Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRDPXCFC32E8AWCS8F3DB1

Run Details

Duration:
17.5s
Cost:
$0.000708
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The cold slap of the glass hitting the counter made her startle, only to realise it was her own hand, trembling slightly, pouring the last of her whisky. She barely tasted it; only the sting of fire and the familiarity of the amber liquid grounding her moment. The dim light of the Raven’s Nest flickered overhead, casting shadows over the cluttered walls full of old photographs and yellowed maps. Someone had just delivered another round of drinks to the table beside her, but her eyes fixed on the entrance, waiting. Not exactly waiting. Watching. The bar door swung open with a squeal on its hinge, rattling the hooks hanging from a rusty beam. Her pulse quickened, knowing it was unlikely to be who she thought it was, but the gut instinct gnawed at her with that unsettling certainty. A man stepped inside, tall and broad-shouldered, limbs like they had been carved from a different, older world. Grey streaked auburn hair, neatly combed back, hazel eyes scanning the room with a quiet keenness. An old soldier’s posture, relaxed but deliberate. The air thickened. Her grip on the glass tightened. She knew that face—knew it like the alignment of stars she’d studied countless nights, even after years had dissolved the details. He moved through the murmur of conversations and clinking glasses, each footstep a quiet warning. Her breath hitched. Silas. He approached, each step reminding her of a different life she’d had, one she was trying to forget even as she yearned to remember it. His gaze settled on her, hazel eyes narrowing just a fraction as recognition flickered. They hadn’t seen each other in what felt like a lifetime. Nearly twelve years, maybe more. Yet, he looked the same—except he didn’t. He sat down without a word, leaning his tall frame against the scarred wooden table, hands resting across the leather surface like he belonged there. A cigarette slipped between his fingers, but he didn’t light it. His voice came low, steady, carrying that quiet authority she’d once admired. “Still hiding in the shadows, Rory?” She froze, the nickname slipping softly from his lips as if he’d spoken it yesterday, not a decade ago. The noise of the bar crept around them—people chatting, a jazz record crackling from an old turntable—yet the space between them shrank into silence. “I’m not hiding,” she managed, voice almost a whisper. Bright blue eyes sharpened, cautious. “Just passing through.” He studied her, slow and thorough, as if weighing her words. “Funny, I was sure I’d find you in Cardiff. Or maybe somewhere even further away.” She felt the flicker of her scar, the tiny crescent-shaped reminder of a childhood mistake she’d thought long buried. Her hands rested on her lap, trembling just enough to be noticeable. “London’s got its charms. Besides, I’ve been busy... with my own things.” “Have you now?” His tone was gentle, but edged with an old, familiar suspicion. “You look… different. That’s some change. Years seem to have worn down the girl I once knew.” She swirled the whisky in her glass, watching the liquid catch the faint glow of the bar’s lighting. “You’re not exactly the same, Silas,” she shot back. Her voice was steadier than she felt. “Running a bar, hiding from ghosts. Some of us move on.” He chuckled softly, a sound more like a low exhale. “Ghosts, huh? No. I chase shadows.” He pushed the signet-ringed hand across the table, fingertips brushing the worn leather. “Still got a lead on those old agents, still buried in secrets." Her brow furrowed. The old Silas, the one she’d known in a past life, would talk about spies and secrets with a sharp, playful edge. Now, she saw the weight behind his words—the weariness that never quite left him. “You retired,” she said softly. “You got out. That’s what you told me.” “Got out,” he echoed, voice devoid of irony. “Until I realised some shadows refuse to stay buried. And some secrets, Rory, they’re like ink on skin. Impossible to erase.” His gaze shifted to the bar’s flickering neon sign. “It’s funny how life pulls us back to the places we thought we’d left behind.” She looked away, the familiar ache starting to throb beneath her ribs. In her mind, she replayed the messages, the nights she’d spent dreaming of escape, the running years she’d spent trying to reshape herself, to forget the scars and the past. And here he was, still chasing shadows, still carrying the burden they’d once shared. “I didn’t expect to see you,” she admitted, voice barely above a whisper. “Not like this.” His eyes lingered on her, a flicker of what might’ve been a smile. “Neither did I.” He paused, then leaned closer, voice dropping. “But I’ve got something you’re going to want to hear. Something that’s been buried long enough.” Her stomach clenched. The old instincts kicked in. Caution. Resentment. Curiosity. She remembered the silences between them back in Cardiff, the days they’d spent plotting their escape from the past, only to find it catching up in ways nobody could foresee. Now, those memories pressed against her chest tight. “What is it?” Her words escaped in a whisper, hesitant. Silas drew a deep breath and then looked over his shoulder, checking the room. The bar was still alive with noise, but he kept his tone low, almost conspiratorial. “I’ve uncovered a leak. Something big. Enough to shake the underworld—your world, my world. And I need—” The door crashed open behind them. A new voice—bright and angry—cut through the murmur. It was loud, commanding, and undesired. “Silas!” The voice was sharp, edged with a desperation she hadn’t expected. A young woman, hurried and breathless, her face streaked with dirt and sweat, darted into the bar. Instantly, her eyes locked onto Silas. He straightened, expression darkening. Rory’s grip on her glass tightened. The girl’s presence twisted the air around her, thickening with unspoken history. “Eva,” Silas greeted coolly, voice tense, eyes narrowing. “You shouldn’t be here.” The woman approached hurriedly, ignoring his tone. Her hands trembled as she reached into her coat and pulled out a crumpled envelope, shoving it across the table towards him. “Found this.” She gasped, eyes darting nervously. “They’re watching us. I think someone’s onto me.” Silas’s brow furrowed, his stiff posture losing a fragment of its rigidity. He examined the envelope, then looked back at Eva. “What’s this about? Who’s watching?” She glanced sideways, swallowed hard, and answered in a whisper: “It’s trouble. Bigger than before. You need to see this.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"she said softly [softly]"
1"He paused then [then]"
2"Silas greeted coolly [coolly]"
dialogueSentences29
tagDensity0.448
leniency0.897
rawRatio0.231
effectiveRatio0.207
68.21% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1101
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count3
2
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
3
adverb"coolly"
count1
4
adverb"nervously"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"softly"
2"barely above a whisper"
3"coolly"
4"nervously"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1101
totalAiIsms23
found
0
word"flickered"
count2
1
word"pulse"
count1
2
word"quickened"
count1
3
word"scanning"
count1
4
word"silence"
count1
5
word"whisper"
count4
6
word"flicker"
count2
7
word"reminder"
count1
8
word"familiar"
count2
9
word"furrowed"
count2
10
word"weight"
count1
11
word"echoed"
count1
12
word"throb"
count1
13
word"stomach"
count1
14
word"unspoken"
count1
15
word"trembled"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"pulse"
2"quickened"
3"scanning"
4"silence"
5"whisper"
6"flicker"
7"reminder"
8"familiar"
9"furrowed"
10"weight"
11"echoed"
12"throb"
13"stomach"
14"unspoken"
15"trembled"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences76
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences76
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences91
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen30
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1090
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions11
wordCount869
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity0.69
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Bright1
Silas6
Cardiff1
Eva1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Silas"
3"Eva"
places
0"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
65.25% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences59
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"felt like a lifetime"
1"as if weighing her words"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1090
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences91
matches
0"knew that face"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs32
mean34.06
std21.63
cv0.635
sampleLengths
094
185
248
31
462
548
66
743
817
926
1043
1131
1245
1341
1439
1513
1653
1756
1816
1939
2049
2110
2246
2320
2435
2522
2612
2729
2815
2921
305
3120
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences76
matches
0"been carved"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs168
matches
0"was trying"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences91
ratio0.066
matches
0"She barely tasted it; only the sting of fire and the familiarity of the amber liquid grounding her moment."
1"She knew that face—knew it like the alignment of stars she’d studied countless nights, even after years had dissolved the details."
2"Yet, he looked the same—except he didn’t."
3"The noise of the bar crept around them—people chatting, a jazz record crackling from an old turntable—yet the space between them shrank into silence."
4"Now, she saw the weight behind his words—the weariness that never quite left him."
5"A new voice—bright and angry—cut through the murmur."
90.18% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount879
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"tiny crescent-shaped reminder"
adverbCount39
adverbRatio0.04436860068259386
lyAdverbCount17
lyAdverbRatio0.019340159271899887
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences91
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences91
mean11.98
std7.35
cv0.613
sampleLengths
028
119
222
321
43
51
619
725
818
916
107
113
126
1321
1415
153
161
1725
1814
1911
205
217
2225
2311
2412
256
2619
2724
289
295
303
3111
3215
3319
3412
3512
3614
3717
3818
399
407
4111
4210
4319
4412
453
4622
4714
485
498
73.99% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.45054945054945056
totalSentences91
uniqueOpeners41
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences71
matches
0"Nearly twelve years, maybe more."
1"Bright blue eyes sharpened, cautious."
2"Instantly, her eyes locked onto"
ratio0.042
0.28% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount39
totalSentences71
matches
0"She barely tasted it; only"
1"Her pulse quickened, knowing it"
2"Her grip on the glass"
3"She knew that face—knew it"
4"He moved through the murmur"
5"Her breath hitched."
6"He approached, each step reminding"
7"His gaze settled on her,"
8"They hadn’t seen each other"
9"He sat down without a"
10"His voice came low, steady,"
11"She froze, the nickname slipping"
12"she managed, voice almost a"
13"He studied her, slow and"
14"She felt the flicker of"
15"Her hands rested on her"
16"His tone was gentle, but"
17"She swirled the whisky in"
18"she shot back"
19"Her voice was steadier than"
ratio0.549
30.42% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount61
totalSentences71
matches
0"The cold slap of the"
1"She barely tasted it; only"
2"The dim light of the"
3"Someone had just delivered another"
4"The bar door swung open"
5"Her pulse quickened, knowing it"
6"A man stepped inside, tall"
7"An old soldier’s posture, relaxed"
8"The air thickened."
9"Her grip on the glass"
10"She knew that face—knew it"
11"He moved through the murmur"
12"Her breath hitched."
13"He approached, each step reminding"
14"His gaze settled on her,"
15"They hadn’t seen each other"
16"He sat down without a"
17"A cigarette slipped between his"
18"His voice came low, steady,"
19"She froze, the nickname slipping"
ratio0.859
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences71
matches
0"Yet, he looked the same—except"
1"Now, she saw the weight"
2"Now, those memories pressed against"
ratio0.042
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences37
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The bar door swung open with a squeal on its hinge, rattling the hooks hanging from a rusty beam."
1"She swirled the whisky in her glass, watching the liquid catch the faint glow of the bar’s lighting."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount7
matches
0"she managed, voice almost a whisper"
1"He pushed, fingertips brushing the worn leather"
2"he echoed, voice devoid of irony"
3"she admitted, voice barely above a whisper"
4"Her words escaped, hesitant"
5"Silas greeted coolly, voice tense, eyes narrowing"
6"She gasped, eyes darting nervously"
81.03% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she admitted (admit)"
1"She gasped (gasp)"
dialogueSentences29
tagDensity0.103
leniency0.207
rawRatio0.667
effectiveRatio0.138
76.9791%