Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRC3MB5DC998PMQAFTC1SX

Run Details

Duration:
16.4s
Cost:
$0.000683
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The grin faded as he took a step back, eyes narrowing and jaw tightening. Rory held her breath, the sudden silence sapping all the noise from the dim, smoky room. Behind the bar, Silas stared at her as if she’d vanished into thin air, then blinked, and for a fleeting second, a flicker of recognition crossed his face. She clenched her fists around the cold glass, the warmth of the whiskey suddenly an afterthought. He was older, more seasoned, the lines around his eyes deeper, the grey streaks in his auburn hair catching the low, hanging light in the bar's shadowed corner. He looked like someone who knew secrets best left buried, yet here he was, rumpled and still. The old bar stool squeaked faintly as he shifted his weight, a slow, deliberate motion, the silvery signet ring on his right hand flashing briefly. "Silas," she managed, voice rough. She blinked, trying to ground herself, her mind racing for the right words. "Didn't expect to see you here." He hesitated, the hint of a smile lingering but never quite reaching his hazel eyes. "Rory. Well, magic’s funny that way. A bar in Soho, and suddenly—" "—suddenly, you're not quite a stranger anymore," she finished. Her fingers tapped the lip of her glass, the familiar sensation offering a weak anchor. Her black hair was straighter now, the shoulder-length cut a little more stubborn, like her resolve. She felt the scar on her wrist pulse slightly under the thin fabric of her sleeve, an old wound, easily dismissed but never forgotten. He moved slowly toward her, the limp in his left leg subtle but present. The newspaper clippings, the long nights with spies and secrets tucked away, all of it had carved stories into him she had long since stopped trying to decipher. Now, he looked like someone who had traded bullets for blurred memories, his eyes wary but sharp. "How long’s it been?" His voice was gravelly, gentle but edged with something unkind—regret, perhaps, or merely age. "Around five years," she replied, her tone neutral but her eyes flickering with unspoken pain. "Maybe more." He nodded, a subtle gesture, almost like a bow. "Time moves fast. Real quick." Rory set her glass down, the ice rattling faintly. She looked away momentarily, processing the sudden surge of memories—the nights they’d spent in this very city, in different bars, hunting for truths no one wanted known. Once, they’d been reckless, reckless in ways that now seemed like a lifetime ago. "You sound... more tired," she said softly, her words hovering between curiosity and accusation. His lips twitched. A faint smile, almost amused, almost bitter. "You’d be tired too, if you’d seen what I’ve seen." He reached for his own drink, a bourbon, and took a slow sip, the glass gleaming in the dim. For a beat, a silence stretched, thick with all the years that had slipped past. Rory looked him over—her old friend who had once been daring and charming, now a husk of the man she’d known, weighed down by scars too deep for words. "So,” she finally said, “what brings you here? After all this time?” He set down his glass, leaning slightly on the battered counter. "You know me, Rory. I don't drift far from the nest, even when I want to. What about you? I heard you ran from Cardiff quick enough." She chuckled softly, the sound hollow in her chest. "Yeah. That’s one way of putting it." Her gaze flickered to the street outside, a blur of neon signs and shadows. "London’s been my home. Or at least, it was once." He looked at her intently then, a flicker of old camaraderie passing through his gaze. "Still the sharp one, I see. I thought you’d fallen off the grid entirely." She shrugged. "Life’s a game of hide and seek. Sometimes, I prefer the hide." His laugh, rough and cracking, warmed the air a little. "We all do what we can." A pause, heavy and charged, settled between them. Rory’s mind flicked back—paranoia, midnight phone calls, debts she’d rather forget. All that time in Cardiff, running from a past she’d almost managed to bury, only to find it waiting for her here. "Did you think about me?" she asked suddenly, voice quiet but clear, stirring something uncomfortable in his eyes. He looked away briefly, licking his lips. "Thought about a lot of things. You, not so much. Not that I didn’t—just... Life moves in strange circles." Her heart clenched. "Strange enough that we run into each other after all this time." He nodded slowly. "Not exactly a coincidence, is it?" "No," she admitted. Her fingers toyed with her scarf. "I’ve changed, Silas. Better part of me wishes I hadn’t." His eyes softened, though the tension clung to him like ash. "You’ve been through hell. I can see it." "I had to." She looked at her hands, the scars, the nights filled with shadows. "You wouldn’t believe what I’ve seen." He took another sip, the amber liquid flickering in the dull glow. "I might. Depends if you’re willing to tell me." A flicker of a smile touched her lips but quickly disappeared. Instead, she looked at the door, then back at him. "You always knew what to say." "Some things, Rory," he said quietly, “you learn by doing, not talking." A figure moved in the doorway, a flash of movement, quick and sharp. Rory’s hand darted to her pocket, instinct honing her senses faster than her mind caught up. Her eyes narrowed. “Silas,” she said, voice a breath lower, “who's that?” He followed her gaze, the haze in his eyes sharpening. Then his expression firmed, the diplomat of a man replaced by something colder—more prepared. “The back room,” he murmured. "Less eyes, more truth." His voice was low, gravelly with a hint of warning. Rory’s stomach tightened. "You think they’re here for me?" He shrugged with unconvincing ease. "Better to be cautious." The shadow in the doorway paused, then stepped forward with deliberate calm. A silhouette, sharp and familiar. The world had tilted again, heavy with the weight of what was lost and who was still lurking in the dark. Rory’s throat dried. She knew that face, knew it all too well. This was no coincidence. Not anymore. And whatever came next, it would reshape everything—again.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
23.53% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"she said softly [softly]"
1"she asked suddenly [suddenly]"
2"he said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.324
leniency0.647
rawRatio0.273
effectiveRatio0.176
43.66% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1065
totalAiIsmAdverbs12
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count4
1
adverb"slightly"
count2
2
adverb"slowly"
count2
3
adverb"very"
count1
4
adverb"softly"
count2
5
adverb"quickly"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"slightly"
2"slowly"
3"very"
4"softly"
5"quickly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
1.41% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1065
totalAiIsms21
found
0
word"silence"
count2
1
word"fleeting"
count1
2
word"flicker"
count3
3
word"warmth"
count1
4
word"weight"
count2
5
word"racing"
count1
6
word"familiar"
count2
7
word"resolve"
count1
8
word"pulse"
count1
9
word"unspoken"
count1
10
word"gleaming"
count1
11
word"flickered"
count1
12
word"charged"
count1
13
word"flicked"
count1
14
word"tension"
count1
15
word"stomach"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"fleeting"
2"flicker"
3"warmth"
4"weight"
5"racing"
6"familiar"
7"resolve"
8"pulse"
9"unspoken"
10"gleaming"
11"flickered"
12"charged"
13"flicked"
14"tension"
15"stomach"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches3
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"clenched jaw/fists"
count1
2
label"flicker of emotion"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"clenched her fists"
2"a flicker of recognition"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences69
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences69
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"managed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences88
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen30
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1057
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions9
wordCount808
uniqueNames3
maxNameDensity0.87
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Silas1
Cardiff1
Rory7
persons
0"Silas"
1"Rory"
places
0"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
8.49% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences53
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"looked like someone who knew secrets best"
1"not quite a stranger"
2"looked like someone who had traded bullet"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1057
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences88
matches
0"knew that face"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs38
mean27.82
std17.81
cv0.64
sampleLengths
058
186
224
327
464
559
618
717
814
950
1014
1139
1244
1312
1438
1540
1629
1714
1816
1941
2018
2126
2215
239
2419
2519
2621
2721
2827
2912
3032
319
3224
3319
349
359
3650
3714
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences69
matches
0"was, rumpled"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs146
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences88
ratio0.08
matches
0"\"—suddenly, you're not quite a stranger anymore,\" she finished."
1"\"How long’s it been?\" His voice was gravelly, gentle but edged with something unkind—regret, perhaps, or merely age."
2"She looked away momentarily, processing the sudden surge of memories—the nights they’d spent in this very city, in different bars, hunting for truths no one wanted known."
3"Rory looked him over—her old friend who had once been daring and charming, now a husk of the man she’d known, weighed down by scars too deep for words."
4"Rory’s mind flicked back—paranoia, midnight phone calls, debts she’d rather forget."
5"Then his expression firmed, the diplomat of a man replaced by something colder—more prepared."
6"And whatever came next, it would reshape everything—again."
74.66% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount348
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount24
adverbRatio0.06896551724137931
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.014367816091954023
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences88
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences88
mean12.01
std7.04
cv0.586
sampleLengths
014
116
228
316
428
517
625
75
813
96
1015
1112
129
1315
1416
1524
1614
1728
1817
1918
2015
212
229
235
249
2527
2614
2714
283
297
3029
3115
3229
3312
3411
3527
369
3721
3810
3915
4014
412
4212
4310
446
458
4611
4722
4818
497
71.59% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.4431818181818182
totalSentences88
uniqueOpeners39
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences65
matches
0"Once, they’d been reckless, reckless"
1"All that time in Cardiff,"
2"Instead, she looked at the"
3"Then his expression firmed, the"
ratio0.062
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount38
totalSentences65
matches
0"She clenched her fists around"
1"He was older, more seasoned,"
2"He looked like someone who"
3"she managed, voice rough"
4"She blinked, trying to ground"
5"He hesitated, the hint of"
6"Her fingers tapped the lip"
7"Her black hair was straighter"
8"She felt the scar on"
9"He moved slowly toward her,"
10"His voice was gravelly, gentle"
11"she replied, her tone neutral"
12"He nodded, a subtle gesture,"
13"She looked away momentarily, processing"
14"she said softly, her words"
15"His lips twitched."
16"He reached for his own"
17"she finally said"
18"He set down his glass,"
19"She chuckled softly, the sound"
ratio0.585
21.54% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount57
totalSentences65
matches
0"The grin faded as he"
1"Rory held her breath, the"
2"She clenched her fists around"
3"He was older, more seasoned,"
4"He looked like someone who"
5"The old bar stool squeaked"
6"she managed, voice rough"
7"She blinked, trying to ground"
8"He hesitated, the hint of"
9"\"—suddenly, you're not quite a"
10"Her fingers tapped the lip"
11"Her black hair was straighter"
12"She felt the scar on"
13"He moved slowly toward her,"
14"The newspaper clippings, the long"
15"His voice was gravelly, gentle"
16"she replied, her tone neutral"
17"He nodded, a subtle gesture,"
18"Rory set her glass down,"
19"She looked away momentarily, processing"
ratio0.877
76.92% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences65
matches
0"Now, he looked like someone"
ratio0.015
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences34
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"She blinked, trying to ground herself, her mind racing for the right words."
1"Rory looked him over—her old friend who had once been daring and charming, now a husk of the man she’d known, weighed down by scars too deep for words."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount6
matches
0"she managed, voice rough"
1"she replied, her tone neutral but her eyes flickering with unspoken pain"
2"she said softly, her words hovering between curiosity and accusation"
3"Her gaze flickered, a blur of neon signs and shadows"
4"she asked suddenly, voice quiet but clear, stirring something uncomfortable in his eyes"
5"She looked, the scars, the nights filled with shadows"
91.18% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she admitted (admit)"
1"he murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.206
leniency0.412
rawRatio0.286
effectiveRatio0.118
72.6547%