Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTR4S3R09ND2DTCJ6HBSA7H

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Duration:
14.0s
Cost:
$0.041130
Provider:
Azure

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora stumbled into the grove, tripping over an ancient oak root hidden beneath a carpet of wildflowers. She caught her balance just in time to avoid falling face-first into the soft earth. Breathing heavily, she shoved the hair out of her eyes and scanned the clearing. The standing stones loomed like silent sentinels under the silver light of the moon, casting long shadows that danced and shifted with the wind. Time moved differently here, she reminded herself, but it didn’t lessen the unease gnawing at her belly. She clutched the Heartstone Pendant around her neck, its crimson hue barely visible in the dim light. The soft pulse of warmth it radiated was meant to be comforting, a guide. But tonight, it felt more like a warning. Rory had come to the Grove to find answers. Eva, her childhood friend and confidante who had been there through thick and thin, often spoke of the Grove's mystical properties. If she sought them out, the grove was supposed to provide clarity. Yet, the moment Aurora had stepped past the oak standing stones, something felt wrong. An oppressive silence hung in the air, the kind that gnawed at the edges of her sanity. A rustle behind her made her spin around, heart pounding. The grove behind was empty, the tall grasses undisturbed. A trick of the mind, perhaps? Shaking her head, she took a step forward, then another, moving deeper into the clearing. Her eyes darted from shadow to shadow, expecting something to emerge, but nothing ever did. “How cliché,” she muttered to herself, nerves getting the better of her. “Always in the middle of the night, and always alone.” Her voice sounded hollow, absorbed by the eerie quiet of the Grove. She continued onward, each step deliberate and measured, the pendant growing warmer against her chest. Aurora knew she must be getting closer to... something. The Heartstone hadn't led her wrong before. She just hoped this time wouldn't be the exception. A high-pitched giggle echoed through the trees. Rory whipped around, scanning the grove for its source. The stones remained silent, indifferent. Something about the laugh sounded child-like, yet impossibly far away. She turned back and nearly screamed, but there was nothing there. Her grip on the pendant tightened until her knuckles turned white. "Eva?" It was barely a whisper, a plea. Her voice wavered, lost in the vastness of the Grove. Another giggle, this time to her left. Closer. Aurora's breath quickened. The wildflowers at her feet swayed although there was no breeze. With a trembling hand, she brushed one aside, revealing the faint outline of a child's footprint. Her heart sank. The stories of the fae were not ones she dismissed lightly. She had no interest in becoming part of their games. She had to keep moving. The air grew thick with the scent of jasmine, cloying and sweet. Aurora pressed on, stepping where she hoped the ground would remain solid. She paused, swearing she saw eyes glimmering in the darkness beyond the grove, but when she focused, everything blurred into a meld of shadows and moonlight. She reached the centre of the Grove where the largest stone stood, taller and darker than the others, almost like the trunk of an ancient tree. Holding the Heartstone Pendant up, Aurora felt its warmth intensify, radiating through her hand. The pendant pulsed faster now, like a heartbeat. Something was close. "Aurora," a whisper floated on the wind, her own name barely brushing against her consciousness. Her eyes narrowed as she took another step forward, expecting to catch a glimpse of who—or what—called out to her. Beneath the largest stone, some etchings glowed faintly. Carefully, Aurora knelt and traced her hand over the faint luminance. The symbols lit up brighter with her touch, like a charge of electricity cascading through her bones. Another laugh, louder and nearer. Rory stood to face a figure that had appeared without a sound. The child-like silhouette at the edge of the clearing held a strange familiarity. Aurora's voice caught in her throat as she called out. "Who are you?" Her voice did not tremble now. It cut through the silence like a knife. The child stepped closer, and Rory’s breath caught once more. It was her – or, more precisely, someone who could have been her, years ago. Standing there in a white dress, black hair flowing over thin shoulders, and those bright blue eyes reflecting the light. Aurora’s mind raced. This couldn’t be real. It was a trick, a cruel illusion. The pendant burned against her chest, the heat nearly searing. “You shouldn’t have come,” the child version of herself whispered. Her voice was not soft. It held an edge of malice, twisting the tone to something otherworldly. The child lunged. Aurora barely had time to sidestep, feeling the cold brush of something insidious as it missed her. She turned to run, but her feet would not obey. “Rory, run!” The voice came from everywhere and nowhere. Her knees buckled and she fell to the ground, the pendant slipping from her grasp. She tried to get up, but the ground felt like quicksand, pulling her down. Panic surged through her. She clawed at the earth, the cool touch of soil giving no purchase. The child laughed again, the sound wrapping around Aurora, tugging at the edges of her sanity. She squeezed her eyes shut and with a final burst of energy, grabbed the pendant, pressing the stone to her chest. Warmth exploded outwards, the pulse becoming a steady, powerful throbbing. The clearing brightened with the crimson glow, revealing the true forms of the shadows. Hideous creatures, distorted faces with limbs long and twisted, recoiled from the light. The child version of herself dissolved into mist, her laugh trembling through the air before winking out. Aurora crawled to the standing stone, back pressed against it as she panted. She kept her eyes on the shadows, slowly retreating back to the edges of the Grove. The warmth of the pendant had saved her, but the Grove would not forget. In the stillness that followed, the wind returned, carrying with it the faint sounds of life beyond the ancient stones. Rory pushed herself up, her legs unsteady but firm. She clutched the Heartstone once more, feeling its pulse steady her racing heart. With one final glance at the Grove, she turned and left, the child’s eerie laugh still echoing in her ears. The hunt for answers had only begun, and the danger had only become more real.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags6
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences7
tagDensity0.857
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
81.67% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1091
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"lightly"
count1
1
adverb"carefully"
count1
2
adverb"precisely"
count1
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"lightly"
1"carefully"
2"precisely"
3"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1091
totalAiIsms30
found
0
word"scanned"
count1
1
word"loomed"
count1
2
word"sentinels"
count1
3
word"pulse"
count3
4
word"warmth"
count4
5
word"comforting"
count1
6
word"oppressive"
count1
7
word"silence"
count2
8
word"pounding"
count1
9
word"measured"
count1
10
word"echoed"
count1
11
word"scanning"
count1
12
word"whisper"
count2
13
word"wavered"
count1
14
word"quickened"
count1
15
word"pulsed"
count1
16
word"traced"
count1
17
word"cascading"
count1
18
word"raced"
count1
19
word"searing"
count1
20
word"otherworldly"
count1
21
word"racing"
count1
22
word"echoing"
count1
highlights
0"scanned"
1"loomed"
2"sentinels"
3"pulse"
4"warmth"
5"comforting"
6"oppressive"
7"silence"
8"pounding"
9"measured"
10"echoed"
11"scanning"
12"whisper"
13"wavered"
14"quickened"
15"pulsed"
16"traced"
17"cascading"
18"raced"
19"searing"
20"otherworldly"
21"racing"
22"echoing"
33.33% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches3
maxInWindow3
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"knuckles turned white"
count1
2
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"knuckles turned white"
2"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences92
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences92
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences92
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen26
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1087
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions4
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
93.61% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions31
wordCount1064
uniqueNames5
maxNameDensity1.13
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Heartstone4
Pendant2
Grove8
Aurora12
Rory5
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Pendant"
2"Aurora"
3"Rory"
places
0"Grove"
globalScore0.936
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences79
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like quicksand, pulling her down"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1087
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences92
matches(empty)
65.18% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs27
mean40.26
std15.22
cv0.378
sampleLengths
087
139
273
355
434
540
653
718
838
929
1050
1151
1235
1336
1440
1517
1645
1724
1827
1930
2024
2131
2237
2354
2443
2542
2635
97.64% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences92
matches
0"was meant"
1"was supposed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs191
matches(empty)
80.75% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences92
ratio0.022
matches
0"Her eyes narrowed as she took another step forward, expecting to catch a glimpse of who—or what—called out to her."
1"It was her – or, more precisely, someone who could have been her, years ago."
91.31% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1068
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"flowing over thin shoulders,"
adverbCount46
adverbRatio0.04307116104868914
lyAdverbCount18
lyAdverbRatio0.016853932584269662
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences92
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences92
mean11.82
std5.41
cv0.458
sampleLengths
017
115
214
324
417
517
614
78
89
921
1012
1114
1217
1310
149
156
1615
1715
1812
1922
2015
218
221
237
249
257
269
275
2810
2911
3011
318
3210
337
341
353
3611
3716
383
3911
4010
415
4212
4312
4426
4526
4614
478
483
4915
55.80% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.34782608695652173
totalSentences92
uniqueOpeners32
37.04% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences90
matches
0"Carefully, Aurora knelt and traced"
ratio0.011
86.67% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount30
totalSentences90
matches
0"She caught her balance just"
1"She clutched the Heartstone Pendant"
2"Her eyes darted from shadow"
3"she muttered to herself, nerves"
4"Her voice sounded hollow, absorbed"
5"She continued onward, each step"
6"She just hoped this time"
7"She turned back and nearly"
8"Her grip on the pendant"
9"It was barely a whisper,"
10"Her voice wavered, lost in"
11"Her heart sank."
12"She had no interest in"
13"She had to keep moving."
14"She paused, swearing she saw"
15"She reached the centre of"
16"Her eyes narrowed as she"
17"Her voice did not tremble"
18"It cut through the silence"
19"It was her – or,"
ratio0.333
32.22% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount77
totalSentences90
matches
0"Aurora stumbled into the grove,"
1"She caught her balance just"
2"The standing stones loomed like"
3"Time moved differently here, she"
4"She clutched the Heartstone Pendant"
5"The soft pulse of warmth"
6"Rory had come to the"
7"Eva, her childhood friend and"
8"An oppressive silence hung in"
9"A rustle behind her made"
10"The grove behind was empty,"
11"A trick of the mind,"
12"Her eyes darted from shadow"
13"she muttered to herself, nerves"
14"Her voice sounded hollow, absorbed"
15"She continued onward, each step"
16"Aurora knew she must be"
17"The Heartstone hadn't led her"
18"She just hoped this time"
19"A high-pitched giggle echoed through"
ratio0.856
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences90
matches
0"If she sought them out,"
1"Yet, the moment Aurora had"
ratio0.022
92.73% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences57
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"The standing stones loomed like silent sentinels under the silver light of the moon, casting long shadows that danced and shifted with the wind."
1"Eva, her childhood friend and confidante who had been there through thick and thin, often spoke of the Grove's mystical properties."
2"The child version of herself dissolved into mist, her laugh trembling through the air before winking out."
3"In the stillness that followed, the wind returned, carrying with it the faint sounds of life beyond the ancient stones."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags6
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"she muttered, nerves getting the better of her"
1"a whisper floated, her own name barely brushing against her consciousness"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"herself whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences7
tagDensity0.286
leniency0.571
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.571
78.2646%