Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTR7F0SX5TYTBQT31P9EVTR

Run Details

Duration:
1m 7s
Cost:
$0.002448
Provider:
DeepInfra

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The Heartstone pendant throbbed against Aurora’s chest as she stepped into the Fae Grove, its crimson pulse warm and insistent. She paused, her breath fogging in the unnatural chill that hung in the air. The ancient oak standing stones loomed ahead, their gnarled roots twisting into the earth like grasping fingers. She rubbed the small crescent-shaped scar on her wrist absently, a nervous tic she’d carried since childhood. The clearing was unnaturally silent, save for the faint rustle of wildflowers that bloomed defiantly in the gloom. Time moved differently here—she’d learned that much from her brief encounters with the Fae-touched. A glance at her watch confirmed it was useless; the hands spun lazily in opposite directions. She clicked the pendant’s silver chain against her fingers. Someone—or something—had guided her here tonight. A note, slipped under her door, scrawled in ink that shimmered like liquid moonlight: *Find me before it’s too late.* "Eva?" she called softly, her voice swallowed by the oppressive stillness. No response. Of course not. Eva wouldn’t be here—couldn’t be here. She’d vanished months ago, leaving nothing but a half-smoked cigarette and a cryptic text: *It’s closer than you think.* Aurora moved deeper into the grove, her trainers crunching on the dry leaves that carpeted the ground. The air thickened with each step, pressing against her skin like a living thing. Her pulse quickened as she caught movement in her periphery—a shadow darting between the trees. She stopped, her hand instinctively reaching for the pocketknife she always carried. "Who’s there?" The silence stretched, taut and expectant. Then, a sound—low, guttural, like a throat being cleared of something thick and wet. It came from behind her. She spun, her knife flashing in the dim light. Nothing. Just the standing stones, their bark weathered to a sickly grey. Her Heartstone pulsed again, sharper this time, and she felt a sudden rush of warmth that spread through her chest. She touched it, the gemstone’s deep crimson glow casting faint shadows on her fingers. Near a Hel portal, it had warned her. She glanced around, her senses heightened. The air tasted metallic, coppery, like blood. Another rustle, this time to her left. She turned, her knife raised, and froze. The wildflowers were… moving. Not swaying in the breeze—there was no breeze—but *bending*, as if something unseen brushed against them. She took a step back, the pendant’s warmth intensifying. "Eva," she whispered again, her voice trembling. "If this is some sick joke—" A branch snapped behind her. She whirled, her knife slicing through empty air. The sound came again, closer now, deliberate. Footsteps. Slow, measured, each one crunching louder than the last. Her breath hitched, her grip tightening on the knife’s handle. "Show yourself." The footsteps stopped. For a moment, there was only silence. Then, a voice—soft, familiar, and utterly wrong. "Rory?" Her stomach dropped. It was Eva’s voice, but distorted, like it was being pulled through water. "Eva? Where are you?" "Here," the voice whispered, closer now. "Look." She turned, her heart hammering in her chest, and froze. At the edge of the clearing stood Eva—or something that looked like her. Her hair was longer, tangled with twigs and leaves, and her eyes—her eyes were wrong. Black, hollow, like voids that drank in the light. "Eva," Aurora breathed, her voice barely audible. "What happened to you?" The thing that wasn’t Eva tilted its head, a smile stretching across its face too wide, too sharp. "I found it, Rory. The entrance. It’s beautiful." Aurora took a step back, her knife trembling in her hand. "Stay where you are. Don’t come any closer." "But I wanted to show you," it said, its voice rising in pitch, almost sing-song. "You’ll like it. You’ll see." The pendant burned against her chest, its glow intensifying. She glanced down instinctively, and when she looked up, it was gone. The clearing was empty again, the wildflowers still. Her breath came in shallow gasps, the knife slick with sweat in her hand. Then, the laughter started—low, guttural, echoing from all directions at once. She spun in circles, her eyes darting between the trees, searching for the source. The pendant pulsed wildly now, its warmth bordering on pain. "Show yourself!" she shouted, her voice raw. The laughter stopped abruptly. In its place, a new sound—a wet, tearing noise, like flesh being pulled apart. She froze, her blood running cold. Slowly, reluctantly, she turned. Behind her, the standing stones had shifted. In the centre of the circle, a gaping maw of darkness yawned open, pulsating with a sickly green light. Shadows writhed within its depths, twisting and coalescing into shapes that resembled human figures—elongated, grotesque, their mouths frozen in silent screams. The pendant’s chain snapped, falling lifelessly to the ground. Its glow extinguished instantly. Aurora stared at the void, her mind screaming at her to run, but her feet remained rooted in place. The shadows reached for her, their movements jagged, jerky, like marionettes on fraying strings. "Eva," she whispered, tears stinging her eyes. "What did you do?" The void pulsed again, its green light intensifying. The shadows surged forward, their grasping fingers inches from her face. She finally broke free of her paralysis, stumbling backward, her knife raised defensively. Then, a hand clamped down on her shoulder, and she screamed.
created_at"2026-02-19T10:48:13.602Z" 2/19/2026, 10:48:13 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags7
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"she called softly [softly]"
1"she whispered again [again]"
dialogueSentences18
tagDensity0.389
leniency0.778
rawRatio0.286
effectiveRatio0.222
72.13% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount897
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"lazily"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count1
2
adverb"utterly"
count1
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
4
adverb"reluctantly"
count1
highlights
0"lazily"
1"softly"
2"utterly"
3"slowly"
4"reluctantly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount897
totalAiIsms25
found
0
word"throbbed"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count2
2
word"chill"
count1
3
word"loomed"
count1
4
word"gloom"
count1
5
word"shimmered"
count1
6
word"oppressive"
count1
7
word"quickened"
count1
8
word"silence"
count2
9
word"pulsed"
count3
10
word"warmth"
count3
11
word"footsteps"
count2
12
word"measured"
count1
13
word"familiar"
count1
14
word"stomach"
count1
15
word"echoing"
count1
16
word"maw"
count1
17
word"depths"
count1
highlights
0"throbbed"
1"pulse"
2"chill"
3"loomed"
4"gloom"
5"shimmered"
6"oppressive"
7"quickened"
8"silence"
9"pulsed"
10"warmth"
11"footsteps"
12"measured"
13"familiar"
14"stomach"
15"echoing"
16"maw"
17"depths"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"stomach dropped/sank"
count1
1
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"stomach dropped"
1"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences81
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences81
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"think"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences92
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen22
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans3
markdownWords12
totalWords879
ratio0.014
matches
0"Find me before it’s too late."
1"It’s closer than you think."
2"bending"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions16
wordCount821
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity0.61
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Heartstone2
Aurora5
Fae2
Grove1
Fae-touched1
Hel1
Eva4
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Eva"
places
0"Fae"
1"Grove"
2"Hel"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences66
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like her"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount879
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences92
matches
0"learned that much"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs29
mean30.31
std20.39
cv0.673
sampleLengths
068
183
211
330
458
52
646
755
843
913
1040
112
1218
1320
147
1547
1611
1726
1819
1920
2043
2135
227
2328
2447
2546
2611
2732
2811
87.94% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences81
matches
0"being cleared"
1"being pulled"
2"was gone"
3"being pulled"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs152
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount14
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences13
totalSentences92
ratio0.141
matches
0"Time moved differently here—she’d learned that much from her brief encounters with the Fae-touched."
1"A glance at her watch confirmed it was useless; the hands spun lazily in opposite directions."
2"Someone—or something—had guided her here tonight."
3"Eva wouldn’t be here—couldn’t be here."
4"Her pulse quickened as she caught movement in her periphery—a shadow darting between the trees."
5"Then, a sound—low, guttural, like a throat being cleared of something thick and wet."
6"Not swaying in the breeze—there was no breeze—but *bending*, as if something unseen brushed against them."
7"Then, a voice—soft, familiar, and utterly wrong."
8"At the edge of the clearing stood Eva—or something that looked like her."
9"Her hair was longer, tangled with twigs and leaves, and her eyes—her eyes were wrong."
10"Then, the laughter started—low, guttural, echoing from all directions at once."
11"In its place, a new sound—a wet, tearing noise, like flesh being pulled apart."
12"Shadows writhed within its depths, twisting and coalescing into shapes that resembled human figures—elongated, grotesque, their mouths frozen in silent screams."
81.01% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount839
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount42
adverbRatio0.050059594755661505
lyAdverbCount21
lyAdverbRatio0.025029797377830752
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences92
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences92
mean9.55
std5.29
cv0.554
sampleLengths
020
114
217
317
418
514
616
79
86
920
1011
112
123
136
1419
1517
1614
1715
1812
192
206
2114
225
239
241
2511
2620
2714
288
296
307
317
327
333
341
3516
369
377
386
395
408
417
421
439
4410
452
463
477
487
491
69.57% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.42391304347826086
totalSentences92
uniqueOpeners39
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount7
totalSentences77
matches
0"Of course not."
1"Then, a sound—low, guttural, like"
2"Just the standing stones, their"
3"Then, a voice—soft, familiar, and"
4"Then, the laughter started—low, guttural,"
5"Slowly, reluctantly, she turned."
6"Then, a hand clamped down"
ratio0.091
64.16% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount30
totalSentences77
matches
0"She paused, her breath fogging"
1"She rubbed the small crescent-shaped"
2"She clicked the pendant’s silver"
3"she called softly, her voice"
4"She’d vanished months ago, leaving"
5"Her pulse quickened as she"
6"She stopped, her hand instinctively"
7"It came from behind her."
8"She spun, her knife flashing"
9"Her Heartstone pulsed again, sharper"
10"She touched it, the gemstone’s"
11"She glanced around, her senses"
12"She turned, her knife raised,"
13"She took a step back,"
14"she whispered again, her voice"
15"She whirled, her knife slicing"
16"Her breath hitched, her grip"
17"Her stomach dropped."
18"It was Eva’s voice, but"
19"She turned, her heart hammering"
ratio0.39
63.90% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount61
totalSentences77
matches
0"The Heartstone pendant throbbed against"
1"She paused, her breath fogging"
2"The ancient oak standing stones"
3"She rubbed the small crescent-shaped"
4"The clearing was unnaturally silent,"
5"Time moved differently here—she’d learned"
6"A glance at her watch"
7"She clicked the pendant’s silver"
8"Someone—or something—had guided her here"
9"A note, slipped under her"
10"she called softly, her voice"
11"Eva wouldn’t be here—couldn’t be"
12"She’d vanished months ago, leaving"
13"Aurora moved deeper into the"
14"The air thickened with each"
15"Her pulse quickened as she"
16"She stopped, her hand instinctively"
17"The silence stretched, taut and"
18"It came from behind her."
19"She spun, her knife flashing"
ratio0.792
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences77
matches(empty)
ratio0
11.28% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences38
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"The clearing was unnaturally silent, save for the faint rustle of wildflowers that bloomed defiantly in the gloom."
1"A note, slipped under her door, scrawled in ink that shimmered like liquid moonlight: *Find me before it’s too late.*"
2"Aurora moved deeper into the grove, her trainers crunching on the dry leaves that carpeted the ground."
3"Not swaying in the breeze—there was no breeze—but *bending*, as if something unseen brushed against them."
4"The thing that wasn’t Eva tilted its head, a smile stretching across its face too wide, too sharp."
5"She spun in circles, her eyes darting between the trees, searching for the source."
6"Shadows writhed within its depths, twisting and coalescing into shapes that resembled human figures—elongated, grotesque, their mouths frozen in silent screams."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags7
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"she whispered again, her voice trembling"
1"Aurora breathed, her voice barely audible"
2"it said, its voice rising in pitch, almost sing-song"
3"she shouted, her voice raw"
4"she whispered, tears stinging her eyes"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"she whispered again (whisper)"
1"the voice whispered (whisper)"
2"Aurora breathed (breathe)"
3"she shouted (shout)"
4"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences18
tagDensity0.389
leniency0.778
rawRatio0.714
effectiveRatio0.556
70.5545%