Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRBC6JPQT09ZM8Q3HE390K

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Duration:
37.7s
Cost:
$0.019486

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The glass slipped from Rory’s fingers before she could catch it, bourbon sloshing over her knuckles. The ice cubes clinked against the bar like a warning. Across the room, a man in a charcoal overcoat turned, his hazel eyes locking onto hers with the precision of a sniper’s scope. Silas. His beard had more grey than she remembered, the auburn streaks dulled to the colour of old pennies. The signet ring on his right hand caught the dim light as he lifted a hand in greeting—or was it surrender? The limp in his left leg was more pronounced now, each step a deliberate negotiation with the floorboards. Rory wiped her hand on her jeans, leaving a damp smear. The last time she’d seen him, he’d been standing in the rain outside Golden Empress, pressing a burner phone into her palm. *"Use it if you need to disappear."* She’d laughed, thinking he was joking. Three days later, she’d fled Cardiff with nothing but a duffel bag and Eva’s whispered *"Go."* Now here he was, threading through the crowd at The Raven’s Nest like a ghost who’d forgotten how to haunt properly. "Rory Carter," he said, voice rough as gravel under tyres. "Still dropping glasses, I see." "Silas Blackwood." She forced a smile. "Still limping like you’re auditioning for a pirate film." A beat. The air between them thickened, the kind of silence that comes before a storm breaks. Then he slid onto the stool beside her, close enough that she caught the scent of bergamot and something sharper—gun oil, maybe, or the metallic tang of old secrets. "Didn’t expect to see you here," he said. "Didn’t expect to be seen." She signalled the bartender for another drink. "Thought you’d retired." "Retirement’s for men who like golf." He tapped the bar, two quick raps. The bartender nodded, already reaching for the good whisky. "You look different." "Five years’ll do that." "Not just the years." His gaze flicked to the crescent scar on her wrist, then away. "You’re harder." Rory flexed her fingers around the fresh glass. "London’ll do that to you." The whisky arrived. Silas took it neat, no hesitation. Rory watched the way his throat worked as he swallowed, the way his signet ring glinted under the neon sign. The Raven’s Nest hadn’t changed—same old maps on the walls, same black-and-white photos of men who looked like they’d died before they hit thirty. But Silas had. The lines around his eyes were deeper, the set of his jaw less forgiving. "You still delivering takeaway?" he asked. "Only on Tuesdays." She swirled her drink. "Rest of the time, I’m gainfully unemployed." "Since when do you care about gainful?" "Since my bank account started sending me passive-aggressive texts." He laughed, but it was a hollow sound, like a gunshot in an empty alley. "You always were shit with money." "And you always were shit at goodbyes." The words hung there, sharp as broken glass. Silas’s fingers tightened around his glass. Outside, a siren wailed, growing louder before fading into the London night. "You left in a hurry," he said finally. "Evan left bruises in a hurry." Something dark flickered across his face. "I told you to call me." "You also told me not to get involved with him in the first place." "Christ, Rory." He rubbed his temple, the signet ring catching the light again. "I could’ve—" "What? Handled it?" She leaned in, close enough to see the flecks of gold in his hazel eyes. "I handled it myself, Silas. Just like I handle everything else." The bartender cleared his throat. "Another round?" Silas waved him off. "We’re good." "We’re not," Rory said. A muscle twitched in his jaw. "No. We’re not." She should’ve left it there. Should’ve finished her drink, walked out, let the past stay buried under five years of bad decisions and worse men. But the weight of the scar on her wrist burned, and the ghost of Evan’s voice still echoed in the back of her skull, whispering all the things he’d do if he ever found her. "So," she said, forcing her voice light. "Still running your little spy games out of the back room?" Silas didn’t answer. Instead, he reached into his coat and pulled out a folded piece of paper. The edges were worn, the creases soft with age. He slid it across the bar. Rory didn’t touch it. "What’s this?" "Open it." She unfolded it carefully. A newspaper clipping, yellowed at the edges. The headline read: *"Local Barrister’s Son Arrested in Domestic Assault Case."* Below it, a grainy photo of Evan being led into a police station, his face twisted in a snarl. Her breath hitched. "Found it a year after you left," Silas said quietly. "Kept meaning to send it to you. Never did." Rory traced the date with her fingertip. The night she’d fled Cardiff, Evan had been at a pub with friends. She’d packed her bag while he was out, left a note on the pillow—*"Gone. Don’t look for me."*—and slipped out the back door. By the time he’d come home, she’d already been on the train to London. She’d always wondered if he’d looked for her. "Thanks," she said, voice steadier than she felt. "But I don’t need it." Silas’s expression didn’t change, but his fingers drummed against the bar, a restless rhythm. "You ever think about going back?" "To Cardiff?" Rory laughed, but it came out wrong, too sharp, too loud. "What’s there for me now? My parents moved to Spain. Eva’s in Berlin. And Evan—" "Is in prison," Silas finished. "Got out last month." The glass slipped from her fingers again. This time, it shattered. Silas didn’t move to help. He just watched her, his hazel eyes dark in the dim light. "He’s been asking around. About you." Rory’s pulse roared in her ears. "How do you know?" "Because I’ve been keeping an eye on him." He leaned in, close enough that she could see the stubble along his jaw, the way his beard didn’t quite hide the old scar near his ear. "And because he came here last week." The room tilted. "Here?" "Sat in that booth over there." Silas nodded toward the back of the bar. "Drank a pint, asked about a girl with black hair and a scar on her wrist. Said he was an old friend." Rory’s hands curled into fists. "You didn’t tell him anything." "Of course I didn’t." His voice was low, dangerous. "But he’s not the kind of man who gives up easy." Outside, the neon sign buzzed, casting the bar in a sickly green glow. Rory’s reflection in the mirror behind the bottles looked small, fragile. Five years of running, and she was still right back where she started. Silas reached into his coat again. This time, he pulled out a key. "There’s a flat above the bar. It’s yours if you want it." Rory stared at the key like it might bite her. "Why?" "Because you’re still the best damn liar I’ve ever met." He pressed the key into her palm, his fingers warm against her skin. "And because I owe you." She should’ve said no. Should’ve walked out, disappeared into the London night like she had five years ago. But the weight of the key in her hand felt like an anchor, and for the first time in years, she didn’t want to run. "One condition," she said. Silas raised an eyebrow. "You teach me how to shoot." A slow smile spread across his face, sharp as a blade. "Deal." The bartender chose that moment to drop a tray of glasses. The crash echoed through the bar, loud as a gunshot. Rory flinched, her heart hammering against her ribs. Silas didn’t move. He just watched her, his hazel eyes dark with something she couldn’t name. Then his hand closed over hers, the signet ring cold against her skin. "Welcome home, Rory."
total_cost0.019486

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags24
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"he said finally [finally]"
1"Silas said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences67
tagDensity0.358
leniency0.716
rawRatio0.083
effectiveRatio0.06
96.23% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1328
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
58.58% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1328
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"silence"
count1
1
word"flicked"
count1
2
word"flickered"
count1
3
word"weight"
count2
4
word"echoed"
count2
5
word"traced"
count1
6
word"shattered"
count1
7
word"pulse"
count1
8
word"eyebrow"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"flicked"
2"flickered"
3"weight"
4"echoed"
5"traced"
6"shattered"
7"pulse"
8"eyebrow"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences95
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences95
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences136
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen35
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans4
markdownWords21
totalWords1322
ratio0.016
matches
0"\"Use it if you need to disappear.\""
1"\"Go.\""
2"\"Local Barrister’s Son Arrested in Domestic Assault Case.\""
3"\"Gone. Don’t look for me.\""
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions21
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
77.61% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions43
wordCount967
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity1.45
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory13
Golden1
Empress1
Three1
Cardiff2
Eva1
Raven2
Nest2
Silas14
London3
Evan3
persons
0"Rory"
1"Empress"
2"Eva"
3"Raven"
4"Nest"
5"Silas"
6"Evan"
places
0"Golden"
1"Cardiff"
2"London"
globalScore0.776
windowScore0.833
38.06% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences67
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"looked like they’d died before they hit t"
1"quite hide the old scar near his ear"
2"felt like an anchor, and for the first"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1322
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences136
matches
0"chose that moment"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs66
mean20.03
std16.51
cv0.824
sampleLengths
049
11
257
362
421
515
615
746
88
915
1025
114
1218
1313
1470
156
1614
177
189
1921
207
2126
228
236
2412
2514
2615
2729
287
296
304
319
3260
3318
3432
356
362
3741
383
3919
4057
418
4213
4320
4428
459
4611
4723
4810
4942
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences95
matches
0"being led"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs172
matches
0"was joking"
1"was, threading"
58.82% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount5
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences136
ratio0.029
matches
0"The signet ring on his right hand caught the dim light as he lifted a hand in greeting—or was it surrender?"
1"Then he slid onto the stool beside her, close enough that she caught the scent of bergamot and something sharper—gun oil, maybe, or the metallic tang of old secrets."
2"The Raven’s Nest hadn’t changed—same old maps on the walls, same black-and-white photos of men who looked like they’d died before they hit thirty."
3"She’d packed her bag while he was out, left a note on the pillow—*\"Gone. Don’t look for me.\"*—and slipped out the back door."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount972
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount33
adverbRatio0.033950617283950615
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.0051440329218107
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences136
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences136
mean9.72
std6.92
cv0.712
sampleLengths
016
110
223
31
418
521
618
711
822
913
1016
1121
1210
135
146
159
162
1715
1829
198
2012
213
2213
239
243
254
2616
272
288
295
303
316
3220
3324
343
3514
366
377
387
397
409
4115
426
437
448
456
4612
478
486
496
65.93% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.4264705882352941
totalSentences136
uniqueOpeners58
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences88
matches
0"Then he slid onto the"
1"Instead, he reached into his"
2"Then his hand closed over"
ratio0.034
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences88
matches
0"His beard had more grey"
1"She’d laughed, thinking he was"
2"he said, voice rough as"
3"She forced a smile"
4"She signalled the bartender for"
5"He tapped the bar, two"
6"His gaze flicked to the"
7"She swirled her drink"
8"He laughed, but it was"
9"he said finally"
10"He rubbed his temple, the"
11"She leaned in, close enough"
12"She should’ve left it there."
13"she said, forcing her voice"
14"He slid it across the"
15"She unfolded it carefully."
16"Her breath hitched."
17"She’d packed her bag while"
18"She’d always wondered if he’d"
19"she said, voice steadier than"
ratio0.295
45.23% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount73
totalSentences88
matches
0"The glass slipped from Rory’s"
1"The ice cubes clinked against"
2"His beard had more grey"
3"The signet ring on his"
4"The limp in his left"
5"Rory wiped her hand on"
6"The last time she’d seen"
7"She’d laughed, thinking he was"
8"he said, voice rough as"
9"She forced a smile"
10"The air between them thickened,"
11"She signalled the bartender for"
12"He tapped the bar, two"
13"The bartender nodded, already reaching"
14"His gaze flicked to the"
15"Rory flexed her fingers around"
16"The whisky arrived."
17"Silas took it neat, no"
18"Rory watched the way his"
19"The Raven’s Nest hadn’t changed—same"
ratio0.83
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences88
matches
0"Now here he was, threading"
1"By the time he’d come"
ratio0.023
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences35
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"The Raven’s Nest hadn’t changed—same old maps on the walls, same black-and-white photos of men who looked like they’d died before they hit thirty."
62.50% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags24
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"he said, voice rough as gravel under tyres"
1"He rubbed, the signet ring catching the light again"
2"she said, voice steadier than she felt"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"She’d (would)"
1"Rory laughed (laugh)"
2"He pressed (press)"
dialogueSentences67
tagDensity0.179
leniency0.358
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.09
90.0991%