Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTR8CX1DHHKTD9X6306VXSQ

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Duration:
52.2s
Cost:
$0.001630

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The pungent scent of decay clung to the walls of the abandoned Tube station, an unsettling mix of rust and something more primal. Detective Harlow Quinn knelt beside the body, the flickering light from her torch dancing across the ghastly scene. The victim lay sprawled near a shattered vending machine, the candy wrappers strewn like confetti around him—a grotesque celebration of an end no one had wanted. “Quinn!” Constable Harris’s voice broke through the gloom, heavy with urgency. He appeared reluctant at the entrance, casting nervous glances deeper into the shadows. “You need to see this.” Without lifting her head, Quinn grunted, focusing on the fine tendrils of crimson that twisted and pooled beneath the body. The victim, a middle-aged man with thinning hair and a woollen cardigan, looked utterly out of place in this derelict world. She turned her attention to the grotesque markings on his skin, patterns too specific to be the result of mere happenstance. Suddenly, a sharp rattle echoed from the tunnels beyond. Harris’s face paled as he instinctively shifted his weight back, but Quinn remained immovable, her mind racing through possibilities. “What did you find?” she demanded, glancing absentmindedly at the dried blood that had congealed, glistening darkly in the dim light. “There’s a scrap of paper in his pocket—occult symbols. I thought you’d want to…” Harris trailed off, his voice small. She could sense the tremors that danced along the edge of his words. In the world they inhabited, fear was a common companion, but it seemed particularly potent here. Quinn took a breath, her brow furrowing as she narrowed her eyes at the body once more. He’d been murdered, no doubt about it, but why here? Why now? She waved Harris closer, reaching for the victim’s inner coat pocket, her fingers deft and sure despite the damp and decay surrounding her. The wrinkled piece of paper slipped from the fabric and landed with a soft plop on the ground. Quinn picked it up and held it before the torchlight, the symbols more intricate than she expected. Each curl and twist seemed alive, vibrating with energy that didn’t belong to the mortal realm. “These are Grim Novices, but they don’t invoke ritual. Not without a circle.” “What do you mean?” Harris asked, peering over her shoulder, his eyebrows knit with confusion. “Could it be a simple death? Gang issues or something? Let’s not look too deep…” His voice faded out as her focus sharpened. “Nothing about this is simple.” She rolled the paper delicately between her fingers, resisting the urge to let anxiety creep in. These symbols weren’t from the city’s dark underbelly. **The Veil Market** sold charms, yes, but to see it here—at a murder scene—-it settled coldly in the pit of her stomach. “A compact, but there’s no summoning circle. This was something else entirely.” “But the Chief,” Harris stammered, shaking his head as though trying to dislodge her interpretation of events. “He’ll want a straightforward cause of death. Nothing too…” He dropped his voice, even though they were alone. “Unholy, right?” “He scared of what he doesn’t understand.” Harlow gestured dismissively, rising to her full height. “It’s about the victim’s connections. *Your least favourite element, boy*—the occult!” She felt the burn of his eyes on her, a mixture of curiosity and apprehension. “But without concrete evidence…” he started. “Evidence?” Quinn swept her arm towards the body in disgust. “This isn’t just a matter of street gangs. The crime scene screams of purpose! Look at how deliberately this was executed.” She gestured towards the body again, as though it were a tick on the chalkboard of the universe, pointing out every scribble and line. “He’s positioned like an offering. You think they’d just toss their enemies aside like refuse?” Harris shuffled nervously. “Okay, but it’s not coming together.” “Not yet,” she admitted, biting the inside of her cheek. “Grab me the small evidence bag and the pen from my kit.” The young officer hurried away, no doubt grateful for the distraction. Quinn's eyes grazed over the walls where grime layered thickly, memories of what this station used to be stealing into her mind, long before it fell out of favour. She knew every jump and jolt of history woven into London’s bones, but this was different. Snatches of a malevolent darkness were winding their way into the pulse of the city, threatening to unsettle everything she thought she understood. Moments later, Harris returned, flimsy plastic bag opening in the dim light. At Quinn’s feet, the paper still lay waiting—an echo of the past and a promise of the future. She tucked it inside, then began to examine the surrounding area, her gaze darting between the body and the walls, the damp floor beneath them calling out to the cinders that lingered. Where the shadows thickened, something felt off. And there it was. Amidst the wreckage, a silver glint caught her attention, glimmering through the debris—a small brass **compass**. Quinn knelt to retrieve it, the verdigris patina smooth and unusual in her grip. The etched sigils along its face were barely visible, but her heart raced at the implication. “Harris!” She shot a glance toward him, her voice dangerously low. “Get forensics down here—now.” “What is it?” he replied, eyes scanning the area nervously. “This compass... It didn’t just fall here,” she said, twisting it in her palm, feeling the needle tug, almost demanding. “It’s attuned to the supernatural.” Harris blanched, using the back of his hand to wipe his brow. “You’re sure?” “Why do you think I’d drag you into this bloody hole otherwise?” she snapped. “This is more than our usual fare.” “But...” he stammered, “aren’t we looking at some local crime?” “Do you *really* think a local gang decided to base themselves in an abandoned underground?” She felt the vibrations of frustration rolling through her; her instincts screamed that this was layered, like an intricate tapestry woven with exquisite care. Before he could respond, the walls began to echo with murmurs. The sound swarmed through the tunnels, distant but growing nearer, like whispers from the void. Quinn’s sharp glance met Harris’s wide eyes, while the needle of the compass swung wildly. Whatever it had been pointing at had been awakened, and it was coming. “Get the bag!” Harlow ordered, her voice a whisper as she crouched behind the vending machine, the shadows swallowing her. “Now!” “What? Why—” “Just do it!” She hissed. As Harris fumbled with the evidence bag, Quinn’s instincts lights flared, igniting every nerve in her body. The hairs on the back of her neck bristled as the whispers grew louder, like the raging wind of a cosmic storm just beyond the veil of their reality, clawing at the very edges. Two figures emerged from the shadows, coalescing into human form. Dressed in tattered cloaks, they stepped into the faint light, their faces obscured. Quinn felt something deeper spiral inside her; the thrill of the chase igniting against the encroaching darkness. “Quinn, we should—” “Quiet!” she murmured sharply. “This isn’t just a conversation.” Harlow raised the compass, the needle spinning furiously. It pulsed in response, alive and insistent. Someone would bleed tonight, but it wouldn’t be them; not if she could help it. “Are you ready?” she whispered, the predatory focus sharpening in her gaze. She felt the fear within Harris, but there wasn’t time for that. The compass now filled with purpose, beckoned her into the ever-looming shadows.
total_cost0.0016298999999999999

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags25
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Harlow gestured dismissively [dismissively]"
1"she murmured sharply [sharply]"
dialogueSentences39
tagDensity0.641
leniency1
rawRatio0.08
effectiveRatio0.08
63.97% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1249
totalAiIsmAdverbs9
found
0
adverb"utterly"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
2
adverb"coldly"
count1
3
adverb"deliberately"
count1
4
adverb"nervously"
count2
5
adverb"really"
count1
6
adverb"very"
count1
7
adverb"sharply"
count1
highlights
0"utterly"
1"suddenly"
2"coldly"
3"deliberately"
4"nervously"
5"really"
6"very"
7"sharply"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1249
totalAiIsms25
found
0
word"dancing"
count1
1
word"shattered"
count1
2
word"gloom"
count1
3
word"echoed"
count1
4
word"weight"
count1
5
word"racing"
count1
6
word"glistening"
count1
7
word"furrowing"
count1
8
word"intricate"
count2
9
word"stomach"
count1
10
word"apprehension"
count1
11
word"pulse"
count1
12
word"echo"
count2
13
word"amidst"
count1
14
word"glint"
count1
15
word"etched"
count1
16
word"raced"
count1
17
word"implication"
count1
18
word"scanning"
count1
19
word"tapestry"
count1
20
word"whisper"
count1
21
word"pulsed"
count1
22
word"looming"
count1
highlights
0"dancing"
1"shattered"
2"gloom"
3"echoed"
4"weight"
5"racing"
6"glistening"
7"furrowing"
8"intricate"
9"stomach"
10"apprehension"
11"pulse"
12"echo"
13"amidst"
14"glint"
15"etched"
16"raced"
17"implication"
18"scanning"
19"tapestry"
20"whisper"
21"pulsed"
22"looming"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences72
matches
0"y with urgency"
1"t with confusion"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences72
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences86
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen45
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans4
markdownWords10
totalWords1241
ratio0.008
matches
0"The Veil Market"
1"Your least favourite element, boy"
2"compass"
3"really"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Without lifting her head, Quinn grunted, focusing on the fine tendrils of crimson that twisted and pooled beneath the bo…"
89.39% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions31
wordCount990
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity1.21
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Harris"
discoveredNames
Tube1
Harlow4
Quinn12
Harris12
Veil1
London1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Harris"
places
0"Veil"
1"London"
globalScore0.894
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences64
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"appeared reluctant at the entrance, casting nervous glances deeper into the shadows"
1"seemed particularly potent here"
2"seemed alive vibrating with energy that didn’t belong to the mortal realm"
3"as though trying to dislodge her interpretation of events"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1241
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences86
matches
0"screamed that this"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs32
mean38.78
std22.18
cv0.572
sampleLengths
067
129
262
349
449
552
664
738
863
937
1041
116
1270
139
1422
1579
1669
1765
1810
1925
2014
2121
2210
2339
2454
2521
262
2756
2840
293
3039
3136
90.64% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences72
matches
0"been murdered"
1"was layered"
2"been awakened"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs169
matches
0"were winding"
1"was coming"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount5
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences86
ratio0.081
matches
0"The victim lay sprawled near a shattered vending machine, the candy wrappers strewn like confetti around him—a grotesque celebration of an end no one had wanted."
1"**The Veil Market** sold charms, yes, but to see it here—at a murder scene—-it settled coldly in the pit of her stomach."
2"At Quinn’s feet, the paper still lay waiting—an echo of the past and a promise of the future."
3"Amidst the wreckage, a silver glint caught her attention, glimmering through the debris—a small brass **compass**."
4"“Do you *really* think a local gang decided to base themselves in an abandoned underground?” She felt the vibrations of frustration rolling through her; her instincts screamed that this was layered, like an intricate tapestry woven with exquisite care."
5"Quinn felt something deeper spiral inside her; the thrill of the chase igniting against the encroaching darkness."
6"Someone would bleed tonight, but it wouldn’t be them; not if she could help it."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount996
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount34
adverbRatio0.03413654618473896
lyAdverbCount19
lyAdverbRatio0.019076305220883535
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences86
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences86
mean14.43
std8.16
cv0.566
sampleLengths
023
118
226
311
413
55
620
721
821
99
1019
1121
1220
1313
1416
1517
1610
172
1823
1918
2017
2116
2213
2315
2423
2521
268
2722
2812
2917
3018
312
3215
3326
346
3510
3645
3715
383
396
4010
4112
4211
4329
4416
4523
4612
4718
4832
497
84.11% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.5116279069767442
totalSentences86
uniqueOpeners44
49.75% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences67
matches
0"Suddenly, a sharp rattle echoed"
ratio0.015
88.66% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount22
totalSentences67
matches
0"He appeared reluctant at the"
1"She turned her attention to"
2"she demanded, glancing absentmindedly at"
3"She could sense the tremors"
4"He’d been murdered, no doubt"
5"She waved Harris closer, reaching"
6"His voice faded out as"
7"She rolled the paper delicately"
8"He dropped his voice, even"
9"She felt the burn of"
10"She gestured towards the body"
11"she admitted, biting the inside"
12"She knew every jump and"
13"She tucked it inside, then"
14"She shot a glance toward"
15"he replied, eyes scanning the"
16"she said, twisting it in"
17"She felt the vibrations of"
18"she murmured sharply"
19"It pulsed in response, alive"
ratio0.328
49.55% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount55
totalSentences67
matches
0"The pungent scent of decay"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn knelt beside"
2"The victim lay sprawled near"
3"Constable Harris’s voice broke through"
4"He appeared reluctant at the"
5"The victim, a middle-aged man"
6"She turned her attention to"
7"Harris’s face paled as he"
8"she demanded, glancing absentmindedly at"
9"Harris trailed off, his voice"
10"She could sense the tremors"
11"Quinn took a breath, her"
12"He’d been murdered, no doubt"
13"She waved Harris closer, reaching"
14"The wrinkled piece of paper"
15"Quinn picked it up and"
16"Each curl and twist seemed"
17"Harris asked, peering over her"
18"His voice faded out as"
19"She rolled the paper delicately"
ratio0.821
74.63% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences67
matches
0"Before he could respond, the"
ratio0.015
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences40
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Without lifting her head, Quinn grunted, focusing on the fine tendrils of crimson that twisted and pooled beneath the body."
1"She tucked it inside, then began to examine the surrounding area, her gaze darting between the body and the walls, the damp floor beneath them calling out to th…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags25
uselessAdditionCount7
matches
0"Harris trailed, his voice small"
1"She felt, a mixture of curiosity and apprehension"
2"She gestured, as though it were a tick on the chalkboard of the universe, pointing out every scribble and line"
3"She shot, her voice dangerously low"
4"he replied, eyes scanning the area nervously"
5"Harlow raised, the needle spinning furiously"
6"she whispered, the predatory focus sharpening in her gaze"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags13
fancyCount10
fancyTags
0"she demanded (demand)"
1"Harris stammered (stammer)"
2"she admitted (admit)"
3"she snapped (snap)"
4"he stammered (stammer)"
5"She felt (feel)"
6"Harlow ordered (order)"
7"She hissed (hiss)"
8"she murmured sharply (murmur)"
9"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences39
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0.769
effectiveRatio0.513
76.3568%