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Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRAWEXQABM2QGEAVMGGZBV
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Model:
Mistral NeMO
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Literary fiction: old friends reunite
Duration:
13.1s
Cost:
$0.000991
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
70.38%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
55.57%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
100.00%
Cliché density
(details)
98.96%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
98.21%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
33.33%
Name drop frequency
(details)
67.58%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
96.01%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
44.48%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
100.00%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
51.75%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
39.37%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
80.75%
Technical jargon density
(details)
0.00%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
81.2126%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>
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In the dim glow of The Raven's Nest, a glass
shattered
, its fragments scattering like stars across the worn floorboards.
The bar's patrons, a motley
crew of Soho regulars and late-night wanderers, barely glanced up.
Another casualty of
Silas' careless hands, no doubt.
Silas Blackwood, the bar's eponymous
owner, was behind the counter, his neatly trimmed beard a
stark
contrast to the unkempt state of his hair.
He was wiping the counter
with a cloth that had seen better days, his hazel eyes distant, lost in thought. Or perhaps lost in the past, as he often was these days.
The bell above the door
chimed, a cheerful sound that jarred with the bar's somber atmosphere. A young woman stepped in, her straight shoulder-length black hair swaying with the movement.
She was small, barely five
foot six, but she carried herself with a confidence that belied her size.
Her bright blue eyes scanned
the room, landing on Silas.
A smile lit up her
face, a
smile that seemed to banish the gloom of the bar
. "Silas,"
she called out, her voice
clear and strong. "It's been ages!"
Silas looked up, his eyes
widening in surprise. "Aurora,"
he said, his voice barely
above a
whisper
. He set the cloth down, his hands trembling
slightly
. "Rory, is it
really
you?"
Aurora laughed, a sound that
was both warm and
slightly
forced. "In the flesh,"
she said, spreading her arms
wide. "I can't believe you still remember me."
Silas chuckled, a sound that
was more like a cough. "How could I forget?"
he said, his eyes flicking
to the crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist.
A memento from a childhood
adventure that had ended in stitches and a stern lecture from Aurora's father.
Aurora followed his gaze, her
smile fading
slightly
.
She tucked her hands into
her pockets, a gesture that
seemed almost defensive
. "I see you're still running the place,"
she said, looking around the
bar. "It hasn't changed a bit." Silas shrugged, picking up the cloth again. "Some things never do,"
he said, his voice noncommittal
. Aurora nodded, her eyes lingering on the old maps and black-and-white photographs that covered the walls. "I suppose not,"
she said softly
. Silas watched her, his expression inscrutable. "What brings you back to London, Rory?"
he asked, his voice carefully
neutral. Aurora hesitated, her gaze flicking away from his. "I, uh, I got a job,"
she said, her voice slightly
stilted. "At the university. Teaching law." Silas raised an
eyebrow
. "Law?"
he said, his voice tinged
with surprise. "I thought you were studying literature. Like your mother." Aurora's smile was tight, her eyes guarded. " Plans change,"
she said, her voice barely
audible. Silas nodded, his expression thoughtful. "And what about your father?" he asked. "How is Brendan?" Aurora's expression softened at the mention of her father. "He's well,"
she said, her voice warm
. "Still practicing law, still arguing with my mother about politics at the dinner table." Silas laughed, a genuine
sound that seemed to lighten the atmosphere of the bar
. "Some things never do change,"
he said, his eyes crinkling
at the corners. Aurora smiled, a genuine smile this time. "No,"
she said, her voice soft
. "Some things don't." Silas poured her a drink, a measure of the same whiskey he'd been nursing all night.
He slid it across the
counter to her, his eyes never leaving hers. "To old friends," he said, raising his glass. Aurora clinked her glass against his, her eyes meeting his. "To old friends," she
echoed
. They drank in
silence
for a moment, the only sound the soft hum of the bar's old refrigerator.
Then, Aurora set her glass
down, her expression turning serious. "Silas,"
she said, her voice hesitant
. "I've been thinking about what you said to me, before I left." Silas' expression didn't change, but his eyes grew distant. "What did I say, Rory?"
he asked, his voice soft
. Aurora took a deep breath, her eyes fixed on the counter. "You said that I was running away,"
she said, her voice barely
audible. "That I was leaving behind everything that mattered." Silas was silent for a moment, his eyes never leaving hers.
Then, he sighed, a sound
that was heavy with regret. "I was out of line," he said, his voice gruff. "I had no right to say that to you." Aurora shook her head, her eyes meeting his. "No,"
she said, her voice firm
. "You were right. I was running away. I was scared, Silas. Scared of what Evan had done to me. Scared of what I had become." Silas' expression darkened at the mention of Evan, the abusive ex-boyfriend who had driven Aurora to flee to London. "He's in the past, Rory,"
he said, his voice firm
. "You don't have to be afraid of him anymore." Aurora nodded, her eyes flicking to the scar on her wrist. "I know,"
she said, her voice soft
. "But I'm still afraid, Silas. Afraid of who I am. Afraid of what I've become." Silas was silent for a moment, his eyes searching hers.
Then, he reached out, his
hand covering hers. "You're still Aurora, Rory,"
he said, his voice firm
. "The girl who stood up to bullies on the playground. The girl who stood up to Evan. The girl who stood up to me."
Aurora laughed, a sound that
was both sad and grateful. "I don't know if I can be that girl again,"
she said, her voice soft
. Silas squeezed her hand, his eyes meeting hers. "You already are,"
he said, his voice firm
. "You just need to remember it." Aurora was silent for a moment, her eyes fixed on their hands.
Then, she looked up, her
eyes meeting his. "Thank you, Silas,"
she said, her voice soft
. "For everything." Silas smiled, a small, sad smile. "That's what friends are for, Rory,"
he said, his voice soft
. They fell silent then, the
weight
of the past hanging heavy between them. The bar's patrons
began to
thin out, the late-night crowd giving way to the early-morning regulars.
The bell above the door
chimed again, and a man in a worn coat stepped in, his eyes
scanning
the room. His gaze landed on Aurora, and he hesitated, his expression turning thoughtful.
Then, he walked over to
the counter, his eyes never leaving hers. "Aurora Carter,"
he said, his voice soft
. "It's been a long time." Aurora looked up, her eyes widening in surprise. "Evan,"
she said, her voice barely
audible. Silas' expression darkened, his hand tightening around his glass. "What are you doing here?"
he growled, his voice low
. Evan held up his hands, his eyes fixed on Aurora. "I'm not here to cause trouble, Silas,"
he said, his voice soft
. "I just wanted to see her. To talk to her." Aurora was silent, her eyes fixed on Evan.
Then, she stood up, her
chair scraping back loudly against the floor. "I have nothing to say to you, Evan,"
she said, her voice firm
. "Nothing at all." Evan nodded, his eyes never leaving hers. "I understand,"
he said, his voice soft
. "But I need you to listen to me, Aurora. I need you to understand why I did what I did." Aurora hesitated, her eyes flicking to Silas. Then, she shook her head, her expression turning resolute. "I don't care why you did what you did, Evan,"
she said, her voice firm
. "I just want you to leave me alone." Evan nodded, his expression turning sad. "I understand,"
he said, his voice soft
. "But I can't, Aurora. I can't leave you alone. Not until you know the truth." Aurora was silent for a moment, her eyes fixed on Evan. Then, she turned to Silas, her expression turning pleading. "Silas,"
she said, her voice soft
. "Please. I can't do this. Not now. Not here." Silas looked at her, his expression thoughtful.
Then, he nodded, his eyes
turning to Evan. "You heard the lady, Evan,"
he said, his voice firm
. "Leave. Now." Evan hesitated, his eyes fixed on Aurora.
Then, he nodded, his expression
turning resigned. "Alright,"
he said, his voice soft
. "I'll go. But this isn't over, Aurora. Not by a long shot." With that, he turned and walked out of the bar, the bell above the door chiming
softly
behind him. Aurora watched him go, her expression turning thoughtful. Then, she turned to Silas, her eyes meeting his. "Thank you, Silas,"
she said, her voice soft
. "For everything." Silas smiled, a small, sad smile. "That's what friends are for, Rory,"
he said, his voice soft
. "But I have to ask, are you sure about this? About teaching law? About staying in London?" Aurora was silent for a moment, her eyes fixed on the counter.
Then, she nodded, her expression
turning resolute. "I'm sure, Silas,"
she said, her voice firm
. "I have to do this. For me. For my future. For everything that I've lost." Silas nodded, his expression turning thoughtful. "Alright then,"
he said, his voice soft
. "But remember, Rory. No matter what happens. No matter where you go. You'll always have a home here. With me. With us." Aurora smiled, a genuine smile this time. "I know, Silas,"
she said, her voice soft
. "I know." With that, she turned and walked out of the bar, the bell above the door chiming
softly
behind her. Silas watched her go, his expression turning sad.
Then, he picked up the
cloth and
began to
wipe the counter again, his eyes distant, lost in thought. The bar was quiet then, the only sound the soft hum of the old refrigerator. The night was almost over, the dawn not far behind. But for Silas, the night was far from over. For he
knew that Aurora's
return was not just a chance
encounter
. It was a sign. A sign that the past
was catching
up with them. A sign that the
weight
of time and
unspoken
regret was about to come crashing down around them. And he knew, with a certainty that was both
comforting
and terrifying, that there was nothing he could do to stop it.
total_cost
0.00099105
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
45
adverbTagCount
1
adverbTags
0
"she said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences
77
tagDensity
0.584
leniency
1
rawRatio
0.022
effectiveRatio
0.022
70.38%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
1688
totalAiIsmAdverbs
10
found
0
adverb
"barely above a whisper"
count
1
1
adverb
"slightly"
count
4
2
adverb
"really"
count
1
3
adverb
"softly"
count
3
4
adverb
"carefully"
count
1
highlights
0
"barely above a whisper"
1
"slightly"
2
"really"
3
"softly"
4
"carefully"
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0
"Blackwood"
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
55.57%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
1688
totalAiIsms
15
found
0
word
"shattered"
count
1
1
word
"stark"
count
1
2
word
"scanned"
count
1
3
word
"gloom"
count
1
4
word
"whisper"
count
1
5
word
"eyebrow"
count
1
6
word
"tinged"
count
1
7
word
"echoed"
count
1
8
word
"silence"
count
1
9
word
"weight"
count
2
10
word
"scanning"
count
1
11
word
"encounter"
count
1
12
word
"unspoken"
count
1
13
word
"comforting"
count
1
highlights
0
"shattered"
1
"stark"
2
"scanned"
3
"gloom"
4
"whisper"
5
"eyebrow"
6
"tinged"
7
"echoed"
8
"silence"
9
"weight"
10
"scanning"
11
"encounter"
12
"unspoken"
13
"comforting"
100.00%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
98.96%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
4
narrationSentences
128
matches
0
"g in surprise"
1
"d with surprise"
2
"y with regret"
3
"g in surprise"
98.21%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
4
narrationSentences
128
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
1
"began to"
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
163
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
25
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
0
markdownWords
0
totalWords
1682
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
49
unquotedAttributions
1
matches
0
"Then, he sighed, a sound that was heavy with regret."
33.33%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
59
wordCount
1162
uniqueNames
7
maxNameDensity
2.24
worstName
"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity
4
worstWindowName
"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Raven
1
Nest
1
Soho
1
Silas
22
Blackwood
1
Aurora
26
Evan
7
persons
0
"Raven"
1
"Silas"
2
"Blackwood"
3
"Aurora"
4
"Evan"
places
0
"Soho"
globalScore
0.381
windowScore
0.333
67.58%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
91
glossingSentenceCount
3
matches
0
"smile that seemed to banish the gloom of the bar"
1
"seemed almost defensive"
2
"sound that seemed to lighten the atmosphere of the bar"
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
0
per1kWords
0
wordCount
1682
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
1
totalSentences
163
matches
0
"knew that Aurora's"
96.01%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
52
mean
32.35
std
15.72
cv
0.486
sampleLengths
0
43
1
56
2
75
3
12
4
31
5
27
6
45
7
39
8
16
9
22
10
19
11
25
12
21
13
16
14
15
15
30
16
27
17
16
18
37
19
15
20
46
21
19
22
32
23
40
24
39
25
38
26
33
27
51
28
25
29
22
30
30
31
17
32
50
33
36
34
15
35
19
36
32
37
36
38
34
39
39
40
28
41
35
42
27
43
32
44
36
45
10
46
34
47
42
48
35
49
17
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
0
totalSentences
128
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
2
totalVerbs
216
matches
0
"was wiping"
1
"was catching"
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
0
semicolonCount
0
flaggedSentences
0
totalSentences
163
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
371
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
12
adverbRatio
0.03234501347708895
lyAdverbCount
2
lyAdverbRatio
0.005390835579514825
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
163
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
163
mean
10.32
std
4.74
cv
0.46
sampleLengths
0
20
1
15
2
8
3
24
4
20
5
12
6
16
7
14
8
18
9
10
10
17
11
9
12
3
13
8
14
9
15
9
16
5
17
11
18
9
19
7
20
10
21
17
22
18
23
8
24
13
25
13
26
5
27
7
28
9
29
16
30
6
31
6
32
13
33
8
34
12
35
5
36
4
37
8
38
9
39
7
40
9
41
5
42
7
43
3
44
9
45
7
46
14
47
14
48
13
49
7
44.48%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
9
diversityRatio
0.22699386503067484
totalSentences
163
uniqueOpeners
37
100.00%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
13
totalSentences
126
matches
0
"Then, Aurora set her glass"
1
"Then, he sighed, a sound"
2
"Then, he reached out, his"
3
"Then, she looked up, her"
4
"Then, he walked over to"
5
"Then, she stood up, her"
6
"Then, she shook her head,"
7
"Then, she turned to Silas,"
8
"Then, he nodded, his eyes"
9
"Then, he nodded, his expression"
10
"Then, she turned to Silas,"
11
"Then, she nodded, her expression"
12
"Then, he picked up the"
ratio
0.103
51.75%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
53
totalSentences
126
matches
0
"He was wiping the counter"
1
"She was small, barely five"
2
"Her bright blue eyes scanned"
3
"she called out, her voice"
4
"he said, his voice barely"
5
"He set the cloth down,"
6
"she said, spreading her arms"
7
"he said, his eyes flicking"
8
"She tucked her hands into"
9
"she said, looking around the"
10
"he said, his voice noncommittal"
11
"she said softly"
12
"he asked, his voice carefully"
13
"she said, her voice slightly"
14
"he said, his voice tinged"
15
"she said, her voice barely"
16
"she said, her voice warm"
17
"he said, his eyes crinkling"
18
"she said, her voice soft"
19
"He slid it across the"
ratio
0.421
39.37%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
106
totalSentences
126
matches
0
"The bar's patrons, a motley"
1
"Another casualty of"
2
"Silas Blackwood, the bar's eponymous"
3
"He was wiping the counter"
4
"The bell above the door"
5
"A young woman stepped in,"
6
"She was small, barely five"
7
"Her bright blue eyes scanned"
8
"A smile lit up her"
9
"she called out, her voice"
10
"Silas looked up, his eyes"
11
"he said, his voice barely"
12
"He set the cloth down,"
13
"Aurora laughed, a sound that"
14
"she said, spreading her arms"
15
"Silas chuckled, a sound that"
16
"he said, his eyes flicking"
17
"A memento from a childhood"
18
"Aurora followed his gaze, her"
19
"She tucked her hands into"
ratio
0.841
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
0
totalSentences
126
matches
(empty)
ratio
0
80.75%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
46
technicalSentenceCount
4
matches
0
"The bell above the door chimed, a cheerful sound that jarred with the bar's somber atmosphere."
1
"She tucked her hands into her pockets, a gesture that seemed almost defensive."
2
"Aurora nodded, her eyes lingering on the old maps and black-and-white photographs that covered the walls."
3
"And he knew, with a certainty that was both comforting and terrifying, that there was nothing he could do to stop it."
0.00%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
45
uselessAdditionCount
36
matches
0
"she called out, her voice clear and strong"
1
"he said, his voice barely above a whisper"
2
"he said, his voice noncommittal"
3
"he asked, his voice carefully neutral"
4
"she said, her voice slightly stilted"
5
"she said, her voice barely audible"
6
"she said, her voice warm"
7
"he said, his eyes crinkling at the corners"
8
"she said, her voice soft"
9
"she said, her voice hesitant"
10
"he asked, his voice soft"
11
"she said, her voice barely audible"
12
"she said, her voice firm"
13
"he said, his voice firm"
14
"she said, her voice soft"
15
"he said, his voice firm"
16
"she said, her voice soft"
17
"he said, his voice firm"
18
"she said, her voice soft"
19
"he said, his voice soft"
20
"he said, his voice soft"
21
"she said, her voice barely audible"
22
"he growled, his voice low"
23
"he said, his voice soft"
24
"she said, her voice firm"
25
"he said, his voice soft"
26
"she said, her voice firm"
27
"he said, his voice soft"
28
"she said, her voice soft"
29
"he said, his voice firm"
30
"he said, his voice soft"
31
"she said, her voice soft"
32
"he said, his voice soft"
33
"she said, her voice firm"
34
"he said, his voice soft"
35
"she said, her voice soft"
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
44
fancyCount
2
fancyTags
0
"she called out (call out)"
1
"he growled (growl)"
dialogueSentences
77
tagDensity
0.571
leniency
1
rawRatio
0.045
effectiveRatio
0.045
81.2126%