Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRFA2HBSXY0M74CRVS7Y89

Run Details

Model:
o4 Mini
Duration:
20.9s
Cost:
$0.012345
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora’s elbow slammed into the bar’s edge as she reached for her pint, amber foam sloshing over the rim. She froze. The knuckles of the hand she steadied herself with brushed against the silver ring on his right hand—same signet she’d glimpsed in her childhood photographs. Silence clogged the air between them. He watched her, one eyebrow raised. His limp shifted his weight unevenly, the bar stool creaking beneath him. “You,” she said. Her voice came out flat, controlled. He pushed back from the stool, the movement measured, deliberate. Hazel eyes narrowed—recognition, surprise, something colder. “Aurora Carter,” he said. “Or should I call you Rory still?” She inhaled, the scent of spilled ale and old maps pressing in. She forced a corner of her mouth up. “Carter, please.” He nodded once, then tapped the ring. “Not Malphora any longer.” She drew back her sleeve, exposing the small crescent scar on her wrist. Her fingers trailed the ridge of old flesh. “Time changes names.” He studied her bright blue eyes, the way her black hair fell straight to her shoulders. She’d lost her roundness, the child’s curvature to her cheeks. Now she looked lean, precise—like she’d taught herself to disappear. Yet something in her stance spoke of readiness. “I heard you left law school,” he said, voice low. She glanced at the half-empty glass in front of her. “Pre-law wasn’t my path. Delivery suits me.” She raised the pint. “Golden Empress special.” He tilted his head, listening to the bar’s hum—gentle chatter, silverware clink, a distant door that rattled whenever someone swung it too hard. He leaned forward. “Regret?” She blinked. “You?” He closed his eyes for a heartbeat, as if to summon patience. When he reopened them, the scar on her wrist was reflected there. “I wrote,” he said. “Missives left in pigeon holes, letters slipped under that flatdoor of yours.” She looked away. A bead of condensation dripped off the glass. She flicked it onto the dark wood. “I moved before any came.” A tremor passed through his beard. “I worried. You had nowhere else to go.” She swallowed. The gulp rattled her throat. “I went to Eva.” His lips thinned. “You never asked me first?” She set the glass down too hard. Foam splattered onto the counter. “I wasn’t coming back.” He rose, limping. His stool scraped. He gestured toward the hatch in the bookshelf. “Back room.” She hesitated, then slid off her stool and followed him through the hidden door. The green neon glow turned to shadow. The secret room smelled of old paper and dust. A single bulb hung overhead, swinging slightly. He shut the bookshelf behind her. The latch clicked. Darkness pressed in from the bar beyond. She swallowed again. “Why here?” He brushed wood shavings from the table. Old maps lined the walls: Prague, Cardiff, Camden. Black-and-white photographs of people she didn’t recognise. Operatives. Ghosts. “I needed you,” he said. He didn’t elaborate. Instead, he pointed to her courier bag. She unzipped it. Inside lay pages of legal notes, an empty pencil case, a single photograph folded crisp. He reached out. His hand hovered an inch above the photo, then withdrew. She offered it. Reluctantly, he took it. It was an old snapshot of the two of them: children grinning in a park, ice cream smeared on her chin, his hand protectively on her shoulder. His thumb brushed the paper’s edge. “You left me hanging.” Her shoulders tightened. “I had to run.” He set the photo on the table and produced a worn notebook from his pocket. He opened to a blank page and tapped it with a finger. “Your address on file.” He stopped. “No forwarding.” She stared at the blank page. “I didn’t think you’d care.” He closed the notebook. “I did.” He traced the circle of his ring. “Not caring would’ve been easier.” She turned away. The bulb swung again, and her shadow stretched across the wall, fractured by map lines. He studied her back. “Why deliver food instead of practising law?” She pressed her palms flat to the tabletop. “I wanted simple. No courtrooms. No arguing guilt or innocence.” He stiffened. “You argued plenty back then.” She met his gaze. “Those arguments ended badly.” He nodded, as though piecing together fragments of their past. “You blamed me.” She frowned. “Because you stayed.” He blinked. “Because I cared.” She closed her eyes. A faint noise came from the bar: a laugh, the clatter of bottles. Pressing a hand to her scar, she offered him a half-smile. “You always did.” He pushed a glass of neat whisky toward her. Amber liquid caught the half-light. She took it. The burn spread from her throat to her chest. He stood and limped to the door. “Your ex—Evan,” he said. “He tracked you?” She set the glass down. Her fingers trembled. “How do you—” He didn’t answer. He slipped outside the room. She followed, heart hammering. When he reemerged, he held a battered photograph. Evan’s face, grinning in a mug shot. Her breath caught. “How—” He tapped the picture. “Last week. Assault. Blackmail.” Her jaw clenched. “He’s out?” He slipped the photo into his coat. “Halfway house.” She paced. The neon flickered through the glass door. “I can handle myself.” He met her gaze across the bar’s open threshold. “Can you?” She swallowed, voice steady. “I have to.” He nodded slowly, then reached into his pocket and withdrew a slim envelope. He placed it on the bar. “Contacts.” His hand hovered over it, conflicted. “Use them if you need help.” She picked up the envelope and felt its weight. Inside, names and numbers. He leaned in, lowering his voice. “Don’t disappear again.” Her throat tightened. “I won’t.” He straightened and limped back into the secret room. She stayed behind, staring at the envelope. A sudden clatter on the bar floor made her spin around. A man in a rough coat stood at the entrance, eyes darting. He raised a pistol, barrel shining. “Carter!” he barked. Silas burst out from the hatch, hand gripping his ring finger. The neon sign shuddered as the man steadied the gun. Aurora’s heart thundered. She dropped the envelope. The contact sheet fluttered to the floor between them. Silas took a breath, his voice calm but fierce. “Let her go.” The man sneered. “Blackwood. Always meddling.” The barrel swung toward Silas. Aurora stepped forward. A shot rang out. Glass shattered behind them. The neon sign blinked and died. Silas’s limp carried him forward, ring hand raised. Aurora scrubbed at her wrist scar, unable to tear her eyes from the pistol. Silence cut between them, broken only by the man’s ragged breathing. And somewhere in the darkness of The Raven’s Nest, something else stirred.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences53
tagDensity0.208
leniency0.415
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
86.73% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1130
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"reluctantly"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"reluctantly"
2"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
33.63% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1130
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"silence"
count2
1
word"eyebrow"
count1
2
word"weight"
count2
3
word"measured"
count1
4
word"flicked"
count1
5
word"traced"
count1
6
word"fractured"
count1
7
word"trembled"
count1
8
word"jaw clenched"
count1
9
word"flickered"
count1
10
word"thundered"
count1
11
word"fluttered"
count1
12
word"shattered"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"eyebrow"
2"weight"
3"measured"
4"flicked"
5"traced"
6"fractured"
7"trembled"
8"jaw clenched"
9"flickered"
10"thundered"
11"fluttered"
12"shattered"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"jaw clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences134
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences134
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences176
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen27
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1122
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions13
wordCount929
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity0.43
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Prague1
Cardiff1
Camden1
Silas4
Raven1
Nest1
Aurora4
persons
0"Silas"
1"Raven"
2"Aurora"
places
0"Prague"
1"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences76
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"as though piecing together fragments of their past"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1122
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences176
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs67
mean16.75
std11.03
cv0.659
sampleLengths
052
118
29
316
411
522
611
724
844
910
1024
1127
123
1340
1423
1514
1611
178
1816
1916
2037
2116
225
2324
2433
2547
2610
277
2835
2911
3018
3118
3211
3318
347
358
3613
375
385
3931
4026
4114
4211
4327
444
458
465
479
4813
4911
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences134
matches
0"was reflected"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs182
matches(empty)
77.92% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences176
ratio0.023
matches
0"The knuckles of the hand she steadied herself with brushed against the silver ring on his right hand—same signet she’d glimpsed in her childhood photographs."
1"Hazel eyes narrowed—recognition, surprise, something colder."
2"Now she looked lean, precise—like she’d taught herself to disappear."
3"He tilted his head, listening to the bar’s hum—gentle chatter, silverware clink, a distant door that rattled whenever someone swung it too hard."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount937
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount24
adverbRatio0.025613660618996798
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.0064034151547491995
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences176
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences176
mean6.38
std4.36
cv0.683
sampleLengths
019
12
225
36
46
512
63
76
810
96
104
117
1212
138
142
157
164
1713
188
193
2016
2110
2210
238
2410
2510
2611
273
2823
293
301
312
321
3312
3412
354
3612
373
388
397
405
416
428
432
445
454
463
475
487
495
45.64% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.30113636363636365
totalSentences176
uniqueOpeners53
56.50% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences118
matches
0"Instead, he pointed to her"
1"Reluctantly, he took it."
ratio0.017
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount71
totalSentences118
matches
0"He watched her, one eyebrow"
1"His limp shifted his weight"
2"Her voice came out flat,"
3"He pushed back from the"
4"She inhaled, the scent of"
5"She forced a corner of"
6"He nodded once, then tapped"
7"She drew back her sleeve,"
8"Her fingers trailed the ridge"
9"He studied her bright blue"
10"She’d lost her roundness, the"
11"he said, voice low"
12"She glanced at the half-empty"
13"She raised the pint"
14"He tilted his head, listening"
15"He leaned forward."
16"He closed his eyes for"
17"She looked away."
18"She flicked it onto the"
19"His lips thinned."
ratio0.602
15.08% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount105
totalSentences118
matches
0"Aurora’s elbow slammed into the"
1"The knuckles of the hand"
2"Silence clogged the air between"
3"He watched her, one eyebrow"
4"His limp shifted his weight"
5"Her voice came out flat,"
6"He pushed back from the"
7"Hazel eyes narrowed—recognition, surprise, something"
8"She inhaled, the scent of"
9"She forced a corner of"
10"He nodded once, then tapped"
11"She drew back her sleeve,"
12"Her fingers trailed the ridge"
13"He studied her bright blue"
14"She’d lost her roundness, the"
15"he said, voice low"
16"She glanced at the half-empty"
17"She raised the pint"
18"He tilted his head, listening"
19"He leaned forward."
ratio0.89
42.37% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences118
matches
0"Now she looked lean, precise—like"
ratio0.008
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences31
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"He tilted his head, listening to the bar’s hum—gentle chatter, silverware clink, a distant door that rattled whenever someone swung it too hard."
79.55% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"he said, voice low"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"he barked (bark)"
dialogueSentences53
tagDensity0.132
leniency0.264
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.038
83.4696%