Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRA638XMV0BQZDTJFE39K8

Run Details

Model:
o4 Mini
Duration:
21.8s
Cost:
$0.012637
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The earth shifted under Aurora’s bootheel, a soft, grudging groan that echoed through the grove. She froze, heart hammering a steady rhythm against her ribs, and pressed a hand to the silver chain at her throat. The Heartstone Pendant vibrated with a faint warmth, as though it had just recognised something long hidden. A ring of ancient oak standing stones loomed around her, each scarred by time and etched with knotwork that pulsed in the murky gloom. She’d walked here for hours, threading through Richmond Park until the city’s roar faded into a distant hiss. Eva had said this place might help her understand the pendant’s power. Aurora hadn’t expected… this. A quiet snapped into the air, like the last page of a book turning itself. She didn’t trust silence. Light-footed, she skirted the nearest stone, wildflowers brushing her calves. Their petals bloomed with impossible brightness, as if they’d swallowed moonlight whole. The pendant warmed again, a throb that pressed under her skin. She paused beside a stone taller than a man, its surface mottled with pale lichen. Fingertips brushed the carving: a swirl of lines meeting at a pointed centre. It hummed. Aurora swallowed. Blood stung her tongue. “Hello?” Her voice sounded small. “Is anyone here?” No answer came, but something beyond the stones shifted. A breath of wind — or the shuffle of feet. She tilted her head, scanning the rim of trees. Shadows gathered where there should have been only bark and leaf. Her pulse jumped. She told herself the Grove played tricks on the mind. Time moved oddly here. An hour could stretch into a day, or collapse into seconds. She’d felt restless since she arrived. Footsteps had followed her path, but when she whirled, nothing stood behind. The pendant glowed, a soft inner pulse like a heartbeat. She tightened her grip on it. Whatever drew her here, she would find it. She crouched and pressed her palm to the damp earth. The soil tasted of rot and mushrooms. Beneath her fingers, roots writhed, as if alive. Aurora jerked back. The roots settled, still as statues. Her breath came in ragged whispers. Something snapped behind her. She spun. Beyond the mist-shrouded clearing, a figure moved. Tall, impossibly thin, its silhouette flickering between trees. Aurora swallowed the cold lump in her throat. She flicked her ponytail back. Bright blue eyes narrowed. “Show yourself,” she called, keeping her voice steady. She stepped forward, toes curling around a gnarled root. The pendant pulsed harder, heat seeping into her collarbone. A sigh drifted through the trees, soundless and weightless. Aurora felt it against her skin, like a caress. Leaves shivered, though no breeze stirred. Shadows pooled at the edges of her vision. Shapes slithered between oaks. She saw a pale hand, long-fingered, its nails curved like talons. Her heart lurched. She lunged toward the nearest stone for cover. “Stop,” she said. Silence answered. The forest exhaled. Aurora pressed her back against rough bark and closed her eyes. The forest smelled of moss and something fainter: decay. Copper. She tried to calm her breathing. Focus on the pendant. Feel its warmth. Let it guide her. A sound rose: a low, lamenting moan, rhythmical as if sung from deep within the earth. She opened her eyes. The standing stones glowed with chipped runes, each flickering in time with the moan. Aurora stepped around the tree, pendant held before her like a torch. The glow clashed with moonlight, painting her boots in crimson light. The lament faded. A twig snapped to her right. She pivoted, almost tripping over a root. In the dim light, she saw footprints pressed into the soft ground: no more than a foot’s length apart, each set curving toward the grove’s heart. The prints vanished before the centre, as if whoever left them melted away. She followed the trail. Each step sent her deeper into the standing stones. Whispers drifted through the ring, half-words that broke on her eardrum. Aurora tilted her head, trying to catch one. “Aurora…” A voice. Soft, coaxing. Familiar and wrong. She spun. No one stood there. Her skin prickled. She patted her wrist, found the crescent scar. Memory flared: childhood laughter, a scraped knee, her mother’s soothing voice. That warmth flickered out as something else pressed in. She jerked her hand away. The pendant throbbed so urgently it felt like it might leap from its chain. Ahead, the stones converged into a narrow gap. Aurora hesitated. Every cell in her body told her to run. But she needed answers. She slipped between the stones. The world narrowed until only she, the pendant, and an impossible hush remained. The ground sloped down. Roots arched overhead like ribs. Cool air stung her lungs. She stepped into a chamber carved from living wood. Its walls pulsed. Amber sap oozed from the bark, trickling down in glistening rivulets. Shapes writhed in the knots: faces, eyes, mouths that spilled nothing but darkness. Aurora licked dry lips. She raised the pendant. Its glow washed the chamber in blood-red light. The faces recoiled from it, shadows convulsing. Aurora felt them watching her. Each beat of the pendant sent a ripple through the sap, echoing in her chest. A soft click behind her made her spin. The path back had vanished. Stones pressed against bark. No gap remained. She swallowed. “This isn’t what I came for,” she said. Her voice didn’t break. Heat pooled at her throat. Something slid along the wall, a long shape that moved too fast to follow. Aurora pressed back, boots skidding in wet sap. Each heartbeat thrummed in her ears. A whisper circled her head, words she almost caught: “…borrowed light…” She steeled herself. “Who are you?” The pendant flared, chasing shadows into corners. The faces recoiled, their eyes gone hollow. A shape formed at the far wall. A figure draped in moss and sap, features melting like candlewax. It watched Aurora with empty hollows where eyes should have been. Aurora stepped forward. She held the pendant high. Heat radiated from it, burning through her jacket. “Show me,” she said. “What do you want?” The figure lifted a sap-stained hand. Its fingers curved around a bright wildflower that had no business growing in that place. Petals glowed with the same inner light as the pendant. Slowly, the creature pressed the flower toward Aurora. She frowned. “I don’t understand.” The flower’s glow pulsed, and in that pulse she saw memories: her mother teaching her to read, her father’s looming shadow, Evan’s angry face. The sap-creature’s flower shifted, and she felt the ache of every wound she’d ever tried to forget. She stumbled back, clutching the pendant. The chamber trembled. Sap dripped from the ceiling. The faces in the walls gagged and twisted. Aurora swung the pendant. The glow intensified, slicing through the gloom in a line of pure red light. The creature froze. The flower fell from its hand. It touched the ground, petals wilting. Aurora heard the click again. The wall behind the creature cracked, splintering. Light spilled in. She caught her breath. Beyond the crack lay open sky—not the grey of London, but a swirl of stars mirrored in shifting violet clouds. A doorway. She didn’t hesitate. She dashed forward. Sap sprayed from the walls. The faces howled in muted protest. She skidded through the crack. The chamber collapsed behind her in a cascade of wood and sap. She landed hard on moss, the pendant clattering from her hand. Pain flared in her side. She rolled, snatched the pendant. It lay cold, dark. She scrambled upright. The grove stood empty. Stones ringed a hollow meadow. Wildflowers waved in an unseen breeze. The air held a silent promise of dawn. Aurora gasped. She checked the pendant. No warmth, no glow. Then she heard it: soft footsteps at the meadow’s edge, crunching grass. Something stepped into view. A slender figure cloaked in oak leaves. The face was beautiful, but its eyes mirrored sap-dark hollows. Aurora pressed her back against the nearest stone. The figure smiled, lips stained red. The pendant hung useless at her throat. She raised a hand to shield herself as it advanced. Something cold brushed her neck, and then— Silence. The figure paused, fingers hovering. Aurora swallowed. The forest held its breath. The last petal of the flower she’d seen lay at her feet, wilting fast. She stared at it. The cloak of leaves rustled as the creature leaned closer. Aurora braced for the end.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags8
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences11
tagDensity0.727
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
96.47% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1418
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1418
totalAiIsms35
found
0
word"echoed"
count1
1
word"vibrated"
count1
2
word"warmth"
count4
3
word"loomed"
count1
4
word"etched"
count1
5
word"pulsed"
count4
6
word"gloom"
count2
7
word"silence"
count3
8
word"throb"
count1
9
word"scanning"
count1
10
word"pulse"
count3
11
word"footsteps"
count2
12
word"flicked"
count1
13
word"lurched"
count1
14
word"familiar"
count1
15
word"flickered"
count1
16
word"throbbed"
count1
17
word"glistening"
count1
18
word"echoing"
count1
19
word"whisper"
count1
20
word"steeled"
count1
21
word"looming"
count1
22
word"trembled"
count1
highlights
0"echoed"
1"vibrated"
2"warmth"
3"loomed"
4"etched"
5"pulsed"
6"gloom"
7"silence"
8"throb"
9"scanning"
10"pulse"
11"footsteps"
12"flicked"
13"lurched"
14"familiar"
15"flickered"
16"throbbed"
17"glistening"
18"echoing"
19"whisper"
20"steeled"
21"looming"
22"trembled"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences189
matches
0"felt the ache"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences189
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences191
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen27
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1410
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
70.41% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions32
wordCount1382
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity1.59
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora22
Heartstone1
Pendant1
Richmond1
Park1
Grove1
Silence2
Soft1
Evan1
London1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Pendant"
2"Silence"
3"Evan"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
globalScore0.704
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences106
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like it might leap from its chain"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.709
wordCount1410
matches
0"not the grey of London, but a swirl of stars mirrored in shifting violet clouds"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences191
matches(empty)
44.57% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs34
mean41.47
std12.69
cv0.306
sampleLengths
053
158
252
344
442
543
664
738
826
958
1046
1157
1255
1346
1450
1541
1654
1739
1839
1939
2049
2124
2239
2346
2440
2534
2644
2737
2836
2933
3031
317
3241
335
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences189
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs284
matches(empty)
97.98% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences191
ratio0.016
matches
0"A breath of wind — or the shuffle of feet."
1"Beyond the crack lay open sky—not the grey of London, but a swirl of stars mirrored in shifting violet clouds."
2"Something cold brushed her neck, and then—"
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1390
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount31
adverbRatio0.022302158273381296
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.004316546762589928
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences191
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences191
mean7.38
std4.64
cv0.628
sampleLengths
015
121
217
324
418
512
63
71
815
94
1010
1112
1211
1315
1413
152
162
174
185
193
209
2110
229
2311
243
2510
264
2711
286
2912
3010
316
328
3310
347
358
363
376
386
394
402
417
428
438
445
454
468
479
489
499
46.77% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.3089005235602094
totalSentences191
uniqueOpeners59
58.82% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences170
matches
0"Bright blue eyes narrowed."
1"Slowly, the creature pressed the"
2"Then she heard it: soft"
ratio0.018
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount49
totalSentences170
matches
0"She froze, heart hammering a"
1"She’d walked here for hours,"
2"She didn’t trust silence."
3"Their petals bloomed with impossible"
4"She paused beside a stone"
5"Her voice sounded small"
6"She tilted her head, scanning"
7"Her pulse jumped."
8"She told herself the Grove"
9"She’d felt restless since she"
10"She tightened her grip on"
11"She crouched and pressed her"
12"Her breath came in ragged"
13"She flicked her ponytail back."
14"she called, keeping her voice"
15"She stepped forward, toes curling"
16"She saw a pale hand,"
17"Her heart lurched."
18"She lunged toward the nearest"
19"She tried to calm her"
ratio0.288
15.88% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount151
totalSentences170
matches
0"The earth shifted under Aurora’s"
1"She froze, heart hammering a"
2"The Heartstone Pendant vibrated with"
3"A ring of ancient oak"
4"She’d walked here for hours,"
5"Eva had said this place"
6"Aurora hadn’t expected…"
7"A quiet snapped into the"
8"She didn’t trust silence."
9"Light-footed, she skirted the nearest"
10"Their petals bloomed with impossible"
11"The pendant warmed again, a"
12"She paused beside a stone"
13"Fingertips brushed the carving: a"
14"Blood stung her tongue."
15"Her voice sounded small"
16"A breath of wind —"
17"She tilted her head, scanning"
18"Shadows gathered where there should"
19"Her pulse jumped."
ratio0.888
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences170
matches(empty)
ratio0
83.33% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences48
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"The Heartstone Pendant vibrated with a faint warmth, as though it had just recognised something long hidden."
1"Their petals bloomed with impossible brightness, as if they’d swallowed moonlight whole."
2"A sound rose: a low, lamenting moan, rhythmical as if sung from deep within the earth."
3"Shapes writhed in the knots: faces, eyes, mouths that spilled nothing but darkness."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags8
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences11
tagDensity0.364
leniency0.727
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
83.8079%