Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTR9ZHBXNAH800EJMNA4ZHB

Run Details

Duration:
14.9s
Cost:
$0.000784
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Her breath caught as the crunch of leaves beneath her feet suddenly sounded too loud in the silence, echoing unnaturally, like a burst of static through a static-filled radio. Aurora Carter—or Rory, as friends called her—paused in the shadow of an ancient oak, her eyes darting through the darkening woods, hunting the faintest flicker of movement. The Heartstone pendant pulsed faintly in her hand, warming subtly against her skin, a dull throb that reminded her she wasn’t here by accident. The thin, silver chained gift had clung to her every step since she slipped it out of her pocket, somewhere between Richmond Park’s dense shadows and this abandoned clearing. The boundary stood silent, marked by the ancient oak standing stones, standing like sleep-deprived sentinels, each one gnarled and moss-covered, flickering at the edge of her vision. She shivered despite herself, a whisper of wind crawling through the trees, carrying an almost metallic scent, sweet and sour at once. Time, she knew, behaved differently here; an hour outside could stretch into days or fleeting minutes, and that alone was enough to plant doubt in her mind. But the real unease simmered beneath that—something was wrong, something she couldn't quite put her finger on but felt deep in her gut. The only sounds now were the shifting rustle of the undergrowth and her own uneven breathing, the spikes of adrenaline piercing her tense muscles. She had come here for answers, chasing whispers in shadows, driven by a compulsion she should have ignored. That pendant, glowing with an inner crimson hue, pulsed irregularly, as if alive. A sudden movement flickered at the corner of her eye, quick as a flicker in a dark room—no more than a shadow passing through the trees, gone before she could focus. She instinctively clenched her fists, the small crescent scar on her wrist prickling cold. Her first instinct was to dismiss it as a trick of the dark, but her mind refused to settle. “Just your imagination,” she muttered under her breath, voice cracking in the thick silence. Her breath fogged in the cool air, settling like a ghost at her feet. Still, she shifted, angling her body instinctively toward the boundary stones, leaning closer to the ancient oak. Inside, she knew, the time slipped at an entirely different pace. A place where centuries could pass in a blink, or vanish in a heartbeat. She touched the rough bark of the standing stone nearest her, fingers tracing the deep carvings—symbols, or old runes now eroded with age. Her stomach clenched as it felt like a faint pulse radiated outward from the stone itself, a sluggish thrum that she felt in her bones. Her eyes flicked up, scanning the shadows, waiting for something—anything—to reveal itself. Darkness pressed in heavier, nearly tangible, like an unseen weight leaning against her shoulders. Then, a whisper drifted through the trees, an unintelligible susurrus that seemed to crawl directly into her ears, blending into the wind’s low moan. It was an invitation—no, a warning? She couldn’t tell, only that her instincts screamed to retreat, but she couldn’t move. Not yet. A flicker of movement again—flittering at the very edge of her vision. Something small, quick, darting between the trees, disappearing whenever she dared to focus on it. Her pulse hammered in her ears, her fingers tightening around the pendant, as if it could shield her from whatever macabre game was unfolding. A faint, soft sound broke through the night–a low, cracking cough, distant but somehow closer. She froze, breath hitching. Her eyes widened, trying to lock onto the source, but the shadows refused to stay still. Instead, they seemed to pulsate gently, breathing along with her, alive with an unnatural vitality. Every sound, every shift of the woods, amplified in her ears, feeding a gnawing certainty that she was not alone. Then, out of the corner of her eye, she saw it: a flicker—something moving behind the low-hanging branches, a shadow with no shape, no face, only a shifting darkness that slid closer. Her heart stuttered in her chest. Her hand clenched the Heartstone pendant tighter—almost painfully—feeling it pulse as if sensing her growing alarm. A second cough, nearer now, rattled out like a cracked bone. The underbrush rustled as if something or someone was pushing through it deliberately, creeping slowly, deliberately. Her stomach twisted into knots. Something was watching her—something that didn’t belong here, didn’t belong in her world at all. She had read stories, seen the warning signs, but that primal fear—this creeping, suffocating dread—was unlike anything she had prepared for. The woods blurred at the edges, shadows dancing and blurring like ink spills in water, distorting reality. Her mind buzzed—was she imagining it? Could she be losing her grip? Yet deep down, certainty remained: she wasn’t alone, and whatever lurked in the darkness knew she was here. A sharp movement now—faint yet deliberate. Someone, or something, stepped into a patch of moonlight filtering through the trees. For a moment, she saw it—a figure, tall and hunched, cloaked in swirling darkness, face hidden beneath a hood. The outline vanished as quickly as it appeared, but the sense of being watched intensified. Her fingernails dug into her palm, pressing against the scar, grounding herself. Her senses sharpened, ears straining for any sound beyond the rustling leaves and her own ragged breathing. The pendant’s glow grew brighter, faintly warm against her skin, as if responding to her fear. A sudden, deafening crack split the silence—like a branch snapping, loud enough to shudder through her entire frame. She swung her head toward the noise, eyes searching. Nothing. Everything remained still—except for the faint shifting of shadows, dark entities whispering secrets that she would never fully understand. Her mind told her to run, to turn away from this nightmare, but her body refused to obey. Instead she reached into her pocket for the small, crimson gem hanging from the Heartstone pendant—an artifact from Dymas with a power she barely grasped. Its faint glow flickered to life, pulses of warmth spilling into her palm, a fragile shield against the terrible, uncanny whispering in the woods. She felt it then: a silent, ever-present presence watching, waiting. Something ancient, something alive with hunger. The boundary stones hummed softly beneath her fingertips—a gateway, a lock, maybe both—and she knew with grim certainty time was slipping faster now, no longer stopping at her command. The shadows thickened, swirling like a black oil slick across her vision, not quite touching her but closing in. She bit her lip hard, forcing herself to stay still, to breathe. That’s when she saw it—something, just beyond the line of her sight, skimming the edge of the boundary. A shape, elongated and shifting, impossible to define, but undeniably there. And it was watching her.
created_at"2026-02-19T10:49:36.052Z" 2/19/2026, 10:49:36 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags1
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences1
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
65.46% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1158
totalAiIsmAdverbs8
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count1
2
adverb"gently"
count1
3
adverb"deliberately"
count2
4
adverb"slowly"
count1
5
adverb"quickly"
count1
6
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"very"
2"gently"
3"deliberately"
4"slowly"
5"quickly"
6"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1158
totalAiIsms32
found
0
word"silence"
count3
1
word"echoing"
count1
2
word"flicker"
count4
3
word"pulsed"
count2
4
word"throb"
count1
5
word"sentinels"
count1
6
word"whisper"
count2
7
word"fleeting"
count1
8
word"flickered"
count2
9
word"tracing"
count1
10
word"stomach"
count2
11
word"pulse"
count3
12
word"flicked"
count1
13
word"scanning"
count1
14
word"tangible"
count1
15
word"weight"
count1
16
word"macabre"
count1
17
word"dancing"
count1
18
word"sense of"
count1
19
word"warmth"
count1
20
word"uncanny"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"echoing"
2"flicker"
3"pulsed"
4"throb"
5"sentinels"
6"whisper"
7"fleeting"
8"flickered"
9"tracing"
10"stomach"
11"pulse"
12"flicked"
13"scanning"
14"tangible"
15"weight"
16"macabre"
17"dancing"
18"sense of"
19"warmth"
20"uncanny"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"clenched jaw/fists"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
1"clenched her fists"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences69
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences69
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences69
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1129
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions3
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions8
wordCount1126
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity0.27
worstName"Heartstone"
maxWindowNameDensity0.5
worstWindowName"Heartstone"
discoveredNames
Carter1
Rory1
Heartstone3
Richmond1
Park1
Dymas1
persons
0"Carter"
1"Rory"
places
0"Heartstone"
1"Richmond"
2"Park"
3"Dymas"
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences64
glossingSentenceCount6
matches
0"quite put her finger on but felt deep in her gut"
1"felt like a faint pulse radiated outwar"
2"susurrus that seemed to crawl directly into her ears, blending into the wind’s low moan"
3"as if sensing her growing alarm"
4"as if responding to her fear"
5"not quite touching her but closing in"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.886
wordCount1129
matches
0"not quite touching her but closing in"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences69
matches(empty)
34.24% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs20
mean56.45
std15.23
cv0.27
sampleLengths
056
180
272
355
464
570
660
760
851
970
1054
1168
1247
1353
1445
1547
1667
1745
1860
195
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences69
matches(empty)
63.95% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs196
matches
0"was pushing"
1"was watching"
2"was slipping"
3"was watching"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount25
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences21
totalSentences69
ratio0.304
matches
0"Aurora Carter—or Rory, as friends called her—paused in the shadow of an ancient oak, her eyes darting through the darkening woods, hunting the faintest flicker of movement."
1"Time, she knew, behaved differently here; an hour outside could stretch into days or fleeting minutes, and that alone was enough to plant doubt in her mind."
2"But the real unease simmered beneath that—something was wrong, something she couldn't quite put her finger on but felt deep in her gut."
3"A sudden movement flickered at the corner of her eye, quick as a flicker in a dark room—no more than a shadow passing through the trees, gone before she could focus."
4"She touched the rough bark of the standing stone nearest her, fingers tracing the deep carvings—symbols, or old runes now eroded with age."
5"Her eyes flicked up, scanning the shadows, waiting for something—anything—to reveal itself."
6"It was an invitation—no, a warning?"
7"A flicker of movement again—flittering at the very edge of her vision."
8"A faint, soft sound broke through the night–a low, cracking cough, distant but somehow closer."
9"Then, out of the corner of her eye, she saw it: a flicker—something moving behind the low-hanging branches, a shadow with no shape, no face, only a shifting darkness that slid closer."
10"Her hand clenched the Heartstone pendant tighter—almost painfully—feeling it pulse as if sensing her growing alarm."
11"Something was watching her—something that didn’t belong here, didn’t belong in her world at all."
12"She had read stories, seen the warning signs, but that primal fear—this creeping, suffocating dread—was unlike anything she had prepared for."
13"Her mind buzzed—was she imagining it?"
14"A sharp movement now—faint yet deliberate."
15"For a moment, she saw it—a figure, tall and hunched, cloaked in swirling darkness, face hidden beneath a hood."
16"A sudden, deafening crack split the silence—like a branch snapping, loud enough to shudder through her entire frame."
17"Everything remained still—except for the faint shifting of shadows, dark entities whispering secrets that she would never fully understand."
18"Instead she reached into her pocket for the small, crimson gem hanging from the Heartstone pendant—an artifact from Dymas with a power she barely grasped."
19"The boundary stones hummed softly beneath her fingertips—a gateway, a lock, maybe both—and she knew with grim certainty time was slipping faster now, no longer stopping at her command."
20"That’s when she saw it—something, just beyond the line of her sight, skimming the edge of the boundary."
93.48% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1155
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount53
adverbRatio0.04588744588744589
lyAdverbCount25
lyAdverbRatio0.021645021645021644
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences69
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences69
mean16.36
std7.36
cv0.45
sampleLengths
029
127
224
329
427
522
627
723
824
918
1013
1131
1214
1319
1414
1514
1617
1711
1814
1923
2025
2112
2214
2324
246
2514
262
2712
2815
2924
3015
314
3216
3315
3420
3532
366
3716
3811
3916
405
4115
4221
4317
446
456
4618
476
4813
4919
54.11% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.37681159420289856
totalSentences69
uniqueOpeners26
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences67
matches
0"Then, a whisper drifted through"
1"Instead, they seemed to pulsate"
2"Then, out of the corner"
3"Instead she reached into her"
ratio0.06
58.81% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount27
totalSentences67
matches
0"Her breath caught as the"
1"She shivered despite herself, a"
2"She had come here for"
3"She instinctively clenched her fists,"
4"Her first instinct was to"
5"she muttered under her breath,"
6"Her breath fogged in the"
7"She touched the rough bark"
8"Her stomach clenched as it"
9"Her eyes flicked up, scanning"
10"It was an invitation—no, a"
11"She couldn’t tell, only that"
12"Her pulse hammered in her"
13"She froze, breath hitching."
14"Her eyes widened, trying to"
15"Her heart stuttered in her"
16"Her hand clenched the Heartstone"
17"Her stomach twisted into knots."
18"She had read stories, seen"
19"Her mind buzzed—was she imagining"
ratio0.403
49.55% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount55
totalSentences67
matches
0"Her breath caught as the"
1"Aurora Carter—or Rory, as friends"
2"The Heartstone pendant pulsed faintly"
3"The thin, silver chained gift"
4"The boundary stood silent, marked"
5"She shivered despite herself, a"
6"The only sounds now were"
7"She had come here for"
8"That pendant, glowing with an"
9"A sudden movement flickered at"
10"She instinctively clenched her fists,"
11"Her first instinct was to"
12"she muttered under her breath,"
13"Her breath fogged in the"
14"A place where centuries could"
15"She touched the rough bark"
16"Her stomach clenched as it"
17"Her eyes flicked up, scanning"
18"Darkness pressed in heavier, nearly"
19"It was an invitation—no, a"
ratio0.821
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences67
matches(empty)
ratio0
15.31% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences56
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"Aurora Carter—or Rory, as friends called her—paused in the shadow of an ancient oak, her eyes darting through the darkening woods, hunting the faintest flicker …"
1"The Heartstone pendant pulsed faintly in her hand, warming subtly against her skin, a dull throb that reminded her she wasn’t here by accident."
2"That pendant, glowing with an inner crimson hue, pulsed irregularly, as if alive."
3"Then, a whisper drifted through the trees, an unintelligible susurrus that seemed to crawl directly into her ears, blending into the wind’s low moan."
4"Her pulse hammered in her ears, her fingers tightening around the pendant, as if it could shield her from whatever macabre game was unfolding."
5"Then, out of the corner of her eye, she saw it: a flicker—something moving behind the low-hanging branches, a shadow with no shape, no face, only a shifting dar…"
6"Her hand clenched the Heartstone pendant tighter—almost painfully—feeling it pulse as if sensing her growing alarm."
7"The underbrush rustled as if something or someone was pushing through it deliberately, creeping slowly, deliberately."
8"Something was watching her—something that didn’t belong here, didn’t belong in her world at all."
9"The pendant’s glow grew brighter, faintly warm against her skin, as if responding to her fear."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags1
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she muttered, voice cracking in the thick silence"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences1
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio1
66.7187%