Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTR3C3JEG69QXZGSCWTC8KS

Run Details

Duration:
12.9s
Cost:
$0.042195
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Running, Aurora’s breath came in sharp, ragged bursts as she tore through the Grove’s winding paths. Faint pale light from her torch sliced through the darkness, revealing twisted roots and gnarled branches grasping at her clothes like skeletal fingers. The Heartstone Pendant dangled from her neck, pulsing an uncomfortable warmth against her skin. The air grew frigid and heavy, pressing down on her shoulders. Just an hour, she had told herself. An hour in The Fae Grove to confirm Eva’s suspicions and get out. But right away, something felt wrong. The Grove felt alive, responding malevolently to her presence. She slowed to a cautious walk, torchlight trailing over the ancient oak standing stones marking the boundary. A faint rustle snapped her attention to the right. She swung the torch, but nothing. Only shadows danced back from the light. Aurora let out a slow breath and forced herself to move, every step a whispered negotiation with the forest floor. “Eva’s counting on you,” she told herself, though her voice strained against the overbearing silence. Her father’s voice echoed in her head: Never let them see your fear, Rory. A birdcall broke through the quiet. Its eerie, lonely note was out of place amidst the stillness of the night, like a misplaced piece in a dangerous puzzle. Aurora froze. Eerie disturbances like this did not bode well. Her heart drummed a frantic rhythm against her ribs. Suddenly, a figure dashed across her path from left to right. She glimpsed pale skin, eyes far too large and deep as the night itself. Her mind reeled, struggling to process the fleeting sight. Instinct urged her to run, but fear rooted her to the spot. She swung the torch frantically, but the torch revealed only emptiness. Her feet staggered forward again, away from the path. The pendant on her neck migrated from warmth to a biting chill as she ventured deeper. The wildflowers bloomed around her, dazzling even in the darkness. But their beauty masked something sinister. Aurora could feel it in her bones. A crunch of leaves and twigs sounded behind her. She turned sharply, her pulse quickening. Silence resumed its heavy presence. It was trying to push her to the brink, this strange grove woven with the threads of fae magic. The enchanted clearing lay ahead, glowing faintly under the influence of unseen forces. The sense of wrongness only intensified, wrapping around her like a constricting vine. As she stepped into the clearing, the air buzzed with an unnatural energy, raising the fine hair on her arms in prickling waves. “What do you want?” Aurora whispered, the words half-lost in the becalmed night. The ground below seemed to vibrate in response, sending shockwaves up her legs. And then, there it was again—movement on the edge of her vision, darting from shadow to shadow, just beyond her sight. Heart pounding, she forced herself to step closer to the centre of the clearing, where a pool of faint moonlight kissed the earth. She dared to glance over her shoulder, seeing nothing but endless darkness pressing in. Was it moving closer, tightening the circle? A chorus of whispers broke out, shattering the fragile silence. Discordant and eerie, they seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere all at once. She strained to make out the words, but they slipped through the fabric of her mind like smoke. Then she saw it. The oak standing stones started bleeding a thick, dark sap that ran down their rugged surfaces. The ground around them rippled as if the earth itself was coming alive. Aurora’s pulse spiked. It wasn’t supposed to be like this. She should have listened to the warnings about delving too deep into the Grove’s heart. A figure came into focus, emerging slowly from behind a distant treestump. Its eyes were luminous, reflecting the cold moonlight, and its form was both human and otherworldly. It stepped forward with a fluid grace, tendrils of shadow seeming to cling to its body. “You’re not supposed to be here,” the figure whispered, its voice merging with the whispers of the grove. It took another step, and Aurora felt as if the world itself was bending toward this phantom. She raised her chin, forcing strength into her voice. “I’m not leaving until I know what happened to Eva.” The figure tilted its head, a dark smile spreading across its face. “Eva is gone. And soon, so will you be.” Aurora’s fingers tightened around the torch, her knuckles white with tension. The pendant throbbed against her chest, as though resonating with the presence of the unnerving figure. A cold wind whispered through the Grove, the standing stones now oozing a viscous, pulsing liquid. In a flash, she remembered the stories she'd heard about being ensnared by fae tricks. Cleverness and bravery were her only weapons now. She took a cautious step back, eyes never leaving the dark figure. “What do you want?” she repeated more firmly, hoping to buy herself time, to find an escape. The figure smiled, showing teeth sharpened to needle points. “This is our realm, mortal. We want nothing... because we already have everything.” The grove itself seemed to come alive, roots and branches moving unnaturally, clawing at her feet and trying to ensnare her. Aurora tore her legs free, her fury boiling over into a desperate will to survive. “Not tonight,” she spat, pivoting sharply and sprinting toward the edge of the clearing. The ground itself seemed intent on swallowing her, but she kept moving, her breath icy in her lungs. She could hear the whispers following her, multiple voices calling out her name. “Rory,” they echoed, “Stay with us.” Branches lashed at her face, tearing at her clothes and skin, but she didn’t stop. The exit loomed ahead, the ancient oak standing stones now a barrier between two worlds. Aurora didn’t slow as she broke through, her body plunging into the icy darkness beyond. Time bent and twisted as the Grove fought to hold her, the air whipping past her ears. With a final, desperate lunge, she collapsed onto the damp earth outside the standing stones. The Grove heaved a last, longing sigh before releasing her. Breathless, chest heaving, Aurora lay on the ground, unable to move for a moment. The pendant cooled against her clammy skin. Above, the night sky was calm and indifferent, stars twinkling incongruously. The quiet now was stark, almost mocking. She was free, but the Grove whispered promises of her return. She knew she had barely escaped with her life. For now, the truth about Eva would remain hidden in that cursed clearing. Aurora staggered to her feet, wiping the blood from a cut along her temple. She turned back toward Richmond Park, determined to live and fight another day. But she knew she'd be haunted by the murmuring shadows. The story wasn’t over; it had only just begun.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
33.33% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags6
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she repeated more [more]"
dialogueSentences9
tagDensity0.667
leniency1
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.167
82.58% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1148
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"sharply"
count2
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"sharply"
2"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1148
totalAiIsms24
found
0
word"warmth"
count2
1
word"silence"
count3
2
word"echoed"
count2
3
word"amidst"
count1
4
word"fleeting"
count1
5
word"chill"
count1
6
word"sinister"
count1
7
word"could feel"
count1
8
word"pulse"
count2
9
word"sense of"
count1
10
word"pounding"
count1
11
word"delving"
count1
12
word"otherworldly"
count1
13
word"tension"
count1
14
word"throbbed"
count1
15
word"firmly"
count1
16
word"loomed"
count1
17
word"stark"
count1
18
word"determined"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"silence"
2"echoed"
3"amidst"
4"fleeting"
5"chill"
6"sinister"
7"could feel"
8"pulse"
9"sense of"
10"pounding"
11"delving"
12"otherworldly"
13"tension"
14"throbbed"
15"firmly"
16"loomed"
17"stark"
18"determined"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences90
matches(empty)
79.37% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences90
filterMatches
0"see"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences93
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen23
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1146
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions4
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
94.95% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions29
wordCount1090
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity1.1
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora12
Grove8
Heartstone1
Pendant1
Fae1
Eva2
Rory1
Branches1
Richmond1
Park1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Pendant"
2"Eva"
3"Rory"
4"Branches"
places
0"Fae"
1"Richmond"
2"Park"
globalScore0.95
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences85
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"as though resonating with the presence of the unnerving figure"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1146
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences93
matches(empty)
49.88% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs29
mean39.52
std12.83
cv0.325
sampleLengths
064
152
242
329
447
557
648
739
849
947
1044
1142
1258
1344
1435
1519
1621
1743
1835
1917
2022
2136
2245
236
2445
2542
2632
2740
2846
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences90
matches
0"being ensnared"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs201
matches
0"was trying"
1"was coming"
2"was bending"
81.41% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences93
ratio0.022
matches
0"And then, there it was again—movement on the edge of her vision, darting from shadow to shadow, just beyond her sight."
1"The story wasn’t over; it had only just begun."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1092
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount40
adverbRatio0.03663003663003663
lyAdverbCount18
lyAdverbRatio0.016483516483516484
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences93
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
90.70% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences93
mean12.32
std4.64
cv0.377
sampleLengths
016
123
214
311
47
513
66
79
817
99
106
117
1220
1315
1414
156
1622
172
188
199
2011
2114
229
2312
2411
259
2616
2710
286
297
309
316
325
3319
3413
3513
3623
3713
3813
3921
4023
4114
427
4310
4414
4518
464
4716
4813
493
62.72% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.40860215053763443
totalSentences93
uniqueOpeners38
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences88
matches
0"Just an hour, she had"
1"Only shadows danced back from"
2"Suddenly, a figure dashed across"
3"Then she saw it."
ratio0.045
97.27% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount27
totalSentences88
matches
0"She slowed to a cautious"
1"She swung the torch, but"
2"she told herself, though her"
3"Her father’s voice echoed in"
4"Its eerie, lonely note was"
5"Her heart drummed a frantic"
6"She glimpsed pale skin, eyes"
7"Her mind reeled, struggling to"
8"She swung the torch frantically,"
9"Her feet staggered forward again,"
10"She turned sharply, her pulse"
11"It was trying to push"
12"She dared to glance over"
13"She strained to make out"
14"It wasn’t supposed to be"
15"She should have listened to"
16"Its eyes were luminous, reflecting"
17"It stepped forward with a"
18"It took another step, and"
19"She raised her chin, forcing"
ratio0.307
67.95% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount69
totalSentences88
matches
0"The Heartstone Pendant dangled from"
1"The air grew frigid and"
2"An hour in The Fae"
3"The Grove felt alive, responding"
4"She slowed to a cautious"
5"A faint rustle snapped her"
6"She swung the torch, but"
7"Aurora let out a slow"
8"she told herself, though her"
9"Her father’s voice echoed in"
10"A birdcall broke through the"
11"Its eerie, lonely note was"
12"Her heart drummed a frantic"
13"She glimpsed pale skin, eyes"
14"Her mind reeled, struggling to"
15"Instinct urged her to run,"
16"She swung the torch frantically,"
17"Her feet staggered forward again,"
18"The pendant on her neck"
19"The wildflowers bloomed around her,"
ratio0.784
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences88
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences56
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"She dared to glance over her shoulder, seeing nothing but endless darkness pressing in."
1"The pendant throbbed against her chest, as though resonating with the presence of the unnerving figure."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags6
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"she told, though her voice strained against the overbearing silence"
1"the figure whispered, its voice merging with the whispers of the grove"
2"she repeated more, hoping to buy herself time, to find an escape"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"Aurora whispered (whisper)"
1"the figure whispered (whisper)"
2"she repeated more (repeat)"
3"she spat (spit)"
dialogueSentences9
tagDensity0.556
leniency1
rawRatio0.8
effectiveRatio0.8
78.0058%