Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRBACYVAWFAQNN66V05WB8

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Duration:
1m 3s
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$0.001291

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The rustle of leaves whispered secrets as Aurora Carter stepped into the Fae Grove, the ancient oak standing stones looming like sentinels around her. She paused, the air thick with an unsettling stillness, a stark contrast to the vibrant wildflowers that bloomed defiantly in the moonlight. The Heartstone Pendant, nestled against her chest, pulsed with a warmth that felt both inviting and foreboding. She had come here for answers, a desperate search for clarity after the chaos of her life in London. The Grove had been a childhood refuge, a place where she and Eva had spun tales of magic and adventure. But now, it felt different—tainted. Shadows flickered at the corners of her vision, darting just beyond the reach of the silvery light. A twig snapped behind her, and she spun around, heart racing. Nothing. Just the trees, their gnarled branches twisting like skeletal fingers against the night sky. “Get a grip, Rory,” she muttered, forcing herself to breathe. “It’s just the woods.” But the woods had never felt like this before. The silence was too profound, too heavy, as if the very air held its breath. She stepped deeper into the Grove, the ground soft beneath her feet, each step muffled by the thick carpet of moss. The faint glow of the Heartstone intensified, casting a crimson hue that danced across the stones, illuminating the intricate carvings etched into their surfaces. “Show me,” she whispered, her voice barely a murmur. “Show me what I need to see.” A low hum vibrated through the air, resonating with the pendant. It felt alive, thrumming with energy that sent a shiver down her spine. She glanced around, half-expecting to see Eva’s familiar face, but the Grove was empty, save for the shadows that seemed to stretch and twist, mocking her solitude. A rustling sound echoed from the thicket to her left, a soft, almost melodic whisper that sent a chill racing through her veins. She turned, squinting into the darkness, but the underbrush remained still. “Hello?” she called, her voice trembling slightly. “Is anyone there?” Silence answered her, thick and suffocating. She took a step back, her instincts screaming at her to leave, but curiosity held her in place. The hum grew louder, a siren’s call that beckoned her deeper into the Grove. With each step, the atmosphere thickened, the air heavy with an unnameable dread. The wildflowers, once vibrant, now appeared wilted, their colours muted as if drained of life. She reached out to touch one, its petals cool and lifeless beneath her fingers. A sudden movement caught her eye—a flicker of white darting between the trees. She turned sharply, heart pounding, but found only the shadows, shifting and swirling as if alive. “Stop it,” she hissed, anger flaring in her chest. “This isn’t funny.” The pendant pulsed again, a steady rhythm that seemed to sync with her heartbeat. She clutched it tighter, the warmth seeping into her skin, grounding her. But the sensation was fleeting, replaced by an icy grip of fear as the rustling returned, louder this time, accompanied by a low, guttural growl that reverberated through the air. Aurora’s breath hitched. She was not alone. “Who’s there?” she demanded, voice steadier than she felt. “Show yourself!” The growl morphed into a series of whispers, indistinct yet urgent, swirling around her like a tempest. Panic clawed at her throat as she scanned the darkness, searching for the source. The shadows seemed to pulse, shifting in a way that felt almost sentient, as if they were watching her, waiting. A figure emerged from the gloom, a silhouette against the backdrop of the standing stones. Aurora’s heart raced as she squinted, trying to discern the shape. It was tall, impossibly thin, with elongated limbs that twisted unnaturally. “Rory…” The voice was a haunting echo, familiar yet distorted, sending a jolt of recognition through her. “Eva?” she breathed, stepping forward, but the figure melted back into the shadows, leaving only the echo of her name hanging in the air. “Rory…” The voice came again, closer this time, laced with a chilling sweetness that made her skin crawl. “Stop!” she shouted, panic surging. “What do you want?” The shadows thickened, swirling around her like a living shroud. The whispers grew louder, a cacophony of voices that clawed at her sanity. She stumbled back, the Heartstone pendant growing hot against her skin, its glow flickering like a dying ember. “Leave this place!” The command rang out, sharp and clear, cutting through the chaos. Aurora froze, the voice resonating with authority. She turned, searching for the source, but the Grove remained shrouded in darkness. The shadows writhed, and the growl returned, low and menacing, echoing her fear. “Rory…” The voice was softer now, almost pleading. “You mustn’t stay.” “Why?” she cried, desperation clawing at her throat. “What’s happening?” The shadows surged forward, a wave of darkness that threatened to engulf her. She stumbled back, heart racing, the pendant’s warmth now a searing heat against her chest. “Run!” The voice urged, a final plea before the shadows lunged. With a surge of adrenaline, Aurora turned and fled, the ground beneath her feet shifting as she raced through the Grove. The whispers chased her, a haunting chorus that echoed in her mind, urging her to stop, to turn back. But she couldn’t. The darkness pressed in around her, the trees closing ranks as if to trap her within their grasp. She could feel the presence behind her, a malevolent force that thrummed with hunger. “Get away!” she screamed, pushing herself harder, the Heartstone pendant blazing against her skin. The Grove twisted, the path shifting beneath her as she ran, disorienting her. She could hear the growl again, closer now, a promise of what awaited if she faltered. A flash of light caught her eye, a glimmer of hope as she spotted the ancient oak standing stones ahead. She sprinted towards them, the pulsating warmth of the pendant guiding her, urging her on. But the shadows surged, a tide of darkness that threatened to swallow her whole. She could feel their breath on her neck, hot and rancid, as she reached the stones. “Please!” she gasped, pressing her back against the cool bark of the nearest oak. “Help me!” The pendant flared, a blinding light that illuminated the Grove, pushing back the shadows. The growl turned into a shriek, a sound of pure rage that reverberated through the air. Aurora’s heart raced as she clutched the pendant, the warmth flooding her veins, filling her with a fierce determination. She would not be consumed. With a final surge of strength, she thrust the pendant forward, the light exploding outward, banishing the darkness. The shadows recoiled, shrieking in fury as they dissipated into the night. Breathless, Aurora stood amidst the ancient stones, the Grove now eerily silent. The warmth of the Heartstone faded, leaving her trembling in its wake. But she knew, deep down, that the darkness would return. It always did.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"The voice came again [again]"
dialogueSentences24
tagDensity0.542
leniency1
rawRatio0.077
effectiveRatio0.077
87.14% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1166
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"sharply"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"slightly"
2"sharply"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1166
totalAiIsms49
found
0
word"looming"
count1
1
word"sentinels"
count1
2
word"stark"
count1
3
word"pulsed"
count2
4
word"warmth"
count6
5
word"foreboding"
count1
6
word"flickered"
count1
7
word"racing"
count3
8
word"silence"
count2
9
word"profound"
count1
10
word"intricate"
count1
11
word"etched"
count1
12
word"vibrated"
count1
13
word"down her spine"
count1
14
word"familiar"
count2
15
word"echoed"
count2
16
word"whisper"
count1
17
word"chill"
count1
18
word"flicker"
count1
19
word"pounding"
count1
20
word"fleeting"
count1
21
word"reverberated"
count2
22
word"scanned"
count1
23
word"pulse"
count1
24
word"gloom"
count1
25
word"raced"
count3
26
word"echo"
count2
27
word"chilling"
count1
28
word"cacophony"
count1
29
word"echoing"
count1
30
word"searing"
count1
31
word"could feel"
count2
32
word"amidst"
count1
highlights
0"looming"
1"sentinels"
2"stark"
3"pulsed"
4"warmth"
5"foreboding"
6"flickered"
7"racing"
8"silence"
9"profound"
10"intricate"
11"etched"
12"vibrated"
13"down her spine"
14"familiar"
15"echoed"
16"whisper"
17"chill"
18"flicker"
19"pounding"
20"fleeting"
21"reverberated"
22"scanned"
23"pulse"
24"gloom"
25"raced"
26"echo"
27"chilling"
28"cacophony"
29"echoing"
30"searing"
31"could feel"
32"amidst"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"sent a shiver through"
count1
1
label"flicker of emotion"
count1
highlights
0"sent a shiver down"
1"a glimmer of hope"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences82
matches
0"g in fury"
90.59% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences82
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences91
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen30
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1163
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions29
wordCount1109
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity0.9
worstName"Grove"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Grove"
discoveredNames
Aurora7
Carter1
Fae1
Grove10
Heartstone5
Pendant1
London1
Eva2
Silence1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Carter"
2"Heartstone"
3"Pendant"
4"Eva"
5"Silence"
places
0"Fae"
1"Grove"
2"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
14.86% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences74
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"felt like this before"
1"shadows that seemed to stretch and twist, mocking her solitude"
2"appeared wilted their colours muted as if drained of life"
3"rhythm that seemed to sync with her heartbeat"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1163
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences91
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs41
mean28.37
std16.11
cv0.568
sampleLengths
063
161
226
314
469
516
651
734
810
938
1042
1129
1212
1356
147
1511
1651
1737
1817
1924
2018
219
2241
2314
2433
2511
2610
2728
2811
2940
3035
3114
3229
3335
3430
3516
3630
3724
3830
3924
4013
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences82
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs202
matches
0"was fleeting"
1"were watching"
80.06% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences91
ratio0.022
matches
0"But now, it felt different—tainted."
1"A sudden movement caught her eye—a flicker of white darting between the trees."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1112
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"growing hot against her"
adverbCount37
adverbRatio0.03327338129496403
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.008093525179856115
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences91
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences91
mean12.78
std6.23
cv0.487
sampleLengths
024
122
217
319
420
55
617
711
81
914
1010
114
129
1315
1421
1524
169
177
1811
1913
2027
2123
2211
237
243
256
2618
2714
2813
2915
3014
3113
3216
339
343
3514
3612
3730
383
394
409
412
4217
4314
4420
4515
4611
4711
4817
4924
49.82% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.31868131868131866
totalSentences91
uniqueOpeners29
41.15% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences81
matches
0"Just the trees, their gnarled"
ratio0.012
66.91% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount31
totalSentences81
matches
0"She paused, the air thick"
1"She had come here for"
2"she muttered, forcing herself to"
3"She stepped deeper into the"
4"she whispered, her voice barely"
5"It felt alive, thrumming with"
6"She glanced around, half-expecting to"
7"She turned, squinting into the"
8"she called, her voice trembling"
9"She took a step back,"
10"She reached out to touch"
11"She turned sharply, heart pounding,"
12"she hissed, anger flaring in"
13"She clutched it tighter, the"
14"She was not alone."
15"she demanded, voice steadier than"
16"It was tall, impossibly thin,"
17"she breathed, stepping forward, but"
18"she shouted, panic surging"
19"She stumbled back, the Heartstone"
ratio0.383
27.90% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount70
totalSentences81
matches
0"The rustle of leaves whispered"
1"She paused, the air thick"
2"The Heartstone Pendant, nestled against"
3"She had come here for"
4"The Grove had been a"
5"Shadows flickered at the corners"
6"A twig snapped behind her,"
7"she muttered, forcing herself to"
8"The silence was too profound,"
9"She stepped deeper into the"
10"The faint glow of the"
11"she whispered, her voice barely"
12"A low hum vibrated through"
13"It felt alive, thrumming with"
14"She glanced around, half-expecting to"
15"A rustling sound echoed from"
16"She turned, squinting into the"
17"she called, her voice trembling"
18"Silence answered her, thick and"
19"She took a step back,"
ratio0.864
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences81
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences57
technicalSentenceCount13
matches
0"She paused, the air thick with an unsettling stillness, a stark contrast to the vibrant wildflowers that bloomed defiantly in the moonlight."
1"The Heartstone Pendant, nestled against her chest, pulsed with a warmth that felt both inviting and foreboding."
2"The faint glow of the Heartstone intensified, casting a crimson hue that danced across the stones, illuminating the intricate carvings etched into their surface…"
3"It felt alive, thrumming with energy that sent a shiver down her spine."
4"She glanced around, half-expecting to see Eva’s familiar face, but the Grove was empty, save for the shadows that seemed to stretch and twist, mocking her solit…"
5"A rustling sound echoed from the thicket to her left, a soft, almost melodic whisper that sent a chill racing through her veins."
6"The wildflowers, once vibrant, now appeared wilted, their colours muted as if drained of life."
7"She turned sharply, heart pounding, but found only the shadows, shifting and swirling as if alive."
8"The pendant pulsed again, a steady rhythm that seemed to sync with her heartbeat."
9"She clutched it tighter, the warmth seeping into her skin, grounding her."
10"But the sensation was fleeting, replaced by an icy grip of fear as the rustling returned, louder this time, accompanied by a low, guttural growl that reverberat…"
11"The shadows seemed to pulse, shifting in a way that felt almost sentient, as if they were watching her, waiting."
12"Aurora’s heart raced as she clutched the pendant, the warmth flooding her veins, filling her with a fierce determination."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"she whispered, her voice barely a murmur"
1"she called, her voice trembling slightly"
2"she demanded, voice steadier than she felt"
3"she cried, desperation clawing at her throat"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags11
fancyCount10
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"she whispered (whisper)"
2"she hissed (hiss)"
3"she demanded (demand)"
4"she breathed (breathe)"
5"she shouted (shout)"
6"she cried (cry)"
7"The voice urged (urge)"
8"she screamed (scream)"
9"she gasped (gasp)"
dialogueSentences24
tagDensity0.458
leniency0.917
rawRatio0.909
effectiveRatio0.833
70.6369%