0.85
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Golden1
Empress1
Eva3
Aurora8
Evan1
Carter1
persons
0"Empress"
1"Eva"
2"Aurora"
3"Evan"
4"Carter"
places
0"Golden"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences67
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"quite place"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1450
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences178
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs95
mean15.26
std17.65
cv1.156
sampleLengths
084
16
27
371
423
52
64
751
87
912
1010
1133
125
132
1445
159
167
175
1813
1919
202
2130
223
232
244
2547
2650
277
281
294
301
313
3214
3349
346
3516
3636
372
3819
3940
406
414
423
4322
447
4536
4641
478
487
498
98.58% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences105
matches
0"was braced"
1"been pressed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs180
matches
0"was looking"
1"was looking"
62.60% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences178
ratio0.028
matches
0"The flat smelled of old books and the faintest hint of lavender—her shampoo, maybe, or the candle Eva always kept burning."
1"She hadn’t changed much in the months since I’d last seen her—same sharp edges, same way of holding herself like she was braced for impact."
2"Then she grabbed the nearest thing—a half-empty mug of tea—and hurled it against the wall."
3"What mattered was the way she was looking at me—like I was the one thing standing between her and the edge."
4"But the way she was looking at me—like she wanted to believe me, like she *needed* to—made the truth spill out before I could stop it."
99.12% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount951
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount39
adverbRatio0.04100946372239748
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.005257623554153523
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences178
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences178
mean8.15
std7.07
cv0.867
sampleLengths
018
118
214
334
46
57
64
722
811
921
1013
117
1213
133
142
154
165
1725
1813
192
206
216
221
2312
249
251
2616
2717
285
292
3011
3113
3211
3310
349
357
364
371
3813
393
403
4110
423
432
4411
459
466
474
483
492
43.82% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.28651685393258425
totalSentences178
uniqueOpeners51
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount9
totalSentences91
matches
0"Then she stepped aside, just"
1"Just stared at the envelope"
2"Then she grabbed the nearest"
3"Then, without warning, she closed"
4"Then she turned away, her"
5"Then, without another word, she"
6"Then I pulled out my"
7"Then Eva sighed."
8"Then I went to find"
ratio0.099
52.97% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount38
totalSentences91
matches
0"Her black hair was damp"
1"she said, voice flat"
2"I turned to face her."
3"She hadn’t changed much in"
4"She dumped the takeaway bag"
5"I reached into my coat"
6"she asked, voice low"
7"Her head snapped up."
8"She didn’t laugh."
9"She exhaled sharply, then snatched"
10"Her fingers trembled as she"
11"She unfolded it with the"
12"I watched her face as"
13"I didn’t answer."
14"I stepped closer, close enough"
15"She whirled on me, eyes"
16"Her voice cracked"
17"I’d seen the reports."
18"She laughed, sharp and humourless."
19"I said quietly"
ratio0.418
80.88% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount69
totalSentences91
matches
0"The door swung open before"
1"Aurora stood there, her bright"
2"The scent of soy sauce"
3"Her black hair was damp"
4"she said, voice flat"
5"A beat of silence."
6"The contact sent a jolt"
7"The flat smelled of old"
8"Ptolemy, the tabby cat, wound"
9"Aurora shut the door harder"
10"The three deadbolts clicked into"
11"I turned to face her."
12"She hadn’t changed much in"
13"A laugh escaped me before"
14"She dumped the takeaway bag"
15"I reached into my coat"
16"The paper was thin, flimsy,"
17"Aurora’s fingers stilled on the"
18"she asked, voice low"
19"Her head snapped up."
ratio0.758
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences91
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences43
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Aurora stared at me, her chest rising and falling too fast."
1"Then, without warning, she closed the distance between us, her hands fisting in the lapels of my coat."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"she said, voice flat"
1"she asked, voice low"
2"She whirled, eyes blazing"
3"She gestured, her hand shaking"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she breathed (breathe)"
1"she demanded (demand)"
dialogueSentences89
tagDensity0.101
leniency0.202
rawRatio0.222
effectiveRatio0.045
86.5604%