Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRAK7VHNNMG6KZ39QY0WNZ

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Duration:
47.8s
Cost:
$0.001600

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora stood behind the bar, her hands deftly arranging glasses while the rhythmic clink of ice against crystal punctuated the sultry air of The Raven's Nest. The deep shades of mahogany and shadows draped over the patrons whispered secrets of the past. She caught snippets of laughter, the clatter of bottles, the low hum of muted conversations – all remnants of lives entangled in the web of their choices. Behind her, Silas instructed a newcomer, his tone authoritative yet gentle, guiding the eager young man who seemed more interested in flirting than pouring drinks. “Watch it,” Silas said, tilting his head towards Aurora. “She’s strong, but not immune to accidents.” “The last one ended with a cocktail explosion,” Aurora interjected with a smirk, wiping a bead of sweat from her brow. She poured a whiskey on the rocks, eyeing a couple across the bar that appeared to be deep in some game of unspoken truths, their laughter underscored by layers of regret. The door swung open, and her heart jolted. In walked a familiar silhouette framed by the soft glow of the neon sign – the distinctive green light casting an almost ethereal aura around the figure. The sound of the bell jingled above them, a playful herald of reunion. “Rory?” The name slipped from his lips like an incantation, lingering in the air thick with nostalgia. Evan stood there, time having sculpted him into something both unrecognizable and achingly familiar. His once-boyish features had matured into something that spoke of hard-earned wisdom, the lines etched around his eyes mapping out stories of their own. He wore a tailored jacket that screamed success, a stark contrast to the scuffed trainers at his feet. But it was those eyes, dark and stormy, that held her captive in that moment. “Haven’t seen you in ages,” he continued, a hesitant smile breaking across his face. “How’s life treating you?” “Life?” She gestured to the bar, her voice steady, revealing none of the tempest swirling within. “Just another night at The Nest. What are you doing lurking around here?” “Lurking?” He chuckled, though the sound rang somewhat remorseful. “More like wondering how I ended up here when I thought I was miles away from... all of this.” He motioned vaguely, encapsulating the bar, the past, and perhaps their shared memories. Aurora crossed her arms, the familiar scepticism settling over her. “You’re different, Evan. This place doesn’t seem to suit you.” “Maybe it’s the place that doesn’t suit me,” he replied, a touch of defensiveness creeping into his tone. “I’ve changed.” “Changed,” she repeated, tilting her head as she regarded him through narrowed eyes. “One could say that.” He stepped closer, invading her space, though the air between them crackled with an unspoken barrier. “If you’re implying I’ve traded my soul for a suit, you’re mistaken.” “Not all transformations come from the corporate grind, Evan.” Her voice caught, revealing her stormy resentment. “You could’ve chosen a different path. We both could have.” He frowned, and she noted the shift in his expression. It almost seemed to ripple through the air, sparking memories that neither of them dared to voice. They had once shared dreams of running away, of collecting and discarding the weight of their respective legacies until they were free of the stifling confines that bound them. “Are you still angry with me?” he asked, the gravity of the question stringing tension between them. “I never had the luxury of pretending I wasn’t,” she countered, her words edged with truth. Silas interrupted, the muted authority of his presence breaking the mounting tension. “Evan. You’ve changed, indeed.” He appraised the man. “Still avoiding the essentials, I see.” “Essentials?” Evan laughed, though there was no joy in it. “What is essential in this world, Silas? Promotion? Money? Perhaps validation from the wrong crowd?” “A proper drink would be a start,” Silas suggested firmly. “Rory, make our guest a drink. Something to cut through the melancholy.” Without protest, Aurora began to pour a bourbon, the amber liquid cascading into the glass, its sharp scent cutting through the humidity. Evan watched her work, a frown marring his features, as if he were witnessing something lost. “Do you miss it? Us?” “What is ‘it’ to you? Late-night plans and wild ideas that swung us between reckless abandon and boredom?” She set the drink before him, and for a moment, the glass trembled, as if the weight of their shared history threatened to shatter it. “We were vibrant, Rory,” he said softly, picking up the glass, his fingers curling around it. “We saw the world in colours.” “No,” she countered, meeting his gaze. “We painted the world in naivety, Evan. There’s a difference.” Pained recognition crossed his face, the old wounds reopening. “You claim naïveté, yet you’re still here pouring cocktails for the disillusioned,” he shot back. “Do you not feel it?” “Feel what?” “Regret.” He lifted his glass, gesturing with it as if it were an offering. “I’ve regretted turning my back on dreams. On you.” Her stomach lurched, the truth of his words giving way to a bitter taste in her mouth. “The past is a dangerous place to linger in when one refuses to move forward.” “Maybe I am trying to move forward.” His voice dropped, dropping those syllables like leaden weights into her. “But the ghosts remain.” “Some ghosts deserve their chains,” she whispered, half-afraid of where the conversation would lead. “Still fighting the same battles, aren’t we?” Evan said. “Are you even happy with your life?” Aurora bit her lip, suppressing thoughts of long nights filled with unshed tears, of darkness creeping through her flat, of Silas’ stoic wisdom guiding her while battling the demons of her past. “Happiness is subjective,” she replied. “And I don’t believe in the fantasy of it anymore.” Evan watched her intently, as though trying to decipher a code embedded in the very fabric of her being. “And what about friendship? What does that mean now?” “It means holding the weight of your choices,” she replied, feeling the air thicken with emotion. “Of your betrayals.” The words hung between them like a knife’s edge, pleading to be understood. He leaned closer, the emotion between them a volatile current. “You can’t lay the blame solely at my feet, Rory. I’m not the villain in your story. We were all unwitting participants in a play, don’t you see?” The bar pulsed around them, laughter ringing hollow against the backdrop of their charged confrontation. “Oh, Evan, so casual with the blame.” She swallowed hard. “You think apologies meant something after deserting me?” “Is that what you think? I deserted you?” His voice rose just above the noise. “I thought you were better without me!” “Better?” The word slipped from her lips, barbed and sharp. “You barely knew me. And worse, you believed I was better off as an abandoned child.” And suddenly, it erupted, that hidden pain breaking the surface. Years of separation crashed against them like waves against the shore, and for that fleeting moment, the chasm between their hearts seemed insurmountable. “I chose differently. I thought you deserved a life beyond our wild schemes, beyond walls of a bar that held us enslaved!” His voice trembled, raw with vulnerability. “Life beyond this?” She gestured to the dimly lit room around them, eyes searching his, desperately seeking the ghost of the person she once knew. “This was a part of our dreams too, Evan. Don’t pretend you have the moral high ground!” “I’m trying to find it,” he pleaded, fingers grasping the glass tighter. “I’m trying to be here right now!” “Not after years of silence!” The fury spilled from her, echoing off the worn timber and onto the bereft souls immersed in their own tales of loss. “You’ve come crashing in after years because now, the golden boy wants a redemption arc?” “I came here because I couldn’t forget you,” he blurted, drawing stares from patrons watching the unfolding tempest. “I came here hoping..." “Hope?” Her laughter was bitter. “There’s no room for hope when we’re haunted.” He stepped back, as if struck. “Haunted? Then join me in exorcising those demons! You’re still here; you don’t have to remain a prisoner of your past. Face it!” There was a flicker in her heart, light struggling against the weight of shadows suffocating her. “Face it? You barely have the strength to.” “Perhaps not,” he admitted, his voice lowering to almost a whisper. “But isn’t that what we should have done together?” Silas cleared his throat, observing the tempest uneasily. “Rory, Evan. If we wallow in the old ghosts, we drown in shadows of what we were.” “They’re bleeding here, Silas!” Aurora glanced at her mentor, desperation weaving into her voice. “You’re not listening to his abyss!” “Yes, I am.” Silas stepped in, his hazel eyes steadying Evan. “But let’s not be unkind with ghosts. They’re part of our fabric, but we don’t have to be bound to their stitches.” A lull fell between them, and for the first time, she saw Evan’s struggle mirrored the very challenges she'd faced. He had changed, but so had she. And in that moment, amidst the chaos of unmet expectations, the taste of bourbon souring into an emotional cocktail, she understood the bittersweet complexity that lingered between them. But before she could unravel her tangled thoughts and voice another retort, a crash echoed from the backroom, shattering the fragile moment like glass against the bar floor.
total_cost0.00160028

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
93.33% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags35
adverbTagCount4
adverbTags
0"He motioned vaguely [vaguely]"
1"Silas suggested firmly [firmly]"
2"he said softly [softly]"
3"She swallowed hard [hard]"
dialogueSentences75
tagDensity0.467
leniency0.933
rawRatio0.114
effectiveRatio0.107
87.36% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1582
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count2
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"very"
2"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
2.02% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1582
totalAiIsms31
found
0
word"rhythmic"
count1
1
word"crystal"
count1
2
word"unspoken"
count2
3
word"familiar"
count3
4
word"etched"
count1
5
word"stark"
count1
6
word"weight"
count4
7
word"tension"
count2
8
word"firmly"
count1
9
word"cascading"
count1
10
word"trembled"
count2
11
word"stomach"
count1
12
word"lurched"
count1
13
word"pulsed"
count1
14
word"charged"
count1
15
word"fleeting"
count1
16
word"silence"
count1
17
word"echoing"
count1
18
word"flicker"
count1
19
word"whisper"
count1
20
word"amidst"
count1
21
word"unravel"
count1
22
word"echoed"
count1
highlights
0"rhythmic"
1"crystal"
2"unspoken"
3"familiar"
4"etched"
5"stark"
6"weight"
7"tension"
8"firmly"
9"cascading"
10"trembled"
11"stomach"
12"lurched"
13"pulsed"
14"charged"
15"fleeting"
16"silence"
17"echoing"
18"flicker"
19"whisper"
20"amidst"
21"unravel"
22"echoed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences73
matches
0"k with nostalgia"
1"was bitter"
84.15% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences73
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"appeared to"
1"seemed to"
2"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences112
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen44
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1580
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions22
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions23
wordCount976
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity0.72
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Evan"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Silas6
Aurora7
Evan7
Pained1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Silas"
2"Aurora"
3"Evan"
places(empty)
globalScore1
windowScore1
34.62% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences65
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"seemed more interested in flirting than pouring drinks"
1"as though trying to decipher a code embedded in the very fabric of her being"
2"seemed insurmountable"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1580
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences112
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs55
mean28.73
std16.95
cv0.59
sampleLengths
094
116
252
348
41
587
618
729
841
920
1020
1117
1228
1326
1456
1517
1616
1726
1825
1922
2022
2121
2243
2322
2416
2529
262
2723
2832
2922
3014
3116
3247
3328
3419
3551
3615
3718
3822
3926
4033
4128
4242
4319
4442
4522
4613
4729
4824
4920
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences73
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs176
matches
0"were witnessing"
66.33% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences112
ratio0.027
matches
0"She caught snippets of laughter, the clatter of bottles, the low hum of muted conversations – all remnants of lives entangled in the web of their choices."
1"In walked a familiar silhouette framed by the soft glow of the neon sign – the distinctive green light casting an almost ethereal aura around the figure."
2"“Haunted? Then join me in exorcising those demons! You’re still here; you don’t have to remain a prisoner of your past. Face it!”"
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount882
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"distinctive green light casting"
adverbCount21
adverbRatio0.023809523809523808
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.01020408163265306
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences112
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences112
mean14.11
std7.81
cv0.553
sampleLengths
026
116
227
325
49
57
621
731
88
927
1013
111
1216
1314
1424
1518
1615
1714
184
1916
2013
219
2232
2310
2410
2518
262
2713
284
2916
3012
3116
3210
3310
3417
3529
3617
3716
3812
398
406
4110
4215
4310
4412
4522
4616
475
4843
4916
79.17% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.49107142857142855
totalSentences112
uniqueOpeners55
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences71
matches(empty)
ratio0
5.92% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount38
totalSentences71
matches
0"She caught snippets of laughter,"
1"She poured a whiskey on"
2"His once-boyish features had matured"
3"He wore a tailored jacket"
4"he continued, a hesitant smile"
5"She gestured to the bar,"
6"He chuckled, though the sound"
7"He motioned vaguely, encapsulating the"
8"he replied, a touch of"
9"she repeated, tilting her head"
10"He stepped closer, invading her"
11"Her voice caught, revealing her"
12"He frowned, and she noted"
13"It almost seemed to ripple"
14"They had once shared dreams"
15"he asked, the gravity of"
16"she countered, her words edged"
17"He appraised the man"
18"She set the drink before"
19"he said softly, picking up"
ratio0.535
23.38% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount62
totalSentences71
matches
0"Aurora stood behind the bar,"
1"The deep shades of mahogany"
2"She caught snippets of laughter,"
3"Silas said, tilting his head"
4"Aurora interjected with a smirk,"
5"She poured a whiskey on"
6"The door swung open, and"
7"The sound of the bell"
8"The name slipped from his"
9"Evan stood there, time having"
10"His once-boyish features had matured"
11"He wore a tailored jacket"
12"he continued, a hesitant smile"
13"She gestured to the bar,"
14"He chuckled, though the sound"
15"He motioned vaguely, encapsulating the"
16"Aurora crossed her arms, the"
17"he replied, a touch of"
18"she repeated, tilting her head"
19"He stepped closer, invading her"
ratio0.873
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences71
matches(empty)
ratio0
4.61% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences31
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"Behind her, Silas instructed a newcomer, his tone authoritative yet gentle, guiding the eager young man who seemed more interested in flirting than pouring drin…"
1"She poured a whiskey on the rocks, eyeing a couple across the bar that appeared to be deep in some game of unspoken truths, their laughter underscored by layers…"
2"His once-boyish features had matured into something that spoke of hard-earned wisdom, the lines etched around his eyes mapping out stories of their own."
3"They had once shared dreams of running away, of collecting and discarding the weight of their respective legacies until they were free of the stifling confines …"
4"Evan watched her work, a frown marring his features, as if he were witnessing something lost."
5"And in that moment, amidst the chaos of unmet expectations, the taste of bourbon souring into an emotional cocktail, she understood the bittersweet complexity t…"
10.71% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags35
uselessAdditionCount8
matches
0"he continued, a hesitant smile breaking across his face"
1"She gestured, her voice steady, revealing none of the tempest swirling within"
2"he replied, a touch of defensiveness creeping into his tone"
3"he asked, the gravity of the question stringing tension between them"
4"he pleaded, fingers grasping the glass tighter"
5"he admitted, his voice lowering to almost a whisper"
6"Aurora glanced, desperation weaving into her voice"
7"Silas stepped in, his hazel eyes steadying Evan"
16.67% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags17
fancyCount10
fancyTags
0"Aurora interjected (interject)"
1"he continued (continue)"
2"He chuckled (chuckle)"
3"she repeated (repeat)"
4"Evan laughed (laugh)"
5"Silas suggested firmly (suggest)"
6"she whispered (whisper)"
7"he pleaded (plead)"
8"he blurted (blurt)"
9"he admitted (admit)"
dialogueSentences75
tagDensity0.227
leniency0.453
rawRatio0.588
effectiveRatio0.267
70.0752%