Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRH5HZ4JNHHK8C8X79D9K8

Run Details

Duration:
24.8s
Cost:
$0.018390
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
"Can I get a cigarette?" The raspy voice startled Aurora, pulling her gaze from the regimented lines of glass bottles behind the bar. She turned, a wordless response halted in her throat when she recognised the source. The man beside her, silhouetted against the dim embrace of The Raven's Nest's green neon sign, leaned casually, as though the years had not sculpted hardship upon his features. Those same years dulled his once-bright hazel eyes, now hidden beneath a shock of grey-streaked auburn hair. "Silas." She managed to utter, trying to reconcile the figure before her with the whirlwind of past memories. He smiled, the corners of his eyes crinkling—a gesture both endearing and saddening. "Rory Carter. As I live and breathe." Their hands found each other in a firm clasp, a world of history overlaid in that single connection. The years conduited through skin and knuckle, filled with days spent in classrooms, old haunts, and hours burnt over tomes in the university library. Rory caught a glimmer of their shared past in his knowing gaze—one that spoke of secrets and silence even between breaths. "Smoke?" Silas offered again, patting his coat's inner pocket, too rumpled to be dapper, yet worn with purpose. Rory shook her head, resisting the churn of nostalgia that sought to unearth old habits. "Can't, really. Cleaner lungs these days." "Good on you," Silas replied, withdrawing a worn silver case. He tipped out a cigarette for himself, the small ritual holding a familiarity that brushed against something tender. "Mind if I?" She waved away the implied question with an amused nod. He lit the cigarette, inhaling deeply before exhaling satisfaction and smoke in equal measure. Retracting her gaze from the aromatic drug, Rory noted, "You look different." "Ah, the hand of time," he drawled, eyes twinkling. "It chisels and paints in peculiar ways." "But always an artist," she added, fondness slipping into her voice—yet she couldn't quite place if it was for the past or for him. "True," he replied, graceful in his concession. "Yours certainly hasn't dulled." The words hung between them, weaving a fragile tapestry of unaddressed changes, of whispers half-truths told in better times. Rory fidgeted slightly, feeling the crescent-shaped scar on her wrist burn with a long-buried memory of bravery and folly. "You disappeared," Silas remarked, a gentle question shrouded in observation. "London called." Her response came automatic, lifeless, devoid of the real reason beneath—a history neither kind nor forgotten. "How's the bar trade?" she deflected, gesturing with a lift of her chin towards the bar's muted patronage. "Successful," he said, though his tone lacked the ringing conviction of success. "Success has a bitter tang when savoured too long." He exhaled, the smoke making its languid dance above their heads. Silas led them from the counter, through the room clothed in the glow of peeling maps and monochrome photographs capturing the glint of past wars and secrets. They wove past the collected patrons, until finally, they settled at a nook near the back wall with a strategically positioned view of the entrance. Silas habitually scanned the room, a habit that was only partly concealed by his easy-going demeanour. "You see it all from here?" Rory questioned, following his line of vision. "More than I'd care to dispose, honestly," he quipped, chuckling quietly, as though he alone held the weight of Soho's secrets. Their conversation faltered, like a beautifully composed song punctuated with forgotten bars, yet even silence spoke volumes between kindred spirits—a stark contrast with the years they'd let slip in between. "Do you think it can ever be the same?" Rory asked, "After the years, I mean." Their gazes met, a bridge overcoming distance. Silas contemplated the notion, fingers drumming rhythmically upon the table's surface. He seemed on the brink of a reply, but then simply said, "Some stories aren't meant to have sequels." Yet his guarded way of speaking, such a shift from the vibrant storyteller she recalled, hinted at more: entrapment within his own hardened exterior, an armour acquired from scars too quickly hidden. She couldn't indulge in herself—not yet—when his soul bore pieces she wished he would reveal. "Silas, you—" she began, and stopped, struggling beneath the weight of unspoken questions. Questions like where's the laughter you used to carry? Or is your world as tangled as mine? She wondered if he too reminisced nights of youthful abandon and wild escapades under shifting moonlight. But unpredictability nestled its arrival then—the bang of a door swinging open, chased by the clattering of boots across the floorboards. Silas straightened, resolve masking itself beneath composed eyes as a tall figure, clad in dark attire, appeared at the bar's edge. Silas watched intently, caution emanating palpably beside him. Rory's curiosity sparked up vivid and raw. Though caught somewhat adrift in their rekindled history, the shifting energy within the bar sparked her instincts. So while the present loomed precariously around them, she glanced sideways at Silas and said, "Let me see." With a knowing nod, he relented, both of them compelled to uncover the story of the stranger. Aurora's pulse quickened, the urgency of the moment a living thing between vertebrae of suspense and electric curiosity. As the tension mounted, Rory observed, "Sometimes it isn't about sequels but unfinished chapters." Yet the thought slipped away with his bracing grin, as they prepared to join the narrative writing itself across the bar floor, unaware of what lay beyond—perhaps coaxing the reluctant truth behind Silas' changed gaze, perched waiting like a crow in daylight. They could no longer detangle their pasts before silence swallowed them whole. "Together, then?" Silas asked, eyes daring and delighted at the prospect. Rory nodded, the tightness around her chest easing. "Here's to life unabridged, Silas." Their time shared beneath The Raven's Nest's green glow crackled with the start of an adventure, where history’s weight would lend backbone to their tale.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags21
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Silas offered again [again]"
1"the thought slipped away [away]"
dialogueSentences27
tagDensity0.778
leniency1
rawRatio0.095
effectiveRatio0.095
84.91% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount994
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"quickly"
count1
highlights
0"really"
1"slightly"
2"quickly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
4.43% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount994
totalAiIsms19
found
0
word"silence"
count3
1
word"churn"
count1
2
word"tapestry"
count1
3
word"dance"
count1
4
word"glint"
count1
5
word"scanned"
count1
6
word"weight"
count3
7
word"stark"
count1
8
word"unspoken"
count1
9
word"resolve"
count1
10
word"loomed"
count1
11
word"pulse"
count1
12
word"quickened"
count1
13
word"electric"
count1
14
word"tension"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"churn"
2"tapestry"
3"dance"
4"glint"
5"scanned"
6"weight"
7"stark"
8"unspoken"
9"resolve"
10"loomed"
11"pulse"
12"quickened"
13"electric"
14"tension"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences56
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences56
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"managed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences63
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen43
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords979
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
90.97% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions27
wordCount847
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity1.18
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Aurora2
Raven2
Nest2
Rory9
Silas10
Soho1
Questions1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Raven"
2"Nest"
3"Rory"
4"Silas"
5"Questions"
places
0"Soho"
globalScore0.91
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences54
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"quite place if it was for the past or for him"
97.85% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords1.021
wordCount979
matches
0"neither kind nor"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences63
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs33
mean29.67
std17.94
cv0.605
sampleLengths
05
178
218
320
463
518
621
731
824
912
1016
1124
1211
1338
1410
1536
1632
1768
1813
1921
2030
2116
2237
2347
2446
2550
2642
2735
2814
2954
3011
3113
3225
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences56
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs157
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount9
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences8
totalSentences63
ratio0.127
matches
0"He smiled, the corners of his eyes crinkling—a gesture both endearing and saddening."
1"Rory caught a glimmer of their shared past in his knowing gaze—one that spoke of secrets and silence even between breaths."
2"\"But always an artist,\" she added, fondness slipping into her voice—yet she couldn't quite place if it was for the past or for him."
3"\"London called.\" Her response came automatic, lifeless, devoid of the real reason beneath—a history neither kind nor forgotten."
4"Their conversation faltered, like a beautifully composed song punctuated with forgotten bars, yet even silence spoke volumes between kindred spirits—a stark contrast with the years they'd let slip in between."
5"She couldn't indulge in herself—not yet—when his soul bore pieces she wished he would reveal."
6"But unpredictability nestled its arrival then—the bang of a door swinging open, chased by the clattering of boots across the floorboards."
7"Yet the thought slipped away with his bracing grin, as they prepared to join the narrative writing itself across the bar floor, unaware of what lay beyond—perhaps coaxing the reluctant truth behind Silas' changed gaze, perched waiting like a crow in daylight."
98.17% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount811
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount31
adverbRatio0.03822441430332922
lyAdverbCount18
lyAdverbRatio0.02219482120838471
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences63
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences63
mean15.54
std7.43
cv0.478
sampleLengths
05
118
214
329
417
518
613
77
818
924
1021
1118
1215
136
1410
1518
163
1710
1814
1912
209
217
2224
237
244
2519
2619
2710
2818
2918
3012
3120
3227
3325
3416
3513
3621
3730
3816
397
4011
4119
4232
4315
4413
459
468
4716
4821
4921
91.01% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.5555555555555556
totalSentences63
uniqueOpeners35
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences55
matches(empty)
ratio0
45.45% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences55
matches
0"She turned, a wordless response"
1"She managed to utter, trying"
2"He smiled, the corners of"
3"Their hands found each other"
4"He tipped out a cigarette"
5"She waved away the implied"
6"He lit the cigarette, inhaling"
7"he drawled, eyes twinkling"
8"she added, fondness slipping into"
9"he replied, graceful in his"
10"Her response came automatic, lifeless,"
11"she deflected, gesturing with a"
12"he said, though his tone"
13"He exhaled, the smoke making"
14"They wove past the collected"
15"he quipped, chuckling quietly, as"
16"Their conversation faltered, like a"
17"Their gazes met, a bridge"
18"He seemed on the brink"
19"She couldn't indulge in herself—not"
ratio0.436
41.82% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount46
totalSentences55
matches
0"The raspy voice startled Aurora,"
1"She turned, a wordless response"
2"The man beside her, silhouetted"
3"Those same years dulled his"
4"She managed to utter, trying"
5"He smiled, the corners of"
6"Their hands found each other"
7"The years conduited through skin"
8"Rory caught a glimmer of"
9"Silas offered again, patting his"
10"Rory shook her head, resisting"
11"Silas replied, withdrawing a worn"
12"He tipped out a cigarette"
13"She waved away the implied"
14"He lit the cigarette, inhaling"
15"he drawled, eyes twinkling"
16"she added, fondness slipping into"
17"he replied, graceful in his"
18"The words hung between them,"
19"Rory fidgeted slightly, feeling the"
ratio0.836
90.91% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences55
matches
0"Though caught somewhat adrift in"
ratio0.018
44.33% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences29
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"The man beside her, silhouetted against the dim embrace of The Raven's Nest's green neon sign, leaned casually, as though the years had not sculpted hardship up…"
1"Rory shook her head, resisting the churn of nostalgia that sought to unearth old habits."
2"He tipped out a cigarette for himself, the small ritual holding a familiarity that brushed against something tender."
3"Silas habitually scanned the room, a habit that was only partly concealed by his easy-going demeanour."
29.76% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags21
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"he drawled, eyes twinkling"
1"he said, though his tone lacked the ringing conviction of success"
2"He exhaled, the smoke making its languid dance above their heads"
3"Silas asked, eyes daring and delighted at the prospect"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"Retracting her gaze from the aromatic drug (retract)"
1"he drawled (drawl)"
2"she added (add)"
3"Rory questioned (question)"
4"he quipped (quip)"
dialogueSentences27
tagDensity0.37
leniency0.741
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.37
77.3205%