Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTR43TE384P7EMW9Z3K063M

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56.8s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

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The door swung open with a creak, and the familiar scent of aged wood and spilled spirits enveloped Aurora Carter like a long-lost embrace. She stepped inside The Raven's Nest, her heart racing, not from the thrill of the bar's dimly lit atmosphere but from the weight of the past that clung to her like a second skin. The walls, adorned with sepia-toned photographs and maps of forgotten places, whispered secrets she had long buried. “Rory!” Silas Blackwood’s voice cut through the murmur of conversation, a warm beacon in the haze of smoke and laughter. He stood behind the bar, his grey-streaked auburn hair catching the low light, a silver signet ring glinting on his right hand. The slight limp in his left leg was more pronounced tonight, but his presence still commanded respect. “Si,” she replied, forcing a smile that felt foreign on her lips. “It’s been a while.” “Too long.” He wiped a glass with a rag, his hazel eyes scanning her face, searching for the girl he once knew. “What’ll it be?” “Just a tonic water.” She leaned against the bar, the cool surface grounding her. “I’m working tonight.” “Still delivering for that Chinese place?” “Golden Empress,” she corrected, a hint of pride creeping into her voice. “It pays the bills.” “Good to hear.” He poured her drink, the fizz of the tonic breaking the silence that hung between them. “You look... different.” “Different how?” she asked, her tone sharper than intended. “Older,” he said, a hint of a smile tugging at his lips. “Wiser, perhaps. Life has a way of doing that.” “Life,” she echoed, the word heavy with unspoken regrets. “It’s been a ride.” “Care to share?” Silas leaned closer, his voice dropping to a conspiratorial whisper. “Or is it too dark for this place?” “Darkness is what I’m used to.” She took a sip, the bubbles tickling her throat. “You know that.” “True.” He studied her, the lines around his eyes deepening. “But you’ve always had a light about you, Rory. I hope you haven’t lost it.” “Maybe I’ve just learned to hide it better.” She glanced around the bar, avoiding his gaze. The patrons were lost in their own worlds, laughter mingling with the clinking of glasses. A couple in the corner shared a bottle of wine, their fingers brushing against each other, while a group of men at the far end argued over football. “Is that what you think?” Silas’s voice pulled her back. “That you’re hiding?” “Isn’t everyone?” she shot back, her heart racing. “We all wear masks, don’t we?” “Some more than others.” He paused, his expression shifting. “I’ve seen you wear yours. But I also remember the girl who didn’t need one.” “Maybe she was naïve.” “Or maybe she was brave.” The tension crackled between them, a palpable reminder of the years that had slipped away. Aurora’s mind flickered back to their shared past, the laughter, the dreams, the reckless abandon of youth. They had been inseparable once, two souls navigating the chaos of life together. But time had a way of fraying even the strongest bonds. “Do you ever think about those days?” Silas asked, his voice softer now. “Sometimes.” She hesitated, the memories flooding back—late-night escapades, whispered secrets, and the promise of forever. “But they feel like someone else’s life.” “Maybe it’s time to reclaim it.” “Reclaim what?” she scoffed, the bitterness rising in her throat. “The girl who thought she could change the world? The one who believed in fairy tales?” “Why not?” He leaned back, crossing his arms. “You’re still here, Rory. You’re still fighting.” “Fighting?” She laughed, the sound hollow. “I’m just surviving. There’s a difference.” “Survival is a fight in itself.” Silas’s gaze bore into her, unwavering. “You’ve made it this far. That counts for something.” “Does it?” She felt the weight of his words, the challenge in them. “What if I’m just a shadow of who I used to be?” “Shadows can be powerful.” He gestured to the dimly lit bar, the flickering candles casting dancing silhouettes on the walls. “They can reveal what’s hidden.” “Or they can consume you.” “Only if you let them.” The air thickened with unspoken truths, the ghosts of their past swirling around them like the smoke from the bar’s patrons. Aurora’s heart raced as she considered the chasm that had formed between them, the years of silence and distance. “Do you ever regret it?” she asked suddenly, her voice barely above a whisper. “Leaving?” “Regret?” Silas’s brow furrowed. “I’ve had my share. But I don’t dwell on it. Life’s too short.” “Is it?” She felt the sting of tears threatening to spill. “I’ve spent so long trying to forget, to move on. But it’s like a weight I can’t shake.” “Then don’t forget.” He leaned closer, his voice low. “Embrace it. Use it.” “Easier said than done.” “True.” He paused, his expression softening. “But you’re stronger than you think. You always were.” “Strength doesn’t always feel like a blessing.” “Perhaps not. But it’s yours.” The conversation hung in the air, heavy with the weight of their shared history. Aurora’s mind raced, the memories flooding back—moments of laughter, of pain, of choices that had led them to this very moment. “Do you ever think about what could have been?” she asked, her voice trembling. “Every day.” Silas’s gaze softened, a flicker of vulnerability breaking through his stoic exterior. “But I’ve learned to let go. It’s the only way to move forward.” “Letting go is hard.” “Sometimes it’s the hardest thing we’ll ever do.” Aurora’s heart ached at the truth of his words. She had spent so long running from her past, from the choices that had shaped her. But standing here, in this bar filled with memories, she felt the pull of something deeper—a longing to reconnect, to reclaim the pieces of herself she had lost along the way. “Maybe I’m tired of running,” she admitted, her voice barely above a whisper. “Then stop.” Silas’s eyes locked onto hers, fierce and unwavering. “Face it. Face yourself.” The challenge hung in the air, a dare wrapped in the warmth of their shared history. Aurora felt the weight of his words settle in her chest, a flicker of hope igniting within her. “Maybe I will,” she said, her voice steadier now. “Maybe it’s time to stop hiding.” “Good.” He smiled, a genuine warmth radiating from him. “I’ve missed you, Rory.” “I’ve missed you too, Si.” But before she could say more, the door swung open again, a gust of cold air sweeping through the bar. A figure stepped inside, silhouetted against the neon glow of the sign outside. Aurora’s heart dropped as recognition washed over her. Evan. The man who had haunted her past, the ghost she had tried to escape. He scanned the room, his eyes landing on her with a predatory glint. “Rory,” he called, his voice dripping with false sweetness. “Fancy seeing you here.” Silas’s expression shifted, a protective instinct flaring in his eyes. “Stay behind me,” he murmured, his body subtly positioning itself between her and Evan. Aurora’s breath quickened, the familiar rush of fear and anger surging through her veins. She had thought she was free, that she had left him behind. But here he was, a spectre from her past, ready to drag her back into the darkness. “Just wanted to catch up,” Evan continued, his smile widening. “You’ve been avoiding me.” “Not hard to do,” she shot back, her voice steady despite the tremor in her hands. “Come now, don’t be like that.” He stepped closer, the air thickening with tension. “We have unfinished business.” “Not anymore.” “Is that so?” His gaze flicked to Silas, a smirk playing on his lips. “And who’s this? Your new protector?” “Get lost, Evan.” Silas’s voice was low, a warning laced with authority. “Or what?” Evan taunted, his bravado masking the uncertainty beneath. “You’ll protect her from me? You think you can keep her safe?” Aurora felt the ground shift beneath her, the weight of the moment pressing down on her. She had a choice to make—run back into the shadows or stand her ground. “Enough,” she said, her voice rising above the chaos. “I’m not afraid of you anymore.” Evan’s expression faltered, surprise flickering in his eyes. “Rory—” “Don’t.” She stepped forward, her heart pounding. “You don’t get to dictate my life anymore.” The tension in the bar crackled, the patrons falling silent as they turned to witness the confrontation. Silas remained at her side, a steady presence anchoring her as she faced the man who had once held so much power over her. “Walk away, Evan,” she said, her voice firm. “This is over.” For a moment, the world held its breath, the air thick with anticipation. Then, with a sneer, Evan turned on his heel and strode out of the bar, the door slamming shut behind him. Aurora exhaled, the adrenaline coursing through her veins. She felt Silas’s hand on her shoulder, a reassuring weight. “Are you alright?” he asked, concern etched on his face. “I am,” she replied, her voice steadier now. “I think I finally am.” The bar erupted into murmurs, the tension dissipating as patrons returned to their conversations. But for Aurora, the moment marked a turning point—a step towards reclaiming her life, her strength, and the light she had thought lost forever. “Let’s get out of here,” Silas said, his eyes glinting with a mix of pride and relief. “Where to?” “Anywhere but here.” As they stepped into the night, the weight of the past began to lift, replaced by the promise of new beginnings. Aurora felt the flicker of hope ignite within her, a spark that had been dormant for far too long. And for the first time in years, she dared to believe in the possibility of a brighter tomorrow.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags47
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"She glanced around [around]"
1"He leaned back [back]"
2"she asked suddenly [suddenly]"
dialogueSentences103
tagDensity0.456
leniency0.913
rawRatio0.064
effectiveRatio0.058
87.89% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1652
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count2
2
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"barely above a whisper"
2"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1652
totalAiIsms50
found
0
word"familiar"
count2
1
word"racing"
count2
2
word"weight"
count8
3
word"beacon"
count1
4
word"glinting"
count2
5
word"scanning"
count1
6
word"silence"
count2
7
word"echoed"
count1
8
word"unspoken"
count2
9
word"whisper"
count3
10
word"tension"
count4
11
word"palpable"
count1
12
word"reminder"
count1
13
word"flickered"
count1
14
word"navigating"
count1
15
word"unwavering"
count2
16
word"dancing"
count1
17
word"raced"
count2
18
word"furrowed"
count1
19
word"flicker"
count3
20
word"warmth"
count2
21
word"scanned"
count1
22
word"glint"
count1
23
word"quickened"
count1
24
word"flicked"
count1
25
word"pounding"
count1
26
word"anticipation"
count1
27
word"etched"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"racing"
2"weight"
3"beacon"
4"glinting"
5"scanning"
6"silence"
7"echoed"
8"unspoken"
9"whisper"
10"tension"
11"palpable"
12"reminder"
13"flickered"
14"navigating"
15"unwavering"
16"dancing"
17"raced"
18"furrowed"
19"flicker"
20"warmth"
21"scanned"
22"glint"
23"quickened"
24"flicked"
25"pounding"
26"anticipation"
27"etched"
0.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches6
maxInWindow6
found
0
label"weight of words/silence"
count3
1
label"hung in the air"
count2
2
label"flicker of emotion"
count1
highlights
0"the weight of his words"
1"the weight of the moment"
2"hung in the air"
3"a flicker of hope"
89.16% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells4
narrationSentences93
matches
0"felt the sting"
1"a flicker of hope"
2"k with anticipation"
3"the flicker of hope"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences93
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences147
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1643
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions23
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions36
wordCount1158
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity1.21
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Evan"
discoveredNames
Aurora12
Carter1
Raven1
Nest1
Blackwood1
Silas14
Evan6
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Carter"
2"Blackwood"
3"Silas"
4"Evan"
places
0"Raven"
globalScore0.896
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences84
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.609
wordCount1643
matches
0"not from the thrill of the bar's dimly lit atmosphere but from the weight of the past"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences147
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs84
mean19.56
std14.63
cv0.748
sampleLengths
075
159
216
325
417
56
616
722
89
921
1013
1121
1218
1325
1459
1513
1614
1724
184
195
2056
2113
2222
236
2426
2515
2612
2721
2825
2925
305
315
3240
3315
3417
3529
3613
374
3815
397
405
4135
4214
4327
444
458
4656
4713
4814
4934
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences93
matches
0"were lost"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs197
matches(empty)
45.68% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount6
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences147
ratio0.034
matches
0"“Sometimes.” She hesitated, the memories flooding back—late-night escapades, whispered secrets, and the promise of forever."
1"Aurora’s mind raced, the memories flooding back—moments of laughter, of pain, of choices that had led them to this very moment."
2"But standing here, in this bar filled with memories, she felt the pull of something deeper—a longing to reconnect, to reclaim the pieces of herself she had lost along the way."
3"She had a choice to make—run back into the shadows or stand her ground."
4"But for Aurora, the moment marked a turning point—a step towards reclaiming her life, her strength, and the light she had thought lost forever."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1167
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount26
adverbRatio0.022279348757497857
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.005141388174807198
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences147
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences147
mean11.18
std6.28
cv0.562
sampleLengths
024
134
217
320
422
517
612
74
822
93
1014
113
126
1312
144
1519
163
179
1812
199
209
214
2213
238
2415
253
2610
2715
2816
2915
3028
3110
323
338
346
359
3615
374
385
3915
4017
4113
4211
4313
4415
457
466
4710
4816
498
76.19% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.46938775510204084
totalSentences147
uniqueOpeners69
36.23% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences92
matches
0"Then, with a sneer, Evan"
ratio0.011
24.35% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount45
totalSentences92
matches
0"She stepped inside The Raven's"
1"He stood behind the bar,"
2"she replied, forcing a smile"
3"He wiped a glass with"
4"She leaned against the bar,"
5"she corrected, a hint of"
6"He poured her drink, the"
7"she asked, her tone sharper"
8"he said, a hint of"
9"she echoed, the word heavy"
10"She took a sip, the"
11"He studied her, the lines"
12"She glanced around the bar,"
13"she shot back, her heart"
14"He paused, his expression shifting"
15"They had been inseparable once,"
16"She hesitated, the memories flooding"
17"she scoffed, the bitterness rising"
18"He leaned back, crossing his"
19"She laughed, the sound hollow"
ratio0.489
8.91% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount83
totalSentences92
matches
0"The door swung open with"
1"She stepped inside The Raven's"
2"The walls, adorned with sepia-toned"
3"Silas Blackwood’s voice cut through"
4"He stood behind the bar,"
5"The slight limp in his"
6"she replied, forcing a smile"
7"He wiped a glass with"
8"She leaned against the bar,"
9"she corrected, a hint of"
10"He poured her drink, the"
11"she asked, her tone sharper"
12"he said, a hint of"
13"she echoed, the word heavy"
14"Silas leaned closer, his voice"
15"She took a sip, the"
16"He studied her, the lines"
17"She glanced around the bar,"
18"The patrons were lost in"
19"A couple in the corner"
ratio0.902
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences92
matches(empty)
ratio0
87.91% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences39
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Aurora’s heart raced as she considered the chasm that had formed between them, the years of silence and distance."
1"Aurora’s mind raced, the memories flooding back—moments of laughter, of pain, of choices that had led them to this very moment."
2"Silas remained at her side, a steady presence anchoring her as she faced the man who had once held so much power over her."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags47
uselessAdditionCount30
matches
0"She leaned, the cool surface grounding her"
1"she corrected, a hint of pride creeping into her voice"
2"she asked, her tone sharper than intended"
3"he said, a hint of a smile tugging at his lips"
4"Silas leaned, his voice dropping to a conspiratorial whisper"
5"She took, the bubbles tickling her throat"
6"she shot back, her heart racing"
7"He paused, his expression shifting"
8"Silas asked, his voice softer now"
9"she scoffed, the bitterness rising in her throat"
10"she asked suddenly, her voice barely above a whisper"
11"He leaned, his voice low"
12"He paused, his expression softening"
13"she asked, her voice trembling"
14"Silas’s gaze softened, a flicker of vulnerability breaking through his stoic exterior"
15"she admitted, her voice barely above a whisper"
16"she said, her voice steadier now"
17"He smiled, a genuine warmth radiating from him"
18"he called, his voice dripping with false sweetness"
19"he murmured, his body subtly positioning itself between her and Evan"
20"Evan continued, his smile widening"
21"she shot back, her voice steady despite the tremor in her hands"
22"He stepped, the air thickening with tension"
23"His gaze flicked, a smirk playing on his lips"
24"Evan taunted, his bravado masking the uncertainty beneath"
25"she said, her voice rising above the chaos"
26"She stepped, her heart pounding"
27"she said, her voice firm"
28"she replied, her voice steadier now"
29"Silas said, his eyes glinting with a mix of pride and relief"
91.75% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags19
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"she corrected (correct)"
1"She laughed (laugh)"
2"she admitted (admit)"
3"he murmured (murmur)"
4"Evan continued (continue)"
5"Evan taunted (taunt)"
dialogueSentences103
tagDensity0.184
leniency0.369
rawRatio0.316
effectiveRatio0.117
74.3801%