Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRA1ZV2KF2SHGH154EAJEB

Run Details

Duration:
22.9s
Cost:
$0.013504
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
A dry snap cracked through the silence. Aurora froze, every nerve alight. She pressed her back against the rough bark of an ancient oak standing stone, heart pounding like a trapped bird. The slim silver chain of the Heartstone pendant warmed against her throat. A faint inner glow flickered within the deep crimson gem, as though it sought something unseen. Aurora risked a glance across the hidden clearing. Wildflowers brushed her ankles, their petals untouched by season or time. Beyond the ring of oak monoliths, shadows slithered against the foliage. She’d come to this Fae-touched grove for answers. Instead she felt intruders closing in. She rose on silent feet, brushing damp earth from her jacket. Moonlight didn’t belong here; light shifted strangely under the boughs. She fingered the small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist, a childhood reminder that pain could linger. A fresh rustle rose behind her. Aurora spun. Nothing. The path she’d followed lay empty. She stepped forward, branches snagging at her hair. A cold scent of metal pricked her nose. Blood? Or iron in the soil? She shook her head. She refused to imagine worse. A faint pulse flared in the pendant. Her fingers tightened around it. The glow bit through the night, coaxing her towards the grove’s heart. She had to trust it. She swallowed. She moved. Stone to stone, her boots sank into moss. Each step echoed. Once, time might stretch or fold here. One hour felt like days. She’d read the lore. She’d thought she prepared. The grove played tricks. She sensed it now. A distant trill like wind chimes whispered across the clearing. She paused. No breeze stirred. The sound spiralled, tick-tock, flip-flop, a measured pattern. Her breathing hitched. Her eyes darted between standing stones that shifted at the corner of her sight. She forced herself forward. The air thickened. Wildflowers leaned as if watching. Petals shimmered with dew or something else. She knelt and touched a blossom. It snapped upright, petals snapping like jaws. She jerked back. “Hello?” Her voice scraped the stillness. “Is someone there?” Silence swallowed her word. Then came a low chuckle from the far edge of the grove. A single note, light and mocking. She swallowed against the lump in her throat. She didn’t belong here. Not yet. Not unprepared. Moonbeams slanted through the canopy and she made out shapes—tall and slender, limbs faintly luminous, like reflections in disturbed water. Her stomach clenched. Fae. Nothing human. The pendant throbbed. A soft warmth spread through her chest. The pulse grew stronger, slower—almost deliberate. It beckoned. She followed. She brushed past a stone etched with twisted runes. Symbols that pulsed when she crossed the threshold. Her pulse raced faster than the gem. Dust of ages drifted from the carvings. She coughed. The air tasted of rot and honey. A breeze finally stirred, carrying a whisper: Rory. Just her childhood nickname. Her breath caught. No one but Eva ever called her that. She whirled. Nothing. Just petals drifting like pale ghosts. An uneasy certainty settled in her bones. She was not alone. She climbed the last mound of mossy earth and faced the grove’s centre. Four stones formed a rough circle around a shallow depression. At its base, tangled roots gathered like clasped fingers. The pendant’s glow brightened, turning her skin to bruised light. Beneath the roots she glimpsed something silver-edged. A rift. A portal. She knelt, heart hammering. Pulled aside decaying roots. Something hissed. The soil shifted beneath her fingertips. She froze. A hand—slender, pale as bone—snaked out. Nails curved into talons that caught her sleeve. She jerked back, stumbling over hidden stones. The pendant fell and skidded across the earth. It stopped at the edge of the portal. Its glow pulsed faster, erratic. “Go,” she whispered to the gem. Her fingertips ached with cold. She reached, but something darted across her vision. Flash of movement. A grin seared from the darkness, rows of teeth too many, too bright. A face framed by tangled hair that moved like living vines. She scrambled back, chest heaving. The portal widened, slurping at the moonlight. Shapes emerged—thin legs, spindly arms, eyes like polished jet. The fae stepped onto the grove’s earth, their laughter soft as falling snow. Aurora swallowed hard. No way out. A twig snapped, close. She turned to run, forgetting the pendant. Hands grasped her shoulders; strength like iron held her fast. She kicked out, boots connecting with bone. A shriek answered. She wrenched free and dove for the gem. Cold fingers grazed her ankle. Tendrils of root shot out, wrapping about her calf. She yanked, pain lancing. The root squeezed. Sap oozed dark and sticky. She struck the nearest monolith with her fist. Stone rang like a bell. The fae hissed, recoiling. She snatched the Heartstone and pressed it to the rift. The light flared, scalding and pure. The portal shuddered. Roots trembled. The fae hissed and reeled, claws yanking at the gem’s glow. A bellow of air blasted through the circle. A pulse of sound rattled her ribcage. She shielded her face. Light exploded from the pendant in waves, banishing shadows. The portal groaned, folding shut like a wounded thing. Dust rained down. Then silence swallowed the grove once more. The hands at her ankle vanished. Roots loosened and fell away. The fae shapes flickered, wisped, then disappeared. Aurora collapsed to her knees, trembling. The Heartstone nestled warm against her palm. She drew it close, as if shield and guide. She glanced at the empty circle. No rift, no roots, no fae. Only the monstrous hush of the grove. She breathed. One, two. She could still feel claws on her skin. She pulled herself upright and brushed moss from her jeans. She wrapped the pendant’s chain around her fingers. It pulsed once more—steady, calm. She turned to leave. The monoliths stood silent sentries. The wildflowers brushed her legs as she passed. No laughter followed. No mocking echoes. Aurora paused at the boundary, hand on the final stone. She jerked as something shifted behind her. She spun, every muscle coiled. Nothing moved but a single blossom, turning its head to watch. A blade of moonlight slipped between the trees. She dared one last look. For a heartbeat she thought she saw a face—pale skin and too-wide grin—peering from the gloom. Then it vanished. She forced her legs to move. Her breath came ragged but steady. She would not look back. The grove had tested her. The Heartstone had held. She would survive this night. A soft snap sounded behind her as she stepped beyond the standing stones. Aurora kept walking, the deep crimson gem pulsing at her chest, and never once glanced over her shoulder.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags2
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences3
tagDensity0.667
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1129
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1129
totalAiIsms26
found
0
word"silence"
count3
1
word"pounding"
count1
2
word"flickered"
count2
3
word"reminder"
count1
4
word"pulse"
count4
5
word"echoed"
count1
6
word"measured"
count1
7
word"shimmered"
count1
8
word"stomach"
count1
9
word"throbbed"
count1
10
word"warmth"
count1
11
word"etched"
count1
12
word"pulsed"
count3
13
word"raced"
count1
14
word"whisper"
count1
15
word"trembled"
count1
16
word"echoes"
count1
17
word"gloom"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"pounding"
2"flickered"
3"reminder"
4"pulse"
5"echoed"
6"measured"
7"shimmered"
8"stomach"
9"throbbed"
10"warmth"
11"etched"
12"pulsed"
13"raced"
14"whisper"
15"trembled"
16"echoes"
17"gloom"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences174
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences174
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences175
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen21
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1115
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions3
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions15
wordCount1110
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity0.63
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Heartstone4
Fae-touched1
Silence1
Rory1
Eva1
Aurora7
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Silence"
2"Rory"
3"Eva"
4"Aurora"
places(empty)
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences93
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.897
wordCount1115
matches
0"No one but"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences175
matches(empty)
44.47% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs33
mean33.79
std10.33
cv0.306
sampleLengths
012
148
244
346
438
533
639
740
835
99
1038
1126
1220
1340
1425
157
1643
1739
1842
1946
2040
2139
2243
2332
2440
2525
2641
2735
2823
2933
3032
3131
3231
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences174
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs230
matches(empty)
12.24% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences8
totalSentences175
ratio0.046
matches
0"Moonlight didn’t belong here; light shifted strangely under the boughs."
1"Moonbeams slanted through the canopy and she made out shapes—tall and slender, limbs faintly luminous, like reflections in disturbed water."
2"The pulse grew stronger, slower—almost deliberate."
3"A hand—slender, pale as bone—snaked out."
4"Shapes emerged—thin legs, spindly arms, eyes like polished jet."
5"Hands grasped her shoulders; strength like iron held her fast."
6"It pulsed once more—steady, calm."
7"For a heartbeat she thought she saw a face—pale skin and too-wide grin—peering from the gloom."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1124
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount38
adverbRatio0.033807829181494664
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.004448398576512456
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences175
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences175
mean6.37
std3.62
cv0.569
sampleLengths
07
15
220
312
416
58
611
711
88
96
1011
1110
1217
136
142
151
166
178
188
191
205
214
225
237
245
2512
265
272
282
298
303
317
325
334
344
354
364
3710
382
393
408
413
4214
434
443
455
467
476
487
493
38.57% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats20
diversityRatio0.2742857142857143
totalSentences175
uniqueOpeners48
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount8
totalSentences152
matches
0"Instead she felt intruders closing"
1"Once, time might stretch or"
2"Then came a low chuckle"
3"Just her childhood nickname."
4"Just petals drifting like pale"
5"Then silence swallowed the grove"
6"Only the monstrous hush of"
7"Then it vanished."
ratio0.053
72.63% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount56
totalSentences152
matches
0"She pressed her back against"
1"She’d come to this Fae-touched"
2"She rose on silent feet,"
3"She fingered the small crescent-shaped"
4"She stepped forward, branches snagging"
5"She shook her head."
6"She refused to imagine worse."
7"Her fingers tightened around it."
8"She had to trust it."
9"She’d read the lore."
10"She’d thought she prepared."
11"She sensed it now."
12"Her breathing hitched."
13"Her eyes darted between standing"
14"She forced herself forward."
15"She knelt and touched a"
16"It snapped upright, petals snapping"
17"She jerked back."
18"Her voice scraped the stillness"
19"She swallowed against the lump"
ratio0.368
38.95% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount128
totalSentences152
matches
0"A dry snap cracked through"
1"Aurora froze, every nerve alight."
2"She pressed her back against"
3"The slim silver chain of"
4"A faint inner glow flickered"
5"Aurora risked a glance across"
6"Wildflowers brushed her ankles, their"
7"She’d come to this Fae-touched"
8"She rose on silent feet,"
9"Moonlight didn’t belong here; light"
10"She fingered the small crescent-shaped"
11"A fresh rustle rose behind"
12"The path she’d followed lay"
13"She stepped forward, branches snagging"
14"A cold scent of metal"
15"She shook her head."
16"She refused to imagine worse."
17"A faint pulse flared in"
18"Her fingers tightened around it."
19"The glow bit through the"
ratio0.842
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences152
matches(empty)
ratio0
95.24% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences30
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"A faint inner glow flickered within the deep crimson gem, as though it sought something unseen."
1"Her eyes darted between standing stones that shifted at the corner of her sight."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags2
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences3
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.667
79.8702%