Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRDNK75WWVX5PNASA3Q2JC

Run Details

Duration:
15.6s
Cost:
$0.000811
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The metallic click of the gate shutting behind her echoed unnervingly in the silence, as if the sound had been smothered, then suddenly released. Rory hesitated for a fleeting moment, gaze flicking across the shadows cast by the moonlight, which pooled irregularly beneath the thick trees surrounding the clearing. The Fae Grove was supposed to be a secret, a quiet sanctuary hidden between Richmond Park and some forgotten corner of the earth, but tonight, it felt wrong—almost alive with something unseen. She tugged her coat tighter around her, the fabric rough against her palms as her fingers brushed against the crimson glow of the Heartstone Pendant beneath her shirt. The pulse of warmth she'd felt when near a Hel portal had faded to a dull throb, now just an echo of something that once was. The pendant hung there, silent and still, as though holding its breath. The wind barely whispered, yet the air hung heavy with an unnatural stillness. Trees creaked softly, their shadows stretching towards her like grasping fingers. Somewhere, distant—far beyond the borders of her sight—the faint crunch of twigs registered, as if something heavy was walking just out of reach, silent and deliberate. Her footsteps crunched softly on the dried leaves, but it sounded uncomfortably loud, exaggerated in the suffocating quiet. She cast a quick glance over her shoulder, the flickering shadows fluttering just beyond her vision. No one was supposed to be here, no one knew she was coming. That’s what made this trip so odd—she’d checked, double-checked. No trackers, no spies. No signs of anyone lurking. Yet the feeling persisted, ratcheting up beneath her skin. A prickling at her neck, a subtle sense that she was being watched. A faint shimmer flickered at the edge of her eye—a distortion, like heat rising off asphalt in the middle of summer. When she turned sharply, the space behind her remained empty, the shadows settling immediately back into their shapeless forms. Still, her chest tugged with an unshakable feeling that something had shifted. The grove was alive with a quiet menace she couldn’t name. She moved further into the clearing, each step cautious, her senses sharpened. Wildflowers, resilient enough to bloom year-round, nodded gently, their scent of damp earth and faintly sweet pollen filling the air. Nothing at first appeared amiss—just the quiet, eerie serenity of the grove. But then, a sudden movement out of the corner of her eye—a flicker—something darting behind a twisted, moss-covered stone. Her breath caught in her throat. Her pulse fluttered, uncertain whether it was fear or anticipation. She took a tentative step closer to the standing stones that marked the boundary, the ancient oak standing sentinel like an altar to something older than memory. The stones radiated silence—an oppressive calm that pressed in on her, weighing down her chest. Then, a faint sound—a whisper, distant but growing louder—like the rustle of a silk dress, or the delicate scrape of claws across stone. It was impossible here—no animals came this far, not this late. The only noise was supposed to be her own breath, shallow and quick. Her eyes darted between the shadows, searching for the source, but nothing revealed itself. The wind picked up again—no, not wind. A soft, almost inaudible humming, like the tune of a lullaby sung from too far away. It dripped into her ears and stayed, a persistent lull, curling around her like a net. She forced herself to stand still, chest tightening, ears straining for its source. A sudden flicker of movement, just a flicker—a ripple—across her peripheral vision. An outline, blurred and shifting, like the shadow of a cloud passing over a face. Her fingers tightened around the pendant chain, feeling the faint pulse that had almost been lost. The glow inside the Crimson Heartstone pulsed feebly with her heartbeat. "Not supposed to be here," she whispered, voice hoarse and swallowed by the thick air. Her eyes lingered on the spot—the place where the flicker had appeared—and her gut twisted. That feeling of wrongness, rippling and expanding, was no longer subtle. A small ripple broke the ground—moonlight bouncing off a surface. Shadows stretched with unnatural intent, twisting unnaturally, distorting what should have been familiar, turned sinister. Something was moving, slow, deliberate, almost shuffling. Too close now. A colder gust seeped in, carrying a faint scent of moss, decay, and something metallic—distant and unsettling. Her skin prickled as she fought the urge to turn away, her gaze fixating on the dark patch near the twisted trunk. A figure? Or just her mind playing tricks, eager to betray her in this place that felt like a secret grave, sealed with whispers and shadows? Then, the hum crescendoed, suddenly sharper, more insistent, vibrating under her skin. The trees shuddered, leaves whispering of secrets they kept silent for centuries. A whisper again, more distinct this time—a voice faint, like a breath or a sigh—murmuring untraceable words that made her stomach churn. “I know you’re here,” a voice finally said. Her breath hitched. Heart thudding painfully against her ribs, she froze. The voice was cold, whispering from just beyond her sight, brushing the edges of her mind with icy fingers. It did not sound human, or alive in the way she understood life. It was layered, shadowed, like the echo of a thousand voices all speaking at once. She clenched her fists, feeling the rough scar on her wrist, grounding herself. The pendant’s faint glow flared with a sudden surge—an accident, or a warning? She didn’t want to look—the sensation was prickling her skin, as if unseen eyes had sunk into her flesh. The hum turned frantic, almost a growl, shifting into a rhythm that resembled a heartbeat. Offbeat, jagged, violent. She felt it, deep inside her bones, and knew the grove was unhinged, unmoored from reality. Her voice barely escaped her lips, trembling. "Who’s there?" No reply. Only that oppressive silence, thick and suffocating, punctuated by the distant, irregular crack of the standing stones—an echo that seemed out of place, like a loud whisper in a world gone quiet. The shadows rippled again, this time with purpose, coalescing into shapes that defied sense. The shapes moved, not with intent, but with a hypnotic, unnatural grace, bending and folding as if liquid. Her eyes refused to leave the darkness, her mind battling the rising tide of panic. In the faint glow of the pendant, she realised with icy clarity that she wasn’t alone—something else was here, watching, waiting. Whether it was beast, spirit, or something worse, she could no longer tell. The grove had opened, and whatever lurked within was learning her secrets. The woods seemed to breathe with a sick, slow rhythm—her own heartbeat, pounding louder now, merging with the whispering pull of unseen forces. The edge of her vision blurred, shadows stretching and pulling like a tide. She knew she had entered something far beyond understanding. If she stayed, she would drown; if she ran, she might never escape. But standing still was no longer an option. The shadows shifted again, closing in like hungry mouths, and she felt the cold, unyielding pull of darkness ready to swallow her whole.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags1
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences3
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
75.41% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1220
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count2
1
adverb"softly"
count2
2
adverb"sharply"
count1
3
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"softly"
2"sharply"
3"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1220
totalAiIsms38
found
0
word"echoed"
count1
1
word"silence"
count3
2
word"fleeting"
count1
3
word"sanctuary"
count1
4
word"almost alive"
count1
5
word"pulse"
count3
6
word"warmth"
count1
7
word"throb"
count1
8
word"echo"
count3
9
word"footsteps"
count1
10
word"flickered"
count1
11
word"amiss"
count1
12
word"flicker"
count4
13
word"fluttered"
count1
14
word"anticipation"
count1
15
word"sentinel"
count1
16
word"oppressive"
count2
17
word"whisper"
count3
18
word"silk"
count1
19
word"pulsed"
count1
20
word"familiar"
count1
21
word"sinister"
count1
22
word"grave"
count1
23
word"stomach"
count1
24
word"churn"
count1
25
word"pounding"
count1
highlights
0"echoed"
1"silence"
2"fleeting"
3"sanctuary"
4"almost alive"
5"pulse"
6"warmth"
7"throb"
8"echo"
9"footsteps"
10"flickered"
11"amiss"
12"flicker"
13"fluttered"
14"anticipation"
15"sentinel"
16"oppressive"
17"whisper"
18"silk"
19"pulsed"
20"familiar"
21"sinister"
22"grave"
23"stomach"
24"churn"
25"pounding"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"clenched jaw/fists"
count1
highlights
0"clenched her fists"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences82
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences82
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
95.14% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences83
gibberishSentences1
adjustedGibberishSentences1
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen33
ratio0.012
matches
0"Then, a faint sound—a whisper, distant but growing louder—like the rustle of a silk dress, or the delicate scrape of claws across stone."
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1192
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions2
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions9
wordCount1181
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity0.17
worstName"Heartstone"
maxWindowNameDensity0.5
worstWindowName"Heartstone"
discoveredNames
Fae1
Grove1
Richmond1
Park1
Heartstone2
Pendant1
Hel1
Crimson1
persons
0"Pendant"
places
0"Fae"
1"Grove"
2"Richmond"
3"Park"
4"Hel"
5"Crimson"
globalScore1
windowScore1
82.43% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences74
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"as though holding its breath"
1"felt like a secret grave, sealed with w"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.839
wordCount1192
matches
0"not with intent, but with a hypnotic, unnatural grace, bending"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences83
matches(empty)
63.11% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs25
mean47.68
std17.68
cv0.371
sampleLengths
081
166
250
365
422
563
663
758
847
966
1054
1141
1235
1365
1446
158
1658
1745
1834
199
2034
2147
2246
2358
2431
75.31% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount7
totalSentences82
matches
0"been smothered"
1"was supposed"
2"was supposed"
3"was supposed"
4"been lost"
5"was layered"
6"was unhinged"
34.16% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs201
matches
0"was walking"
1"was coming"
2"was being"
3"was prickling"
4"was learning"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount26
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences21
totalSentences83
ratio0.253
matches
0"The Fae Grove was supposed to be a secret, a quiet sanctuary hidden between Richmond Park and some forgotten corner of the earth, but tonight, it felt wrong—almost alive with something unseen."
1"Somewhere, distant—far beyond the borders of her sight—the faint crunch of twigs registered, as if something heavy was walking just out of reach, silent and deliberate."
2"That’s what made this trip so odd—she’d checked, double-checked."
3"A faint shimmer flickered at the edge of her eye—a distortion, like heat rising off asphalt in the middle of summer."
4"Nothing at first appeared amiss—just the quiet, eerie serenity of the grove."
5"But then, a sudden movement out of the corner of her eye—a flicker—something darting behind a twisted, moss-covered stone."
6"The stones radiated silence—an oppressive calm that pressed in on her, weighing down her chest."
7"Then, a faint sound—a whisper, distant but growing louder—like the rustle of a silk dress, or the delicate scrape of claws across stone."
8"It was impossible here—no animals came this far, not this late."
9"The wind picked up again—no, not wind."
10"A sudden flicker of movement, just a flicker—a ripple—across her peripheral vision."
11"Her eyes lingered on the spot—the place where the flicker had appeared—and her gut twisted."
12"A small ripple broke the ground—moonlight bouncing off a surface."
13"A colder gust seeped in, carrying a faint scent of moss, decay, and something metallic—distant and unsettling."
14"A whisper again, more distinct this time—a voice faint, like a breath or a sigh—murmuring untraceable words that made her stomach churn."
15"The pendant’s faint glow flared with a sudden surge—an accident, or a warning?"
16"She didn’t want to look—the sensation was prickling her skin, as if unseen eyes had sunk into her flesh."
17"Only that oppressive silence, thick and suffocating, punctuated by the distant, irregular crack of the standing stones—an echo that seemed out of place, like a loud whisper in a world gone quiet."
18"In the faint glow of the pendant, she realised with icy clarity that she wasn’t alone—something else was here, watching, waiting."
19"The woods seemed to breathe with a sick, slow rhythm—her own heartbeat, pounding louder now, merging with the whispering pull of unseen forces."
20"If she stayed, she would drown; if she ran, she might never escape."
81.23% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1209
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"twisted, moss-covered stone."
adverbCount66
adverbRatio0.05459057071960298
lyAdverbCount20
lyAdverbRatio0.016542597187758478
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences83
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences83
mean14.36
std6.74
cv0.47
sampleLengths
024
125
232
328
426
512
613
711
826
918
1016
1113
129
134
145
159
1613
1721
1819
1912
2011
2112
2220
2312
2419
256
2610
2727
2815
2923
3011
3113
3214
337
3416
3516
3613
3712
3815
3916
4011
4115
4215
4311
4410
4515
467
473
4817
4922
51.41% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.37349397590361444
totalSentences83
uniqueOpeners31
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences80
matches
0"Somewhere, distant—far beyond the borders"
1"Then, a faint sound—a whisper,"
2"Too close now."
3"Then, the hum crescendoed, suddenly"
4"Only that oppressive silence, thick"
ratio0.063
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences80
matches
0"She tugged her coat tighter"
1"Her footsteps crunched softly on"
2"She cast a quick glance"
3"She moved further into the"
4"Her breath caught in her"
5"Her pulse fluttered, uncertain whether"
6"She took a tentative step"
7"It was impossible here—no animals"
8"Her eyes darted between the"
9"It dripped into her ears"
10"She forced herself to stand"
11"Her fingers tightened around the"
12"she whispered, voice hoarse and"
13"Her eyes lingered on the"
14"Her skin prickled as she"
15"Her breath hitched."
16"It did not sound human,"
17"It was layered, shadowed, like"
18"She clenched her fists, feeling"
19"She didn’t want to look—the"
ratio0.3
72.50% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount62
totalSentences80
matches
0"The metallic click of the"
1"Rory hesitated for a fleeting"
2"The Fae Grove was supposed"
3"She tugged her coat tighter"
4"The pulse of warmth she'd"
5"The pendant hung there, silent"
6"The wind barely whispered, yet"
7"Trees creaked softly, their shadows"
8"Her footsteps crunched softly on"
9"She cast a quick glance"
10"That’s what made this trip"
11"A prickling at her neck,"
12"A faint shimmer flickered at"
13"The grove was alive with"
14"She moved further into the"
15"Wildflowers, resilient enough to bloom"
16"Nothing at first appeared amiss—just"
17"Her breath caught in her"
18"Her pulse fluttered, uncertain whether"
19"She took a tentative step"
ratio0.775
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences80
matches
0"Whether it was beast, spirit,"
1"If she stayed, she would"
ratio0.025
32.97% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences65
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"The metallic click of the gate shutting behind her echoed unnervingly in the silence, as if the sound had been smothered, then suddenly released."
1"Rory hesitated for a fleeting moment, gaze flicking across the shadows cast by the moonlight, which pooled irregularly beneath the thick trees surrounding the c…"
2"Somewhere, distant—far beyond the borders of her sight—the faint crunch of twigs registered, as if something heavy was walking just out of reach, silent and del…"
3"She took a tentative step closer to the standing stones that marked the boundary, the ancient oak standing sentinel like an altar to something older than memory…"
4"A whisper again, more distinct this time—a voice faint, like a breath or a sigh—murmuring untraceable words that made her stomach churn."
5"She clenched her fists, feeling the rough scar on her wrist, grounding herself."
6"She didn’t want to look—the sensation was prickling her skin, as if unseen eyes had sunk into her flesh."
7"The hum turned frantic, almost a growl, shifting into a rhythm that resembled a heartbeat."
8"Only that oppressive silence, thick and suffocating, punctuated by the distant, irregular crack of the standing stones—an echo that seemed out of place, like a …"
9"The shapes moved, not with intent, but with a hypnotic, unnatural grace, bending and folding as if liquid."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags1
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences3
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.667
78.7889%