Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTREYTVVGTWQ36C0FE4SH4V

Run Details

Duration:
7.1s
Cost:
$0.000830

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The bar was a symphony of clinking glasses and low chatter, the air thick with the scent of aged wood and spilled beer. The neon sign outside cast a green glow on the rain-slicked pavement, a beacon for the weary and the lost. Rory, wiping down the counter with a cloth that had seen better days, felt the familiar rhythm of the evening's lull. Then, the door creaked open, and the symphony faltered. Silas stood in the doorway, his hazel eyes scanning the room before settling on her. He limped towards the bar, his neat beard framing a smile that didn't quite reach his eyes. Rory's heart pounded in her chest, a mix of surprise and dread coursing through her veins. She hadn't seen him in years, not since she'd left Cardiff and the life she'd known. "Rory," he said, his voice a low rumble. "Or should I say, Laila?" She bristled at the old nickname, a remnant of their shared past. "It's been a long time, Si," she replied, her voice steady despite the storm within her. He leaned against the bar, his signet ring glinting in the dim light. "Too long," he agreed. "You look... different." Rory raised an eyebrow. "And you look just the same. Still wearing that ring, I see." Silas glanced at his hand, a shadow passing over his face. "Some things never change, I suppose." He paused, then asked, "What are you doing here, Rory?" She poured him a drink, a glass of the bar's finest whiskey. "Working," she said, sliding the glass towards him. "You?" He took a sip, his eyes never leaving hers. "Retired," he said. "Sort of." Rory leaned against the bar, her arms crossed. "Sort of?" Silas chuckled, a sound like distant thunder. "MI6 doesn't exactly let you walk away, you know that. But I'm... consulting. From time to time." Rory nodded, her gaze flicking to the hidden back room. She knew all too well the kind of consulting Silas did. "And what brings you to London?" He swirled the whiskey in his glass, watching the amber liquid catch the light. "You," he said finally. "I heard you were here. Thought it was time we caught up." Rory felt a chill run down her spine. She'd left Cardiff to escape her past, to start anew. But here was Silas, a ghost from her old life, standing in her present. She took a deep breath, steeling herself for the conversation she knew was coming. "Well, here I am," she said, her voice barely above a whisper. "But I'm not the same person you knew, Si. Things have changed." Silas took another sip of his whiskey, his eyes never leaving hers. "Change is inevitable, Rory," he said. "But some things never change. Like the fact that you're still running." Rory felt the sting of his words, a truth she'd long tried to ignore. She'd run from her past, from her abusive ex, from the life she'd known. But here was Silas, holding up a mirror to her soul, forcing her to confront the truth she'd long tried to avoid. "I'm not running anymore, Si," she said, her voice firm. "I'm building a new life. Here. Now." Silas nodded, but the skepticism in his eyes was clear. "And what about the past, Rory? What about the things you left behind?" Rory felt a lump form in her throat, the weight of her past pressing down on her. She'd tried to leave it behind, to start anew. But here was Silas, reminding her of the ghosts she'd left unlaid. "I can't change the past, Si," she said, her voice barely above a whisper. "All I can do is move forward. Make things right." Silas finished his whiskey, setting the glass down with a soft thud. "And what about the things you can't make right, Rory? What about the things you can't change?" Rory felt the tears pricking at the corners of her eyes, the weight of her past threatening to crush her. She'd tried to outrun it, to leave it behind. But here was Silas, forcing her to confront the truth she'd long tried to ignore. "I don't know, Si," she said, her voice breaking. "I just... I just don't know." Silas reached across the bar, his hand covering hers. His palm was warm, his grip firm. "It's okay, Rory," he said, his voice soft. "You don't have to know. Not yet. But you do have to face it. Face the past. Face the truth." Rory nodded, the tears spilling over onto her cheeks. She'd tried to run, to hide. But here was Silas, reminding her that some things never change. Some things never go away. Some things can only be faced, head on. "I know, Si," she said, her voice barely above a whisper. "I know." Silas squeezed her hand, then released it. He stood up, his chair scraping against the floor. "I'll be in town for a few days," he said. "If you want to talk. If you want to face it. Together." Rory nodded, her gaze fixed on the worn wooden bar. "I'll think about it, Si," she said. "I promise." Silas nodded, then turned and walked out of the bar, leaving Rory alone with her thoughts and the ghosts of her past. The symphony of the bar picked up again, the clinking glasses and low chatter filling the void left by Silas's departure. But Rory barely heard it. She was lost in her thoughts, lost in her past, lost in the weight of time and the unspoken regret that threatened to consume her.
total_cost0.0008298

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
88.89% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"He paused then [then]"
1"he said finally [finally]"
dialogueSentences36
tagDensity0.444
leniency0.889
rawRatio0.125
effectiveRatio0.111
83.94% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount934
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count3
highlights
0"barely above a whisper"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
8.99% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount934
totalAiIsms17
found
0
word"symphony"
count3
1
word"beacon"
count1
2
word"familiar"
count1
3
word"scanning"
count1
4
word"glinting"
count1
5
word"eyebrow"
count1
6
word"chill"
count1
7
word"down her spine"
count1
8
word"whisper"
count3
9
word"weight"
count3
10
word"unspoken"
count1
highlights
0"symphony"
1"beacon"
2"familiar"
3"scanning"
4"glinting"
5"eyebrow"
6"chill"
7"down her spine"
8"whisper"
9"weight"
10"unspoken"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"heart pounded in chest"
count1
highlights
0"heart pounded in her chest"
86.54% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells3
narrationSentences65
matches
0"felt a chill"
1"felt the sting"
2"felt a lump"
10.99% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount6
narrationSentences65
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences85
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen25
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords933
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions18
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
34.73% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions31
wordCount694
uniqueNames3
maxNameDensity2.31
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Cardiff2
Rory13
Silas16
persons
0"Rory"
1"Silas"
places
0"Cardiff"
globalScore0.347
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences52
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"quite reach his eyes"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount933
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences85
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs29
mean32.17
std18.18
cv0.565
sampleLengths
073
164
213
328
420
516
627
721
814
910
1024
1127
1230
1370
1430
1550
1617
1723
1838
1924
2029
2144
2215
2344
2439
2513
2638
2719
2873
99.87% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences65
matches
0"was lost"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs141
matches
0"was coming"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences85
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount695
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount15
adverbRatio0.02158273381294964
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.008633093525179856
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences85
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences85
mean10.98
std5.37
cv0.49
sampleLengths
023
120
221
39
415
517
616
716
88
95
1012
1116
1213
134
143
154
1612
1711
1816
1912
208
211
229
233
242
258
262
277
2817
2910
3011
316
3214
334
3412
358
3610
3714
3814
3912
4012
4112
426
4312
4414
4514
4622
4710
487
4910
42.94% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.27058823529411763
totalSentences85
uniqueOpeners23
55.56% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences60
matches
0"Then, the door creaked open,"
ratio0.017
33.33% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount28
totalSentences60
matches
0"He limped towards the bar,"
1"She hadn't seen him in"
2"he said, his voice a"
3"She bristled at the old"
4"she replied, her voice steady"
5"He leaned against the bar,"
6"He paused, then asked"
7"She poured him a drink,"
8"she said, sliding the glass"
9"He took a sip, his"
10"She knew all too well"
11"He swirled the whiskey in"
12"he said finally"
13"She'd left Cardiff to escape"
14"She took a deep breath,"
15"she said, her voice barely"
16"She'd run from her past,"
17"she said, her voice firm"
18"She'd tried to leave it"
19"she said, her voice barely"
ratio0.467
18.33% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount53
totalSentences60
matches
0"The bar was a symphony"
1"The neon sign outside cast"
2"Rory, wiping down the counter"
3"Silas stood in the doorway,"
4"He limped towards the bar,"
5"Rory's heart pounded in her"
6"She hadn't seen him in"
7"he said, his voice a"
8"She bristled at the old"
9"she replied, her voice steady"
10"He leaned against the bar,"
11"Rory raised an eyebrow."
12"Silas glanced at his hand,"
13"He paused, then asked"
14"She poured him a drink,"
15"she said, sliding the glass"
16"He took a sip, his"
17"Rory leaned against the bar,"
18"Silas chuckled, a sound like"
19"Rory nodded, her gaze flicking"
ratio0.883
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences60
matches(empty)
ratio0
98.21% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences32
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Rory, wiping down the counter with a cloth that had seen better days, felt the familiar rhythm of the evening's lull."
1"Rory felt the tears pricking at the corners of her eyes, the weight of her past threatening to crush her."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount8
matches
0"he said, his voice a low rumble"
1"she replied, her voice steady despite the storm within her"
2"she said, her voice barely above a whisper"
3"she said, her voice firm"
4"she said, her voice barely above a whisper"
5"she said, her voice breaking"
6"he said, his voice soft"
7"she said, her voice barely above a whisper"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags15
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"he agreed (agree)"
dialogueSentences36
tagDensity0.417
leniency0.833
rawRatio0.067
effectiveRatio0.056
75.4106%