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Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTR2ZN1ZSNZPGVK752KAJ28
Run Details
Model:
Qwen 2.5 72B
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Horror: alone in an eerie place at night
Duration:
1m 15s
Cost:
$0.001148
Provider:
DeepInfra
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
95.12%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
0.00%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
0.00%
Cliché density
(details)
83.85%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
19.40%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
66.67%
Name drop frequency
(details)
56.72%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
81.76%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
96.60%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
94.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
38.76%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
42.74%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
40.13%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
64.10%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Technical jargon density
(details)
0.00%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
0.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
72.6615%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>
Model response
Messages
Meta
AI
Aurora Carter, known to her
friends as Rory, stood at the edge of Richmond Park, the cool night air biting at her cheeks. The crescent moon cast long, eerie shadows over the ancient oak standing stones that marked the boundary of The Fae Grove.
She clutched the Heartstone Pendant
around her neck, its deep crimson gemstone faintly glowing in the dim light.
The silver chain felt cold
against her skin, a
stark
contrast to the
warmth
that
pulsed
through the stone itself. She took a deep breath, trying to steady her nerves. This was no ordinary park.
The Fae Grove was a
place of ancient magic, a hidden pocket of time and space.
She had come here for
a reason, a reason she couldn't
quite remember now
.
The night air seemed to
whisper
secrets, urging her forward.
Rory stepped through the standing
stones, the world around her shifting subtly.
The wildflowers that dotted the
clearing were in full bloom, their colors vibrant and
surreal
in the moonlight.
The scent of earth and
old magic filled her lungs, making her
feel
both alive and uneasy.
She walked deeper into the
grove, her
footsteps
silent on the soft ground.
The Heartstone Pendant pulsed more
insistently, its
warmth
a
comforting
presence. But the feeling of being watched gnawed at the back of her mind. She paused, listening.
The air was heavy with
an unnatural stillness, as if the world held its breath. "Hello?"
she called out, her voice
barely a
whisper
. No response, only the faint rustle of leaves in the breeze.
She shook her head, chiding
herself for being paranoid.
She had a job to
do, a reason to be here, she just needed to focus.
A sudden snap of a
twig made her jump. She spun around, heart
racing
. Nothing there.
Just the trees, looming and
silent. She took a deep breath, forcing herself to calm down. It was just the wind, just her imagination running wild. Rory pressed on, the Heartstone Pendant leading her deeper into the grove. The clearing opened up, revealing a small pond surrounded by ancient, gnarled trees. The water was still, reflecting the moon like a mirror. She approached the water's edge, the Heartstone Pendant growing warmer. As she leaned over the pond, her reflection stared back at her, eyes wide with fear. But then, something shifted. The water rippled, and another face
appeared beside hers
. A woman with long, flowing hair and eyes that glowed like emeralds. Rory gasped, stumbling backward. "Who are you?"
she demanded, her voice trembling
. The woman smiled, a
chilling
, almost predatory smile. "I am Isolde, guardian of this grove. You seek something, child. Something powerful." Rory's
heart pounded in her chest
. "What do you mean? What do I seek?" Isolde's smile widened. "The Heartstone Pendant you wear is a key. A key to a door that should never be opened. But you have come for a reason, have you not?" Rory hesitated. Something about the woman's words rang true.
She had to find out
what it was. "Yes," she whispered. "I need to know why I'm here." Isolde's eyes
flickered
with amusement. "Follow me, child. The answers you seek lie within the heart of the grove." Rory hesitated for a moment longer, then nodded.
She followed Isolde deeper into
the clearing, the trees closing around them like a living wall. The air grew colder, the shadows darker. The Heartstone Pendant glowed more brightly, casting a red light that danced across the ground.
They came to a small
glade, where the trees formed a natural circle. In the center, a stone altar stood, covered in
intricate
carvings. Isolde approached the altar, her movements graceful and deliberate. Rory stayed back,
a sense of foreboding
growing stronger with each step. Isolde placed her hand on the altar, and the carvings glowed with a green light. "This is the heart of the grove," she said. "It has been here since the dawn of time. You must place the Heartstone here to continue your journey." Rory's hands
trembled
as she untangled the pendant from her neck.
She stepped forward, placing the
stone on the altar.
As soon as it touched
the surface, the pendant glowed brighter than ever, its
warmth
spreading through the clearing. The carvings on the altar
pulsed
in sync with the Heartstone, the light growing more intense. A low rumble filled the air, and the ground beneath her feet
began to
tremble. Rory stumbled, her heart
racing
. "What's happening?"
she cried out
. Isolde's smile never faltered. "The door is opening. The power you seek is within. But beware, child. What lies beyond is not for the faint of heart." The light from the altar grew blinding, forcing Rory to shield her eyes. When she could
see
again, the clearing had changed. The trees
were twisted
and gnarled, their branches reaching out like skeletal fingers. The ground
was covered
in a thick, black
mist that seemed to shift and move on its own
. Rory
felt a chill
run
down her spine
.
The air was thick with
the scent of decay and fear.
She could hear whispers on
the wind,
voices that seemed to come from nowhere and everywhere at once
. "Who are you?" a voice hissed, close to her ear. Rory spun around, but no one was there. The mist closed in around her, choking and cold. She took a step back, her heart
pounding
. "I need to find out who I am,"
she whispered, more to herself than to anyone else
. The mist parted
slightly
, revealing a path that led deeper into the twisted forest. Rory took a deep breath, steeling herself.
She had to find out
what she
was searching
for, no matter the cost. She stepped onto the path, the mist closing behind her like a curtain. The trees grew denser, their branches intertwining overhead, creating a canopy that blotted out the moonlight. The only light came from the Heartstone Pendant, which
pulsed
faintly with
warmth
. The whispers grew louder, surrounding her on all sides. "Turn back," one voice hissed. "It's too late." "Find the truth," another voice urged. "Accept your fate." Rory's mind
raced
. What was the truth? What was her fate? She continued down the path, the mist parting just enough to let her
see
a few steps ahead. The forest
seemed to
shift and change, the trees twisting into impossible shapes. She came to a clearing, where a stone archway stood, covered in carvings that glowed with a sickly green light.
The air was thick with
an
oppressive
silence
, broken only by the faint, distant sound of water. Rory approached the archway, her heart heavy with
foreboding
. The Heartstone Pendant glowed more brightly, its
warmth
a
beacon
in the darkness. As she stepped through the archway, the world around her shifted again. The forest disappeared, replaced by a vast, open plain. The sky was a deep, swirling purple, and the ground
was covered
in a thick, black fog. In the distance, a dark tower
loomed
, its spires reaching into the sky like twisted fingers. Rory felt
a pang of fear
, but her
resolve
hardened. She had come this far, and she wouldn't turn back now. She
began to
walk toward the tower, the mist swirling around her feet. The whispers grew louder, taunting and threatening. "Turn back," one voice hissed. "You'll never survive." "Embrace the darkness," another voice urged. "It's the only way." Rory ignored the voices, her focus fixed on the tower. She knew she had to reach it, no matter what. As she drew closer, the tower's presence grew more
oppressive
, the air thick with an almost
palpable
malevolence. She reached the base of the tower and placed her hand on the stone, feeling a cold, tingling sensation run through her. The door creaked open on its own, the hinges groaning in protest. Rory hesitated for a moment, then stepped inside. The interior of the tower was dark, the air thick with the scent of decay. She walked down a narrow, winding staircase, the Heartstone Pendant casting a dim light that barely illuminated her path. The walls were cold and damp, and she
could feel
the presence of something ancient and powerful. At the bottom of the stairs, she came to a small chamber, where a single torch
flickered
in a wall sconce. In the center of the room, a stone pedestal stood, covered in the same carvings she had seen on the altar. On top of the pedestal lay an ancient, leather-bound book, its pages yellowed with age. Rory approached the pedestal, her heart
pounding
. She reached out and opened the book, the pages crackling under her fingers. The text
was written
in a language she didn't recognize, but she
could feel
the power radiating from it. As she read, the words
seemed to
whisper
to her, filling her mind with ancient, forbidden knowledge.
Suddenly, the air around her
grew thick with a cold,
oppressive
presence. The torch
flickered
and went out, plunging the room into darkness. Rory's heart
raced
, her breath coming in short, shallow gasps. She
could feel
something watching her, something ancient and malevolent. "Who are you?" a voice hissed in her mind, a
voice that seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere at once
. Rory's hands
trembled
as she clutched the Heartstone Pendant. "I'm Aurora Carter," she whispered. "I need to know why I'm here." The darkness
seemed to
shift, a cold,
oppressive
weight
pressing down on her. "You are the key," the voice hissed. "The one who will open the door." Rory's mind reeled. The key? Open the door? What did it mean? Before she could think further, the air around her grew colder, the presence more intense. She
could feel
it coiling around her, a living, breathing entity of pure malice. "Tell me,"
she demanded, her voice steady despite the fear
. "What is the truth?" The darkness
seemed to
laugh, a sound that
echoed
through her mind. "The truth is hidden in the pages of the book. You must accept your fate, Aurora Carter. You must embrace the darkness." Rory's hands shook as she closed the book, her mind
racing
. She had to get out of there, but the door behind her was sealed shut. The darkness closed in, the presence more
oppressive
than ever. She
could feel
it pressing against her, trying to break her will. "No,"
she whispered, her voice a defiant whisper
. "I won't accept your darkness. I won't let it control me." The darkness
seemed to
recoil, a cold, empty void where the presence had been. Rory felt
a surge of determination
. She had to find a way out, to break the hold this place had on her. She turned and ran, her feet
pounding
on the stone floor as she
raced
up the stairs. The torches lit one by one as she climbed, casting flickering shadows on the walls. The presence was still there, but it
seemed to
be weakening. She reached the top of the stairs and burst through the door, the cold night air a welcome relief. She ran through the forest, the mist parting before her. The archway
loomed
ahead, and she sprinted toward it, the Heartstone Pendant pulsing with
warmth
. As she stepped through the archway, the forest shifted back to the clearing with the twisted trees. Rory took a deep breath, her heart still
racing
. The Heartstone Pendant glowed more brightly than ever, its
warmth
a
beacon
in the darkness. She knew she had to leave, to find a way back to the real world. She ran through the clearing, the twisted trees parting to let her pass. The stone archway at the edge of the grove
loomed
ahead, and she sprinted toward it, her heart
pounding
with each step. As she crossed the boundary, the world shifted back to the moonlit clearing. The Heartstone Pendant glowed one final time, then dimmed to a faint inner glow. Rory collapsed on the ground, her breath coming in ragged gasps. She looked up at the moon, her mind
racing
with the events of the night. She had found the answers she sought, but they were not what she had expected. She had to find a way to understand and control the power within her, before it was too late.
created_at
"2026-02-19T10:45:46.79Z"
2/19/2026, 10:45:46 AM
model
"qwen/qwen-2.5-72b-instruct"
app_id
182717
external_user
(null)
streamed
true
cancelled
false
latency
421
moderation_latency
(null)
generation_time
74716
tokens_prompt
1060
tokens_completion
3011
native_tokens_prompt
940
native_tokens_completion
2655
native_tokens_completion_images
(null)
native_tokens_reasoning
0
native_tokens_cached
0
num_media_prompt
(null)
num_input_audio_prompt
(null)
num_media_completion
0
num_search_results
(null)
origin
"https://ncbench.com/"
is_byok
false
finish_reason
"stop"
native_finish_reason
"stop"
usage
0.00114825
router
(null)
provider_responses
0
endpoint_id
"8b6b26e9-621a-4b31-b55a-c9aaa7482ede"
id
"cmpl-940503f21e2049b0bed706ef5a2f39ef"
is_byok
false
latency
76
model_permaslug
"qwen/qwen-2.5-72b-instruct"
provider_name
"DeepInfra"
status
200
api_type
"completions"
id
"gen-1771497946-4j5C0R5JYYp6LEqL40lH"
upstream_id
"cmpl-940503f21e2049b0bed706ef5a2f39ef"
total_cost
0.00114825
cache_discount
(null)
upstream_inference_cost
0
provider_name
"DeepInfra"
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
16
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
dialogueSentences
32
tagDensity
0.5
leniency
1
rawRatio
0
effectiveRatio
0
95.12%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
2050
totalAiIsmAdverbs
2
found
0
adverb
"slightly"
count
1
1
adverb
"suddenly"
count
1
highlights
0
"slightly"
1
"suddenly"
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
0.00%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
2050
totalAiIsms
65
found
0
word
"stark"
count
1
1
word
"warmth"
count
7
2
word
"pulsed"
count
4
3
word
"whisper"
count
4
4
word
"surreal"
count
1
5
word
"footsteps"
count
1
6
word
"comforting"
count
1
7
word
"racing"
count
5
8
word
"looming"
count
1
9
word
"chilling"
count
1
10
word
"flickered"
count
3
11
word
"intricate"
count
1
12
word
"sense of"
count
1
13
word
"foreboding"
count
2
14
word
"trembled"
count
2
15
word
"chill"
count
1
16
word
"down her spine"
count
1
17
word
"pounding"
count
4
18
word
"raced"
count
3
19
word
"oppressive"
count
5
20
word
"silence"
count
1
21
word
"beacon"
count
2
22
word
"loomed"
count
3
23
word
"pang"
count
1
24
word
"resolve"
count
1
25
word
"palpable"
count
1
26
word
"could feel"
count
5
27
word
"weight"
count
1
28
word
"echoed"
count
1
highlights
0
"stark"
1
"warmth"
2
"pulsed"
3
"whisper"
4
"surreal"
5
"footsteps"
6
"comforting"
7
"racing"
8
"looming"
9
"chilling"
10
"flickered"
11
"intricate"
12
"sense of"
13
"foreboding"
14
"trembled"
15
"chill"
16
"down her spine"
17
"pounding"
18
"raced"
19
"oppressive"
20
"silence"
21
"beacon"
22
"loomed"
23
"pang"
24
"resolve"
25
"palpable"
26
"could feel"
27
"weight"
28
"echoed"
0.00%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
5
maxInWindow
4
found
0
label
"heart pounded in chest"
count
1
1
label
"sense of foreboding"
count
1
2
label
"air was thick with"
count
3
highlights
0
"heart pounded in her chest"
1
"a sense of foreboding"
2
"The air was heavy with"
3
"The air was thick with"
83.85%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
8
narrationSentences
162
matches
0
"e with fear"
1
"a sense of foreboding"
2
"felt a chill"
3
"y with warmth"
4
"y with foreboding"
5
"a pang of fear"
6
"a surge of determination"
7
"g with warmth"
19.40%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
2
hedgeCount
12
narrationSentences
162
filterMatches
0
"feel"
1
"see"
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
1
"began to"
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
178
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
28
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
0
markdownWords
0
totalWords
2049
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
16
unquotedAttributions
0
matches
(empty)
66.67%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
65
wordCount
1825
uniqueNames
9
maxNameDensity
1.48
worstName
"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity
3
worstWindowName
"Rory"
discoveredNames
Carter
1
Rory
27
Richmond
1
Park
1
Fae
2
Grove
2
Heartstone
13
Pendant
12
Isolde
6
persons
0
"Carter"
1
"Rory"
2
"Pendant"
3
"Isolde"
places
0
"Richmond"
1
"Park"
2
"Fae"
3
"Grove"
4
"Heartstone"
globalScore
0.76
windowScore
0.667
56.72%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
134
glossingSentenceCount
5
matches
0
"quite remember now"
1
"appeared beside hers"
2
"mist that seemed to shift and move on its own"
3
"voices that seemed to come from nowhere and everywhere at once"
4
"voice that seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere at once"
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
0
per1kWords
0
wordCount
2049
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
178
matches
(empty)
81.76%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
54
mean
37.94
std
16.55
cv
0.436
sampleLengths
0
82
1
55
2
47
3
55
4
45
5
42
6
45
7
45
8
8
9
21
10
14
11
31
12
27
13
19
14
46
15
45
16
43
17
55
18
25
19
27
20
53
21
37
22
10
23
42
24
48
25
38
26
8
27
9
28
42
29
59
30
54
31
41
32
8
33
10
34
38
35
42
36
51
37
57
38
56
39
43
40
21
41
21
42
27
43
41
44
14
45
34
46
48
47
19
48
53
49
45
96.60%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
4
totalSentences
162
matches
0
"were twisted"
1
"was covered"
2
"was covered"
3
"was written"
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
1
totalVerbs
326
matches
0
"was searching"
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
0
semicolonCount
0
flaggedSentences
0
totalSentences
178
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
94.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1826
adjectiveStacks
1
stackExamples
0
"ancient, leather-bound book,"
adverbCount
63
adverbRatio
0.03450164293537788
lyAdverbCount
15
lyAdverbRatio
0.008214676889375685
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
178
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
178
mean
11.51
std
5.25
cv
0.456
sampleLengths
0
23
1
21
2
18
3
20
4
10
5
5
6
16
7
14
8
10
9
12
10
18
11
17
12
13
13
11
14
13
15
3
16
15
17
9
18
11
19
9
20
16
21
9
22
5
23
2
24
6
25
10
26
10
27
12
28
13
29
10
30
10
31
16
32
4
33
9
34
12
35
4
36
8
37
8
38
13
39
6
40
8
41
3
42
28
43
2
44
7
45
8
46
3
47
7
48
5
49
14
38.76%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
20
diversityRatio
0.19101123595505617
totalSentences
178
uniqueOpeners
34
42.74%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
2
totalSentences
156
matches
0
"Just the trees, looming and"
1
"Suddenly, the air around her"
ratio
0.013
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
46
totalSentences
156
matches
0
"She clutched the Heartstone Pendant"
1
"She took a deep breath,"
2
"She had come here for"
3
"She walked deeper into the"
4
"She paused, listening."
5
"she called out, her voice"
6
"She shook her head, chiding"
7
"She had a job to"
8
"She spun around, heart racing."
9
"She took a deep breath,"
10
"It was just the wind,"
11
"She approached the water's edge,"
12
"she demanded, her voice trembling"
13
"She had to find out"
14
"She followed Isolde deeper into"
15
"They came to a small"
16
"She stepped forward, placing the"
17
"she cried out"
18
"She could hear whispers on"
19
"She took a step back,"
ratio
0.295
40.13%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
131
totalSentences
156
matches
0
"Aurora Carter, known to her"
1
"The crescent moon cast long,"
2
"She clutched the Heartstone Pendant"
3
"The silver chain felt cold"
4
"She took a deep breath,"
5
"This was no ordinary park."
6
"The Fae Grove was a"
7
"She had come here for"
8
"The night air seemed to"
9
"Rory stepped through the standing"
10
"The wildflowers that dotted the"
11
"The scent of earth and"
12
"She walked deeper into the"
13
"The Heartstone Pendant pulsed more"
14
"She paused, listening."
15
"The air was heavy with"
16
"she called out, her voice"
17
"She shook her head, chiding"
18
"She had a job to"
19
"A sudden snap of a"
ratio
0.84
64.10%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
2
totalSentences
156
matches
0
"As soon as it touched"
1
"Before she could think further,"
ratio
0.013
100.00%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
101
technicalSentenceCount
5
matches
0
"The crescent moon cast long, eerie shadows over the ancient oak standing stones that marked the boundary of The Fae Grove."
1
"The wildflowers that dotted the clearing were in full bloom, their colors vibrant and surreal in the moonlight."
2
"The air was heavy with an unnatural stillness, as if the world held its breath."
3
"The mist parted slightly, revealing a path that led deeper into the twisted forest."
4
"The trees grew denser, their branches intertwining overhead, creating a canopy that blotted out the moonlight."
0.00%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
16
uselessAdditionCount
5
matches
0
"she called out, her voice barely a whisper"
1
"she demanded, her voice trembling"
2
"she whispered, more to herself than to anyone else"
3
"she demanded, her voice steady despite the fear"
4
"she whispered, her voice a defiant whisper"
0.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
15
fancyCount
14
fancyTags
0
"she called out (call out)"
1
"she demanded (demand)"
2
"she whispered (whisper)"
3
"a voice hissed (hiss)"
4
"she whispered (whisper)"
5
"voice hissed (hiss)"
6
"another voice urged (urge)"
7
"voice hissed (hiss)"
8
"another voice urged (urge)"
9
"a voice hissed (hiss)"
10
"she whispered (whisper)"
11
"the voice hissed (hiss)"
12
"she demanded (demand)"
13
"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences
32
tagDensity
0.469
leniency
0.938
rawRatio
0.933
effectiveRatio
0.875
72.6615%