Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTREPRY1GKQ3QHCJF3AEK1K

Run Details

Duration:
12.5s
Cost:
$0.000988
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door swung open before she had a chance to react, revealing Lucien's slicked-back platinum blond hair and piercing heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one black—etched with a hint of annoyance and something softer, something almost desperate. A sharp edge of surprise sliced through her chest. Rory froze, ribs tight, as his cane clinked softly against the doorframe, the ivory handle catching the dim light. “I shouldn’t be here,” he said, voice low and smooth, with that faint French inflection that always cut beneath his words. She stared, breath caught in her throat, unsure whether to slam the door or step back. Her dominant eye, the bright blue that drew in everything like a magnet, flicked over him—his tailored charcoal suit, the faint smudge of dirt on his sleek cheek. The air between them charged, flickering with the ghost of their shared history. “I wasn’t expecting anyone,” she managed, voice shaky but authoritative, sharp despite the twinge of something fragile beneath her words. Lucien’s lips curled into a tight, almost sardonic smile. “You always did run your mouth, Caroline. Or should I say, Aurora?” His gaze flickered with something flickering beneath the veneer—remorse? Anger? Or maybe just the heavy weight of regret. Her fists clenched before she realised she’d done it. “What the hell are you doing here?” He pushed off the doorframe, cane clicking softly. The moonlight spilled over him, casting a pale glow on his sharply tailored suit as he stepped inside, slow and deliberate. “You know why I’m here. We need to talk. Or... I need to explain.” Her mind spun. Her left wrist tingled—still faint from the scar beneath her sleeve, the echo of childhood scars and battles long fought. A million emotions warred in her chest, but she kept her feet rooted, breath shallow. “You don’t get to come here after everything and expect me to listen.” He paused, gaze flickering to the books and scribbled research sprawled across every surface of her cramped flat. Every inch covered with notes, maps, and battered paper scrolls. Sherlock would have called it ‘the clutter of obsession,’ but to Rory, each one was a defence, a shield against the chaos outside. “I wasn't planning to just barge in,” Lucien admitted softly, voice stripped of bravado, “but I couldn’t wait any longer. These past weeks—I’ve been looking for you. You disappeared. Like you always do, Rory, after the storm.” The nickname made her tighten, clutching her pendant—her anchor. “I told you—” “*I know*. The thing is, I’m not here to dredge up old wounds. Not tonight. I’ve got something you've been looking for.” Her eyes narrowed. “What are you talking about?” He drew the cane from his side, the ivory handle gleaming. With a flick, he pulled the concealed blade. Her heart skipped a beat. His half-demon blood slicked his reflexes, made him unpredictable. Still, he held it with care, not aggression. “Your father’s case,” he said simply, voice like a blade sliding across silk. “The one from Cardiff. I found it. Hidden in the underground networks. It’s alive, Rory. Something's stirring. And I think it’s tied to the shadow I see following you.” The air thickened with tension. Her shoulders sagged, but her mind raced—fingers tightening on the small crescent scar on her wrist. She remembered all those nights in Cardiff, the frantic research, the ghost stories, her father's haunted files. She’d left behind the doubts and fears long ago, but now, it felt like those ghosts crept back. “You're playing with fire,” she finally whispered. “Just because you found that doesn’t mean you’re invited to come back into my life. Leave it alone.” Lucien’s eyes flickered, amber melding into black. “You’re still hanging on to that scar. Still afraid of what you’re capable of. I see it in you, Rory. That same fight that made you disappear. That war inside you. You think hiding will make it go away, but it won’t.” She shook her head, biting back the tears that threatened to surface. “You don’t get to judge me. You left! You never said it was because you were trying to protect me, or that you cared. You just vanished, like you do.” His jaw clenched, a rare crack of vulnerability slipping through his steely facade. “I was trying to save you. I still am. We’ve both got demons—yours aren’t just in your past, Rory. They’re chasing you now, and they won’t stop until they get what they want. That’s why I came.” She backed up, voice cracking despite her effort to sound strong. “This isn’t your fight. Whatever you think you’re doing here—whatever game you’re playing—leave me out of it. I’ve got enough monsters in my life already.” His expression flickered, a shadow of pain shadowing his face. He lowered the cane slowly, folding the blade back into the handle. “You don’t get to push me away, not after everything. I’m not leaving until you hear me out. Whatever’s coming, I can help. But you have to trust me—just this once.” The distant hum of the city seeped through the narrow window, but the space between them shrank to a breath. Her eyes darted past him, to the chaotic mounds of research notes, the map pinned to the wall with red string. Secrets buried beneath layers of protective lies. Her fingers brushed her scar again, a child’s reminder of scars she thought had healed. Or buried. “Help,” she echoed, voice trembling. “You think you can fix this, Lucien? Just walk in, say a few words, and everything’s fine?” He reached out, caressing the edge of her jaw with that delicate, calculated motion. “You’re right. I can’t fix everything. I can’t save everyone—but I can save you. Or at least, I can try.” Her breath hitched, pushing her back another step, her heart pounding against her ribs. The past clawed its way back, unbidden and sharp. Their history—bittersweet, tangled like a web—spun itself into every glance, every syllable. “Some debts,” she whispered, voice barely above a murmur, “you don’t come back from.” Lucien’s gaze lingered, lips pressed into a tight line, then softened. “Maybe not,” he said softly. “But I’m going to try.” And he stepped closer—closer than she’d ever permitted—eyes blazing with the same dangerous allure that had always pulled her in. Tonight, she thought, she’d decide whether she was going to let the past tear her apart or finally face the shadows lurking beneath.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags9
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"Lucien admitted softly [softly]"
1"he said simply [simply]"
2"he said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences25
tagDensity0.36
leniency0.72
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.24
72.40% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1087
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"softly"
count4
1
adverb"sharply"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"sharply"
2"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
8.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1087
totalAiIsms20
found
0
word"etched"
count1
1
word"flicked"
count1
2
word"charged"
count1
3
word"flickered"
count3
4
word"weight"
count1
5
word"echo"
count1
6
word"gleaming"
count1
7
word"skipped a beat"
count1
8
word"silk"
count1
9
word"tension"
count1
10
word"raced"
count1
11
word"jaw clenched"
count1
12
word"facade"
count1
13
word"chaotic"
count1
14
word"reminder"
count1
15
word"echoed"
count1
16
word"calculated"
count1
17
word"pounding"
count1
highlights
0"etched"
1"flicked"
2"charged"
3"flickered"
4"weight"
5"echo"
6"gleaming"
7"skipped a beat"
8"silk"
9"tension"
10"raced"
11"jaw clenched"
12"facade"
13"chaotic"
14"reminder"
15"echoed"
16"calculated"
17"pounding"
33.33% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches3
maxInWindow3
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count2
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"fists clenched"
2"jaw clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences56
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences56
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences72
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen43
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords2
totalWords1068
ratio0.002
matches
0"I know"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions8
wordCount665
uniqueNames4
maxNameDensity0.75
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Lucien5
French1
Anger1
Cardiff1
persons
0"Lucien"
places
0"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
95.65% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences46
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like those ghosts crept back"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1068
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences72
matches(empty)
78.39% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs30
mean35.6
std15.11
cv0.424
sampleLengths
063
121
257
320
439
516
643
751
851
937
1012
1122
128
1341
1442
1556
1625
1749
1842
1950
2036
2153
2248
2317
2422
2534
2635
2714
2821
2943
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences56
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs130
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount11
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences8
totalSentences72
ratio0.111
matches
0"The door swung open before she had a chance to react, revealing Lucien's slicked-back platinum blond hair and piercing heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one black—etched with a hint of annoyance and something softer, something almost desperate."
1"Her dominant eye, the bright blue that drew in everything like a magnet, flicked over him—his tailored charcoal suit, the faint smudge of dirt on his sleek cheek."
2"“You always did run your mouth, Caroline. Or should I say, Aurora?” His gaze flickered with something flickering beneath the veneer—remorse?"
3"Her left wrist tingled—still faint from the scar beneath her sleeve, the echo of childhood scars and battles long fought."
4"The nickname made her tighten, clutching her pendant—her anchor."
5"Her shoulders sagged, but her mind raced—fingers tightening on the small crescent scar on her wrist."
6"Their history—bittersweet, tangled like a web—spun itself into every glance, every syllable."
7"And he stepped closer—closer than she’d ever permitted—eyes blazing with the same dangerous allure that had always pulled her in."
99.47% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount591
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount24
adverbRatio0.04060913705583756
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.005076142131979695
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences72
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences72
mean14.83
std8.94
cv0.602
sampleLengths
035
19
219
321
416
528
613
720
89
921
101
118
129
137
148
1521
1614
173
1820
1915
2013
2118
2210
2323
2437
259
263
2722
283
295
3011
318
325
339
348
3513
3629
375
3816
3917
4018
417
4218
437
4442
4512
4630
4713
4837
4911
59.26% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.3888888888888889
totalSentences72
uniqueOpeners28
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences54
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount32
totalSentences54
matches
0"he said, voice low and"
1"She stared, breath caught in"
2"Her dominant eye, the bright"
3"she managed, voice shaky but"
4"His gaze flickered with something"
5"Her fists clenched before she"
6"He pushed off the doorframe,"
7"Her mind spun."
8"Her left wrist tingled—still faint"
9"He paused, gaze flickering to"
10"Her eyes narrowed."
11"He drew the cane from"
12"Her heart skipped a beat."
13"His half-demon blood slicked his"
14"he said simply, voice like"
15"Her shoulders sagged, but her"
16"She remembered all those nights"
17"She’d left behind the doubts"
18"she finally whispered"
19"She shook her head, biting"
ratio0.593
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount50
totalSentences54
matches
0"The door swung open before"
1"A sharp edge of surprise"
2"Rory froze, ribs tight, as"
3"he said, voice low and"
4"She stared, breath caught in"
5"Her dominant eye, the bright"
6"The air between them charged,"
7"she managed, voice shaky but"
8"Lucien’s lips curled into a"
9"His gaze flickered with something"
10"Her fists clenched before she"
11"He pushed off the doorframe,"
12"The moonlight spilled over him,"
13"Her mind spun."
14"Her left wrist tingled—still faint"
15"A million emotions warred in"
16"He paused, gaze flickering to"
17"Every inch covered with notes,"
18"Sherlock would have called it"
19"Lucien admitted softly, voice stripped"
ratio0.926
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences54
matches(empty)
ratio0
95.24% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences30
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Her breath hitched, pushing her back another step, her heart pounding against her ribs."
1"And he stepped closer—closer than she’d ever permitted—eyes blazing with the same dangerous allure that had always pulled her in."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags9
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"Lucien admitted softly, voice stripped of bravado,"
1"she echoed, voice trembling"
2"she whispered, voice barely above a murmur,"
70.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Lucien admitted softly (admit)"
1"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences25
tagDensity0.2
leniency0.4
rawRatio0.4
effectiveRatio0.16
67.0582%