Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTR3X2D2VK79G89TP2ACD2T

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Duration:
10.8s
Cost:
$0.000930

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
In the dim glow of the green neon sign, Rory pushed open the heavy door of The Raven's Nest, a bell jingling her arrival. The familiar scent of aged wood and whiskey enveloped her, a comforting embrace after the damp London night. She stepped inside, her boots sinking into the worn carpet, and scanned the room. The usual crowd was gathered, faces illuminated by the soft light of their drinks, murmurs of conversation filling the air. She spotted an empty stool at the far end of the bar and made her way towards it, her eyes flicking over the patrons, a silent greeting to the familiar faces. As she sat down, she felt a presence beside her. She turned to find Silas Blackwood, the bar's owner, pouring a glass of red wine. His hazel eyes met hers, a hint of a smile playing on his lips. "Evening, Rory," he said, his voice a low rumble. "The usual?" She nodded, watching as he poured the wine, his movements precise, practiced. He slid the glass towards her, his signet ring glinting in the light. "You're late," he commented, leaning against the bar. "Thought you'd be here hours ago." Rory took a sip of her wine, the rich flavour filling her mouth. "Delivery ran long," she explained. "Some idiot ordered a pizza at midnight." Silas chuckled, his beard twitching. "Only in London," he said, shaking his head. He turned to pour a drink for another customer, leaving Rory to her wine. As she took another sip, she felt a prickle at the back of her neck. She turned to find a pair of bright blue eyes staring at her from the other end of the bar. The woman's face was familiar, yet different. Her straight black hair was now cropped short, framing her face in sharp lines. She wore a leather jacket, the sleeves pushed up to reveal intricate tattoos snaking down her arms. It was Eva, her childhood friend, the one who had convinced her to leave Cardiff, to start a new life in London. Rory raised her glass in a silent toast, a small smile playing on her lips. Eva mirrored the gesture, her eyes never leaving Rory's face. There was a tension in the air, a weight of unspoken words hanging between them. Silas followed Rory's gaze, his expression softening as he saw Eva. "Old friend?" he asked, his voice barely above a whisper. Rory nodded, turning back to her wine. "From Cardiff," she said. "We haven't seen each other in... what, five years?" Silas whistled softly, pouring another drink. "Time flies," he commented, sliding the glass towards Rory. "On the house. For old times' sake." Rory took the drink, her eyes flicking back to Eva. She could feel the weight of their shared history, the years of friendship and secrets hanging between them. She took a deep breath, steeling herself for the conversation to come. Eva made her way towards them, her boots clicking on the wooden floor. She stopped in front of Rory, her eyes never leaving Rory's face. "Rory Carter," she said, her voice a low purr. "You look... different." Rory raised an eyebrow, a small smile playing on her lips. "So do you, Eva," she said. "The hair suits you." Eva ran a hand through her short hair, a smirk tugging at the corners of her mouth. "Thanks," she said. "I thought it was time for a change." Silas poured Eva a drink, pushing it towards her. "On the house," he said, his eyes flicking between the two women. "For old times' sake." Eva took the drink, her eyes never leaving Rory's face. "So," she said, taking a sip. "What have you been up to, Rory?" Rory took a deep breath, her eyes flicking to Silas. He gave her a small nod, a silent encouragement. "I work part-time at Golden Empress," she said, turning back to Eva. "Deliveries, mostly. And I live above the bar." Eva's eyes widened slightly, a hint of surprise flashing across her face. "Above the bar?" she repeated, her voice barely above a whisper. "You've always been one for the simple life, Rory." Rory felt a flicker of irritation at the implied criticism. "And what about you, Eva?" she asked, her voice cool. "What have you been up to?" Eva took a sip of her drink, her eyes never leaving Rory's face. "I work at the tattoo parlour down the street," she said. "The one with the neon sign." Rory nodded, her eyes flicking to the window. She could see the neon sign from where she sat, the bright lights casting a glow on the wet pavement outside. "I've seen it," she said. "I didn't know you were into tattoos." Eva smirked, holding out her arms. "I am now," she said, turning her arms to reveal the intricate designs. "I started a few years ago. It's... therapeutic." Rory nodded, her eyes flicking over the tattoos. She could see the stories etched into Eva's skin, the layers of meaning hidden beneath the ink. She felt a pang of envy, a longing for the same sense of purpose, of identity. Eva watched Rory's face, her expression softening. "You should come by sometime," she said, her voice gentle. "I could draw something for you." Rory felt a lump form in her throat, the offer catching her off guard. She took a deep breath, pushing down the emotion. "Maybe," she said, her voice noncommittal. Eva nodded, taking another sip of her drink. "So," she said, her voice casual. "What about... Evan?" Rory felt a jolt at the mention of her ex-boyfriend, the name sending a shiver down her spine. She took a deep breath, steeling herself for the conversation. "We're not together anymore," she said, her voice measured. "I left him... a few years ago." Eva nodded, her eyes never leaving Rory's face. "I'm sorry," she said, her voice soft. "I know how... difficult things were between you two." Rory felt a flicker of irritation at the understatement. "Difficult" didn't begin to cover it. She took a deep breath, pushing down the memories. "It's in the past," she said, her voice firm. "I'm not with him anymore. That's all that matters." Eva nodded, her eyes flicking to Silas. He was watching them, his expression thoughtful. "And what about you, Silas?" she asked, her voice casual. "Still playing the spymaster?" Silas chuckled, pouring another drink. "Retired," he said, sliding the glass towards Eva. "I own the bar now. No more cloak and dagger." Eva raised an eyebrow, a smirk tugging at the corners of her mouth. "Is that so?" she said, her voice skeptical. "You don't strike me as the type to give up the game so easily, Silas." Silas shrugged, his eyes flicking to Rory. "Everyone changes, Eva," he said, his voice soft. "Even spymasters." Eva nodded, her eyes flicking back to Rory. "So," she said, her voice casual. "What do you say we catch up properly? I could tell you about my tattoos. You could tell me about... whatever it is you do these days." Rory felt a flicker of hesitation, the weight of their shared history hanging between them. She took a deep breath, pushing down the uncertainty. "Sure," she said, her voice steady. "Why not?" Eva smiled, her eyes never leaving Rory's face. "Great," she said, her voice soft. "Let's start with the tattoos. I could draw something for you. Something to mark this... reunion." Rory felt a lump form in her throat, the offer catching her off guard. She took a deep breath, pushing down the emotion. "Maybe," she said, her voice noncommittal. Eva nodded, taking another sip of her drink. "So," she said, her voice casual. "What do you say we get out of here? Somewhere we can talk. Really talk." Rory felt a flicker of hesitation, the weight of their shared history hanging between them. She took a deep breath, steeling herself for the conversation to come. "Sure," she said, her voice steady. "Let's go." As they made their way out of the bar, Rory could feel the weight of their shared history, the years of friendship and secrets hanging between them. She could feel the tension in the air, the unspoken regret lurking just beneath the surface. She took a deep breath, steeling herself for the conversation to come. Whatever happened, she knew one thing for sure: tonight was going to be a long one.
total_cost0.0009296999999999999

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags34
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences65
tagDensity0.523
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
82.23% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1407
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count2
1
adverb"softly"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count1
3
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"barely above a whisper"
1"softly"
2"slightly"
3"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1407
totalAiIsms33
found
0
word"familiar"
count3
1
word"comforting"
count1
2
word"scanned"
count1
3
word"glinting"
count1
4
word"intricate"
count2
5
word"tension"
count2
6
word"weight"
count5
7
word"unspoken"
count2
8
word"whisper"
count2
9
word"could feel"
count3
10
word"eyebrow"
count2
11
word"flicker"
count4
12
word"etched"
count1
13
word"pang"
count1
14
word"sense of"
count1
15
word"down her spine"
count1
16
word"measured"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"comforting"
2"scanned"
3"glinting"
4"intricate"
5"tension"
6"weight"
7"unspoken"
8"whisper"
9"could feel"
10"eyebrow"
11"flicker"
12"etched"
13"pang"
14"sense of"
15"down her spine"
16"measured"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
93.85% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells4
narrationSentences107
matches
0"felt a prickle"
1"felt a lump"
2"felt a jolt"
3"felt a lump"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences107
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"begin to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences137
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen31
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1406
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions37
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions67
wordCount1086
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity2.76
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory30
Raven1
Nest1
London2
Silas9
Blackwood1
Eva22
Cardiff1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Raven"
2"Silas"
3"Blackwood"
4"Eva"
places
0"London"
1"Cardiff"
globalScore0.119
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences80
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1406
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences137
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs40
mean35.15
std18.23
cv0.519
sampleLengths
0107
150
239
325
427
595
640
721
820
922
1040
1137
1221
1328
1425
1523
1639
1732
1826
1930
2041
2127
2241
2323
2429
2517
2644
2724
2842
2928
3023
3136
3217
3341
3432
3530
3629
3729
3835
3971
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences107
matches
0"was gathered"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs203
matches
0"was watching"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences137
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1086
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount14
adverbRatio0.01289134438305709
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.003683241252302026
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences137
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences137
mean10.26
std5.16
cv0.502
sampleLengths
024
118
214
320
431
510
615
714
89
92
1012
1113
128
136
1413
155
167
175
188
1914
2015
2120
227
2314
2417
2522
2615
2710
2815
2911
3010
317
324
339
346
359
367
3710
3818
3912
4013
4112
429
433
4411
456
464
4717
483
498
47.93% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.31386861313868614
totalSentences137
uniqueOpeners43
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences101
matches(empty)
ratio0
2.18% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount55
totalSentences101
matches
0"She stepped inside, her boots"
1"She spotted an empty stool"
2"She turned to find Silas"
3"His hazel eyes met hers,"
4"he said, his voice a"
5"She nodded, watching as he"
6"He slid the glass towards"
7"he commented, leaning against the"
8"he said, shaking his head"
9"He turned to pour a"
10"She turned to find a"
11"Her straight black hair was"
12"She wore a leather jacket,"
13"It was Eva, her childhood"
14"he asked, his voice barely"
15"he commented, sliding the glass"
16"She could feel the weight"
17"She took a deep breath,"
18"She stopped in front of"
19"she said, her voice a"
ratio0.545
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount95
totalSentences101
matches
0"The familiar scent of aged"
1"She stepped inside, her boots"
2"The usual crowd was gathered,"
3"She spotted an empty stool"
4"She turned to find Silas"
5"His hazel eyes met hers,"
6"he said, his voice a"
7"She nodded, watching as he"
8"He slid the glass towards"
9"he commented, leaning against the"
10"Rory took a sip of"
11"Silas chuckled, his beard twitching."
12"he said, shaking his head"
13"He turned to pour a"
14"She turned to find a"
15"The woman's face was familiar,"
16"Her straight black hair was"
17"She wore a leather jacket,"
18"It was Eva, her childhood"
19"Rory raised her glass in"
ratio0.941
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences101
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences48
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags34
uselessAdditionCount21
matches
0"he said, his voice a low rumble"
1"he asked, his voice barely above a whisper"
2"she said, her voice a low purr"
3"he said, his eyes flicking between the two women"
4"she repeated, her voice barely above a whisper"
5"she asked, her voice cool"
6"she said, her voice gentle"
7"she said, her voice noncommittal"
8"she said, her voice casual"
9"she said, her voice measured"
10"she said, her voice soft"
11"she said, her voice firm"
12"she asked, her voice casual"
13"she said, her voice skeptical"
14"he said, his voice soft"
15"she said, her voice casual"
16"she said, her voice steady"
17"she said, her voice soft"
18"she said, her voice noncommittal"
19"she said, her voice casual"
20"she said, her voice steady"
91.18% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags34
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"he commented (comment)"
1"she explained (explain)"
2"he commented (comment)"
3"she repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences65
tagDensity0.523
leniency1
rawRatio0.118
effectiveRatio0.118
73.9122%