Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRH42T4R198TF319V0GPQT

Run Details

Duration:
14.8s
Cost:
$0.000768
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The faint hum of the ancient stones prickled under her skin, like static crawling along her nerves. Aurora Carter hesitated at the boundary of the standing stones, her fingers closing around the crimson-glowing Heartstone Pendant that pulsed gently against her palm. Her breath fogged in the cool night air, and the shadows between the gnarled limbs stretched long and twisting, as if waiting. She had come here for answers, her mind racing through the half-remembered stories, the warnings. Richmond Park’s silent secrets called to her, promising clarity amid whispers of childhood legends. Still, that nagging prick of unease crept in, a warning she ignored at her peril. She shifted her weight, eyes flickering between the dark gap between the stones and the wooded edge beyond, where moonlight filtered through the dense canopy like fragmented silver. The air shifted subtly; a scent, strange and damp—something between moss and decay—clung to her nostrils. It wasn't unfamiliar precisely, but it refused to be dismissed. The park felt different tonight, more alive in an uncomfortable way, as if the earth beneath her had awakened with a slow, deliberate pulse. She stepped forward, shoes crunching faintly on dead leaves and brittle twigs. Her gaze darted across the clearing, wary of movement at the edge, where shadows lurked like silent predators. Inside, the Grove was unnervingly still, the wildflowers undisturbed, colourful blooms defying the absence of wind. Time in this realm moved as sluggishly as the heartbeat in her chest, an unnatural delay that prickled her skin. A shimmer flickered near her peripheral vision—a hint of motion too quick to follow. She paused, eyes narrowing, heart hammering softly. Her fingertips brushed the cool polished surface of the Heartstone. It pulsed once, faintly, in rhythm with her own irregular heartbeat. The glow was faint but persistent, a heartbeat of warmth thrumming against the cold. A whisper floated through the trees, so faint she thought her ears betrayed her. A voice, soft and lingering, carried on the unseen breeze. She froze, listening. “Come closer.” It was not her own voice. Not her imagination. The words sank into the deep silence like a stone tossed into still water, spreading ripples she couldn’t see. Her muscles stiffened, voice caught in her throat. She pressed her back against the rough bark of a nearby oak, eyes scanning the shadows. The phrase echoed again, clearer this time, more insistent. “Come closer.” This time, it wasn’t a whisper but a low, beckoning murmur, a dark lullaby threading through the branches. Her heartbeat quickened, but she forced herself to stay still. The urge to flee prickled under her skin, but the roots of the oak seemed to hold her in place, rooted as deeply as the ancient stones. From the corner of her vision, a flicker—something moving, just at the boundary of sight. It was fleeting, like the flick of a candle flame in the dark. She squinted, trying to pierce the shadows, but whatever it was vanished as quickly as it appeared. Her stomach clenched. She considered retreating, retreating became retreating from her sanity itself. The park’s silence stretched too long, as if waiting, watching. The wildflowers on the forest floor began to glow faintly, a soft iridescent shimmer that shouldn't have been there, unnaturally vivid against the midnight backdrop. She reached out instinctively, fingertips trembling, trying methodically to dismiss the creeping ice wrapping her spine. The air shifted again—this time, closer, almost tactile. A breath, cold and damp, brushed against her cheek, making her freeze. Her eyes snapped shut a moment, sensing something just behind her, behind her eyelids. Then she heard it. A rustling—subtle, methodical. Not a branch in the breeze, but something deliberate, something alive. It moved with a strange, uneven rhythm, like mismatched footsteps on gravel, slow but purposeful. Her stomach tightened, her hand clutching the Heartstone like a talisman. The faint pulse from the pendant accelerated, synchronising with her racing nerves. She felt a prickling itch in her fingers, a sensation that had nothing to do with the cold, but the presence pressing against her, unseen. The whisper returned, softer, yet more insistent: “Let go.” She recoiled, her eyes snapping open. Shadows stretched and writhed at the edge of her vision, shapes morphing before dissolving into the dark. The wildflowers flickered out, as if someone had snuffed them with a breath. Her breath caught, and she clutched the pendant tighter. A shadow slithered closer. Not a person, not an animal. Something in-between, inhuman and unnameable. Its form was vague—a shifting black mass, with faint glimmers that resembled eyes. The eyes were not friendly, nor curious but predatory. Cold and ancient, like the stones she had crossed to reach this place. A jarring silence fell—thick, oppressive, yet filled with fragments of sound. The shifting mass hesitated, then moved deliberately closer, flowing like smoke carried on a breeze she could no longer feel. Her pulse thundered. No rational thought told her to stay. The pull of instincts, primal and relentless, screamed to run, to get away. But her body refused, rooted by the unseen force, her muscles frozen. The pendant pulsed faster, brighter, as if it responded to the thing approaching. She saw, at the limit of her vision, a pair of eyes—pale, glowing faintly crimson—like remnants of a dying ember. She was caught between worlds, on a precipice where flesh and shadow blurred into the terrible unknown. Her hand trembled, slipping from the pendant’s chain, but she didn’t loosen her grip. The small crescent-shaped scar on her wrist itched fiercely, as if warning her. She felt her breathing turn ragged, a whisper close to her ear that was not her own. "Come. Join us." The voice was a hum, insectile and echoing, reverberating through her skull. It seeped into her mind—an invasive warmth that promised knowledge, chaos, salvation or ruin. She staggered, pulses of heat shooting through her fingertips as the wildflowers around her dimmed into grey, lifeless nubs. The shadow at the edge of her sight thickened, swelling, becoming opaque and hungrily watchful. Its eyes blinked slowly, calculating, studying her. And she knew—sensed deeply—that whatever this was, it was not meant for her eyes, her mind, her world. A sudden rush of air—an oppressive gust that carried a cacophony of hissing whispers and sharp, pricking scents of moss, decay, and something darker—swept her off balance. Her vision blurred. Her body swayed, caught in that limbo where the boundary between her reality and those shadowed depths dissolved. Then everything went black.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags0
68.18% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1100
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"gently"
count1
1
adverb"precisely"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count1
3
adverb"quickly"
count1
4
adverb"deliberately"
count1
5
adverb"hungrily"
count1
6
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"gently"
1"precisely"
2"softly"
3"quickly"
4"deliberately"
5"hungrily"
6"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1100
totalAiIsms39
found
0
word"pulsed"
count3
1
word"racing"
count2
2
word"peril"
count1
3
word"weight"
count1
4
word"fragmented"
count1
5
word"pulse"
count3
6
word"flickered"
count2
7
word"warmth"
count2
8
word"whisper"
count4
9
word"silence"
count3
10
word"scanning"
count1
11
word"echoed"
count1
12
word"quickened"
count1
13
word"flicker"
count1
14
word"fleeting"
count1
15
word"stomach"
count2
16
word"methodical"
count1
17
word"footsteps"
count1
18
word"oppressive"
count2
19
word"thundered"
count1
20
word"trembled"
count1
21
word"echoing"
count1
22
word"calculating"
count1
23
word"cacophony"
count1
24
word"depths"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"racing"
2"peril"
3"weight"
4"fragmented"
5"pulse"
6"flickered"
7"warmth"
8"whisper"
9"silence"
10"scanning"
11"echoed"
12"quickened"
13"flicker"
14"fleeting"
15"stomach"
16"methodical"
17"footsteps"
18"oppressive"
19"thundered"
20"trembled"
21"echoing"
22"calculating"
23"cacophony"
24"depths"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences82
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences82
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences86
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen29
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1082
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions2
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions7
wordCount1073
uniqueNames5
maxNameDensity0.28
worstName"Heartstone"
maxWindowNameDensity0.5
worstWindowName"Heartstone"
discoveredNames
Carter1
Heartstone3
Pendant1
Park1
Grove1
persons
0"Carter"
1"Heartstone"
places
0"Pendant"
1"Park"
2"Grove"
globalScore1
windowScore1
11.11% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences72
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"as if waiting"
1"something between moss and decay—clung to her n"
2"as if waiting watching"
3"as if warning her"
15.16% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.848
wordCount1082
matches
0"Not a branch in the breeze, but something deliberate, something alive"
1"not friendly, nor curious but predatory"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences86
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs27
mean40.07
std22.04
cv0.55
sampleLengths
063
172
250
366
456
527
62
761
82
955
1048
1161
1238
1329
1448
157
162
1745
1850
1954
2062
2144
223
2345
2440
2548
264
96.71% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences82
matches
0"was vanished"
1"was caught"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs189
matches
0"was fleeting"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount15
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences11
totalSentences86
ratio0.128
matches
0"The air shifted subtly; a scent, strange and damp—something between moss and decay—clung to her nostrils."
1"A shimmer flickered near her peripheral vision—a hint of motion too quick to follow."
2"From the corner of her vision, a flicker—something moving, just at the boundary of sight."
3"The air shifted again—this time, closer, almost tactile."
4"A rustling—subtle, methodical."
5"Its form was vague—a shifting black mass, with faint glimmers that resembled eyes."
6"A jarring silence fell—thick, oppressive, yet filled with fragments of sound."
7"She saw, at the limit of her vision, a pair of eyes—pale, glowing faintly crimson—like remnants of a dying ember."
8"It seeped into her mind—an invasive warmth that promised knowledge, chaos, salvation or ruin."
9"And she knew—sensed deeply—that whatever this was, it was not meant for her eyes, her mind, her world."
10"A sudden rush of air—an oppressive gust that carried a cacophony of hissing whispers and sharp, pricking scents of moss, decay, and something darker—swept her off balance."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1091
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount40
adverbRatio0.03666361136571952
lyAdverbCount21
lyAdverbRatio0.01924839596700275
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences86
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences86
mean12.58
std6.39
cv0.508
sampleLengths
017
124
222
315
414
515
628
716
810
924
1012
1118
1216
1320
1414
157
1610
1711
1814
1914
2010
213
222
236
243
2519
268
2716
289
292
3018
3110
3227
3315
3413
3517
363
3710
3810
3925
4016
418
4212
4314
444
453
4611
4715
4811
4912
45.35% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.26744186046511625
totalSentences86
uniqueOpeners23
81.30% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences82
matches
0"Then she heard it."
1"Then everything went black."
ratio0.024
44.39% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount36
totalSentences82
matches
0"Her breath fogged in the"
1"She had come here for"
2"She shifted her weight, eyes"
3"It wasn't unfamiliar precisely, but"
4"She stepped forward, shoes crunching"
5"Her gaze darted across the"
6"She paused, eyes narrowing, heart"
7"Her fingertips brushed the cool"
8"It pulsed once, faintly, in"
9"She froze, listening."
10"It was not her own"
11"Her muscles stiffened, voice caught"
12"She pressed her back against"
13"Her heartbeat quickened, but she"
14"It was fleeting, like the"
15"She squinted, trying to pierce"
16"Her stomach clenched."
17"She considered retreating, retreating became"
18"She reached out instinctively, fingertips"
19"Her eyes snapped shut a"
ratio0.439
39.27% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount69
totalSentences82
matches
0"The faint hum of the"
1"Aurora Carter hesitated at the"
2"Her breath fogged in the"
3"She had come here for"
4"Richmond Park’s silent secrets called"
5"She shifted her weight, eyes"
6"The air shifted subtly; a"
7"It wasn't unfamiliar precisely, but"
8"The park felt different tonight,"
9"She stepped forward, shoes crunching"
10"Her gaze darted across the"
11"A shimmer flickered near her"
12"She paused, eyes narrowing, heart"
13"Her fingertips brushed the cool"
14"It pulsed once, faintly, in"
15"The glow was faint but"
16"A whisper floated through the"
17"A voice, soft and lingering,"
18"She froze, listening."
19"It was not her own"
ratio0.841
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences82
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences60
technicalSentenceCount12
matches
0"Her breath fogged in the cool night air, and the shadows between the gnarled limbs stretched long and twisting, as if waiting."
1"The park felt different tonight, more alive in an uncomfortable way, as if the earth beneath her had awakened with a slow, deliberate pulse."
2"Time in this realm moved as sluggishly as the heartbeat in her chest, an unnatural delay that prickled her skin."
3"The park’s silence stretched too long, as if waiting, watching."
4"The wildflowers on the forest floor began to glow faintly, a soft iridescent shimmer that shouldn't have been there, unnaturally vivid against the midnight back…"
5"She felt a prickling itch in her fingers, a sensation that had nothing to do with the cold, but the presence pressing against her, unseen."
6"Its form was vague—a shifting black mass, with faint glimmers that resembled eyes."
7"The pendant pulsed faster, brighter, as if it responded to the thing approaching."
8"The small crescent-shaped scar on her wrist itched fiercely, as if warning her."
9"She felt her breathing turn ragged, a whisper close to her ear that was not her own."
10"It seeped into her mind—an invasive warmth that promised knowledge, chaos, salvation or ruin."
11"A sudden rush of air—an oppressive gust that carried a cacophony of hissing whispers and sharp, pricking scents of moss, decay, and something darker—swept her o…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags0
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
73.1821%