Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTR3M5F6TB7JM5PDC2T1QGX

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7.2s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The knock at the door echoed through Eva's flat, a sharp contrast to the soft hum of Ptolemy's purrs. Rory, buried under a mountain of research notes, didn't stir. The knock came again, more insistent this time. She sighed, marking her place with a worn-out bookmark, and padded towards the door. "Who is it?" she called, peering through the peephole. Her heart leapt into her throat. She knew that face, those heterochromatic eyes, that slicked-back platinum hair. She unbolted the door, her hands trembling slightly. Lucien stood in the dimly lit hallway, his tailored charcoal suit stark against the worn brick walls. He leaned casually on his ivory-handled cane, a small smile playing on his lips. "Aurora," he said, his voice a low rumble, "you're looking well." Rory crossed her arms, her bright blue eyes flashing. "What are you doing here, Lucien?" He pushed off from the wall, his smile widening. "Is that any way to greet an old friend?" "Friend?" Rory scoffed, stepping aside to let him in. "We were never friends, Lucien. We were... something else." Lucien stepped into the flat, his gaze sweeping over the cluttered space. "Indeed," he murmured, "we were something else." He turned to face her, his amber eye warm, his black eye cold. "But here we are, Aurora. Together again." Rory shut the door, her heart pounding in her chest. She turned to face him, her expression guarded. "What do you want, Lucien?" Lucien walked further into the room, his cane tapping a rhythm on the worn floorboards. "I have a job for you, Aurora. A job that requires your unique... skills." Rory raised an eyebrow. "My skills? You mean my ability to find things? People? Secrets?" She stepped closer to him, her voice dropping to a low whisper. "You mean the very thing that got us into this mess in the first place?" Lucien turned to face her, his eyes serious. "Yes, Aurora. That's exactly what I mean." Rory shook her head, her straight black hair swinging around her shoulders. "I'm not interested, Lucien. I left that life behind. I left you behind." Lucien's gaze flicked to the small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist. "Did you, Aurora? Or did you just run away?" Rory's breath hitched. She looked away, her gaze landing on Ptolemy, who watched them with lazy curiosity. "I did what I had to do, Lucien. Just like you did." Lucien stepped closer, his voice soft. "And what about us, Aurora? What about what we had?" Rory turned to face him, her eyes flashing. "We had nothing, Lucien. We were a mistake. A complication." Lucien reached out, his hand cupping her cheek. His thumb traced the line of her jaw, sending shivers down her spine. "We were many things, Aurora. But we were never a mistake." Rory leaned into his touch, her eyes fluttering closed. "We can't do this, Lucien. Not again." Lucien's hand dropped away, his voice hardening. "I need your help, Aurora. This job... it's important. It could change everything." Rory opened her eyes, her gaze steady. "I can't, Lucien. I won't." Lucien's expression darkened. "You owe me, Aurora. After everything we've been through, after everything I've done for you... you owe me this." Rory's breath caught in her throat. She looked away, her gaze landing on the stack of books by the window. "I can't, Lucien. I won't." Lucien's voice was like ice. "Fine, Aurora. Have it your way." He turned to leave, his cane tapping a harsh rhythm on the floor. Rory watched him go, her heart aching. "Lucien," she called out, her voice barely above a whisper. He paused, his hand on the doorknob. "Yes, Aurora?" She took a deep breath, her decision made. "I'll do it. I'll help you." Lucien turned to face her, a small smile playing on his lips. "I knew you would, Aurora. I knew you wouldn't let me down." Rory looked away, her heart heavy. "I'll get my things," she said, her voice flat. As she gathered her things, she couldn't shake the feeling of dread that settled in the pit of her stomach. She knew this job would be dangerous, knew that it would dredge up old memories, old feelings. But she also knew that she couldn't say no to Lucien. Not after everything they'd been through. Not after everything he'd done for her. She looked at Ptolemy, who watched her with wide, curious eyes. "Take care of the place, Ptolemy," she said, her voice soft. "I'll be back before you know it." With a heavy heart, Rory followed Lucien out of the flat, leaving behind the safety of her old life and stepping back into the dangerous world she thought she'd left behind. The door closed softly behind her, the sound echoing in the empty hallway like a death knell.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags9
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.281
leniency0.563
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
75.22% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount807
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count1
2
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
3
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"very"
2"barely above a whisper"
3"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
31.85% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount807
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"echoed"
count1
1
word"stark"
count1
2
word"pounding"
count1
3
word"eyebrow"
count1
4
word"whisper"
count2
5
word"flicked"
count1
6
word"traced"
count1
7
word"down her spine"
count1
8
word"stomach"
count1
9
word"echoing"
count1
highlights
0"echoed"
1"stark"
2"pounding"
3"eyebrow"
4"whisper"
5"flicked"
6"traced"
7"down her spine"
8"stomach"
9"echoing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences54
matches
0"the feeling of dread"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences54
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences77
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen31
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords803
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
16.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions31
wordCount549
uniqueNames4
maxNameDensity2.55
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity4.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Eva1
Ptolemy3
Rory14
Lucien13
persons
0"Eva"
1"Rory"
2"Lucien"
places
0"Ptolemy"
globalScore0.225
windowScore0.167
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences48
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount803
matches(empty)
36.80% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount3
totalSentences77
matches
0"knew that face"
1"knew that it"
2"knew that she"
93.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs31
mean25.9
std12.32
cv0.475
sampleLengths
051
134
242
315
418
518
639
723
829
942
1015
1125
1221
1329
1416
1518
1632
1716
1820
1912
2022
2125
2224
2317
249
2514
2624
2715
2861
2929
3048
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences54
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs106
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences77
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount553
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount18
adverbRatio0.0325497287522604
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.009041591320072333
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences77
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences77
mean10.43
std4.97
cv0.476
sampleLengths
019
110
28
314
49
56
611
78
817
914
1011
119
126
139
149
159
169
1712
1820
197
2010
218
225
2315
2414
254
2623
2715
288
297
3012
3113
3212
339
343
3514
3612
376
3810
398
4010
418
4213
4311
449
457
467
4713
487
495
53.68% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.33766233766233766
totalSentences77
uniqueOpeners26
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences54
matches(empty)
ratio0
57.04% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount22
totalSentences54
matches
0"She sighed, marking her place"
1"she called, peering through the"
2"Her heart leapt into her"
3"She knew that face, those"
4"She unbolted the door, her"
5"He leaned casually on his"
6"he said, his voice a"
7"He pushed off from the"
8"he murmured, He turned to"
9"She turned to face him,"
10"She stepped closer to him,"
11"She looked away, her gaze"
12"His thumb traced the line"
13"She looked away, her gaze"
14"He turned to leave, his"
15"she called out, her voice"
16"He paused, his hand on"
17"She took a deep breath,"
18"she said, her voice flat"
19"She knew this job would"
ratio0.407
6.30% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount49
totalSentences54
matches
0"The knock at the door"
1"Rory, buried under a mountain"
2"The knock came again, more"
3"She sighed, marking her place"
4"she called, peering through the"
5"Her heart leapt into her"
6"She knew that face, those"
7"She unbolted the door, her"
8"Lucien stood in the dimly"
9"He leaned casually on his"
10"he said, his voice a"
11"Rory crossed her arms, her"
12"He pushed off from the"
13"Rory scoffed, stepping aside to"
14"Lucien stepped into the flat,"
15"he murmured, He turned to"
16"Rory shut the door, her"
17"She turned to face him,"
18"Lucien walked further into the"
19"Rory raised an eyebrow."
ratio0.907
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences54
matches(empty)
ratio0
40.82% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences21
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"She knew that face, those heterochromatic eyes, that slicked-back platinum hair."
1"She looked away, her gaze landing on Ptolemy, who watched them with lazy curiosity."
2"As she gathered her things, she couldn't shake the feeling of dread that settled in the pit of her stomach."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags9
uselessAdditionCount6
matches
0"he said, his voice a low rumble,"
1"She stepped, her voice dropping to a low whisper"
2"He turned, his cane tapping a harsh rhythm on the floor"
3"she called out, her voice barely above a whisper"
4"she said, her voice flat"
5"she said, her voice soft"
87.50% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"he murmured (murmur)"
1"she called out (call out)"
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.188
leniency0.375
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.125
73.0951%