Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRK2T19VQC02F12TG1FB8E

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door swung open, and Aurora stood frozen, her heart racing. Lucien Moreau, impeccably dressed in a tailored charcoal suit, filled the doorway, his slicked-back platinum hair glinting under the dim light of the hallway. The air thickened with unspoken words, a tension that crackled like static electricity. “Surprise,” he said, a smirk playing on his lips, but his eyes betrayed a flicker of something deeper—an emotion she couldn’t quite place. “Lucien,” she breathed, the name slipping from her lips like a secret. She hadn’t expected to see him again, not after the way they had parted. The memories flooded back, sharp and vivid: the heated arguments, the lingering glances, the way he had made her feel alive and terrified all at once. “May I come in?” He gestured with his cane, the ivory handle gleaming ominously. Rory hesitated, her mind racing. She could slam the door shut, retreat into the safety of her cluttered flat, but something in his gaze held her captive. The door creaked wider, and she stepped aside, allowing him entry. The cramped one-bedroom flat was a chaotic sanctuary, every surface cluttered with books, scrolls, and research notes. Ptolemy, Eva’s tabby cat, darted past Lucien’s feet, eyeing him with suspicion before disappearing into the shadows. “Nice place,” he remarked, his voice smooth, but the corners of his mouth twitched as if he were suppressing a laugh. “Very… lived in.” “Thanks,” she replied, crossing her arms defensively. “What are you doing here?” “Business, as always.” He leaned against the doorframe, his posture relaxed, but the tension in the air was palpable. “I need your help.” “Help?” She scoffed, the word bitter on her tongue. “You have a funny way of asking for it.” “Touché.” He pushed off the doorframe, stepping further into the flat. “But this is different. I wouldn’t be here if it weren’t important.” “Important how?” She narrowed her eyes, unwilling to let him off the hook so easily. “Last time I checked, you were perfectly capable of handling your own affairs.” “Last time I checked, you were the one who walked away.” His voice dropped, the playful banter replaced by a weighty seriousness. “I’m not here to rehash old arguments, Rory. I need you to trust me.” “Trust?” The word hung between them, heavy with the weight of their shared history. “You lost that privilege the moment you decided to keep secrets.” “Secrets?” He stepped closer, the air thickening with the heat of their proximity. “You think I wanted to keep you in the dark? I was trying to protect you.” “Protect me?” She laughed, a harsh sound that echoed off the walls. “By lying to me? By pushing me away?” “I was trying to shield you from my world.” His voice softened, the edge of frustration giving way to something more vulnerable. “You don’t understand what I deal with, Rory. The dangers I face.” “Then explain it to me.” She took a step back, her heart pounding in her chest. “Don’t just stand there and expect me to take your word for it.” He ran a hand through his hair, a gesture of frustration. “I can’t. Not here. Not now.” “Then why are you here?” She challenged, her voice rising. “If you can’t tell me what’s going on, then what’s the point?” “Because I need you to help me find something.” His eyes locked onto hers, a fierce intensity igniting the space between them. “Something that could change everything.” “Change what?” She felt her resolve wavering, the pull of his presence drawing her in despite the hurt. “What could possibly be so important that you’d come to me?” He hesitated, the weight of his words hanging in the air. “A relic. An ancient artifact that’s fallen into the wrong hands. If I don’t retrieve it, it could unleash chaos.” “Chaos?” She scoffed again, but the seriousness in his tone made her stomach twist. “And you think I can help with that?” “You’re the only one who can.” He stepped closer, the distance between them shrinking. “You have knowledge of the supernatural that I don’t. You’ve studied it. You understand it.” “Why should I help you?” The question slipped out, laced with defiance, but her heart raced at the thought of being pulled back into his world. “You left me behind.” “I didn’t leave you behind.” His voice was low, almost pleading. “I thought I was protecting you. I thought you’d be safer without me.” “Safer?” She shook her head, anger bubbling beneath the surface. “You think I’m some fragile thing that needs protecting? I’m not that girl anymore, Lucien.” “I know.” He reached out, his fingers brushing against her arm, sending a jolt of electricity through her. “But this is different. I’m not asking for your forgiveness. I’m asking for your help.” The warmth of his touch lingered, igniting memories of stolen moments and whispered secrets. She pulled away, her heart racing, torn between the desire to push him away and the longing to pull him closer. “Why should I trust you now?” she demanded, her voice steadier than she felt. “You’ve always had your secrets.” “Because I’m here, aren’t I?” He stepped back, his expression earnest. “I could have sent someone else. I could have handled this alone. But I came to you.” “Why?” The question hung in the air, heavy with unspoken feelings. “What makes me so special?” “Because you’re the only one who ever understood me.” His gaze bore into hers, a mixture of vulnerability and desperation. “You’re the only one I can trust.” The silence stretched between them, thick with unresolved tension. Rory’s heart raced, caught in a whirlwind of emotions. She wanted to scream, to push him away, but the truth was, she missed him. The way he made her feel alive, the way he challenged her. “Fine,” she said, her voice barely above a whisper. “I’ll help you. But this doesn’t mean I forgive you.” “Understood.” A flicker of relief crossed his face, but it was quickly replaced by a seriousness that sent a shiver down her spine. “We need to move quickly. Time is not on our side.” “Where do we start?” She crossed her arms, steeling herself for whatever lay ahead. “First, we need to gather information. I have a contact who might know where the artifact is.” He turned, heading towards the door, but paused, glancing back at her. “Are you ready for this?” “Ready?” She scoffed, her heart pounding. “I’ve been ready for a long time.” “Then let’s go.” As they stepped out into the dimly lit hallway, the weight of their past hung heavily in the air, but the thrill of the unknown beckoned them forward. The door clicked shut behind them, sealing away the chaos of their history, and for the first time in a long while, Rory felt a spark of hope ignite within her.
total_cost0.0015366

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags31
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"She scoffed again [again]"
1"He stepped back [back]"
dialogueSentences65
tagDensity0.477
leniency0.954
rawRatio0.065
effectiveRatio0.062
78.22% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1148
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
1
adverb"perfectly"
count1
2
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
3
adverb"quickly"
count2
highlights
0"very"
1"perfectly"
2"barely above a whisper"
3"quickly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1148
totalAiIsms32
found
0
word"racing"
count3
1
word"glinting"
count1
2
word"unspoken"
count2
3
word"tension"
count3
4
word"flicker"
count2
5
word"gleaming"
count1
6
word"chaotic"
count1
7
word"sanctuary"
count1
8
word"palpable"
count1
9
word"weight"
count3
10
word"echoed"
count1
11
word"pounding"
count2
12
word"intensity"
count1
13
word"resolve"
count1
14
word"wavering"
count1
15
word"stomach"
count1
16
word"raced"
count2
17
word"warmth"
count1
18
word"desire"
count1
19
word"silence"
count1
20
word"whisper"
count1
21
word"down her spine"
count1
highlights
0"racing"
1"glinting"
2"unspoken"
3"tension"
4"flicker"
5"gleaming"
6"chaotic"
7"sanctuary"
8"palpable"
9"weight"
10"echoed"
11"pounding"
12"intensity"
13"resolve"
14"wavering"
15"stomach"
16"raced"
17"warmth"
18"desire"
19"silence"
20"whisper"
21"down her spine"
0.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches4
maxInWindow4
found
0
label"weight of words/silence"
count1
1
label"hung in the air"
count1
2
label"sent a shiver through"
count1
3
label"flicker of emotion"
count1
highlights
0"the weight of his words"
1"hung in the air"
2"sent a shiver down"
3"a spark of hope"
93.55% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences53
matches
0"A flicker of relief"
1"a spark of hope"
88.95% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences53
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences85
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen31
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1145
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions8
wordCount705
uniqueNames5
maxNameDensity0.43
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Aurora1
Moreau1
Rory3
Eva1
Lucien2
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Moreau"
2"Rory"
3"Eva"
4"Lucien"
places(empty)
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences50
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"quite place"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1145
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences85
matches(empty)
70.23% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs42
mean27.26
std10.79
cv0.396
sampleLengths
048
123
252
314
438
534
624
712
823
918
1023
1128
1236
1325
1429
1520
1634
1729
1817
1922
2027
2129
2231
2322
2429
2530
2624
2725
2833
2935
3019
3128
3216
3327
3445
3519
3634
3714
3834
3913
403
4159
98.64% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences53
matches
0"being pulled"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs135
matches
0"were suppressing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences85
ratio0.012
matches
0"“Surprise,” he said, a smirk playing on his lips, but his eyes betrayed a flicker of something deeper—an emotion she couldn’t quite place."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount708
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount27
adverbRatio0.038135593220338986
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.011299435028248588
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences85
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences85
mean13.47
std6.26
cv0.465
sampleLengths
011
124
213
323
412
514
626
714
85
922
1011
1117
1217
1321
143
157
165
1719
184
199
209
2111
2212
2315
2413
2522
2614
2714
2811
2913
3016
3112
328
3322
3412
3516
3613
3711
386
3910
4012
4122
425
4318
4411
4511
4620
4714
488
4914
79.61% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.5058823529411764
totalSentences85
uniqueOpeners43
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences53
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount35
totalSentences53
matches
0"he said, a smirk playing"
1"she breathed, the name slipping"
2"She hadn’t expected to see"
3"He gestured with his cane,"
4"She could slam the door"
5"he remarked, his voice smooth,"
6"she replied, crossing her arms"
7"He leaned against the doorframe,"
8"She scoffed, the word bitter"
9"He pushed off the doorframe,"
10"She narrowed her eyes, unwilling"
11"His voice dropped, the playful"
12"He stepped closer, the air"
13"She laughed, a harsh sound"
14"His voice softened, the edge"
15"She took a step back,"
16"He ran a hand through"
17"She challenged, her voice rising"
18"His eyes locked onto hers,"
19"She felt her resolve wavering,"
ratio0.66
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount52
totalSentences53
matches
0"The door swung open, and"
1"Lucien Moreau, impeccably dressed in"
2"The air thickened with unspoken"
3"he said, a smirk playing"
4"she breathed, the name slipping"
5"She hadn’t expected to see"
6"The memories flooded back, sharp"
7"He gestured with his cane,"
8"Rory hesitated, her mind racing."
9"She could slam the door"
10"The door creaked wider, and"
11"The cramped one-bedroom flat was"
12"Ptolemy, Eva’s tabby cat, darted"
13"he remarked, his voice smooth,"
14"she replied, crossing her arms"
15"He leaned against the doorframe,"
16"She scoffed, the word bitter"
17"He pushed off the doorframe,"
18"She narrowed her eyes, unwilling"
19"His voice dropped, the playful"
ratio0.981
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences53
matches(empty)
ratio0
58.82% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences17
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Ptolemy, Eva’s tabby cat, darted past Lucien’s feet, eyeing him with suspicion before disappearing into the shadows."
1"She pulled away, her heart racing, torn between the desire to push him away and the longing to pull him closer."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags31
uselessAdditionCount13
matches
0"she breathed, the name slipping from her lips like a secret"
1"He gestured, the ivory handle gleaming ominously"
2"She narrowed, unwilling to let him off the hook so easily"
3"He stepped, the air thickening with the heat of their proximity"
4"His voice softened, the edge of frustration giving way to something more vulnerable"
5"She took, her heart pounding in her chest"
6"She challenged, her voice rising"
7"His eyes locked, a fierce intensity igniting the space between them"
8"she demanded, her voice steadier than she felt"
9"He stepped back, his expression earnest"
10"His gaze bore, a mixture of vulnerability and desperation"
11"she said, her voice barely above a whisper"
12"She scoffed, her heart pounding"
88.46% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"she breathed (breathe)"
1"She laughed (laugh)"
2"She challenged (challenge)"
3"she demanded (demand)"
dialogueSentences65
tagDensity0.108
leniency0.215
rawRatio0.571
effectiveRatio0.123
71.8830%