Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRK55QRS3Z6Z92Y9FBNJQF

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Duration:
33.9s
Cost:
$0.001353

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora's breath clouded before her as she stepped into the Fae Grove, the ancient oak standing stones towered high, forming an imposing gateway. The air was thick with an unsettling quiet that seemed to exhale a muted warning. She paused, her heart thudding against the confines of her chest, the deep crimson Heartstone Pendant at her neck pulsing gently, almost insistent. It was the faint heat that tugged at her breastbone that convinced her she needed to be here, whatever the cost. *Just a delivery,* she repeated in her mind, drawing in a steadying breath. Yu-Fei had sent her to retrieve a dubious package from within the Grove, its details obscured by whispers and wary glances. Yet Rory was no stranger to risk, and the thought of aligning herself closer to whatever secrets lay hidden in this seemingly ordinary location beckoned. Dusk hung heavy among the old trees, shadows lengthening and curling like fingers about her ankles. The wildflowers dotted the ground, their vibrant hues glowing oddly against the deepening night. It felt like a separate world entirely here, cocooned in the slow thrum of the earth, yet something gnawed at the edge of her awareness. A rustle to her right snapped her gaze, but only a flicker of movement caught her eye—a little rabbit darting away into the underbrush. *Just wildlife,* she assured herself. Yet when she took a step forward, she hesitated. She wouldn’t have been able to articulate when the sensation of being watched first nested in her mind, but it dripped into her consciousness like watered ink. “Hello?” Her voice seemed preposterously small amidst the towering trees. There was no reply, but the rustling grew louder now. Not just leaves – something organic and unsettling shifted, drawing her attention toward the thick ferns. Shadows danced, elongated and exaggerated under the feeble moonlight. Every instinct screamed for her to turn back, to retreat into the safe embrace of the mundane city streets, but that was not who Rory was anymore. With careful steps, she ventured deeper into the Grove, her senses heightened, acutely aware of the myriad things that brushed against her skin; the cool leather of her boots against the damp earth, the slight whisper of her hair against her neck, and just there, a dissonant chime ringing through the hushed stillness. *Chimes? Here?* “Mistake,” she muttered, thrusting her chin out defiantly against the creeping dread that clung to her gut. One foot in front of the other. The glowing pendant warmed, a soft pulse putting rhythm to her heartbeat. But then the chimes flourished into a cacophony, jangling notes tumbling together like forgotten memories. With each echo, that disquiet deepened. She found her gaze drawn upward. The sky above began to ooze indigo, each star appearing like a pinprick in a velvet sheet. But the stars flickered irregularly, as if they weren’t quite in this realm, wheeling in unison and unfurling a tangled web of tension. Watching. Waiting. A low hum vibrated through the atmosphere surrounding her, palpable as if the very ground shifted beneath. Aurora chilled, shaken from the sensation and sending a pulse into her senses that she was not alone. She squinted into the darkened edges where the light didn’t quite reach, pulse racing against the thrumming undercurrent of the forest. “Who’s there?” Fine hairs prickled at the nape of her neck. Silence fell like a curtain, suffocating and absolute. A fleeting thought of Evan flared in her mind, but she crushed it. This wasn’t him. This was something old, something rooted deep in the earth and the shadows. The sound of tiny footsteps, delicate yet purposeful, pitter-pattered behind her. She turned quickly, heart hammering, only to find nothing but the stoic trees watching her with a hushed intensity. The pendant pulsed again, and something shifted back into the ferns, just on the edge of her vision. Desperation clawed within her. She needed to find the package; the unease gnawed at her, and with every inconspicuous shift, she felt a cold touch trailing her. “Enough games!” she shouted, but no one barked back. The air thickened, charged with a volatile energy, and the shadows darkened, creeping closer as though they sought to swallow her whole. Ahead, an ethereal shimmer hung between the trees. She squinted against the gloom, forging towards the glow. But as she approached, the shimmering flickered in and out, creating an illusion of distance, a maddening mirage. It called to her, promising secrets, power, and danger. The chime rang again—white and pure, a haunting echo now fused with laughter. Breath held, Rory tread closer, chasing the sound. It emanated from deeper within the Grove, thrumming with an unnatural rhythm. As she reached the clearing, the heart of this cursed nook, the laughter ceased abruptly. The Heartstone Pendant flared to life, flooding her with warmth, nearly burning against her chest. Shadows swirled above her, twisting and contorting as if alive. A fluid shape began to form. Silvery laughter danced in the very branches of the trees, molten and vibrant against dark skies. Aurora stumbled back, a gasp escaping her lips. “Rory, sweet Rory!” The voice was sharp and sweet, lilting like a silver chime. A figure emerged from the shadow—a being of ethereal beauty, all sharp edges and soft light, eyeing her with a gaze that spanned centuries. “What do you seek here?” The voice wrapped around her like silk. All tension hardened into a prickling metallic taste across her tongue. “I-I came for a package,” she said, arguments falling short against the invasive power of the figure’s presence. “Package? What if I offer more?” Intricate patterns rippled like quicksilver on the edges of the being’s form, twisting grotesquely into faces she could almost recognise. *This was wrong.* She glanced back at the ferns, apprehension pressing down against her ribs, forcing the air from her lungs. For every tick of the pendant’s pulse, the shadows thickened, spiralling down as if an enormous hand lurked on the edges of her vision, waiting to strike. “Don’t play coy, little human. We know what you’ve brought, the curiosity of mortals stirs the dark.” That laugh erupted; enchanting, terrifying. Suddenly a mere package felt infinitely less significant. It loomed above her like a violence hinted at in some plucked string, reverberating through the very fabric of the foliage. “Show me your heart, Rory,” it beckoned, and with one step, the Grove transformed into a realm of pulses and slips, as if the shadows wove webs, drawing closer to where Rory stood. Sharp inhalation. Shadows twitched, and somewhere in the oppressive darkness, she thought she saw eyes—wide, gleaming, and hungry. “Enough!” she shouted, adrenaline flooding her veins as she grasped the pendant, its heat like a low burning flame. She felt compelled to do something. Anything! But as she turned to flee, moths drawn to the flame, the shadows surged, coiling about her feet. With every frantic step forward, the laughter rose to a fevered pitch, a maelstrom of sound crashing against her resolve. The pendant pulsed like a heartbeat in her palm—*pulsing, pulsing, pulsing*—and she knew the time for retreat had vanished. “Rory!” the shadows hissed in unison, their voices mingling as one, a siren call that reverberated through the grove. They pulled her deeper into the ancient heart of the Grove, where secrets awaited, and she understood, too late—that she would need to confront the source of the chaos that throbbed all around her. The shadows consumed her next step, and before she could find her footing, everything shattered into darkness.
total_cost0.00135319

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags9
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"Her voice seemed preposterously [preposterously]"
1"The voice wrapped around [around]"
2"Intricate patterns rippled like [like]"
dialogueSentences12
tagDensity0.75
leniency1
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.333
76.27% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1264
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"gently"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count3
2
adverb"quickly"
count1
3
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"gently"
1"very"
2"quickly"
3"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1264
totalAiIsms39
found
0
word"imposing"
count1
1
word"flicker"
count1
2
word"amidst"
count1
3
word"whisper"
count1
4
word"pulse"
count4
5
word"cacophony"
count1
6
word"echo"
count2
7
word"velvet"
count1
8
word"flickered"
count2
9
word"tension"
count2
10
word"vibrated"
count1
11
word"palpable"
count1
12
word"chilled"
count1
13
word"racing"
count1
14
word"silence"
count1
15
word"fleeting"
count1
16
word"footsteps"
count1
17
word"intensity"
count1
18
word"pulsed"
count2
19
word"charged"
count1
20
word"gloom"
count1
21
word"warmth"
count1
22
word"silk"
count1
23
word"intricate"
count1
24
word"apprehension"
count1
25
word"loomed"
count1
26
word"oppressive"
count1
27
word"gleaming"
count1
28
word"resolve"
count1
29
word"reverberated"
count1
30
word"throbbed"
count1
31
word"shattered"
count1
highlights
0"imposing"
1"flicker"
2"amidst"
3"whisper"
4"pulse"
5"cacophony"
6"echo"
7"velvet"
8"flickered"
9"tension"
10"vibrated"
11"palpable"
12"chilled"
13"racing"
14"silence"
15"fleeting"
16"footsteps"
17"intensity"
18"pulsed"
19"charged"
20"gloom"
21"warmth"
22"silk"
23"intricate"
24"apprehension"
25"loomed"
26"oppressive"
27"gleaming"
28"resolve"
29"reverberated"
30"throbbed"
31"shattered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"air was thick with"
count1
highlights
0"The air was thick with"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences84
matches
0"r with warmth"
91.84% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences84
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences86
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen53
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans5
markdownWords13
totalWords1258
ratio0.01
matches
0"Just a delivery,"
1"Just wildlife,"
2"Chimes? Here?"
3"This was wrong."
4"pulsing, pulsing, pulsing"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions25
wordCount1209
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity0.5
worstName"Grove"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Grove"
discoveredNames
Fae1
Grove6
Heartstone2
Pendant2
Rory4
One1
Evan1
Intricate1
Sharp1
Aurora3
Shadows3
persons
0"Pendant"
1"Rory"
2"One"
3"Evan"
4"Aurora"
5"Shadows"
places
0"Fae"
1"Grove"
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences73
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"hidden in this seemingly ordinary location b"
1"felt like a separate world entirely her"
2"seemed preposterously small amidst the towering trees"
3"quite in this realm, wheeling in unison and unfurling a tangled web of tension"
4"quite reach, pulse racing against the thrumming undercurrent of the forest"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1258
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences86
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs35
mean35.94
std20.4
cv0.568
sampleLengths
082
159
255
365
410
535
680
72
857
948
1056
112
1246
1348
1427
1531
1644
1713
1835
1955
2038
2123
2218
2326
243
2545
2617
2734
2833
2918
3026
3138
3219
3353
3417
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences84
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs221
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences10
totalSentences86
ratio0.116
matches
0"A rustle to her right snapped her gaze, but only a flicker of movement caught her eye—a little rabbit darting away into the underbrush."
1"Not just leaves – something organic and unsettling shifted, drawing her attention toward the thick ferns."
2"With careful steps, she ventured deeper into the Grove, her senses heightened, acutely aware of the myriad things that brushed against her skin; the cool leather of her boots against the damp earth, the slight whisper of her hair against her neck, and just there, a dissonant chime ringing through the hushed stillness."
3"She needed to find the package; the unease gnawed at her, and with every inconspicuous shift, she felt a cold touch trailing her."
4"The chime rang again—white and pure, a haunting echo now fused with laughter."
5"A figure emerged from the shadow—a being of ethereal beauty, all sharp edges and soft light, eyeing her with a gaze that spanned centuries."
6"That laugh erupted; enchanting, terrifying."
7"Shadows twitched, and somewhere in the oppressive darkness, she thought she saw eyes—wide, gleaming, and hungry."
8"The pendant pulsed like a heartbeat in her palm—*pulsing, pulsing, pulsing*—and she knew the time for retreat had vanished."
9"They pulled her deeper into the ancient heart of the Grove, where secrets awaited, and she understood, too late—that she would need to confront the source of the chaos that throbbed all around her."
93.71% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1215
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"vibrant against dark skies."
adverbCount49
adverbRatio0.040329218106995884
lyAdverbCount17
lyAdverbRatio0.013991769547325103
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences86
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences86
mean14.63
std8.74
cv0.598
sampleLengths
023
115
223
321
413
521
625
716
814
925
1024
115
129
1327
1410
1510
1616
179
1827
1953
201
211
2217
237
2412
2515
266
276
2817
2923
301
311
3217
3318
3421
352
369
378
3813
393
4013
4111
4219
4318
444
4523
469
4722
488
499
86.05% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.5232558139534884
totalSentences86
uniqueOpeners45
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences78
matches
0"*Just a delivery,* she repeated"
1"*Just wildlife,* she assured herself."
2"Suddenly a mere package felt"
ratio0.038
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount21
totalSentences78
matches
0"She paused, her heart thudding"
1"It was the faint heat"
2"It felt like a separate"
3"She wouldn’t have been able"
4"Her voice seemed preposterously small"
5"she muttered, thrusting her chin"
6"She found her gaze drawn"
7"She squinted into the darkened"
8"She turned quickly, heart hammering,"
9"She needed to find the"
10"she shouted, but no one"
11"She squinted against the gloom,"
12"It called to her, promising"
13"It emanated from deeper within"
14"she said, arguments falling short"
15"She glanced back at the"
16"It loomed above her like"
17"it beckoned, and with one"
18"she shouted, adrenaline flooding her"
19"She felt compelled to do"
ratio0.269
94.62% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount57
totalSentences78
matches
0"Aurora's breath clouded before her"
1"The air was thick with"
2"She paused, her heart thudding"
3"It was the faint heat"
4"Yu-Fei had sent her to"
5"Dusk hung heavy among the"
6"The wildflowers dotted the ground,"
7"It felt like a separate"
8"A rustle to her right"
9"She wouldn’t have been able"
10"Her voice seemed preposterously small"
11"Shadows danced, elongated and exaggerated"
12"Every instinct screamed for her"
13"she muttered, thrusting her chin"
14"The glowing pendant warmed, a"
15"She found her gaze drawn"
16"The sky above began to"
17"A low hum vibrated through"
18"Aurora chilled, shaken from the"
19"She squinted into the darkened"
ratio0.731
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences78
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences48
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"She paused, her heart thudding against the confines of her chest, the deep crimson Heartstone Pendant at her neck pulsing gently, almost insistent."
1"With careful steps, she ventured deeper into the Grove, her senses heightened, acutely aware of the myriad things that brushed against her skin; the cool leathe…"
2"But the stars flickered irregularly, as if they weren’t quite in this realm, wheeling in unison and unfurling a tangled web of tension."
3"A low hum vibrated through the atmosphere surrounding her, palpable as if the very ground shifted beneath."
4"The air thickened, charged with a volatile energy, and the shadows darkened, creeping closer as though they sought to swallow her whole."
5"Shadows swirled above her, twisting and contorting as if alive."
6"A figure emerged from the shadow—a being of ethereal beauty, all sharp edges and soft light, eyeing her with a gaze that spanned centuries."
7"She glanced back at the ferns, apprehension pressing down against her ribs, forcing the air from her lungs."
8"For every tick of the pendant’s pulse, the shadows thickened, spiralling down as if an enormous hand lurked on the edges of her vision, waiting to strike."
9"They pulled her deeper into the ancient heart of the Grove, where secrets awaited, and she understood, too late—that she would need to confront the source of th…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags9
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"she shouted (shout)"
2"she shouted (shout)"
3"the shadows hissed (hiss)"
dialogueSentences12
tagDensity0.417
leniency0.833
rawRatio0.8
effectiveRatio0.667
74.7492%