Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTR4HYEHMR959Q0JW26BGQR

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Duration:
9.6s
Cost:
$0.037790
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
"Rory? Is that you?" Aurora Carter turned sharply, nearly spilling her drink. The voice was familiar, yet it carried a weight she hadn't heard before. She scanned the dimly lit bar, her eyes adjusting to the shadows cast by the green neon sign of The Raven's Nest. There, by the corner booth, stood a man she hadn't seen in years. "Silas?" Her voice wavered, betraying a mix of surprise and uncertainty. Silas Blackwood, the once formidable MI6 operative, now bar owner, limped towards her. His hazel eyes, still sharp, bore into hers with a mixture of curiosity and something else—regret, perhaps. "Indeed," he said, his voice a low rumble. "It's been a while, Rory." She nodded, swallowing hard. "Too long." They stood there, the silence between them thick with unspoken words. Finally, Silas gestured to the booth. "Join me for a drink?" Aurora hesitated, then nodded. "Sure." They slid into the booth, the worn leather creaking under their weight. Silas signaled to the bartender, who brought over two glasses of whisky. He raised his glass. "To old friends." "To old friends," she echoed, clinking her glass against his. They drank in silence, the whisky burning a path down her throat. Aurora studied Silas, noting the grey streaks in his auburn hair, the lines etched into his face. He looked older, more worn, but there was still a fire in his eyes. "So," he began, setting his glass down. "What brings you to The Raven's Nest?" Aurora shrugged, tracing the rim of her glass with her finger. "I live upstairs now. Work part-time at the Golden Empress. Needed a change of scenery." Silas raised an eyebrow. "From Cardiff?" "From everything," she replied, her voice barely above a whisper. He nodded, understanding flickering in his eyes. "I heard about Evan." Her heart skipped a beat. "How?" "Word gets around," he said, his tone gentle. "I'm sorry, Rory." She looked away, the memories flooding back. The arguments, the fear, the night she finally left. "It's over now," she said, more to convince herself than him. Silas reached across the table, his hand covering hers. "If you ever need anything, you know where to find me." She nodded, grateful for the offer. "Thanks, Silas." They sat in silence for a moment, the weight of their pasts hanging between them. Finally, Silas broke the silence. "Do you remember the last time we saw each other?" Aurora smiled, a genuine smile that reached her eyes. "How could I forget? Prague. The botched operation." He chuckled, a deep, rumbling sound. "Ah, yes. The infamous knee injury." She glanced at his leg, noting the slight limp. "Does it still bother you?" "Every damn day," he admitted. "But it reminds me of who I was. Who I am." Aurora nodded, understanding all too well. "We all have our scars." Silas's eyes flicked to the small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist. "Some more visible than others." She pulled her hand back, hiding the scar. "It's nothing." "It's not nothing," he said softly. "It's a part of you." She looked at him, seeing the sincerity in his eyes. "I suppose it is." They fell into a comfortable silence, the noise of the bar fading into the background. Aurora took a sip of her whisky, savouring the warmth it brought. "Do you ever think about the old days?" she asked suddenly. Silas leaned back, his eyes distant. "All the time. Sometimes I miss it. The adrenaline, the danger. But then I remember why I left." "Prague," she said, nodding. "Prague," he echoed. "And everything that came after." Aurora reached for her glass, her hand trembling slightly. "I miss it too. But I don't miss who I was." Silas studied her, his gaze intense. "You've changed, Rory. But that's not a bad thing." She looked at him, her eyes searching his. "Have you?" He smiled, a sad, wistful smile. "In some ways, yes. In others, not at all." They sat in silence, the weight of their shared history pressing down on them. Finally, Aurora spoke. "Do you ever regret it? Leaving the life behind?" Silas considered her question, his eyes thoughtful. "Sometimes. But then I look at what I have now. This bar, the people I've met. It's a different kind of fulfilment." Aurora nodded, understanding. "I guess we all have to find our own path." "Indeed," he said, raising his glass. "To new beginnings." "To new beginnings," she echoed, clinking her glass against his. They drank, the whisky warming them from the inside out. Aurora felt a sense of peace settle over her, a feeling she hadn't experienced in a long time. "Thank you, Silas," she said softly. "For everything." He smiled, a genuine smile that reached his eyes. "Anytime, Rory. Anytime." As they sat there, the noise of the bar fading into the background, Aurora realised that some things never changed. And maybe, just maybe, that was okay.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
82.35% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"he said softly [softly]"
1"she asked suddenly [suddenly]"
2"she said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.294
leniency0.588
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.118
63.46% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount821
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"sharply"
count1
1
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count2
3
adverb"suddenly"
count1
4
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"sharply"
1"barely above a whisper"
2"softly"
3"suddenly"
4"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount821
totalAiIsms26
found
0
word"familiar"
count1
1
word"weight"
count4
2
word"scanned"
count1
3
word"wavered"
count1
4
word"silence"
count6
5
word"unspoken"
count1
6
word"echoed"
count3
7
word"etched"
count1
8
word"tracing"
count1
9
word"eyebrow"
count1
10
word"whisper"
count1
11
word"skipped a beat"
count1
12
word"flicked"
count1
13
word"comfortable"
count1
14
word"warmth"
count1
15
word"sense of"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"weight"
2"scanned"
3"wavered"
4"silence"
5"unspoken"
6"echoed"
7"etched"
8"tracing"
9"eyebrow"
10"whisper"
11"skipped a beat"
12"flicked"
13"comfortable"
14"warmth"
15"sense of"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences64
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences64
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences100
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen22
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords818
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Finally, Aurora spoke."
41.30% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions30
wordCount552
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity2.17
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Carter1
Raven1
Nest1
Silas11
Blackwood1
Aurora12
Finally3
persons
0"Carter"
1"Raven"
2"Silas"
3"Blackwood"
4"Aurora"
5"Finally"
places(empty)
globalScore0.413
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences48
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount818
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences100
matches
0"realised that some"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs49
mean16.69
std10.38
cv0.622
sampleLengths
04
156
211
330
413
56
622
75
831
910
1043
1114
1226
136
1410
1511
166
1711
1827
1920
208
2130
2217
2312
2414
2516
2611
2717
2810
2911
3014
3127
3211
3324
344
358
3620
3715
3810
3915
4026
4129
4213
439
4410
4528
468
4712
4827
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences64
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs110
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences100
ratio0.01
matches
0"His hazel eyes, still sharp, bore into hers with a mixture of curiosity and something else—regret, perhaps."
86.55% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount554
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount26
adverbRatio0.04693140794223827
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.021660649819494584
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences100
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences100
mean8.18
std4.62
cv0.565
sampleLengths
04
18
213
322
413
511
613
717
88
95
104
112
1211
136
145
154
161
1712
1812
194
203
2110
2212
2317
2414
257
267
2711
2815
294
302
3110
327
334
345
351
368
373
387
399
4011
419
4211
436
442
4515
465
4710
489
498
64.67% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.43
totalSentences100
uniqueOpeners43
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences62
matches
0"Finally, Silas gestured to the"
1"Finally, Silas broke the silence."
2"Finally, Aurora spoke."
ratio0.048
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount36
totalSentences62
matches
0"She scanned the dimly lit"
1"Her voice wavered, betraying a"
2"His hazel eyes, still sharp,"
3"he said, his voice a"
4"She nodded, swallowing hard."
5"They stood there, the silence"
6"They slid into the booth,"
7"He raised his glass."
8"she echoed, clinking her glass"
9"They drank in silence, the"
10"He looked older, more worn,"
11"he began, setting his glass"
12"she replied, her voice barely"
13"He nodded, understanding flickering in"
14"Her heart skipped a beat."
15"he said, his tone gentle"
16"She looked away, the memories"
17"she said, more to convince"
18"She nodded, grateful for the"
19"They sat in silence for"
ratio0.581
0.32% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount57
totalSentences62
matches
0"Aurora Carter turned sharply, nearly"
1"The voice was familiar, yet"
2"She scanned the dimly lit"
3"There, by the corner booth,"
4"Her voice wavered, betraying a"
5"Silas Blackwood, the once formidable"
6"His hazel eyes, still sharp,"
7"he said, his voice a"
8"She nodded, swallowing hard."
9"They stood there, the silence"
10"Aurora hesitated, then nodded."
11"They slid into the booth,"
12"Silas signaled to the bartender,"
13"He raised his glass."
14"she echoed, clinking her glass"
15"They drank in silence, the"
16"Aurora studied Silas, noting the"
17"He looked older, more worn,"
18"he began, setting his glass"
19"Aurora shrugged, tracing the rim"
ratio0.919
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences62
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences21
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
25.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"he said, his voice a low rumble"
1"she replied, her voice barely above a whisper"
2"he said, his tone gentle"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"he admitted (admit)"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.196
leniency0.392
rawRatio0.1
effectiveRatio0.039
78.7886%