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Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRFG5V9F57BXXJRZDSXQHV
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Model:
GPT-4o Mini (temp=0)
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:
43.1s
Cost:
$0.001257
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
84.25%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
0.00%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
100.00%
Cliché density
(details)
77.65%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
100.00%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
0.00%
Name drop frequency
(details)
47.26%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
94.84%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
59.38%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
0.00%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
56.82%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
94.16%
Technical jargon density
(details)
0.00%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
0.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
73.8120%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>
Model response
Messages
Meta
AI
The air shimmered as Aurora
stepped through the ancient oak standing stones, the boundary between the mundane world and the Fae Grove.
A soft breeze brushed against
her skin, carrying the scent of wildflowers and something sweet, almost intoxicating.
She paused, taking in the
vibrant colors that danced before her eyes. The grove
pulsed
with life, each flower a splash of color against the lush green backdrop. “Is this real?”
Rory whispered, her voice barely
breaking the serene
silence
. She glanced back at Nyx, who floated beside her, a silhouette of shadow and mystery.
Their faintly glowing violet eyes
flickered
with curiosity. “Real as dreams,”
Nyx replied, their voice a
whisper
that
seemed to
echo
from the
depths
of the grove. “But dreams can be
treacherous
.”
Rory shivered, not from fear
but from the thrill of the unknown.
She brushed her fingers against
the petals of a nearby flower, its surface cool and velvety.
The bloom leaned toward her
touch,
as if welcoming her
. “Look at that!”
Eva exclaimed, pointing toward a
cluster of trees that twisted and turned in impossible angles.
The trunks spiraled upward, their
branches intertwining like dancers in a graceful waltz. “It’s like they’re alive.” “Everything here is alive,”
Isolde said, her silver hair
flowing like a river behind her.
She stepped lightly, leaving no
footprints on the soft earth. “But not all life is friendly.”
Rory felt a chill creep
up her spine.
The grove felt alive, but
there was an undercurrent of something else—an awareness that watched from the shadows.
She glanced at Isolde, whose
pale lavender eyes sparkled with mischief and wisdom. “Do you see them?”
Isolde asked, her voice melodic
yet cryptic. “The whispers of the past linger here, waiting for those who dare to listen.” “What do you mean?”
Rory asked, her heart racing
. “Every step you take
echoes
through time,”
Isolde replied, her gaze distant
. “The Fae leave traces of their magic, and those who tread
lightly
may find secrets hidden in the folds of reality.” Rory exchanged a glance with Eva, who looked both excited and apprehensive.
They moved deeper into the
grove, the air thickening with enchantment. The sunlight filtered through the leaves, casting dappled patterns on the ground. “Over there!” Eva pointed to a shimmering pool nestled between the roots of an ancient tree. The water glowed with an ethereal light, reflecting the colors of the grove in a
kaleidoscope
of hues. Rory knelt beside the pool, mesmerized. “It’s beautiful,”
she breathed, reaching out to
touch the surface. As her fingers grazed the water, ripples spread outward, distorting the reflection. “Careful,”
Nyx warned, their form flickering
. “The waters can reveal truths, but they can also ensnare the unwary.” “What do you mean?” Rory asked, pulling her hand back. “Some truths are better left undiscovered,”
Nyx replied, their voice a
soft murmur. Isolde stepped closer, her eyes narrowing as she peered into the
depths
of the pool. “What do you seek, child? The past or the future?” Rory hesitated, the
weight
of the question pressing down on her. “I just want to understand.” “Understanding can be a double-edged sword,”
Isolde said, her tone cryptic
. “But if you wish to know, look deeper.” Rory leaned over the pool, her heart
pounding
. The water swirled, revealing
fleeting
images—fragments of memories, faces she recognized and some she didn’t. A flash of her father’s stern expression, her mother’s gentle smile, and then Evan’s angry glare.
She recoiled, the memories crashing
over her like a wave. “Rory?” Eva’s voice broke through the haze. “Are you okay?” “I… I’m fine,” Rory stammered, shaking off the visions. “Just… a lot to take in.” “Let’s keep moving,”
Nyx suggested, their form shifting as they glided forward
. “There’s more to see.”
They ventured deeper into the
grove, the atmosphere thickening with magic. The trees whispered secrets, their leaves rustling like soft laughter. Rory felt a pull, an urge to explore every nook and cranny. “Look at that!” Eva pointed to a cluster of wildflowers that glowed faintly in the dim light. “They’re like little lanterns.” “Fae flora,” Isolde explained, her voice laced with reverence. “They bloom in the presence of magic, feeding off the energy of the grove.” Rory knelt to examine the flowers, their petals shimmering like jewels.
She reached out, and as
her fingers brushed against one, it
pulsed
with
warmth
, sending a jolt of energy through her. “Careful!”
Nyx warned, their voice sharp
. “Not all magic is benign.” Rory pulled her hand back, heart
racing
. “What do you mean?” “Some plants can ensnare the mind,”
Nyx replied, their form flickering with unease
. “They can lead you astray.” “Let’s not linger,” Isolde suggested, glancing around
as if sensing unseen eyes
. “The grove has its guardians.” Rory stood, unease settling in her
stomach
. “Guardians?” “Creatures of the grove,”
Isolde said, her tone serious
. “They protect the secrets within. We must tread
carefully
.” As they moved forward, the trees
began to
thin, revealing a clearing bathed in soft light. In the center stood a circle of ancient stones, each
etched
with symbols that glowed faintly. Rory felt a pull toward them, an urge to step closer. “Don’t,”
Nyx said, their voice urgent
. “Those stones are a boundary. Crossing them could awaken something best left undisturbed.” “What kind of something?”
Rory asked, her curiosity piqued
. “Something that hungers,”
Nyx replied, their form darkening
. “A creature bound by ancient magic.” Rory’s heart
raced
. “We should go back.” “Not yet,” Isolde said, stepping forward. “The stones hold knowledge. If we listen, we may learn.” Rory exchanged a glance with Eva, who looked torn between fear and fascination. “Stay close,”
Nyx warned, their voice low
. “And be ready to run.” As Isolde approached the stones, Rory felt a shift in the air, a
tension
that crackled like static. The symbols glowed brighter, pulsing in rhythm with her heartbeat. “Listen,”
Isolde murmured, her eyes closed
. “The stones speak.” Rory strained to hear, but all she caught was a low hum, a vibration that
resonated
deep within her. The grove felt alive, the
very
ground thrumming with energy. “What are they saying?”
Eva whispered, her voice barely audible
. “Secrets of the past,”
Isolde replied, her expression serene
. “And warnings for the future.”
Rory felt a chill creep
down her spine
. The air thickened, and shadows danced at the edges of her vision. “Something’s coming,”
Nyx said, their voice urgent
. “We need to leave.”
Before Rory could respond, a
low growl
echoed
through the grove, reverberating off the trees. The shadows coalesced, forming a shape that
loomed
just beyond the circle of stones. “Run!” Nyx shouted, their form flickering as they moved to shield Rory and Eva. Rory’s heart
raced
as she turned, the grove shifting around her. The whispers grew louder, a
cacophony
of voices urging her to flee.
She grabbed Eva’s hand, pulling
her toward the path they had come from. “Isolde!” Rory shouted, glancing back at the seer, who stood
transfixed
before the stones. “Isolde, come on!” But Isolde remained, her eyes locked on the shadows that writhed and twisted, a smile playing on her lips. “Some truths must be faced,”
she said, her voice echoing
in the stillness. Rory felt
a surge of panic
. “We can’t leave her!” “Trust her,” Nyx urged, their form solidifying as they prepared to confront the encroaching darkness. “We must go.” With one last glance at Isolde, Rory turned and ran, the grove closing in around her as the shadows surged forward. The whispers faded into the distance, leaving only the
pounding
of her heart and the thrill of the unknown behind.
total_cost
0.0012571700000000002
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
35
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
dialogueSentences
66
tagDensity
0.53
leniency
1
rawRatio
0
effectiveRatio
0
84.25%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
1270
totalAiIsmAdverbs
4
found
0
adverb
"lightly"
count
2
1
adverb
"carefully"
count
1
2
adverb
"very"
count
1
highlights
0
"lightly"
1
"carefully"
2
"very"
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
0.00%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
1270
totalAiIsms
33
found
0
word
"shimmered"
count
1
1
word
"pulsed"
count
2
2
word
"silence"
count
1
3
word
"flickered"
count
1
4
word
"whisper"
count
1
5
word
"echo"
count
1
6
word
"depths"
count
2
7
word
"treacherous"
count
1
8
word
"chill"
count
2
9
word
"racing"
count
2
10
word
"echoes"
count
1
11
word
"kaleidoscope"
count
1
12
word
"weight"
count
1
13
word
"pounding"
count
2
14
word
"fleeting"
count
1
15
word
"warmth"
count
1
16
word
"stomach"
count
1
17
word
"etched"
count
1
18
word
"raced"
count
2
19
word
"tension"
count
1
20
word
"resonated"
count
1
21
word
"down her spine"
count
1
22
word
"echoed"
count
1
23
word
"loomed"
count
1
24
word
"cacophony"
count
1
25
word
"transfixed"
count
1
26
word
"echoing"
count
1
highlights
0
"shimmered"
1
"pulsed"
2
"silence"
3
"flickered"
4
"whisper"
5
"echo"
6
"depths"
7
"treacherous"
8
"chill"
9
"racing"
10
"echoes"
11
"kaleidoscope"
12
"weight"
13
"pounding"
14
"fleeting"
15
"warmth"
16
"stomach"
17
"etched"
18
"raced"
19
"tension"
20
"resonated"
21
"down her spine"
22
"echoed"
23
"loomed"
24
"cacophony"
25
"transfixed"
26
"echoing"
100.00%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
77.65%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
5
narrationSentences
88
matches
0
"felt a chill"
1
"d with warmth"
2
"g with unease"
3
"felt a chill"
4
"a surge of panic"
100.00%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
2
narrationSentences
88
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
1
"began to"
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
119
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
22
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
0
markdownWords
0
totalWords
1267
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
22
unquotedAttributions
0
matches
(empty)
0.00%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
68
wordCount
955
uniqueNames
8
maxNameDensity
2.83
worstName
"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity
5
worstWindowName
"Rory"
discoveredNames
Aurora
1
Fae
1
Grove
1
Nyx
13
Rory
27
Isolde
15
Eva
9
Evan
1
persons
0
"Aurora"
1
"Nyx"
2
"Rory"
3
"Isolde"
4
"Eva"
5
"Evan"
places
0
"Fae"
1
"Grove"
globalScore
0.086
windowScore
0
47.26%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
73
glossingSentenceCount
3
matches
0
"whisper that seemed to echo from the depths of the grove"
1
"as if welcoming her"
2
"as if sensing unseen eyes"
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
1
per1kWords
0.789
wordCount
1267
matches
0
"not from fear but from the thrill of the unknown"
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
119
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
58
mean
21.84
std
12.22
cv
0.56
sampleLengths
0
67
1
35
2
24
3
38
4
35
5
31
6
39
7
25
8
9
9
33
10
35
11
34
12
28
13
18
14
10
15
13
16
25
17
16
18
19
19
49
20
10
21
15
22
16
23
33
24
21
25
23
26
32
27
11
28
11
29
18
30
17
31
8
32
18
33
43
34
19
35
9
36
14
37
7
38
16
39
13
40
12
41
28
42
9
43
29
44
10
45
14
46
20
47
11
48
29
49
14
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
0
totalSentences
88
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
0
totalVerbs
197
matches
(empty)
94.84%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
2
semicolonCount
0
flaggedSentences
2
totalSentences
119
ratio
0.017
matches
0
"The grove felt alive, but there was an undercurrent of something else—an awareness that watched from the shadows."
1
"The water swirled, revealing fleeting images—fragments of memories, faces she recognized and some she didn’t."
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
957
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
20
adverbRatio
0.02089864158829676
lyAdverbCount
7
lyAdverbRatio
0.0073145245559038665
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
119
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
119
mean
10.65
std
4.78
cv
0.449
sampleLengths
0
22
1
17
2
12
3
16
4
12
5
15
6
8
7
19
8
5
9
12
10
16
11
10
12
18
13
13
14
4
15
15
16
10
17
6
18
8
19
18
20
13
21
11
22
14
23
9
24
12
25
21
26
12
27
11
28
12
29
16
30
18
31
6
32
10
33
12
34
6
35
12
36
10
37
13
38
15
39
10
40
11
41
5
42
11
43
8
44
8
45
15
46
16
47
10
48
7
49
3
59.38%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
1
diversityRatio
0.36134453781512604
totalSentences
119
uniqueOpeners
43
0.00%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
0
totalSentences
88
matches
(empty)
ratio
0
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
13
totalSentences
88
matches
0
"She paused, taking in the"
1
"She glanced back at Nyx,"
2
"Their faintly glowing violet eyes"
3
"She brushed her fingers against"
4
"She stepped lightly, leaving no"
5
"She glanced at Isolde, whose"
6
"They moved deeper into the"
7
"she breathed, reaching out to"
8
"She recoiled, the memories crashing"
9
"They ventured deeper into the"
10
"She reached out, and as"
11
"She grabbed Eva’s hand, pulling"
12
"she said, her voice echoing"
ratio
0.148
0.00%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
81
totalSentences
88
matches
0
"The air shimmered as Aurora"
1
"A soft breeze brushed against"
2
"She paused, taking in the"
3
"The grove pulsed with life,"
4
"Rory whispered, her voice barely"
5
"She glanced back at Nyx,"
6
"Their faintly glowing violet eyes"
7
"Nyx replied, their voice a"
8
"Rory shivered, not from fear"
9
"She brushed her fingers against"
10
"The bloom leaned toward her"
11
"Eva exclaimed, pointing toward a"
12
"The trunks spiraled upward, their"
13
"Isolde said, her silver hair"
14
"She stepped lightly, leaving no"
15
"Rory felt a chill creep"
16
"The grove felt alive, but"
17
"She glanced at Isolde, whose"
18
"Isolde asked, her voice melodic"
19
"Rory asked, her heart racing"
ratio
0.92
56.82%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
1
totalSentences
88
matches
0
"Before Rory could respond, a"
ratio
0.011
94.16%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
44
technicalSentenceCount
3
matches
0
"A soft breeze brushed against her skin, carrying the scent of wildflowers and something sweet, almost intoxicating."
1
"Rory exchanged a glance with Eva, who looked both excited and apprehensive."
2
"Rory strained to hear, but all she caught was a low hum, a vibration that resonated deep within her."
0.00%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
35
uselessAdditionCount
21
matches
0
"Rory whispered, her voice barely breaking the serene silence"
1
"Isolde said, her silver hair flowing like a river behind her"
2
"Isolde asked, her voice melodic yet cryptic"
3
"Rory asked, her heart racing"
4
"Isolde replied, her gaze distant"
5
"Nyx warned, their form flickering"
6
"Nyx replied, their voice a soft murmur"
7
"Isolde said, her tone cryptic"
8
"Nyx suggested, their form shifting as they glided forward"
9
"Nyx warned, their voice sharp"
10
"Nyx replied, their form flickering with unease"
11
"Isolde said, her tone serious"
12
"Nyx said, their voice urgent"
13
"Rory asked, her curiosity piqued"
14
"Nyx replied, their form darkening"
15
"Nyx warned, their voice low"
16
"Isolde murmured, her eyes closed"
17
"Eva whispered, her voice barely audible"
18
"Isolde replied, her expression serene"
19
"Nyx said, their voice urgent"
20
"she said, her voice echoing in the stillness"
0.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
32
fancyCount
15
fancyTags
0
"Rory whispered (whisper)"
1
"Eva exclaimed (exclaim)"
2
"she breathed (breathe)"
3
"Nyx warned (warn)"
4
"Rory stammered (stammer)"
5
"Nyx suggested (suggest)"
6
"Isolde explained (explain)"
7
"Nyx warned (warn)"
8
"Isolde suggested (suggest)"
9
"Nyx warned (warn)"
10
"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
11
"Eva whispered (whisper)"
12
"Nyx shouted (shout)"
13
"Rory shouted (shout)"
14
"Nyx urged (urge)"
dialogueSentences
66
tagDensity
0.485
leniency
0.97
rawRatio
0.469
effectiveRatio
0.455
73.8120%