Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRHN15KAYV51CSRW1HE0K1

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Duration:
22.7s
Cost:
$0.014662

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The Heartstone Pendant pulsed against Aurora’s collarbone, a slow, insistent warmth like a held breath. She shouldn’t have come. Not at night. Not alone. But the note had been specific—*The Grove, midnight, alone*—and the pendant had burned hotter the closer she got to Richmond Park, as if tugging her forward. She stepped over the moss-slick boundary stones, their ancient oak bark blackened by centuries of unseen fires. The air inside the grove was thicker, sweet with the cloying scent of wildflowers that shouldn’t bloom in October. The trees here grew too close, their branches knitting together overhead like skeletal fingers. Moonlight filtered through in sickly patches, painting the ground in shifting silver and shadow. Aurora’s boots sank into damp earth as she moved deeper into the clearing. The pendant’s glow had dimmed to a faint ember, but the weight of it was undeniable. She touched it absently, her fingers tracing the crimson stone. *Hel portal.* The words from the note echoed in her skull. *You’re the only one who can close it.* A twig snapped. She froze. The sound had come from behind her, near the boundary stones. Too deliberate to be an animal. Too heavy to be the wind. Silence. Aurora exhaled through her nose and turned slowly. Nothing. Just the gnarled trees, their bark peeling like sunburnt skin. She flexed her fingers, willing them to stop trembling. *Get a grip, Carter.* She’d faced worse than a creepy forest. Evan’s fists had been real. This? This was just her imagination. Another sound. A whisper, this time. Not from behind. From *above.* She tilted her head back. The branches swayed, though there was no breeze. The leaves rustled, forming words she almost understood—*Laila, Laila*—before dissolving into meaningless chatter. Her childhood nickname. No one had called her that in years. The pendant flared hot against her skin. Aurora stumbled back, her heel catching on a root. She barely kept her balance, her pulse hammering in her throat. The grove had gone still. Too still. No owls. No rustling. Just the distant hum of the city, muffled as if heard through water. Then, the laughter. It started low, a child’s giggle, bubbling up from the earth itself. It slithered around her ankles, cold and wet, before rising into the air like smoke. Aurora spun, her breath coming in shallow gasps. The laughter multiplied, bouncing between the trees, until it surrounded her, a chorus of voices that weren’t quite human. A shape moved at the edge of the clearing. Tall. Too tall. Its limbs stretched unnaturally, joints bending in ways that made her stomach lurch. It wore no face, just a smooth expanse of skin where features should have been. The thing tilted its head, and the laughter cut off abruptly, as if someone had flipped a switch. Aurora’s fingers closed around the pendant. The stone burned now, searing her palm, but she didn’t let go. The thing took a step forward. Then another. Its bare feet made no sound on the damp earth. She should run. She *knew* she should run. But her body refused to obey, locked in place by something deeper than fear. The thing raised an arm, its fingers elongating into pale, skeletal points. It reached for her— —and the pendant *screamed.* Not a sound. A *feeling.* A wave of heat and pressure that knocked Aurora to her knees. The thing recoiled, its form flickering like a candle flame in the wind. The grove trembled. The trees groaned, their branches twisting as if in pain. Then, the ground split open. A fissure tore through the earth, wide enough to swallow a car. From the depths came a sound like a thousand voices wailing in unison, a chorus of agony that made Aurora’s teeth ache. The thing—whatever it was—let out a high, keening cry and dissolved into smoke, its remnants sucked into the fissure as if pulled by an unseen force. The pendant went cold. Aurora gasped, her lungs burning. The fissure sealed itself with a wet, sucking sound, leaving no trace behind. The grove was silent again. Normal. The wildflowers swayed gently in a breeze that hadn’t been there moments before. She staggered to her feet, her legs unsteady. The pendant lay inert against her chest, its crimson glow extinguished. Her hand came away from it smeared with blood—her blood, from where the stone had burned her palm. A voice, soft and familiar, whispered from the trees. *"You shouldn’t have come, Rory."* She whirled. The grove was empty. But the boundary stones were gone. And the path back had vanished with them.
total_cost0.014662

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags0
86.96% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount767
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
8.74% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount767
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"pulsed"
count1
1
word"warmth"
count1
2
word"weight"
count1
3
word"tracing"
count1
4
word"echoed"
count1
5
word"silence"
count1
6
word"whisper"
count1
7
word"pulse"
count1
8
word"stomach"
count1
9
word"lurch"
count1
10
word"searing"
count1
11
word"trembled"
count1
12
word"depths"
count1
13
word"familiar"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"warmth"
2"weight"
3"tracing"
4"echoed"
5"silence"
6"whisper"
7"pulse"
8"stomach"
9"lurch"
10"searing"
11"trembled"
12"depths"
13"familiar"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences90
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences90
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences91
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen28
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans10
markdownWords29
totalWords763
ratio0.038
matches
0"The Grove, midnight, alone"
1"Hel portal."
2"You’re the only one who can close it."
3"Get a grip, Carter."
4"above."
5"Laila, Laila"
6"knew"
7"screamed."
8"feeling."
9"\"You shouldn’t have come, Rory.\""
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions1
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
90.63% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions15
wordCount758
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity1.19
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Heartstone1
Pendant1
Aurora9
Grove1
Richmond1
Park1
October1
persons
0"Pendant"
1"Aurora"
2"Grove"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"October"
globalScore0.906
windowScore1
55.66% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences53
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"as if tugging her forward"
1"quite human"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount763
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences91
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs29
mean26.31
std21.28
cv0.809
sampleLengths
050
164
258
33
425
51
650
711
837
97
1044
113
1254
139
1449
1536
1638
174
1843
195
2060
214
2237
2337
249
255
266
276
288
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences90
matches
0"were gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs129
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount9
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences91
ratio0.066
matches
0"But the note had been specific—*The Grove, midnight, alone*—and the pendant had burned hotter the closer she got to Richmond Park, as if tugging her forward."
1"The leaves rustled, forming words she almost understood—*Laila, Laila*—before dissolving into meaningless chatter."
2"It reached for her—"
3"—and the pendant *screamed.*"
4"The thing—whatever it was—let out a high, keening cry and dissolved into smoke, its remnants sucked into the fissure as if pulled by an unseen force."
5"Her hand came away from it smeared with blood—her blood, from where the stone had burned her palm."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount762
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"lay inert against her"
adverbCount29
adverbRatio0.03805774278215223
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.010498687664041995
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences91
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences91
mean8.38
std5.76
cv0.687
sampleLengths
015
14
23
32
426
517
619
714
814
913
1016
1110
1211
138
143
152
1611
176
186
191
208
211
2210
239
2411
255
261
275
282
294
303
312
325
338
3413
353
368
377
389
3911
405
412
422
432
4413
453
4612
4715
488
4919
35.71% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats13
diversityRatio0.2857142857142857
totalSentences91
uniqueOpeners26
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount6
totalSentences75
matches
0"Too deliberate to be an"
1"Too heavy to be the"
2"Just the gnarled trees, their"
3"Just the distant hum of"
4"Then, the laughter."
5"Then, the ground split open."
ratio0.08
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount18
totalSentences75
matches
0"She shouldn’t have come."
1"She stepped over the moss-slick"
2"She touched it absently, her"
3"*You’re the only one who"
4"She flexed her fingers, willing"
5"She tilted her head back."
6"Her childhood nickname."
7"She barely kept her balance,"
8"It started low, a child’s"
9"It slithered around her ankles,"
10"Its limbs stretched unnaturally, joints"
11"It wore no face, just"
12"Its bare feet made no"
13"She should run."
14"She *knew* she should run."
15"It reached for her—"
16"She staggered to her feet,"
17"Her hand came away from"
ratio0.24
73.33% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount58
totalSentences75
matches
0"The Heartstone Pendant pulsed against"
1"She shouldn’t have come."
2"She stepped over the moss-slick"
3"The air inside the grove"
4"The trees here grew too"
5"Moonlight filtered through in sickly"
6"Aurora’s boots sank into damp"
7"The pendant’s glow had dimmed"
8"She touched it absently, her"
9"*Hel portal.* The words from"
10"*You’re the only one who"
11"A twig snapped."
12"The sound had come from"
13"Aurora exhaled through her nose"
14"She flexed her fingers, willing"
15"Evan’s fists had been real."
16"This was just her imagination."
17"A whisper, this time."
18"She tilted her head back."
19"The branches swayed, though there"
ratio0.773
66.67% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences75
matches
0"—and the pendant *screamed.*"
ratio0.013
63.49% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences36
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"But the note had been specific—*The Grove, midnight, alone*—and the pendant had burned hotter the closer she got to Richmond Park, as if tugging her forward."
1"The air inside the grove was thicker, sweet with the cloying scent of wildflowers that shouldn’t bloom in October."
2"Its limbs stretched unnaturally, joints bending in ways that made her stomach lurch."
3"A *feeling.* A wave of heat and pressure that knocked Aurora to her knees."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
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100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
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85.8399%