Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRJN8263VB4XS4MP0XR2HC

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20.6s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory's fingers trembled as she turned the key in the lock. The flat was supposed to be her sanctuary, a place to escape the chaos of London's supernatural underworld. But standing in the doorway, backlit by the afternoon sunlight, was the last person she expected to see. "Evan." His name caught in her throat, sharp and unwelcome. Rory braced herself against the doorframe, pulse racing. She'd fled London three years ago to get away from him, the controlling ex-boyfriend who'd shattered her confidence and her trust. And now here he was, on her doorstep, as if no time had passed at all. Evan's mouth curved into a smile that didn't reach his eyes. "Hello, Rory." His gaze swept over her, drinking in every detail. "It's been a while." Rory's fingers tightened around the doorknob. "What are you doing here?" "I was in the neighborhood." Evan's tone was casual, but there was an edge to it that set Rory on edge. He took a step forward, and she instinctively retreated, heart pounding. "How did you find me?" "I have my ways." Evan's eyes narrowed. "Did you really think you could hide from me forever?" Rory's mind raced, cataloging possible escape routes. The deadbolts on the door, the windows, the fire escape — all potential avenues of escape, if it came to that. But the thought of Evan chasing her again, of feeling that fear and helplessness all over again, made her sick to her stomach. "What do you want, Evan?" she asked, hating how small her voice sounded. "What do I want?" Evan echoed, his expression darkening. "I want you to come home, Rory. We had something special, you and I. And then you just... disappeared." He took another step forward, and Rory resisted the urge to slam the door in his face. "I'm not going anywhere with you." "Don't be ridiculous." Evan's hand shot out, grabbing her wrist. Rory flinched, the memory of his grip, tight and unyielding, flooding back. "You belong with me." "No!" Rory jerked her hand away, panic rising in her chest. "Let go of me!" The sound of a throat clearing behind Evan made them both freeze. Rory's gaze flicked past Evan's shoulder to see a tall, impeccably dressed man standing in the hallway, one hand resting casually on the ivory handle of his cane. "I believe the lady asked you to let go." Evan's grip tightened momentarily before he released Rory's wrist, turning to face the newcomer. "This doesn't concern you," he growled. The man's lips curved into a humorless smile. "On the contrary, I believe it does." He took a step forward, his heterochromatic eyes boring into Evan. "You're trespassing on private property and harassing my... associate." Rory's heart leapt at the word "associate." Lucien Moreau, the half-demon information broker she'd been working with, had apparently been keeping an eye on her flat. She didn't know whether to feel relieved or even more unsettled. Evan's jaw tightened. "This is between me and Rory." "I'm afraid I can't allow that." Lucien's tone was cool, measured. "Ms. Carter has made it clear she doesn't wish to have any further contact with you. I suggest you leave. Now." For a long, tense moment, the three of them stood there, the air thick with unspoken threat. Rory could feel the power radiating off Lucien, a subtle undercurrent of otherworldly energy that set her nerves on edge. Finally, Evan's shoulders slumped in defeat. "This isn't over, Rory," he growled, glaring at her. "I believe it is." Lucien's voice was like ice. "Good day, Mr...?" "Evan." Evan's gaze flickered between the two of them, his expression dark. "Evan Matheson." "Well then, Mr. Matheson, I suggest you remove yourself from the premises before I'm forced to... assist you." Lucien's grip tightened on his cane, the threat implicit. With one last, venomous look at Rory, Evan turned and stalked away. Rory watched him go, relief and dread warring within her. She knew Evan, knew how stubborn and dangerous he could be. This wasn't the last she'd seen of him. As soon as Evan disappeared around the corner, Lucien turned his attention to Rory. "Are you alright?" Rory nodded shakily, her arms wrapping around herself. "I... I think so." She met his gaze, grateful and wary in equal measure. "Thank you for... intervening." Lucien inclined his head. "Of course. I take the safety of my associates very seriously." His eyes narrowed. "Though I must admit, I'm curious as to the nature of your history with Mr. Matheson." Rory hesitated, not entirely sure she trusted Lucien with the sordid details of her past. But she also knew that he was the only reason Evan had backed down, and she couldn't ignore that debt. "Evan and I... we used to date," she began slowly. "It was a long time ago, but he was..." She paused, searching for the right words. "Controlling. Abusive, even. I left him and came to London to get away." Lucien's expression darkened. "I see." He reached into his pocket, pulling out a sleek, silver business card. "If you have any further... trouble with Mr. Matheson, I suggest you contact me immediately." Rory took the card, the weight of it grounding her. "I will." She cleared her throat, trying to regain her composure. "Thank you, Lucien. I owe you one." Lucien's lips curved into a faint smile. "Consider it a... professional courtesy." He inclined his head. "I'll leave you to your afternoon. Do take care, Ms. Carter." With that, he turned and strode away, his cane tapping against the hardwood floor. Rory watched him go, the tension slowly bleeding from her shoulders. She glanced down at the business card in her hand, the raised lettering spelling out Lucien's name and contact information. She had a feeling this wouldn't be the last time she'd need to call on the enigmatic half-demon's assistance. And as much as she hated to admit it, she was grateful to have him in her corner. Tucking the card into her pocket, Rory closed the door and leaned back against it, exhaling a shaky breath. The encounter with Evan had shaken her, dredging up memories she'd long tried to bury. But she was stronger now, hardened by her experiences in the supernatural underworld. She wouldn't let Evan drag her back into his web of control and fear. Not this time. With renewed determination, Rory pushed herself off the door and headed for the kitchen, the sound of Ptolemy's plaintive meows guiding her. She needed a strong cup of tea and a long, hot shower to wash the taint of Evan's presence from her skin. And then, she had a call to make.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags19
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she began slowly [slowly]"
dialogueSentences44
tagDensity0.432
leniency0.864
rawRatio0.053
effectiveRatio0.045
82.05% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1114
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count2
highlights
0"really"
1"very"
2"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
5.75% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1114
totalAiIsms21
found
0
word"trembled"
count1
1
word"sanctuary"
count1
2
word"pulse"
count1
3
word"racing"
count1
4
word"shattered"
count1
5
word"pounding"
count1
6
word"raced"
count1
7
word"potential"
count1
8
word"stomach"
count1
9
word"echoed"
count1
10
word"flicked"
count1
11
word"unsettled"
count1
12
word"measured"
count1
13
word"unspoken"
count1
14
word"could feel"
count1
15
word"otherworldly"
count1
16
word"flickered"
count1
17
word"weight"
count1
18
word"tension"
count1
19
word"enigmatic"
count1
20
word"encounter"
count1
highlights
0"trembled"
1"sanctuary"
2"pulse"
3"racing"
4"shattered"
5"pounding"
6"raced"
7"potential"
8"stomach"
9"echoed"
10"flicked"
11"unsettled"
12"measured"
13"unspoken"
14"could feel"
15"otherworldly"
16"flickered"
17"weight"
18"tension"
19"enigmatic"
20"encounter"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count2
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences71
matches
0"was grateful"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences71
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences93
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen28
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1113
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
23.04% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions56
wordCount827
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity2.54
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
London2
Rory21
Evan20
Lucien11
Moreau1
Ptolemy1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Evan"
2"Lucien"
3"Moreau"
4"Ptolemy"
places
0"London"
globalScore0.23
windowScore0.333
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences58
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"king with, had apparently been keeping an eye"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1113
matches(empty)
59.14% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount3
totalSentences93
matches
0"feeling that fear"
1"knew that he ignore that debt"
99.03% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
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mean27.15
std13.48
cv0.497
sampleLengths
047
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254
326
411
532
65
717
851
913
1028
1123
1226
1315
1440
159
1620
1735
1837
199
2032
2137
2215
2312
2414
2527
2641
2717
2826
2934
3035
3139
3232
3328
3427
3545
3637
3747
3817
3944
408
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences71
matches
0"was supposed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs154
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences93
ratio0.011
matches
0"The deadbolts on the door, the windows, the fire escape — all potential avenues of escape, if it came to that."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount828
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount25
adverbRatio0.030193236714975844
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.014492753623188406
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences93
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences93
mean11.97
std6.1
cv0.51
sampleLengths
011
118
218
31
49
58
621
716
811
911
104
116
125
1321
1411
155
167
1710
187
1921
2023
2113
229
2319
2417
256
2610
2712
284
2911
304
3112
3228
339
3414
356
368
3718
389
3926
4011
413
426
4311
4421
4517
4620
476
489
499
63.08% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.3978494623655914
totalSentences93
uniqueOpeners37
47.62% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences70
matches
0"Finally, Evan's shoulders slumped in"
ratio0.014
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount21
totalSentences70
matches
0"His name caught in her"
1"She'd fled London three years"
2"His gaze swept over her,"
3"He took a step forward,"
4"she asked, hating how small"
5"He took another step forward,"
6"He took a step forward,"
7"She didn't know whether to"
8"he growled, glaring at her"
9"She knew Evan, knew how"
10"She met his gaze, grateful"
11"His eyes narrowed"
12"she began slowly"
13"She paused, searching for the"
14"He reached into his pocket,"
15"She cleared her throat, trying"
16"He inclined his head"
17"She glanced down at the"
18"She had a feeling this"
19"She wouldn't let Evan drag"
ratio0.3
67.14% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount55
totalSentences70
matches
0"Rory's fingers trembled as she"
1"The flat was supposed to"
2"His name caught in her"
3"Rory braced herself against the"
4"She'd fled London three years"
5"Evan's mouth curved into a"
6"His gaze swept over her,"
7"Rory's fingers tightened around the"
8"Evan's tone was casual, but"
9"He took a step forward,"
10"Evan's eyes narrowed"
11"Rory's mind raced, cataloging possible"
12"The deadbolts on the door,"
13"she asked, hating how small"
14"Evan echoed, his expression darkening"
15"He took another step forward,"
16"Evan's hand shot out, grabbing"
17"Rory flinched, the memory of"
18"Rory jerked her hand away,"
19"The sound of a throat"
ratio0.786
71.43% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences70
matches
0"As soon as Evan disappeared"
ratio0.014
81.63% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences35
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"She'd fled London three years ago to get away from him, the controlling ex-boyfriend who'd shattered her confidence and her trust."
1"Evan's mouth curved into a smile that didn't reach his eyes."
2"Rory could feel the power radiating off Lucien, a subtle undercurrent of otherworldly energy that set her nerves on edge."
46.05% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags19
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"Evan echoed, his expression darkening"
1"He took, his heterochromatic eyes boring into Evan"
2"She cleared, trying to regain her composure"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"he growled (growl)"
1"he growled (growl)"
dialogueSentences44
tagDensity0.068
leniency0.136
rawRatio0.667
effectiveRatio0.091
83.7540%