Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTR74J3GQRX4YYYPB92H2Z4

Run Details

Duration:
59.0s
Cost:
$0.001267
Provider:
DeepInfra

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora crept forward, the warm amber light of Dymas casting an eerie glow over her face. The vineyards stretched out endlessly before them, laden with strange fruits that gleamed like jewels in the twilight. Nyx drifted alongside her, a living shadow that seemed to drink in the dappled sunbeams filtering through the broad leaves overhead. "This place feels alive," Aurora murmured, reaching out to brush her fingertips against a plump grape as big as her fist. It felt warm and slightly yielding beneath her touch, as if it were pulsing with some secret energy. "The realm of Gluttony is not like our world," Isolde whispered. Her silver hair shimmered like moonlight, and her pale lavender eyes held an ancient wisdom that made her seem far older than her youthful appearance suggested. "Here, everything is more. More color, more flavor, more sensation." As they ventured deeper into the vineyard, the air grew thick with the heady scent of ripe fruit, mixed with the sweet tang of fresh honey. Aurora could almost taste it on her tongue, a richness that made her mouth water and her stomach rumble in anticipation. Nyx let out a soft hiss, drawing Aurora's attention back to the path ahead. There, a creature unlike any she had seen before slithered along one of the vines, its iridescent scales reflecting all the colors of the rainbow. It moved with a sinuous grace, its long body undulating as it climbed higher and higher, reaching for the sun-warmed fruit above. "What is that?" Aurora breathed. "A seraphine," Isolde replied, her voice filled with wonder. "The dragons of this realm." As if sensing their gaze upon it, the seraphine turned its head towards them. Its eyes glinted like emeralds caught in the light, and it regarded them curiously for a moment before resuming its quest for the ripest grapes. "Dragons?" Aurora echoed incredulously. She had read about such creatures in ancient texts, but never thought she would see one outside of her wildest dreams. "They are not like the fearsome beasts of legend," Isolde explained softly. "In Dymas, they are gentle and wise, as much a part of this land as the very earth beneath our feet." Still, Aurora could not help but feel a flicker of unease as they continued forward, walking beneath the shadow of the seraphine's sinuous form. The vineyards gave way to orchards heavy with exotic fruits Aurora could not name, their vibrant hues like living rainbows against the amber sky. Here and there, they passed other denizens of this strange realm — beings that resembled men and women but moved with an unearthly grace, their features too perfect to be wholly human. Some smiled at the travelers in welcome, while others simply watched with impassive curiosity, as if wondering what business these mortals had in their paradisiacal home. In the distance, Aurora could hear the sound of laughter on the wind, and music that seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere at once. It was a melody that made her heart race and her feet itch to dance, even as dread twisted her guts into knots. "What is that music?" she asked Isolde nervously. "The song of the Dymasian Court," the seer replied. "It calls to those who would indulge in pleasure beyond imagining." A sudden gust of wind sent the shadows rushing around them, and Nyx's form billowed like a sail caught in a storm. Aurora felt her heart lurch in her chest, certain that at any moment the insubstantial shade would dissipate before her eyes — but then the wind died away, leaving Nyx whole and unharmed once more. "We are being watched," the shade murmured ominously. Aurora did not need to ask how Nyx knew this; shades had senses beyond mortal ken, able to perceive things that existed just out of reach of human sight. She scanned the orchard anxiously, her hand straying towards the dagger at her belt. The Fae-forged blade felt cold and heavy against her hip, its weight both a comfort and a reminder of the danger they faced here in this dissipated Eden. Isolde's eyes narrowed as she peered into the distance, her lips moving silently as if invoking some secret knowledge. At last, she turned to Aurora and Nyx, her expression grave. "There is a presence here that does not belong," she said quietly. "An intruder from the mortal world, one who thirsts for power and immortality." "You mean a demon?" Aurora asked sharply. "No." Isolde shook her head, sending her silver tresses cascading over her shoulders like a waterfall of moonlight. "Something far more dangerous. One of the Wardens." A cold chill ran down Aurora's spine at the mention of the Wardens, those who had been tasked with maintaining the Veil between worlds. They were powerful beyond reckoning, possessed of arcane knowledge and abilities that made even shades like Nyx seem insignificant in comparison. "What would one of the Wardens be doing here?" Nyx whispered. "I believe they seek to harness the power of Dymas for their own ends," Isolde replied grimly. As if in answer to her words, a figure emerged from the shadows between two trees — a tall man dressed all in black, his eyes hidden beneath the brim of his hat. He moved with deadly grace, his hands gloved in leather that creaked softly with each step. Aurora's heart hammered against her ribs as she recognized him: Silas, the barkeep who had offered her sanctuary in his home above the pub. But now, seeing him here in this otherworldly realm, she could not help but wonder how much of his kindly demeanor had been a ruse. "What brings you to our realm, Warden?" Isolde called out boldly. Silas paused, tilting his head to peer at them from beneath the shadow of his hat. His voice was low and musical as he replied, "I am not here by choice, half-breed. The Veil weakens with each passing day, and if it should fail entirely..." He let the thought trail off, as if even speaking such a dread possibility aloud might make it come true. Aurora felt a sudden surge of anger and fear as she realized what he was implying; that all of this beauty and wonder would be lost forever if the Wardens failed in their duty. "We must find the source of the corruption within the Veil," Isolde declared firmly. "And you will aid us in this task, Warden, or face the consequences of your failure." For a long moment, Silas stood immobile, as if contemplating her words — or perhaps considering whether it would be worth his while to defy her command. At last, he bowed his head in acquiescence, though there was no mistaking the simmering resentment in his eyes as he did so. "Very well," he said coldly. "Lead on." And so they ventured deeper into the heart of Dymas, guided now by Silas's knowledge of its twisted paths. Everywhere they looked, there were new sights to behold: crystal-clear streams overflowing with sweet nectar; groves of trees suffused with an inner light that bathed their surroundings in radiant hues; even the air itself seemed alive with magic, tingling against Aurora's skin like tiny needles of ice and flame. But beneath this veneer of beauty, a sense of wrongness began to creep over her — a feeling that all was not as it should be. The colors seemed too bright, the scents too fragrant, the fruit too sweet; it was as if the very essence of the realm had been twisted and corrupted by some unseen force. "Can you feel it?" Nyx murmured, echoing her thoughts precisely. "There is something unholy here." Aurora nodded grimly, her hand tightening around the hilt of her dagger. Together, they pressed onward, following the winding path that led ever deeper into the decadent heart of Dymas. As they walked, the landscape began to change subtly; the vineyards and orchards gave way to gardens filled with flowers of impossible hue, each petal adorned with intricate patterns that seemed to dance before Aurora's eyes. Here and there, she caught glimpses of creatures unlike any she had ever seen before — beings that moved like liquid shadow, or shimmered like heat haze on the horizon. Isolde's eyes widened in recognition as she saw these denizens of the Hellscape, and her steps faltered for a moment before she caught herself. "By the Seven," she whispered. "What is it?" Aurora asked sharply. "I have heard tales of such beings," Isolde replied, her voice trembling slightly. "They are known as the Soulforged — those who have traded their very essence for power within the realms." A cold knot of dread formed in Aurora's gut as she listened to Isolde's words. If these Soulforged were indeed what she said they were, then the corruption within Dymas ran far deeper than any of them could have imagined. As if to confirm her darkest fears, Silas spoke up from behind them, his voice low and ominous. "We are being hunted," he said softly. Aurora whirled around, her heart pounding in her chest as she scanned the dense foliage around them for any sign of movement. But there was nothing — only the stillness of the garden, broken by the occasional flutter of leaves in the warm breeze. "What do you mean?" she asked breathlessly. "The Soulforged are not the only ones who seek to harness the power of this realm," Silas replied. "There are others, those who would see the Veil between worlds torn asunder completely." "Demons," Nyx hissed, its voice barely audible over the pounding of Aurora's pulse. "No," Silas replied, a grim smile playing at the corners of his mouth. "Worse." A sudden gust of wind whipped past them, sending the shadows scattering like leaves before a storm. Aurora smelled the sharp tang of ozone in the air, and felt the hairs on the back of her neck stand on end — and then she saw them, emerging from the shadows between the trees with deadly purpose: Wardens, their black robes billowing like smoke, their faces hidden beneath the brim of their hats. Fear twisted like a knife in Aurora's gut as she realized what this meant; that not only were they being pursued by the Soulforged, but also by their own kind — those who had once sworn an oath to protect the Veil between worlds, but who now sought to destroy it utterly. Struggling to contain the rising tide of panic that threatened to overwhelm her completely, she turned to face Silas, her voice shaking with barely controlled fear. "What do we do now?" she demanded. For a long moment, he stood silent, considering the implications of his fellow Wardens' betrayal. At last, he looked up at her, his eyes glinting beneath the shadow of his hat like chips of ice caught in the sunlight. "We have no choice," he said quietly. "We must find the source of the corruption within the Veil — and destroy it — before it is too late." As if in response to his words, the shadows around them began to writhe and swell, coalescing into a single mass of darkness that threatened to engulf them all. With a Wordless cry of desperation, Aurora leapt forward, her dagger flashing in the amber light as she struck at the heart of the darkness with all her might. The world exploded into chaos around them; Nyx's cries echoed through the air like the wail of a thousand damned souls, while Isolde shouted words of power that cracked like thunder overhead. But through it all, one thought remained foremost in Aurora's mind — that whatever happened now, she would face it head-on, armed with nothing but her courage and her will to survive.
created_at"2026-02-19T10:48:02.887Z" 2/19/2026, 10:48:02 AM
model"nousresearch/hermes-3-llama-3.1-70b"
app_id182717
external_user(null)
streamedtrue
cancelledfalse
latency329
moderation_latency(null)
generation_time58919
tokens_prompt1838
tokens_completion2928
native_tokens_prompt1723
native_tokens_completion2501
native_tokens_completion_images(null)
native_tokens_reasoning0
native_tokens_cached0
num_media_prompt(null)
num_input_audio_prompt(null)
num_media_completion0
num_search_results(null)
origin"https://ncbench.com/"
is_byokfalse
finish_reason"stop"
native_finish_reason"stop"
usage0.0012672
router(null)
provider_responses
0
endpoint_id"2151651b-f4e9-4db7-b20d-8b91fb524bf8"
id"cmpl-d0301fd21edf450b841b79128c15ba07"
is_byokfalse
latency51
model_permaslug"nousresearch/hermes-3-llama-3.1-70b"
provider_name"DeepInfra"
status200
api_type"completions"
id"gen-1771498082-gec3faK1Qifh5h7g3N0i"
upstream_id"cmpl-d0301fd21edf450b841b79128c15ba07"
total_cost0.0012672
cache_discount(null)
upstream_inference_cost0
provider_name"DeepInfra"

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags30
adverbTagCount12
adverbTags
0"Aurora echoed incredulously [incredulously]"
1"Isolde explained softly [softly]"
2"the shade murmured ominously [ominously]"
3"she said quietly [quietly]"
4"Aurora asked sharply [sharply]"
5"Isolde replied grimly [grimly]"
6"Isolde declared firmly [firmly]"
7"he said coldly [coldly]"
8"Aurora asked sharply [sharply]"
9"he said softly [softly]"
10"she asked breathlessly [breathlessly]"
11"he said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences43
tagDensity0.698
leniency1
rawRatio0.4
effectiveRatio0.4
53.99% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1956
totalAiIsmAdverbs18
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"softly"
count3
2
adverb"very"
count4
3
adverb"nervously"
count1
4
adverb"anxiously"
count1
5
adverb"sharply"
count2
6
adverb"coldly"
count1
7
adverb"precisely"
count1
8
adverb"completely"
count2
9
adverb"utterly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"softly"
2"very"
3"nervously"
4"anxiously"
5"sharply"
6"coldly"
7"precisely"
8"completely"
9"utterly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
18.20% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1956
totalAiIsms32
found
0
word"shimmered"
count2
1
word"stomach"
count1
2
word"anticipation"
count1
3
word"echoed"
count2
4
word"flicker"
count1
5
word"perfect"
count1
6
word"race"
count1
7
word"dance"
count2
8
word"lurch"
count1
9
word"scanned"
count2
10
word"weight"
count1
11
word"reminder"
count1
12
word"grave"
count1
13
word"cascading"
count1
14
word"chill"
count1
15
word"sanctuary"
count1
16
word"otherworldly"
count1
17
word"firmly"
count1
18
word"simmering"
count1
19
word"crystal"
count1
20
word"radiant"
count1
21
word"sense of"
count1
22
word"echoing"
count1
23
word"intricate"
count1
24
word"pounding"
count2
25
word"pulse"
count1
26
word"glinting"
count1
highlights
0"shimmered"
1"stomach"
2"anticipation"
3"echoed"
4"flicker"
5"perfect"
6"race"
7"dance"
8"lurch"
9"scanned"
10"weight"
11"reminder"
12"grave"
13"cascading"
14"chill"
15"sanctuary"
16"otherworldly"
17"firmly"
18"simmering"
19"crystal"
20"radiant"
21"sense of"
22"echoing"
23"intricate"
24"pounding"
25"pulse"
26"glinting"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count2
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"eyes widened"
88.37% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells4
narrationSentences91
matches
0"e in anticipation"
1"filled with wonder"
2"d with wonder"
3"a flicker of unease"
32.97% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount7
narrationSentences91
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences104
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen54
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1964
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions25
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"As if to confirm her darkest fears, Silas spoke up from behind them, his voice low and ominous."
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions74
wordCount1653
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity1.63
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Dymas4
Aurora27
Isolde13
Nyx11
Fae-forged1
Eden1
Wardens3
Veil2
Silas8
Hellscape1
Soulforged2
Wordless1
persons
0"Dymas"
1"Aurora"
2"Isolde"
3"Nyx"
4"Eden"
5"Wardens"
6"Silas"
places(empty)
globalScore0.683
windowScore0.667
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences70
glossingSentenceCount9
matches
0"shadow that seemed to drink in the dappled sunbeams filtering through the broad leaves overhead"
1"As if sensing their gaze upon it, the seraphine turned its head towards them"
2"as if wondering what business these mortals had in their paradisiacal home"
3"music that seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere at once"
4"as if invoking some secret knowledge"
5"as if contemplating her words — or perhaps considering whether it would be worth his while to defy her command"
6"seemed alive with magic, tingling against Aurora's skin like tiny needles of ice and flame"
7"it was as if the very essence of the realm had been twisted and corrupted by some unseen force"
8"patterns that seemed to dance before Aurora's eyes"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.509
wordCount1964
matches
0"not only were they being pursued by the Soulforged, but also by their own kind"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences104
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs55
mean35.71
std19.19
cv0.537
sampleLengths
055
139
247
347
461
55
614
739
825
933
1048
1158
1248
138
1420
1557
168
1729
1842
1930
2025
217
2226
2345
2411
2517
2649
2749
2811
2945
3054
3130
3250
337
3468
3558
3615
3730
3866
3929
406
4132
4240
4325
4444
457
4632
4713
4814
4972
93.70% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences91
matches
0"been tasked"
1"been twisted"
2"being pursued"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs275
matches
0"were pulsing"
1"was implying"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount11
semicolonCount8
flaggedSentences17
totalSentences104
ratio0.163
matches
0"Here and there, they passed other denizens of this strange realm — beings that resembled men and women but moved with an unearthly grace, their features too perfect to be wholly human."
1"Aurora felt her heart lurch in her chest, certain that at any moment the insubstantial shade would dissipate before her eyes — but then the wind died away, leaving Nyx whole and unharmed once more."
2"Aurora did not need to ask how Nyx knew this; shades had senses beyond mortal ken, able to perceive things that existed just out of reach of human sight."
3"As if in answer to her words, a figure emerged from the shadows between two trees — a tall man dressed all in black, his eyes hidden beneath the brim of his hat."
4"Aurora felt a sudden surge of anger and fear as she realized what he was implying; that all of this beauty and wonder would be lost forever if the Wardens failed in their duty."
5"For a long moment, Silas stood immobile, as if contemplating her words — or perhaps considering whether it would be worth his while to defy her command."
6"Everywhere they looked, there were new sights to behold: crystal-clear streams overflowing with sweet nectar; groves of trees suffused with an inner light that bathed their surroundings in radiant hues; even the air itself seemed alive with magic, tingling against Aurora's skin like tiny needles of ice and flame."
7"But beneath this veneer of beauty, a sense of wrongness began to creep over her — a feeling that all was not as it should be."
8"The colors seemed too bright, the scents too fragrant, the fruit too sweet; it was as if the very essence of the realm had been twisted and corrupted by some unseen force."
9"As they walked, the landscape began to change subtly; the vineyards and orchards gave way to gardens filled with flowers of impossible hue, each petal adorned with intricate patterns that seemed to dance before Aurora's eyes."
10"Here and there, she caught glimpses of creatures unlike any she had ever seen before — beings that moved like liquid shadow, or shimmered like heat haze on the horizon."
11"But there was nothing — only the stillness of the garden, broken by the occasional flutter of leaves in the warm breeze."
12"Aurora smelled the sharp tang of ozone in the air, and felt the hairs on the back of her neck stand on end — and then she saw them, emerging from the shadows between the trees with deadly purpose: Wardens, their black robes billowing like smoke, their faces hidden beneath the brim of their hats."
13"Fear twisted like a knife in Aurora's gut as she realized what this meant; that not only were they being pursued by the Soulforged, but also by their own kind — those who had once sworn an oath to protect the Veil between worlds, but who now sought to destroy it utterly."
14"and destroy it — before it is too late.\""
15"The world exploded into chaos around them; Nyx's cries echoed through the air like the wail of a thousand damned souls, while Isolde shouted words of power that cracked like thunder overhead."
16"But through it all, one thought remained foremost in Aurora's mind — that whatever happened now, she would face it head-on, armed with nothing but her courage and her will to survive."
87.72% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1509
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount76
adverbRatio0.05036447978793903
lyAdverbCount36
lyAdverbRatio0.02385685884691849
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences104
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences104
mean18.88
std10.12
cv0.536
sampleLengths
016
118
221
321
418
511
626
710
826
921
1014
1125
1222
135
149
155
1614
1725
184
1921
2012
2121
2224
2324
2432
2526
2625
2723
288
299
3011
3122
3235
338
3429
3514
3628
3719
3811
3912
4013
417
4218
438
4424
4521
4611
4717
4833
4916
69.55% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.4230769230769231
totalSentences104
uniqueOpeners44
39.22% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences85
matches
0"Everywhere they looked, there were"
ratio0.012
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount17
totalSentences85
matches
0"It felt warm and slightly"
1"Her silver hair shimmered like"
2"It moved with a sinuous"
3"Its eyes glinted like emeralds"
4"She had read about such"
5"It was a melody that"
6"she asked Isolde nervously"
7"She scanned the orchard anxiously,"
8"she said quietly"
9"They were powerful beyond reckoning,"
10"He moved with deadly grace,"
11"His voice was low and"
12"He let the thought trail"
13"he said coldly"
14"he said softly"
15"she asked breathlessly"
16"he said quietly"
ratio0.2
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount60
totalSentences85
matches
0"Aurora crept forward, the warm"
1"The vineyards stretched out endlessly"
2"Nyx drifted alongside her, a"
3"Aurora murmured, reaching out to"
4"It felt warm and slightly"
5"Her silver hair shimmered like"
6"Aurora could almost taste it"
7"Nyx let out a soft"
8"There, a creature unlike any"
9"It moved with a sinuous"
10"Isolde replied, her voice filled"
11"Its eyes glinted like emeralds"
12"Aurora echoed incredulously"
13"She had read about such"
14"Isolde explained softly"
15"The vineyards gave way to"
16"Here and there, they passed"
17"Some smiled at the travelers"
18"It was a melody that"
19"she asked Isolde nervously"
ratio0.706
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount5
totalSentences85
matches
0"As if sensing their gaze"
1"As if in answer to"
2"If these Soulforged were indeed"
3"As if to confirm her"
4"As if in response to"
ratio0.059
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences60
technicalSentenceCount20
matches
0"The vineyards stretched out endlessly before them, laden with strange fruits that gleamed like jewels in the twilight."
1"Nyx drifted alongside her, a living shadow that seemed to drink in the dappled sunbeams filtering through the broad leaves overhead."
2"It felt warm and slightly yielding beneath her touch, as if it were pulsing with some secret energy."
3"Her silver hair shimmered like moonlight, and her pale lavender eyes held an ancient wisdom that made her seem far older than her youthful appearance suggested."
4"Aurora could almost taste it on her tongue, a richness that made her mouth water and her stomach rumble in anticipation."
5"As if sensing their gaze upon it, the seraphine turned its head towards them."
6"Here and there, they passed other denizens of this strange realm — beings that resembled men and women but moved with an unearthly grace, their features too per…"
7"Some smiled at the travelers in welcome, while others simply watched with impassive curiosity, as if wondering what business these mortals had in their paradisi…"
8"It was a melody that made her heart race and her feet itch to dance, even as dread twisted her guts into knots."
9"Isolde's eyes narrowed as she peered into the distance, her lips moving silently as if invoking some secret knowledge."
10"They were powerful beyond reckoning, possessed of arcane knowledge and abilities that made even shades like Nyx seem insignificant in comparison."
11"As if in answer to her words, a figure emerged from the shadows between two trees — a tall man dressed all in black, his eyes hidden beneath the brim of his hat…"
12"Aurora's heart hammered against her ribs as she recognized him: Silas, the barkeep who had offered her sanctuary in his home above the pub."
13"For a long moment, Silas stood immobile, as if contemplating her words — or perhaps considering whether it would be worth his while to defy her command."
14"Everywhere they looked, there were new sights to behold: crystal-clear streams overflowing with sweet nectar; groves of trees suffused with an inner light that …"
15"The colors seemed too bright, the scents too fragrant, the fruit too sweet; it was as if the very essence of the realm had been twisted and corrupted by some un…"
16"Together, they pressed onward, following the winding path that led ever deeper into the decadent heart of Dymas."
17"As they walked, the landscape began to change subtly; the vineyards and orchards gave way to gardens filled with flowers of impossible hue, each petal adorned w…"
18"Struggling to contain the rising tide of panic that threatened to overwhelm her completely, she turned to face Silas, her voice shaking with barely controlled f…"
19"As if in response to his words, the shadows around them began to writhe and swell, coalescing into a single mass of darkness that threatened to engulf them all."
91.67% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags30
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Isolde replied, her voice trembling slightly"
1"Nyx hissed, its voice barely audible over the pounding of Aurora's pulse"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags26
fancyCount11
fancyTags
0"Aurora murmured (murmur)"
1"Isolde whispered (whisper)"
2"Aurora breathed (breathe)"
3"Isolde explained softly (explain)"
4"the shade murmured ominously (murmur)"
5"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
6"Isolde declared firmly (declare)"
7"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
8"she whispered (whisper)"
9"Nyx hissed (hiss)"
10"she demanded (demand)"
dialogueSentences43
tagDensity0.605
leniency1
rawRatio0.423
effectiveRatio0.423
70.2902%