Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTR7JVEY2562BRC341T72Q8

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Duration:
5m 33s
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$0.001810
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door to The Raven's Nest creaked open, a blast of cold night air following a woman inside. She shrugs off her coat, revealing a face lined with fatigue. Her eyes scan the dimly lit bar, finally landing on Silas polishing glasses behind the counter. She makes her way over, claiming a stool with a heavy sigh. "Long day, Rory?" Silas asks, setting aside his rag. Aurora shakes her head with a wry chuckle. "You could say that. Whiskey, please. Neat." As Silas pours, Rory's eyes drift to the mirror behind the bar, not recognizing the woman staring back. When did her hair get so grey? She runs a hand through the short black strands self-consciously. The whiskey appears. Rory downs it in one go, sputtering as she sets the glass back on the bar. "Fuck, that's good." "Rough life of a delivery girl keeping you on your toes?" Silas has that knowing look, like he sees right through her bullshit. But then, he always could. "You don't want to know, Si. Trust me." Rory signals for another. Silas pours, eyes narrowed. "Suit yourself, love. But you know where to find me if that changes." He moves off to serve another customer, leaving Rory to stew in her own head. She's chasing her tail and she knows it. Deliveries by day, a quasi-legal courier by night. Work for the Triads even though deep down she despises them. What a fall from grace for the girl voted Most Likely to Change the World. She's lost in whiskey-soaked maudlin thoughts when the door opens again, a tall figure silhouetted against the neon sign. He looks around, seems to spot someone he knows. Grins. And then his eyes find Rory at the bar. "Well, I'll be damned," he drawls, sauntering over with a loose-hipped swagger. "Aurora fucking Carter." Rory's head whips around so fast she nearly gives herself whiplash. It can't be. But there he is, large as life. Evan fucking Hughes. Her ex. The one who made her life hell. "What the - what are you doing here?" she stammers. Smooth, Rory. Evan laughs, clapping a hand on her shoulder like they're old buddies. "Hey, is that any way to greet an old friend? It's been, what, five years?" "Five years, four months and about 15 days," Rory mutters. Evan just grins wider. He's still handsome in that devil-may-care way that used to charm the pants off her. Literally. "Buy me a drink, old timer," Evan says, plopping down on the stool next to her. Rory ignores him, throwing back her third whiskey. It burns all the way down, fueling the slow simmer of her anger. "You look good, Rory," Evan comments, eyes raking over her. "Life's treating you well, I see." A harsh laugh escapes her. "Oh, you have no idea." "I've missed you, you know," he says with a smirk, leaning in. "We had some wild times." "Times best forgotten," Rory snaps, inching away. She can feel the heat radiating off his body, smell his cologne. It's the same one he wore when he - No. She won't go down that road, not tonight. "Come on, baby," Evan coaxes, voice lowered. "Don't be like that. I've changed, I swear. I'm not that guy anymore." Rory's heard that line before. Too many times to count. She pins him with a look that would wither a lesser man. "People don't change, Evan. They just get better at hiding who they are." He has the decency to flinch. Good. She hopes it stings. "Anyway," Rory says crisply, rising from her stool. "Best of luck with...whatever." She starts pushing through the crowd. "Rory, wait!" Evan calls. But she's not listening. She's done with this conversation, with him. She's almost at the door when she spots Silas watching from the corner, eyebrows raised. He knows what happened with Evan. He found her after one particularly nasty episode, crying in an alley, mascara running down her face. With a start, Rory realizes she's still seeing him - this man she hasn't laid eyes on in half a decade. Except now he's got a vicious scar bisecting his cheek, courtesy of a Triad enforcer last year. Her doing. Her shoulders slump. That night was what finally made her flee Cardiff, when it became clear just how far Evan would go to control her. And here he is now, toxic as ever. Rory pushes out into the chill night, sucking in deep lungfuls of air. She needs space, needs to clear her head. She has no idea where she's going. She just walks, one foot in front of the other, reluctantly threading her way through backstreets gone black and silent. The bottle of whiskey dangles from her fingers, sloshing with each step. She's so lost in thought that a figure emerges from the shadows, she startles, dropping the bottle with a curse. It shatters on the cobblestones. "Shit, you scared me!" Rory hisses. The figure - a man - steps into a pool of lamplight. She recognizes him. It's the stranger from earlier, the one she unlocked a memory for. He looks different now, worn out. Dark circles ring his eyes. His hands tremble as he takes a drag on a cigarette. "Oh. It's you," Rory says. She crouches, scooping up the broken bottle. She's cut herself but doesn't care. "Thought you were someone else for a sec." "I'm always someone else," the man replies cryptically. He flicks ash onto the ground. "Didn't mean to sneak up on you." "Mm." Rory straightens, glancing around uneasily. She likes this part of town less and less. "Weird running into you here." The stranger takes a final drag, stubbing out the cigarette against the sole of his boot. "I live nearby. What's your excuse, aurora?" Rory bristles. "I live here too, evidently." She doesn't know this man, doesn't owe him her life story. "I used to know someone like you," he sighs. "A good person. Genuine. She had this way of seeing people, like...like she could peel back all the layers, see who they really were under all the bullshit. Used to drive me wild." Rory stiffens. Used to? Did something happen to his friend? Is that who he confused her for earlier? Intrigued despite herself, she asks, "What happened to her?" "Who says anything happened?" The man's voice is suddenly guarded. "You did. Just now." Rory folds her arms. "You said 'used to'. What changed?" "Guess I grew up," he mutters. But Rory isn't so sure. For a long moment they just stand there, facing each other in the empty street. The man seems to reach some internal conclusion. He steps closer. "You remind me of her," he says quietly. "That's all. Must be the eyes." His thumb brushes her cheek, pushing a strand of hair behind her ear. Rory's heart thumps. His touch is electric, sending shivers down her spine. And yet she leans into it, craving the contact. It's been so long since anyone touched her like this. Like she's something precious. "Come home with me," the man whispers. His lips hover a breath from hers. "Let me make you feel like the most beautiful woman in the world." He doesn't give her time to answer, to protest. He kisses her, a hand tangling in her hair. It's wrong, she knows it's wrong. But god, it feels so right. His lips are soft, insistent. He tastes like smoke and whiskey and a desperation that matches her own. They stumble together down the street, hands roaming, breath mingling. Clothes come off in a frenzy, buttons flying, fabric ripping. And then it's just skin on skin, hip on hip, ragged moans swallowed by the night. After, she cries. Giant, heaving sobs that shake her entire body. The man holds her as if he'll never let go. Maybe he won't. "I've got you," he breathes into her hair. "I've got you." And for the first time in years, Rory believes it.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
88.89% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags27
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"Rory says crisply [crisply]"
1"the man replies cryptically [cryptically]"
2"he says quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences46
tagDensity0.587
leniency1
rawRatio0.111
effectiveRatio0.111
88.73% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1331
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"reluctantly"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"reluctantly"
1"really"
2"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
84.97% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1331
totalAiIsms4
found
0
word"charm"
count1
1
word"chill"
count1
2
word"electric"
count1
3
word"down her spine"
count1
highlights
0"charm"
1"chill"
2"electric"
3"down her spine"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences131
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences131
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seems to"
1"happen to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences147
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen33
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1330
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"After, she cries."
39.10% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions49
wordCount1037
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity2.22
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Silas6
Aurora1
Rory23
Triads1
Likely1
Change1
World1
Hughes1
Smooth1
Evan9
Triad1
Cardiff1
persons
0"Nest"
1"Silas"
2"Aurora"
3"Rory"
4"Hughes"
5"Evan"
places
0"Raven"
1"Change"
2"Cardiff"
globalScore0.391
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences82
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1330
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences147
matches
0"heard that line"
1"thought that a"
86.56% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs54
mean24.63
std11.16
cv0.453
sampleLengths
057
117
242
322
428
516
613
757
838
915
1033
1112
1227
1330
1437
1516
1610
1717
1828
199
2020
2135
2211
2318
2415
2538
2640
2733
2821
2939
3025
3121
3234
3326
3421
3520
3623
3718
3842
3918
409
4110
4214
4311
4426
4527
4635
4727
4818
4930
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences131
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs212
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences147
ratio0.014
matches
0"With a start, Rory realizes she's still seeing him - this man she hasn't laid eyes on in half a decade."
1"The figure - a man - steps into a pool of lamplight."
97.95% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1039
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount44
adverbRatio0.04234841193455245
lyAdverbCount14
lyAdverbRatio0.013474494706448507
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences147
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences147
mean9.05
std5.35
cv0.592
sampleLengths
018
111
216
312
49
58
625
77
810
93
1016
113
1223
135
1412
154
1613
1715
188
198
2011
2115
2219
239
241
259
2612
273
2811
293
307
313
322
337
3410
352
3612
3715
3810
394
4015
411
4216
438
4413
4510
466
475
485
4912
66.89% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.4421768707482993
totalSentences147
uniqueOpeners65
58.48% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences114
matches
0"Too many times to count."
1"Maybe he won't."
ratio0.018
37.54% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount52
totalSentences114
matches
0"She shrugs off her coat,"
1"Her eyes scan the dimly"
2"She makes her way over,"
3"She runs a hand through"
4"He moves off to serve"
5"She's chasing her tail and"
6"She's lost in whiskey-soaked maudlin"
7"He looks around, seems to"
8"he drawls, sauntering over with"
9"It can't be."
10"He's still handsome in that"
11"It burns all the way"
12"he says with a smirk,"
13"She can feel the heat"
14"It's the same one he"
15"She won't go down that"
16"She pins him with a"
17"He has the decency to"
18"She hopes it stings."
19"She starts pushing through the"
ratio0.456
74.04% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount88
totalSentences114
matches
0"The door to The Raven's"
1"She shrugs off her coat,"
2"Her eyes scan the dimly"
3"She makes her way over,"
4"Silas asks, setting aside his"
5"Aurora shakes her head with"
6"She runs a hand through"
7"The whiskey appears."
8"Rory downs it in one"
9"Silas has that knowing look,"
10"Rory signals for another"
11"Silas pours, eyes narrowed."
12"He moves off to serve"
13"She's chasing her tail and"
14"Deliveries by day, a quasi-legal"
15"She's lost in whiskey-soaked maudlin"
16"He looks around, seems to"
17"he drawls, sauntering over with"
18"Rory's head whips around so"
19"It can't be."
ratio0.772
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences114
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences36
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"He's still handsome in that devil-may-care way that used to charm the pants off her."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags27
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Evan comments, eyes raking over her"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags17
fancyCount8
fancyTags
0"he drawls (drawl)"
1"she stammers (stammer)"
2"Evan comments (comment)"
3"Rory snaps (snap)"
4"he sighs (sigh)"
5"he mutters (mutter)"
6"the man whispers (whisper)"
7"he breathes (breathe)"
dialogueSentences46
tagDensity0.37
leniency0.739
rawRatio0.471
effectiveRatio0.348
84.1050%