Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRF6Q0RKSFQ08CG2RFDMVN

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40.4s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
“Get that bloody light out of my eyes!” Detective Harlow Quinn squinted against the harsh beam of a flashlight, her sharp jawline taut with irritation. The abandoned Tube station beneath Camden, a relic of a forgotten era, echoed with the sounds of hurried footsteps and muffled voices. The air was thick with the scent of damp concrete and something else—something metallic that made her stomach churn. “Sorry, Harlow.” DS Davies stepped back, lowering the light. “Didn’t see you there.” “Clearly.” She stepped further into the cavernous space, her worn leather watch creaking against her wrist as she surveyed the scene. A body lay sprawled on the ground, limbs twisted at unnatural angles. The victim—a young woman—had a pallid complexion, her freckled skin marred by dark bruises. Quinn knelt beside her, the coldness of the concrete seeping through her trousers. “Looks like a mugging gone wrong,” Davies said, his voice a mix of uncertainty and eagerness. “Wallet’s missing, and her phone’s gone too.” Quinn’s brow furrowed. “No signs of a struggle. No scuff marks on the ground. Just… this.” She gestured to the victim’s neck, where a thin line of crimson marred the pale skin. “That’s not a mugging. It’s too clean.” “Maybe she fought back?” Davies suggested, scratching the back of his head. “You know how it is. People panic.” “Panic doesn’t leave a neat little cut like that.” Quinn’s eyes narrowed as she examined the area. “And look at the way her clothes are arranged. No rips, no tears. If she’d been attacked, there’d be signs of it.” “Maybe she was caught off guard?” “Or maybe she knew her attacker.” Quinn stood, brushing off her knees. “Get me the coroner. I want a full report on the time of death and any signs of struggle. And check the CCTV from the station entrance. Someone must have seen something.” “On it.” Davies moved away, but Quinn’s attention remained fixed on the body. Something about the scene felt off, like a puzzle with missing pieces. She turned her gaze to the walls, where faded advertisements for long-defunct businesses clung stubbornly to the peeling paint. “Quinn!” A voice called from the shadows. Eva Kowalski emerged, her curly red hair bouncing as she hurried over, a worn leather satchel slung across her shoulder. “I heard you were here. What’s going on?” “Another body,” Quinn replied tersely, her eyes still scanning the area. “Looks like a mugging, but I’m not convinced.” Eva knelt beside the victim, her round glasses slipping down her nose as she examined the scene. “You’re right. It doesn’t add up. The bruising is too uniform, and the cut on her neck… it’s almost surgical.” “Exactly.” Quinn crossed her arms, feeling a flicker of hope. “You see it too.” “Of course. I’ve been studying occult practices for years. This has the markings of something more sinister.” Eva’s voice dropped to a whisper, her freckled complexion paling. “Do you think it’s connected to the Veil Market?” Quinn’s heart raced at the mention of the underground market. “Could be. But we need more evidence before jumping to conclusions. Let’s see if there’s anything unusual around here.” As they searched the area, Quinn’s instincts kicked in. She noticed a small, brass object glinting in the dim light near the victim’s hand. She knelt down, brushing away the dirt to reveal a small compass, its face etched with protective sigils. “Eva, look at this.” She held it up, the patina of verdigris catching the light. “This isn’t just any compass. It’s a Veil Compass.” Eva’s eyes widened. “Where did she get that? It’s not something you find in a regular shop.” “Exactly.” Quinn’s mind raced. “It points to supernatural rifts or portals. If she had this, she was involved in something far beyond a simple mugging.” “Or she was trying to escape something.” Eva’s voice trembled slightly. “What if she was running from someone?” “Then we need to find out who.” Quinn’s gaze shifted to the walls again, her mind piecing together the fragments of the scene. “Check her pockets. See if there’s anything else.” Eva rifled through the victim’s clothing, her fingers trembling slightly. “Nothing but a few coins and a bus pass. Wait—what’s this?” She pulled out a crumpled piece of paper, its edges frayed. Quinn leaned closer as Eva unfolded it. “It’s a list of names,” she said, her voice barely above a whisper. “And dates. Looks like some sort of schedule.” “Let me see.” Quinn took the paper, her heart racing as she scanned the names. They were all familiar—people connected to the Veil Market, each one marked with a date that corresponded to the full moon. “This is a hit list.” “Or a warning,” Eva suggested, her eyes darting around the station. “What if she was trying to warn someone?” “Or she was the target.” Quinn’s mind raced. “We need to get this to the station. If there’s a connection to the Market, we might be able to find out who’s behind this.” “Right.” Eva nodded, her freckled complexion flushed with excitement. “But we need to be careful. If this is connected to the Market, we’re stepping into dangerous territory.” “Dangerous is my middle name.” Quinn smirked, but the tension in her voice betrayed her. “Let’s move.” As they made their way back through the dimly lit station, Quinn’s instincts prickled. The shadows seemed to shift, and the air grew heavier, as if the very walls were closing in. She glanced at Eva, who was nervously tucking her hair behind her left ear, a telltale sign of her anxiety. “Stay close,” Quinn said, her voice low. “We don’t know who else might be here.” They reached the entrance, the flickering lights casting eerie shadows on the walls. Quinn pushed the door open, the creaking sound echoing through the empty station. Just as they stepped outside, a figure emerged from the darkness, blocking their path. “Going somewhere?” The voice was smooth, laced with a hint of menace. Quinn’s heart raced as she recognised the man standing before them. A familiar face from the Veil Market, one she had hoped never to see again. “Back off, Marcus,” she warned, her hand instinctively moving towards her sidearm. “We’re not in the mood for games.” “Games?” He chuckled, a predatory glint in his eyes. “Oh, but this is just the beginning. You’ve stumbled into something far beyond your understanding.” “Let us pass.” Quinn’s voice was steady, but her pulse quickened. “Not a chance.” He stepped closer, the shadows swallowing him whole. “You’re in over your head, Detective. And I can’t let you ruin everything.” Quinn’s mind raced, the pieces of the puzzle clicking into place. The victim, the compass, the names—everything was connected. But before she could formulate a plan, Marcus lunged forward, and the world erupted into chaos. “Run!” Quinn shouted, adrenaline surging through her veins as she pushed Eva aside. The chase had begun, and there was no turning back.
total_cost0.0012987799999999998

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
64.41% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags29
adverbTagCount4
adverbTags
0"DS Davies stepped back [back]"
1"She stepped further [further]"
2"Quinn replied tersely [tersely]"
3"Eva’s voice trembled slightly [slightly]"
dialogueSentences59
tagDensity0.492
leniency0.983
rawRatio0.138
effectiveRatio0.136
78.54% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1165
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count1
3
adverb"nervously"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"barely above a whisper"
2"very"
3"nervously"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Marcus"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1165
totalAiIsms27
found
0
word"echoed"
count1
1
word"footsteps"
count1
2
word"stomach"
count1
3
word"churn"
count1
4
word"furrowed"
count1
5
word"scanning"
count1
6
word"flicker"
count1
7
word"sinister"
count1
8
word"whisper"
count2
9
word"raced"
count5
10
word"glinting"
count1
11
word"etched"
count1
12
word"trembled"
count1
13
word"racing"
count1
14
word"scanned"
count1
15
word"familiar"
count2
16
word"tension"
count1
17
word"echoing"
count1
18
word"glint"
count1
19
word"pulse"
count1
20
word"quickened"
count1
highlights
0"echoed"
1"footsteps"
2"stomach"
3"churn"
4"furrowed"
5"scanning"
6"flicker"
7"sinister"
8"whisper"
9"raced"
10"glinting"
11"etched"
12"trembled"
13"racing"
14"scanned"
15"familiar"
16"tension"
17"echoing"
18"glint"
19"pulse"
20"quickened"
0.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches4
maxInWindow4
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count2
1
label"air was thick with"
count1
2
label"flicker of emotion"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"eyes widened"
2"The air was thick with"
3"a flicker of hope"
97.68% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences61
matches
0"a flicker of hope"
1"d with excitement"
96.02% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences61
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences90
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen32
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1158
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions47
wordCount698
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity3.3
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity4.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn23
Tube1
Camden1
Davies4
Eva11
Kowalski1
Veil2
Market2
Marcus1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Davies"
3"Eva"
4"Kowalski"
5"Marcus"
places
0"Veil"
globalScore0
windowScore0.167
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences55
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1158
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences90
matches(empty)
87.91% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs41
mean28.24
std12.93
cv0.458
sampleLengths
08
158
213
360
423
539
619
739
86
944
1044
1135
1219
1337
1414
1536
1629
1742
1824
1917
2025
2118
2231
2332
2428
2541
2619
2733
2827
2917
3052
3115
3240
3312
3426
3519
3624
3711
3824
3935
4023
99.51% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences61
matches
0"was connected"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs128
matches
0"were closing"
15.87% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount5
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences90
ratio0.044
matches
0"The air was thick with the scent of damp concrete and something else—something metallic that made her stomach churn."
1"The victim—a young woman—had a pallid complexion, her freckled skin marred by dark bruises."
2"They were all familiar—people connected to the Veil Market, each one marked with a date that corresponded to the full moon."
3"The victim, the compass, the names—everything was connected."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount704
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount20
adverbRatio0.028409090909090908
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.01278409090909091
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences90
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences90
mean12.87
std6.03
cv0.469
sampleLengths
08
117
222
319
49
54
621
712
814
913
1016
117
123
1329
147
1512
167
1717
1822
196
2012
2132
2213
2312
2419
257
2620
278
2811
298
3017
3120
3210
334
3427
359
3610
3719
389
3915
4018
4115
429
433
4414
454
4621
4711
487
4923
88.52% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.5444444444444444
totalSentences90
uniqueOpeners49
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences61
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount14
totalSentences61
matches
0"She stepped further into the"
1"She gestured to the victim’s"
2"She turned her gaze to"
3"She noticed a small, brass"
4"She knelt down, brushing away"
5"She held it up, the"
6"She pulled out a crumpled"
7"she said, her voice barely"
8"They were all familiar—people connected"
9"She glanced at Eva, who"
10"They reached the entrance, the"
11"she warned, her hand instinctively"
12"He chuckled, a predatory glint"
13"He stepped closer, the shadows"
ratio0.23
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount57
totalSentences61
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn squinted against"
1"The abandoned Tube station beneath"
2"The air was thick with"
3"DS Davies stepped back, lowering"
4"She stepped further into the"
5"A body lay sprawled on"
6"The victim—a young woman—had a"
7"Quinn knelt beside her, the"
8"Davies said, his voice a"
9"Quinn’s brow furrowed."
10"She gestured to the victim’s"
11"Davies suggested, scratching the back"
12"Quinn’s eyes narrowed as she"
13"Quinn stood, brushing off her"
14"Davies moved away, but Quinn’s"
15"Something about the scene felt"
16"She turned her gaze to"
17"A voice called from the"
18"Eva Kowalski emerged, her curly"
19"Quinn replied tersely, her eyes"
ratio0.934
81.97% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences61
matches
0"Just as they stepped outside,"
ratio0.016
60.44% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences26
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Eva rifled through the victim’s clothing, her fingers trembling slightly."
1"They were all familiar—people connected to the Veil Market, each one marked with a date that corresponded to the full moon."
2"She glanced at Eva, who was nervously tucking her hair behind her left ear, a telltale sign of her anxiety."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags29
uselessAdditionCount14
matches
0"Davies said, his voice a mix of uncertainty and eagerness"
1"Davies moved away, but Quinn’s attention remained fixed on the body"
2"Quinn replied tersely, her eyes still scanning the area"
3"Eva’s voice dropped, her freckled complexion paling"
4"She held, the patina of verdigris catching the light"
5"Quinn’s gaze shifted, her mind piecing together the fragments of the scene"
6"She pulled out, its edges frayed"
7"she said, her voice barely above a whisper"
8"Quinn took, her heart racing as she scanned the names"
9"Eva suggested, her eyes darting around the station"
10"Quinn said, her voice low"
11"she warned, her hand instinctively moving towards her sidearm"
12"He stepped, the shadows swallowing him whole"
13"Quinn shouted, adrenaline surging through her veins as she pushed Eva aside"
65.25% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"Davies suggested (suggest)"
1"Eva suggested (suggest)"
2"she warned (warn)"
3"He chuckled (chuckle)"
4"Quinn shouted (shout)"
dialogueSentences59
tagDensity0.169
leniency0.339
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.169
70.5374%