Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRDV0J63WZE40YRB6EH18B

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Duration:
37.7s
Cost:
$0.019798

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

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The glass slipped from her fingers before she could catch it, shattering against the floorboards with a sound like gunfire. Rory didn’t flinch. She’d heard worse. The bar’s dim light caught the amber liquid as it pooled between the cracks, seeping into the wood like a slow confession. "Still got a knack for making an entrance, I see." The voice came from behind her, low and familiar, roughened by years she hadn’t witnessed. Rory turned slowly, the crescent scar on her wrist prickling as if it remembered him too. Silas stood there, leaning against the bar with that same infuriating ease, though his auburn hair had more grey in it now, threading through his beard like silver wire. The signet ring on his right hand glinted as he crossed his arms. "You kept the place," she said, because it was easier than hello. "Some habits die hard." His gaze flicked to the broken glass, then back to her face. "You look different." "People tend to after seven years." "Seven years, three months, and—" he checked his watch, a deliberate pause "—sixteen days. Not that I’ve been counting." The air between them thickened, heavy with the weight of things unsaid. Rory reached for the nearest stool, her fingers brushing the worn leather. The Raven’s Nest hadn’t changed. Same old maps on the walls, same scent of aged whiskey and polished wood. Even the green neon sign outside still buzzed like a dying insect. But Silas had. The slight limp in his left leg was new, or maybe she’d just never noticed it before. The way his hazel eyes held hers now, like he was measuring her against some memory she couldn’t see. "You’re working here now?" she asked, nodding toward the bar. "Own it." He pushed off the counter, moving with that quiet authority she remembered. "Though I suspect you already knew that." Rory didn’t answer. She didn’t have to. The way his mouth quirked told her he’d seen right through it. Silas grabbed a fresh glass and poured two fingers of something dark and rich. "Still take it neat?" "Still ask stupid questions?" He slid the drink toward her. "Some things never change." Rory wrapped her fingers around the glass, the cut crystal cool against her skin. She could feel his eyes on her, tracing the lines of her face, the way her black hair fell just past her shoulders now, the way her bright blue eyes didn’t quite meet his. She took a sip, letting the whiskey burn its way down her throat. "You’re not just here for a drink," he said. "No." "Thought so." He leaned back against the counter, the wood creaking under his weight. "You always did have that look. Like you were about to ask for something you knew I wouldn’t like." Rory set the glass down. "I need a favour." Silas exhaled through his nose, a sound that might have been a laugh if it weren’t so tired. "Of course you do." "It’s not what you think." "Isn’t it?" He reached for a rag, wiping down the counter with slow, deliberate strokes. "Last time you needed a favour, you ended up in a safe house in Marseille. The time before that, you nearly got us both killed in Prague." "That was different." "Was it?" He tossed the rag aside. "You’ve got that same look in your eyes, Rory. Like you’re already halfway out the door." She opened her mouth to argue, but the words died on her tongue. He wasn’t wrong. She *had* been halfway out the door the moment she’d stepped inside. That was the problem with old friends—they remembered the parts of you that you tried to leave behind. Silas sighed, running a hand through his hair. "What is it this time?" Rory hesitated. The truth sat on the tip of her tongue, bitter and heavy. But some things were harder to say than others. "I need access to the back room." His expression didn’t change, but something in his eyes flickered. "You know what’s in there?" "I know what *was* in there." "And you think it’s still the same?" She didn’t answer. She didn’t have to. Silas studied her for a long moment, his fingers tapping against the counter like he was counting the beats of her silence. Then, without a word, he turned and walked toward the bookshelf at the far end of the bar. Rory followed, her pulse quickening as he pressed his palm against the spine of a worn leather volume. The bookshelf swung open with a soft click, revealing the hidden room beyond. The air inside was cooler, stale. Rory stepped over the threshold, her eyes adjusting to the dim light. The room was smaller than she remembered, the walls lined with maps and photographs, some new, some yellowed with age. A desk sat in the corner, cluttered with papers and a single lamp casting long shadows. Silas leaned against the doorframe, watching her. "You always did have a knack for finding trouble." Rory ignored him, moving toward the desk. Her fingers brushed against a stack of files, the edges worn and soft. She flipped one open, her breath catching as she recognised the name at the top. Evan Mercer. Her ex’s face stared back at her from a grainy photograph, his smile too sharp, his eyes too cold. Rory’s fingers tightened around the file, her knuckles turning white. "You kept tabs on him," she said, her voice barely above a whisper. "Someone had to." She looked up, meeting Silas’s gaze. "You didn’t think to tell me?" "Why? So you could go running back to him?" His voice was quiet, but there was an edge to it, something raw and unguarded. "You were already halfway in love with him when I warned you the first time. What good would it have done?" Rory swallowed hard, the file trembling in her hands. "I wasn’t—" "You were." Silas pushed off the doorframe, stepping into the room. "And you know it." She wanted to argue, to deny it, but the words stuck in her throat. Because he was right. She *had* been in love with Evan. Or at least, she’d thought she was. Until the night he’d put his hands around her throat and squeezed just enough to make her see stars. Silas’s expression softened, just for a moment. "You left. That’s what matters." Rory closed the file, her fingers lingering on the photograph. "He’s back in London." "I know." "Of course you do." She let out a bitter laugh. "You always know everything, don’t you?" "Not everything." His voice was quiet. "I didn’t know you were coming tonight." She looked up, meeting his gaze. The years between them stretched like a chasm, filled with all the things they’d never said. Rory wanted to cross it, to reach for the man who’d once been her closest friend, her confidant. But the weight of time held her back. Silas exhaled, running a hand over his beard. "What do you need?" Rory took a deep breath, the scent of old paper and whiskey filling her lungs. "I need to know where he is." Silas studied her for a long moment, his hazel eyes searching her face. Then, without a word, he turned and walked back into the bar. Rory followed, her heart pounding as he pulled a key from his pocket and unlocked a drawer beneath the counter. He pulled out a manila envelope, thick and heavy, and slid it toward her. "Everything I’ve got on him," he said. "Addresses, associates, known hangouts. But Rory—" She reached for the envelope, her fingers brushing against his. "I know." "You don’t have to do this." "Yes," she said, her voice steady. "I do." Silas didn’t try to stop her as she turned toward the door. The green neon sign outside flickered, casting long shadows across the pavement. Rory hesitated, her hand on the doorknob, the envelope clutched tight in her other hand. "Silas?" He looked up, his expression unreadable. "Thank you." He didn’t answer. He didn’t have to. The door swung shut behind her, the sound echoing through the empty bar like a gunshot. Silas stood there for a long moment, listening to the sound of her footsteps fading into the night. Then he reached for the bottle of whiskey, pouring himself a drink he didn’t want. Outside, Rory walked quickly, her breath misting in the cold air. The envelope burned in her hand, heavy with the weight of the past. She didn’t look back. She couldn’t. Because some doors, once closed, were better left that way.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"He leaned back [back]"
dialogueSentences55
tagDensity0.255
leniency0.509
rawRatio0.071
effectiveRatio0.036
89.55% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1435
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
2
adverb"quickly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"barely above a whisper"
2"quickly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
37.28% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1435
totalAiIsms18
found
0
word"familiar"
count1
1
word"flicked"
count1
2
word"weight"
count4
3
word"crystal"
count1
4
word"could feel"
count1
5
word"tracing"
count1
6
word"flickered"
count2
7
word"silence"
count1
8
word"pulse"
count1
9
word"whisper"
count1
10
word"pounding"
count1
11
word"unreadable"
count1
12
word"echoing"
count1
13
word"footsteps"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"flicked"
2"weight"
3"crystal"
4"could feel"
5"tracing"
6"flickered"
7"silence"
8"pulse"
9"whisper"
10"pounding"
11"unreadable"
12"echoing"
13"footsteps"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences102
matches
0"n in love"
86.83% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences102
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"see"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"try to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences141
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans3
markdownWords3
totalWords1433
ratio0.002
matches
0"had"
1"was"
2"had"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
70.07% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions37
wordCount1126
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity1.6
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Silas14
Rory18
Mercer1
Evan2
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Silas"
3"Rory"
4"Mercer"
5"Evan"
places(empty)
globalScore0.701
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences80
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"quite meet his"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1433
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences141
matches
0"left that way"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs65
mean22.05
std20.28
cv0.92
sampleLengths
048
110
273
312
419
56
619
794
810
921
1019
1118
124
1310
1461
159
161
1733
189
1922
205
2142
223
2323
2446
2513
2630
2715
286
297
307
3171
3254
3316
3435
352
3629
3713
383
3912
4045
4111
4215
4351
4412
4514
462
4716
4813
4948
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences102
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs205
matches
0"was measuring"
1"was counting"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences141
ratio0.014
matches
0"\"Seven years, three months, and—\" he checked his watch, a deliberate pause \"—sixteen days. Not that I’ve been counting.\""
1"That was the problem with old friends—they remembered the parts of you that you tried to leave behind."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount334
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount12
adverbRatio0.03592814371257485
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.005988023952095809
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences141
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences141
mean10.16
std6.34
cv0.624
sampleLengths
020
13
23
322
410
515
616
729
813
912
1016
113
126
1319
1412
1512
165
1714
1812
193
2017
2119
2210
2314
247
253
264
2712
2814
294
304
316
324
3314
3434
3513
369
371
3814
3919
405
414
4218
434
445
4515
4627
473
487
4916
45.04% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.2978723404255319
totalSentences141
uniqueOpeners42
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences97
matches
0"Even the green neon sign"
1"Then, without a word, he"
2"Then, without a word, he"
3"Then he reached for the"
ratio0.041
67.42% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount37
totalSentences97
matches
0"She’d heard worse."
1"she said, because it was"
2"His gaze flicked to the"
3"he checked his watch, a"
4"she asked, nodding toward the"
5"He pushed off the counter,"
6"She didn’t have to."
7"He slid the drink toward"
8"She could feel his eyes"
9"She took a sip, letting"
10"He leaned back against the"
11"He reached for a rag,"
12"He tossed the rag aside"
13"She opened her mouth to"
14"He wasn’t wrong."
15"She *had* been halfway out"
16"His expression didn’t change, but"
17"She didn’t answer."
18"She didn’t have to."
19"Her fingers brushed against a"
ratio0.381
27.01% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount84
totalSentences97
matches
0"The glass slipped from her"
1"Rory didn’t flinch."
2"She’d heard worse."
3"The bar’s dim light caught"
4"The voice came from behind"
5"Rory turned slowly, the crescent"
6"Silas stood there, leaning against"
7"The signet ring on his"
8"she said, because it was"
9"His gaze flicked to the"
10"he checked his watch, a"
11"The air between them thickened,"
12"Rory reached for the nearest"
13"The Raven’s Nest hadn’t changed."
14"The slight limp in his"
15"The way his hazel eyes"
16"she asked, nodding toward the"
17"He pushed off the counter,"
18"Rory didn’t answer."
19"She didn’t have to."
ratio0.866
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences97
matches
0"Because he was right."
1"Because some doors, once closed,"
ratio0.021
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences54
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Rory turned slowly, the crescent scar on her wrist prickling as if it remembered him too."
1"Silas studied her for a long moment, his fingers tapping against the counter like he was counting the beats of her silence."
2"Silas stood there for a long moment, listening to the sound of her footsteps fading into the night."
17.86% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"He leaned back, the wood creaking under his weight"
1"she said, her voice barely above a whisper"
2"she said, her voice steady"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences55
tagDensity0.109
leniency0.218
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
88.0354%